Tere mere sapne - A Shraman TS - Updated part 2 on page 7 - Page 4

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Nith & Anu 🤗
Short & sweet , loved it very much
Kaash. ...Kaash Shravan aisa ho hamare show mein bhi
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Posted: 8 years ago
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This is amazing👏👏
I loved your writing style.
Sumo's pain is so felt and the song at the end is so apt for shraman.
Would like to read more from you
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Rikta97

This is really a good one 👏

Thanks Rikta 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: nicky13

Good one... Beautiful song

Thanks nicky ! Glad you liked it 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: crazy_vaish

This is amazing👏👏

I loved your writing style.
Sumo's pain is so felt and the song at the end is so apt for shraman.
Would like to read more from you


Thanks vaish ! Will definitely try to write more 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: KostinsQueen

Nith & Anu 🤗

Short & sweet , loved it very much
Kaash. ...Kaash Shravan aisa ho hamare show mein bhi


Thanks Hasu 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Thanks Bubli ! Glad you love it 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Brilliant Nith!
Loved the subtleness here!

Cheers.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Dear friends,
I felt the first part was kind of incomplete, so went ahead and added a second part.Hope you all like it. It is a bit longer than the first one though.
@mayasingh : I have taken the liberty of using Sumo's letter from your post. I hope its ok.
So here it is.
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The first light of the morning woke her up. Her legs were sore from sleeping in that position.She stretched her legs and slowly opened her eyes. It look her a moment to understand where she was. But, what was this, was she looking at Shravan's feet ?
She rubbed her eyes, twice.
No Sumo sapna nahi hai.

It all started coming back to her. This was Shravan's room. Her head was in his lap. She tried to turn only her head but ended up moving. She couldn't control her tears when she saw him like that. Leaning on the wall, neck titled to the left, one hand on the floor and one on her.
Mera Shravan. Slowly a smile crept up her face. How much more will he hide the fact that he cared for her ? All his indifference, hatred gave away sooner or later, he tried but failed time and again. Ziddi.

She tried to connect the dots. The last she remembered he was sleeping like a log next to her, what had woken him up ?

His neck and back must be stiff. She softly tried to move his hand that rested on her. Just as her finger touched his hand he moved.

"Sumo... kya hai ? so jao"
"Uto Shravan, bed pe jaake so jaate hain"
"Nahi, main utonga to tum chali jaogi"

What was that now ? Where did it come from ? Had he really said what she had heard ? He had not changed at all.
Her smile now became a grin. Mera Shravan.

"Shravan bed pe so jao, main kahin nahi jaongi" she insisted.

He got up complaining, protesting like the 16 year old he actually was and she held on to him till they reached the bed. She made sure he was comfortable, covered him with the blanket, even pretended to sleep next to him.Once she heard his steady breathing, she got up.

He had taken a step forward, it was her turn now.

Shravan woke up a couple of hours later, Sumo was no longer in the room. She did it again, didn't she ? She had said she wouldn't leave, where was she then !
Shravan rushed downstairs to the dining table. It was almost 10 in the morning, he had slept really well.
There was no one there, he spotted Preethi in the kitchen.
"Preethi, Sumo ko kahin dekha tumne ?"
"Aap yahan ho ? Par di ne to kaha tha ki woh aap se milne jaa rahi hai" she said puzzled.

This was the limit ! Kabhi kuch to kabhi kuch aur. Shravan climbed two steps at a time to his room and found his phone. He didn't want to call her. But he couldn't stop himself either.

"Kahan ho ?" he messaged
She replied immediately
"Jahan tumne bulaya tha"

He could take it no more, he threw the phone on the bed in sheer frustration.
What kind of a reply was that ! He started pacing up and down the room, trying to compose himself. He wanted his cube. His eyes quickly scanned the shelves and he found it. He had just picked it up when he noticed something odd, his book was out of place.
The orange and black crossword dictionary was turned according to their secret code. He picked it up automatically and opened the last page, there was an almost tattered piece of paper in it.

"Shravan

Itne saal beet gaye tumhe gaye hue aaj bhi mera har din ishi intezar main gujarta hain ki tum kab vapas aaoge..
jane se pehle hamare beech jo kuch bhi hua.. main tumse kabhi mafi bhi nahi maang payi..
Samaj main nahi aata ki tumse kaise kahu ki hamara rishta mere liye kitna khaas hai
Yeh pyaar to hamesha hamare beech main tha par iska ehsas tumare jaane ke baad hua..
Main tumara dus saal se intezar kar rahi hoon..
Main kitni bekraar hoon tumhe batane ke liye ki main tumse kitna pyaar karti hoon .. I love you Shravan...
aur yeh baat batane ke liye maine tumara intezar kiya hain..par main chahti hoon ki hamare beech main duriya sab mit jaye aur hum hamesha ke liye ek ho jaye..
Kya tum bhi mujhse pyaar karte ho ?

Tumare intezar main...

Suman"


Shravan couldn't understand anything.He read it all over again and again till he was convinced that this was real. His Sumo was his after all. He sat down in a corner of his bed and let himself cry. All his anger melted away as tears. He had not waited in vain. Sumo loved him and had waited for him. Lalaji's words came to his mind.

He wanted to see her right NOW. His mind was euphoric and miserable at the same time. But where, where could she be ? The letter was still in his hands and he clutched it tightly as if his life was in it.
"Jahan tumne bulaya tha" she had said and he knew.

He showered, changed and left immediately. Clouds had started gathering and traffic was bad. But he made it faster than he ever had.

The coffee shop was not too crowded for that time of the day. Her car was parked outside. He opened the door and saw her sitting with her back towards the main door. He walked as fast as he could to reach her. Sumo was looking at the slight drizzle outside when she saw his reflection in the glass. He was in blue too.
He sat down opposite to her and gave a knowing smile.

"Pohounch gaye tum ?"
"Bohour der kar di kya ?"
"Maine socha tumahare paanch gante ka record main thodoongi aaj"
"Sumo ... "
"Bolo"
He cleared the lump in his throat and looked at her. There was so much love in her eyes, how could he not have seen it till now.

"Bataya kyon nahi" he asked
"Poocha kyon nahi "
"To is baar bi galti meri hi hai ?"
"Koi shaq ? " she said teasingly, but his eyes moistened.

"Bohout dukhaya hai na maine tumhe "
She put her hands on his which were on the table.
"Maine bhi tumhe kahan kam dukhaya hai ?" she said recalling the hurt on his face when Aditha had announed their wedding.

"Mujhe samajna chahiye tha, tum to majboor thi"
"Chup Shravan, bilkul chup, galtiyan hum dono ki hai"
"Main chup rehne ke liye nahi aaya"
"To phir kisliye aaye ?"
"Coffee peene, aur maine suna hai ki yahan ke paistries bhi kaafi acche hain"
"Bukkad" she said laughing.

She had deliberated if she should tell him about Ramnath. But her mind was now clear. There was no need. Things would happen when they would. It was Shravan's happiness that mattered over everything else and the content smile on his face proved her right.

They both got up together and walked towards the main door. She held his hand but once they were out, Shravan pulled away his hand and wrapped his arm around her shoulders.
She stared at him in disbelief, was this even him ? She had a lifetime to find out.
"Ghoor kyon rahi ho ? Haq hai mera " he said adamantly
"Ziddi" she muttered under her breath.

"Mere tere dil kaa aisa ek din milna
Jaise bahar aane par par hain phul kaa khilana
O mere jeevan sathee...
Tere mere sapne abb ek rang hain
Jaha bhee le jaye rahen ham sang hain"

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Edited by nith125 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Tell me this is not the end... There is more right?

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