Shraman TS- Dabhi Dabhi Si Kwahishe (Chapter 4 pg5 27th Aug)

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey guys please bear with me..this is my first ever attempt in writing.. I just thought of Daboo who could be the Cupid for our shraman ( Akhir bache toh bhagwan ka roop hote hain)šŸ˜‰
So here it goes...


Chapter 1

Sumo was in her room studying her account sheet of preeti's wedding. Suddenly she received a call from pushkar.
Pu- sumo tujhe pata hai kya bhaiya kaha hai..yaar kabse call kar raha hu voh phone hi nahi utha rahe hai..
Su- arrey pagal hai kya voh ..itna irresponsible kaise ho sakta hai ..itni raat ko kaha gaya voh..tu ek kaam kar use time padna sikha..yaar raat ke doon (2:00) baje hai
Just saying that Sumo hung up the call.She was so tensed she didn't even answer pushkar's question
She fumbled the keys of her car that were kept in the drawer... rushing out of her house her mind was occupied with thoughts of shravan and all possible places he could have been to that to at the time when the whole of Delhi was sleeping...
Driving past a park she saw shravan's black sleek car parked... she immediately called pushkar and asked him to come to that park.. she rushed out of her car just to see that there was no one in the car
Su-(to herself) kaha gaya yeh.. milne do isse ache se Khabar loonge
She entered the park hoping to find her shravan in there..
Just then she saw a tall frame sitting on a bench..she realized it was shravan...she ran towards him only to notice his bobbing his...yes he was in a deep slumber
Sumo shook him awake.. shravan was in sheer confusion..he had to rub his eyes to confirm that his sumo about whom he was dreaming was standing in front of him..tears, anger, fright .her face had all these emotions.
To add to his surprise she hugged him tight mumbling something which he couldn't understand because her sound had been muffled because of his jacket..he couldn't help but smile like a stupid person.
Soon even pushkar and ramnath arrived.. pushkar was happy to see suman in shravan's arms whereas ramnath just had the opposite feelings.. anger was boiling inside his chest..
Ramnath offered to drop sumo home...on the way he reminded sumo her promise and even gave her a threat..

Feel free to criticize... would love to read ur opinion on this.. also pl tell me do I write further😊





Chapter 1- above
Chapter 2- pg2
Chapter 3- pg3
Chapter 4- pg5
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Go ahead dearšŸ‘šŸ¼ continue soon.
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continue it stupid
why did you have to ask
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: BubliBag

continue it stupid

why did you have to ask


Thanks dude😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: BubliBag

continue it stupid

why did you have to ask

Thanks dear..juat asked for the sake of formality🤣
Just kidding
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: agrawalrk

It was Amazing...Do continue

Thankyouu..I'm glad you liked it!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Thankyou peeps..i'm overwhelmed with the response
So guys here it goes 😊
Chapter 2

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Suman's longed for her room..she wanted to cry her heart out in the darkness of her room where there won't be anyone who would be able to see how messed up she is when she pretends to be strong..
Sumo rushed to her room to cry to her hearts content
Su- kyu bhagwan kyu?aisa kya galat kiya hai maine Jo aap mujhe itni badi sajja de rahe ho..abb toh pyaar karne se bhi daar lagta hai..kya pata app usse bhi bulado apne pass.. pehle mere maa papa ko aapne mujhse door kar diya aur ab jab shravan se pyaar karne lagi toh...(wiping off her tears) nahi sumo..bass tu aur nahi royegi .. tune hamesha aapna vaada nibhaya hain aur abhi bhi tu vahi karegi..pyaar toh tu abh bhi kar sakti hai shravan se sirf jata nahi sakti... mujhe aapne shravan par pura bharosa hain voh mere pyaar ko jaroor samjhega..bas ek bar shravan mujhe apni dil ki baat batade ...ussi waqt main uske ho jaongi...
Saying this tears again found a way to flow from her eyes..
Little did sumo know that she had an audience..her little brother Daboo heard it all and promised to himself-"bass didi abh aap kabhi bhi dukhi nahi rahoge..abh shravan bhaiya ko toh mera jiju banna hi padega"
He slowly entered sumo's room ..hugged her , kissed her cheek because he knew that she loves when he kisses her.. wiping her eyes he said.."main nahi jaanta ki aap ro kyu rahi hai..lekin jaise aap mujhe pyaar se sulati hai jab main sad hota hu .. waise hi main bhi aapko aaj sulaonga..
Hearing his concern for her..sumo smiled
Su- abhi itna bada hogaya tu..mera pyaara Daboo..I love you..and she kissed his cheek
Da-(to himself)arrey I love you seedha seedha shravan bhaiya ko bol deti toh kya bhijad jata..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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I am just lol!!
Sweet n cute!!
Would love to have you as a buddy!!
I am Shikha
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nimik

I am just lol!!

Sweet n cute!!
Would love to have you as a buddy!!
I am Shikha

Hi Shikha..I'm glad you liked itā¤ļø
Even I'll love to have u as a buddy but the problem is that I hardly know how to use this IF account..I had literally wasted 30 mins to figure out how to post my tsšŸ˜•
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Ohhh kitni pyar update h it's awesome plz continue 😊

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