EDKV Collective OS: ongoing part3, plz join in guys.. - Page 9

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Posted: 9 years ago
#81
The knot of Suman's dress had loosened in a bow and moved as she struggled to use her hands to undo it so that Preeta comes and ties it for her. With no Preeta in sight, Shravan moved towards her as if in a trance, giving in the desire to caress her bare back. Shravan was right behind her, as Sumo still struggled to untie the knot, Shravan did that by a mere tug on the dori. Then he very softly caressed the exposed part of her back.. Feeling the touch he felt Suman freeze, sucking up her breath and gulping. She didn't move or resist his touch encouraging him to pull her back againt his hard chest. He looked at their reflection in the glass window of the kitchen, he could see Sumo looking at him through it. He could feel her face full of dazed expression, and her eyes, becoming heavy with passion spoke an unknown language. He could see crimson pass through her neck and shudder going through her body. Clearly taking this as a welcome sign, Shravan bent his head to let his lips meet the red on her neck. As his lips met the hot of her skin, he heard a moan escape though her, increasing his desire to turn her towards him and claim those luscious lips. As he turned her towards him he felt her stiffen and suddenly snap her fingers in front of his eyes.
"hello, kahan khoye hue ho aap, ek to vaise hi khambe ki tarah lambe ho, upar se yahan chaila babu ban ke kya dekh rahe ho, porta darwaza ghar le khade ho, ander jaana hai to ander jaao, bahar rehna hai to bahar raho... hato raasta do mujhe" Preeta blurted, pushing Shravan out of his dream. Shravan felt as if he has been sleeping and someone woke him up by throwing a bucket of ice cold water.

"Arey ab hato bhi, bahut kaam hai" Preeta barked still irritated

"Who main, actually... bas yahan.. aisi hi..." stammered Shravan

"Preeta, kya hua, kyon gussa ho rahi hai, and he is a guest, please take it easy," Suman came suddenly to Shravan's defence, while he gulped fresh air, trying to keep aside the thoughts he has no so long ago

" Bas sumo, pooch mat kya hua... muje bahut Gussa aa raha hai, theek hai, Dabbu ke birthday ke liye bas family aur friends, to use kyon bula liya" Preetha said irritated

"kise??? bula lia???? kya keh rahi hai tu?? theek se bata" said Sumo coming in between Shravan and Preeta, as if trying to shield Shravan from Preetha's wrath

Shravan stood their rooted at his spot, trying to figure out what this ladies were talking

"Arey wohi Sumo, jisne office ke chakkar kat kat ke teri aur hum sab ki naak mein dum kar diya hai, vohi jo tere peeche lattu ki tarah ghoomta hai, vohi indecent man, ullu da pattha, maa da laal, Satyarthi Verma" Preetha blabbered out in anger

Suman's expressions changed from shock to disgust on hearing this name, and this change in expression didn't go unnoticed by Shravan, and he didn't like the sudden turn in Suman's mood



Guysss... this was my twist... ab hum.. tum ke beech mein voh to hona zaroori hai, and if the "woh" is as creep as VERMA, kahani mein mast wala twist aayega

So verma is a guest of suman's mamaji, he os lattu after Suman, in a little creepy way.. so please continue
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Posted: 9 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever



Just reserve an update and jump in with your part😃



Like I will have to continue from last written one or can continue from anyone's update
Or can I start my own ?
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Posted: 9 years ago
#83

Originally posted by: sweetmishthi



Like I will have to continue from last written one or can continue from anyone's update
Or can I start my own ?


hi, u need to continue from the last part updated.. just res a post stating that you res after the last person stating her name in order to avoid confusion
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Posted: 9 years ago
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good morning huys. I updatd... please continue, now after the verma twist, we will start part 3... so write as you please, likh likh ke naksha bigaad do verma ka
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Excellent work, guys! Please do continue the story. For now, I'm busy writing the update for my SS. After that I have a lot of work lined up. I will try to catch up with you guys when I'm free.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Haayo rabba Regina... Kya awesome twist daala... 🤣 Mai ek jealousy track daalne ka soch hi rhi thi but the way u handled it was 👏
I mean u showed romance without making it clichd.. Hats off babe 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
#87

Originally posted by: Amreen...

Haayo rabba Regina... Kya awesome twist daala... 🤣 Mai ek jealousy track daalne ka soch hi rhi thi but the way u handled it was 👏
I mean u showed romance without making it clichd.. Hats off babe 😳


Hey hey... Thanks, when the show isn't clichd, why should we be... 😆

When are u planning to update
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Posted: 9 years ago
#88
Is there any res after your part Regina?
Can't see Amreen's res... I would like to continue
Am busy but can't resist the continuation of this brilliant twist!!
Fab work Regs(I'll call u that)😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Artist_Forever

Is there any res after your part Regina?

Can't see Amreen's res... I would like to continue
Am busy but can't resist the continuation of this brilliant twist!!
Fab work Regs(I'll call u that)😆


Thanks... N cool, regs will do... Amreen hasn't resd... Guess she is still busy in the sanskari AT.. U can res if u want after me
Edited by mizzundaztud - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#90
Sorry folks... was a lil busy... Mahi plz carry on!!
Looking forward for ur update... kabhi kabhi mere update pe comment bhi kar diya karo 😆

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