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Posted: 11 years ago
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It was morning around. The birds have flown out of there next, the sky was same, same trees, mamiji was doing her regular household work in the morning. Geeta was all busy to make ready Ishaan for his school. Everything was same but something was different not for the world but for Antara.

Yes it was different because she has realized that he was the man that knew her as she is, who is well aware of her everything, who take care of her every at every step and above that never deceives her. She trusts him as she trust her family, as she trust herself. The man is non other then Raghu. The same ganster who made her life no less than hell but today she was in love with the same guy, Raghu.

Hues have changed today for her. Breeze is more pleasant, flowers are more colourful and with more pleasant smell. She always had a smile on her face and cheek's color is pink and when she sees Raghu, it automatically turns red. The world seems to a better place for her today as after her dad's death, it was a hell for her, but today again things have changed.

On the other hand, Raghu was unaware of Antara's feelings. But he himself think and feel the same way, as she did. He always remain in his own world. No matter what Daya mai is saying, he never give damm to her, he is not even worried if her mai is angry on him, he remains calm and quite as always. Its not because he respects his daya mai, but today the reason is different. Today he feels for someone, he wants her to be happy and to see that smile and happiness, he is ready to turn the east and west.

And today he decided to say everything, he feels for Antara because he cant wait for more days. He started planning things that how he is going to tell her. But nothing worked much. He was not happy with those plannings. So he decided to go for very simple and classy way, the way Antara always loved, is his mouth organ, which she didn't know till now. He told muchmuch and Rukhsana to do further planning.

It was night and he started planning his mouth organ standing in the middle of the street below Antara's house. Antara got super excited today, and came out of her house, as she can feel the sound from a close place.

But when she came out, she saw a man playing mouth organ with his back towards her. He became even more curious and went towards him with baby steps. She came forward of him to see the person. She saw it was Raghu playing the mouth organ with closed eyes.

" Raghu", Antara said, " you... you ... Playing ... This ... Means you are the one who..."

" yes, I am the one, who play, this every night for you.." Raghu said with confidence looking straight into her eyes. Antara was in tears. " why didn't you tell me before, when I ask u?" Antara asked.

Raghu: because, today is the day, to tell you everything. There is a perfect time for everything to disclose and today is that day. I wanted to tell you that the person standing in front of you is IN LOVE. Yes raghu is in love, with a girl who is little yedi, actually puri yedi hai meri tarah...

Antara was all red as she get that he is addressing her only. She was sometimes looking up to Raghu but then the evry next second she put her eyes down. She was all shy but not uncomfortable.

Raghu: Yes miss Kaul, Raghu Naik IS IN LOVE WITH YOU. mujhe pyar hai tujhse, teri har baat se, tere daantne se, tere ruthne se, tere wapas mujhe palat ke dekhne se, phir dekhke muskurana se, mere paas aane pe teri tez dil ke dhakan se, tujhe chune se, teri har baat se or tujhse... I LOVE YOU ANTARA.

Antara hugged him tighly digging her face in his chest and he too took her in his arms, securing her. They were in this position for some minutes and then broke the hug. But Raghu was getting restless again..

Raghu: ab jawab to de, meri baat ka... Maine to sab bol diya... Ab tu to kuch bol...

Antara: mai kya bolu?

Raghu: are ye kya baat hui... ye to bata de kit u bhi mujhse pyar karti hai ya nahi?? Ya phir mai devdass to nahi ban jaunga??

Antara brok the hug and hit him a bit on his chest.

Antara: agar pyar nahi karti to hug kyu karti?

Raghu: actually tune to mujhe garage me bhi hug kiya than a... to kyat u tab bhi mujhse pyar karti thi?? Ya abhi abhi hua hai???

He teased her even more just to listen two magical words from her...

" I LOVE YOU MR. RAGHUNATH NAIK" Antara said looking into his eyes and then lowered it because of shyness. The colour of her blood was all on her cheeks. Raghu couldn't control so he kissed her on her forehead which gave a jerk in Antara with this sudden kiss. She moved back few steps. This confused Raghu.

Raghu: kya hua? Tujhe acha nahi laga?

Antara: please Raghu, abhi humari shaadi nahi huyi hai, so please... Ye thik nahi hai...

Raghu gave a smirk and came close to Antara and said .. " to chal mere saath abhi"

Antara: but where and that on in his night?

Raghu: do you trust me?

Antara: more than me I trust you.

Raghu took her hand and made her sit in his car. And they went to a place far from Naik vadi. It was a house which was all decorated and Machmach and Ruksaana were standing.

Ruksana hugged Antara and gave her lots of wishes. Antara was all confused.

Antara(in front of all): Raghu please ab to bata do, that why I am here?

Raghu(looking at both and then Antara): shaadi karne, laya hmm tujhe yaha or tu pareshan mat ho.. sab intezam kar liye hai... actually I cant wait for more days...

Antara: Raghu but itni jaldi and that too without informing mamaji and mamiji, how can I ??

Raghu: tujhe unhe bolna hai na... chal ander or bolde... ha wo ander hi hai... tujhe kya laga, mai tujhe akele me shaadi karne launga? Bado ke aashirwaad bina?

Antara: or mayi?

Raghu: wo out of station hai, unhi baad me bata denge... Ab chal ya saari raat yahi rahegi, to mai to gaya...

Muchmach: waise yedi, tujhe bhai se pyar kaise huya?? Mera matlab hai.. bhabhiji... Ab to yahi bolna padega na... but tu meri bahen mafik hai.. to bhai jiju hua, to mai isko kya bolu??

Raghu: tu soch, hum shad karte hai... thik hai...

mandap was ready and all things necessary for the marriage is set. Ruksana, Mami and aapa took Antara away for getting her ready for the marriage. She came out after 30 minutes and marriage ritual started. It was just in few more minutes marriage is complete and Rantara is now a newly married couple. They took blessings from elders.

Ruksana: so lets leave now, and let these two alone in this new house of Mr and Mrs Raghunath Naik.

Saying this all left them alone in new house that Raghu kept from his past, for his family. And now he is standing there with his family, Antara.

Raghu: may I kiss you now?

Antara was all red now. He came close to her and asked again the same thing in her ears in his husky voice. Antara was not able to say anything. So he kissed her both cheeks, and gave a feathery kiss on his forehead and then on her chin. All this time she was closing her eyes.

He lifted her in his arms and took her to the bedroom which was all decorated.

So guys this was it, and I will only continue if I will get response and trust me next part you all can imagine will be gutter or 18+

part 2: page 8

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Posted: 11 years ago
#2
well written!!!
Kash tumahari thinking sach ho jaye aur...DM ko to planet se bahar kr dena chahiye...please continue..dear
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Beautiful.aaj k episode s itna lovely OS...awesome.. 👏 n tell me tera next OS SR p hoga na 😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Tsuchi

well written!!!

Kash tumahari thinking sach ho jaye aur...DM ko to planet se bahar kr dena chahiye...please continue..dear


thank u dear
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: 22pundirabhi

Beautiful.aaj k episode s itna lovely OS...awesome.. 👏 n tell me tera next OS SR p hoga na 😆


may be ... depends on how i get response in this...😊
n ya thanks
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Posted: 11 years ago
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wow juhi awesome os buddy Raghu toh rajdhani express se bhi fast nikla aur plz continue it dear kyunki humein ise aage padhne mein koi problem nhi hai😉rantra ki SR hayee
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Posted: 11 years ago
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good os...but very fast ...It could have included two three parts and the story could be more deep with emotional views and story track could be better...

nice plot...if there is only one part you wanted to add bcs it is an one short story..then the os could be more long with changed sequences and character views...

keep up the good effort...all d best...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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aate hai ruko thodi der!!!😆
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It was simply super-duper-awesome!
hv no word for ur writing 👏 ⭐️
Raghu cant wait ...lol
he is so fast guy!chat shaadi phat SR...lol😆
machmuach is so confused , poor guy!
kisko kya bole? he dont understand! and its true with more confusion !!😆 😕
very well description from you for ds week epis 👏
is DM ki to main...gharrr!!!!!!!!😡

do continue kameeni, kameenapan tujhse jyada better kayon describe kar sakta h? 🤣

Edited by lizadavidmm - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Omg such a romantic n beautiful os Juhi dear
Plz continue soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: SONAL30

wow juhi awesome os buddy Raghu toh rajdhani express se bhi fast nikla aur plz continue it dear kyunki humein ise aage padhne mein koi problem nhi hai😉rantra ki SR hayee


ya i made it very fast in this os... as actually my focus was on next part... ...

ya i know that aap logo ko koi problem nahi hogi😆😆 next part padne me

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