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Posted: 11 years ago
#71

Guys this the second part of my so called OS which has now become an SS all thanks to the positive response on the last one!

And I apologise for the late update but I was stuck with some circumstances!

Antara walks into Aaji's room blushing..

Aaji: Kya hua Antara? Chai nahi layi??

Antara: Aaji woh...kya hua na ki..ermm wohh

When Antara was all confused and trying to explain Aaji noticed Raghu coming out of the kitchen and smiles

Aaji: Achcha chal koi baat nahi waise bhi mera chai peene ka man nahi tha. Raghu!!

Aaji shouted him

Raghu: Kya hua aaji?? Aapki tabiyat to theek hai na??

Aaji: Haan re jab tak Antara idhar hai mujhe kya hoga??

Raghu and Antara's eyes met and Raghu gave her a naughty smile!

Raghu: Haan to kuch kaam tha kya aaji?

Aaji: Haan woh dekh Antara ko doctor ke paas leke jaana hai

Raghu and Antara: KYA??????

Antara: par aaji mujhe kya hua??

Raghu: Haan aaji kya hua Miss Call ko? Eh Miss Call tune apun ko bataya nahi ki teri tabiyat kharab hai! Kya hua hain haan?? Bata mereko abhi chup chap se!

Raghu went on blabbering showing his concern not even letting Antara speak and then Aaji patted on his back...

Aaji: Ehhh Yede ab khade khade bakwaas hi karega yaa phir lekar bhi jaega?

Antara: Par aaji mujhe kuch bhi to nahi hua to fir kyun??

Aaji: Kaise nahi hua? Who tere gale pe itna bura nishaan ka kya?? Chot lagi to hai!

Aaji gets a big smirk on her face, Raghu gets shocked after hearing her words and Antara's face was priceless.

Raghu: nishaan?? Kaisa nishaan?

He looked at the big bruise on her neck and was petrified at the sight! Antara gave Raghu an angry look and he looks down and waves his hands through his hair! Aaji is stood at the back witnessing all the shyness between the two and all those flashbacks playing between their eyes.

Aaji: ahem...mm

They both came out of their trance.

Aaji: kya hua Chintu tu ek dum se chup kyun hogaya?? Lekar nahi jaega doctor ke paas?

Raghu: haan lekar jaata hoon na...Aana Miss Call

He stammered and put his arms around her shoulder and then Antara gave him a look and jerked his hand off. They both went to the jeep and Aaji accompanied them making sure they leave immediately. They both left the basti in his jeep

@In The Jeep

Antara: Raghu!

Raghu: Haan Miss Call

Antara: Hum kahan jaa rahe hain?? Tum please bataoge mujhe?

Raghu: Doctor ke paas..aur kaha?

Antara was stunned at his reply!

Antara: Kya??? Tum sach mein mujhe doctor ke paas lekar jaa rahe ho???

Raghu: Chila kyun rahi hai?? Aur tujhe kya laga??

Antara: Aaji ko to kuch nahi pata tha par tumhe to...

And then she suddenly realised what she was about to say and shut her mouth instantly. Raghu had a smug look on his face and watched Antara flush from the corner from his eye

Raghu: Mujhe kya Miss Call?? Bol na..chup kyun hogayi?

Raghu: Bol na!!!

Antara: Raghu chup chap gaadi roko!

Raghu: Kyun???

Antara: Tum ek baar mein bina sawaal karein side mein sun nahi sakte? Agar sunna hota to aaj ye sab nahi hua hota!

Raghu: Nahi galat boli tu...Agar sunliya hota to kal raat itni haseen nahi hoti!

Antara started reddening on his words...and gave him a punch on his arm but that didn't seem to bother him at all but at her surprise he just sat their grinning!

Like before if you liked the update and want a pm please like this post!

PS. YES YES YES I know I left it as a cliff hanger AGAIN and everyone is going to be mad again...sabra ka fal meetha hota hain remember!!

AsTru thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
#72
Awesme Yar Plz Contineuoe
Edited by A_.R_.786 - 11 years ago
nnks thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
#73
wow nice alisha pls.continue😛
alishamerchant_ thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
#74

Originally posted by: nnks

wow nice alisha pls.continue😛

I will thanks!
alishamerchant_ thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
#75

Originally posted by: ayaazukideewani

awesome update alisha
do continue


Thank You! 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
#76
Oh wow! Read the second part aur bahut mazaa aaya! The best part is your dialogues! You stay true to the character! Their dialogues dont seem weird! You have written exactly the way the characters would have talked! Loved it! But eager to know the rest of the story!

P.S. I am not mad at you for the cliffhanger! Coz I am a writer and I know what is the value of cliffhanger in a story! Really eager to read more but ready to wait coz the wait is worth your work!
Edited by Kalpana_Writer - 11 years ago
alishamerchant_ thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
#77

Originally posted by: Kalpana_Writer

Oh wow! Read the second part aur bahut mazaa aaya! The best part is your dialogues! You stay true to the character! Their dialogues dont seem weird! You have written exactly the way the characters would have talked! Loved it! But eager to know the rest of the story!


P.S. I am not mad at you for the cliffhanger! Coz I am a writer and I know what is the value of cliffhanger in a story! Really eager to read more but ready to wait coz the wait is worth your work!


AWWW thanks for the lovely review!
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Posted: 11 years ago
#78
Aakhir aisa kya huva hai kal raat bata na...


Oxygen pe rakh diya yaar...kun...


Ab mere sawal ka jawab kon dega...machmach ko poochu kya????????
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Posted: 11 years ago
#79
alisha osam cant wait to read the flash back
i will only update my ss when u update urs
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Posted: 11 years ago
#80

Originally posted by: kaveriw2008

Aakhir aisa kya huva hai kal raat bata na...


Oxygen pe rakh diya yaar...kun...


Ab mere sawal ka jawab kon dega...machmach ko poochu kya????????


Kal raat...woh to tumhe pata hai...bu there are going to be twists and tuns i can tell you that!

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