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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: --Priya--

Loved it, the confession wasn't dramatic or cheesy, it wasn't overly romantic or long either. It was plain and simple, few words that meant the world to Raghav and could last him a lifetime. I love how you've described Jhanvi, it's quite realistic and the essence of her character remains to be intact. The bond both Raghav and Jhanvi share is just beautiful and I love how you've showed Jhanvi to be healing bit by bit in each of these OS's. Raghav seeing Sia's scars is something I would like to see in the show too, maybe in one of the shots Jhanvi could trust him enough to tell him how she got them from Viraj? Brilliant writing, would love to read more!


Cheers,
Pri


that is the plan. I plan to write more of these as Raghav discovers more about her past. She is healing slowly but surely. She has accepted that Raghav would never hurt her, she trust him now. She will tell him about her scars in another os. Thanks for reading!
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Posted: 13 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: Prishna_DBPS

It's really beautiul Jaan you write really beautifully keep writing


thanks dear hope you all can continue to read when I post more in the future
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Fourth Os- Scars

She was lounging on couch flipping through Tanisha's designs. Her feet were bare. Her ankle was bothering her so she had elevated her leg on a pillow as she browsed. He must have not noticed her at first. She smiled slightly. His shirt was soaked from sweat. He had been working in the scorching summer heat. He threw his shirt on the couch and it landed at her feet. He turned finally to see her laying there. He frowned.

He looked apologetic for just throwing his things here and there. He grabbed the shirt from there but stopped short seeing something on the back of her feet. He looked at her. She looked back at him puzzled.

"Go freshen up, I'll just go get you something cool to drink," she stammered.

He grabbed her arm.

"Ruko," he stated firmly.

She looked at him apprehensively wondering if she had done something wrong.

"Yeh sab use ne kiya?," he asked upset.

Had he noticed an unfaded scar of her past?

"Kya?," she asked softly.

He had her sit down facing him.

He caressed the back of her feet and looked at her softly. She realized what he had noticed.

"When I tried to run away, I hurt my feet then he burned me there with..," she trailed off.

He cupped her chin and turned her to look at him directly.

"I want to help all your wounds heal. I want you to become strong enough that even the scabs cannot bleed out," he declared.

A few tears escaped her eyes this time. She didn't care that he was sweaty, she simply embraced him with all her might. He held her before he stepped back.

"Guess someone else needs to freshen up along with me," he teased before pulling her along with him. Before she knew it he had pulled her under the shower and both of them were drenched. She regained her composure and nudged him, he simply pulled her back. He ran a hand from her shoulder down to her hand again. She blushed as he give her quick peck on her neck. She found some soap and flung it at him. He squirted some body wash on her.

The couple enjoyed their soap fight. Later they rinsed themselves off. She ran off first to go change and get dry.

Later she was attempting to wear one of Tanisha's creations to see if it would fit one of the models for the fashion show. She was having trouble with the doris. Raghav arrived in the room. He smiled softly. She saw him in the mirror.

He raised his eyebrows as if to ask if she needed help. She merely nodded. He came closer and moved her hair aside. She felt the good kind of goosebumps as she felt his fingers on her skin and his warm breath on her neck.

He looked carefully at her skin. He noticed some marks that were faded, some older than others. He wished he could erase all the bad things that had happened to her. All he wanted was her to be happy. He wished he could erase the scars and fears just like one could rip up thorns and throw them away for good. He helped her finish getting ready.

She smiled at him.

"I'll be back soon. Just going to show Tanisha how the fitting looks," she stated.

He looked her up and down.

"Kya hua?," she inquired.

"It must look strange on me. Don't worry, I'll change soon," she stammered.

He shook his head.

"You look very nice. Just wish I could help you more," he stammered.

She shook her head.

"What are you saying? Everything you do and have done has helped me heal more each day," she assured him.

She kissed his cheek quickly before walking out of the room.

He gazed after her his eyes moistened.

Much later they lay together, side by side on their bed. He would notice a scar and she would tell him how it happened and so forth. In return he would hold her and assure her that someday she would sleep through the night without any nightmares.

He was right. That night Jhanvi Singhania slept without any nightmares. She slept peacefully with her loving husband Raghav Singhania right beside her.

Edited by adventure_gurl - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#34
beautiful work, hatts off dear...
i can literally feel ur words...
d shower part was dreamy, wish i cud really get such a RaghavI scene one day...
but d best part was when she embraces him aftr he assures her of taking away her pain...
seriously dis couple just rocks, i wish creatives wud read dese nd adopt em as d future scenes 4 RaghavI...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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One word; Beautiful! 👏 Why can they not show something like this in the show? 🤔

Edited by --Priya-- - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#36
Aww!! Lovely.. 😍wish something like this happens in the show :)

Thanks for the pm dear, keep writing more🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
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You are welcome glad you liked it!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I just caught with all the chapters and wonderful writing, 👏I loved each and every one of them!

What's unique about these OS's are that they aren't overly romantic, cheesy and full of fluff, everything is balanced out and each shot shows the depth of bond between RaghavI.

You can tell Raghav loves Jhanvi and his love is so selfless that he doesn't want much in return, he just wants her to heal and get better and be the person she used to be before she got married to Viraj. And Jhanvi, you can see her character progression in each of these shots as she begins to trust Raghav even more and heals with his help. What I really like is that she can mentally compare both of her marriages and see how differently the two men love her. When she was married to Viraj he was possessive, obsessive and narcissistic and with Raghav it's the exact opposite.

We've seen Raghav comforting and helping Jhanvi heal, if possible I would like to see Jhanvi comforting Raghav and help him mend the relationship with Gayatri. Once again, great writing and I just cannot wait to read the next shot!

Anji
Edited by *angel94* - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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It was very nice and beuutiful
luved the bathroom scene
pls cont soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: *angel94*

I just caught with all the chapters and wonderful writing, 👏I loved each and every one of them!


What's unique about these OS's are that they aren't overly romantic, cheesy and full of fluff, everything is balanced out and each shot shows the depth of bond between RaghavI.

You can tell Raghav loves Jhanvi and his love is so selfless that he doesn't want much in return, he just wants her to heal and get better and be the person she used to be before she got married to Viraj. And Jhanvi, you can see her character progression in each of these shots as she begins to trust Raghav even more and heals with his help. What I really like is that she can mentally compare both of her marriages and see how differently the two men love her. When she was married to Viraj he was possessive, obsessive and narcissistic and with Raghav it's the exact opposite.

We've seen Raghav comforting and helping Jhanvi heal, if possible I would like to see Jhanvi comforting Raghav and help him mend the relationship with Gayatri. Once again, great writing and I just cannot wait to read the next shot!

Anji


Hey thanks for the lovely comments, will consider writing one dealing with Gayatri and Raghav healing their relationship.

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