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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: Bidz_cutegal

I really like the way you are building up the characters😳.. Loving the chatterbox Kastur and Chup chap sa Mohan.. haayee what should I say about him? *sigh*☺️ I wish if he would kidnap me😍🤣 The story is shaping up perfectly👏.. Waiting for the love story to begin😉.. Hats off to your writing style⭐️.. Update soon! 😊 Not only soon but super fast cuz I'm getting impatient😆.. Fantastic update once again! 👏

Aww Thanks hun Embarrassed, Yesss I know, I want Kastur as a chatterbox instead of her being all silent 😊... Haha 😆😆.. Yess Bidz_cutegal everybody's dream would be that a guy like him would kidnap us lolz.. Ohh Honey ..Sorry for the late update, my laptop was broken so had to give it for repair. But I'll update right away now.
Please give me ideas around how you guys want the update to be.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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When I woke up, Mohan got me saying that today is the day he will call my dad and we would not see eachother hopefully he said with a gasp on his face. I somehow didn't want to leave him, I enjoyed the time with him and was really happy around him even though I was kidnapped, I didn't feel like getting kidnapped. I could feel his pain and even though he didn't tell me his pain I could feel his pain and I didn;t like it, he told me to get up and he would gimme my breakfast. I was happy because I got really hungry, and you guys know how much I love food.. I got up and went to the bathroom.

They had this awesome buffet thing going on - English muffins, with pancakes and syrup, and some eggy stuff. I grabbed a plate and loaded it with yumminess - This why I hearth buffets so much. You can never finish.

I shoved some french toast in my mouth, chewing and swallowing as quickly as I could. Mohan was watching me distastefully, nibbling at his strawberry. God he was such a girl.

"What's your Dad's number?" He finally asked, his eyes following the spoon that was rapidly from my mouth to my bowl of yummy cereal. " I should make the call soon"

I almost choked on the chocolatey cereal ( everything is better chocolated. You know, bread stick things, donuts, bread) Damn. Should I give it to him? I'd slept on it, but the whole propect of returning home was just.. bleurgh. I really didn't want to leave so soon. I was actually having fun.

Trying to figure out what to say, I stared into the distance. Then my eyes focused.

oh CRAP!

"Mohan we have to leave right away right now.! Do you have all our stuff??"

He frowned and tapped his pockets.

"My clothes are upstairs, but my wallet and... weapon is with me" Weapon? Oh right, gun.

"Leave them" I whispered " We have to leave now"

"Why" Mohan asked with an confused face expression

"Behind you, there is a man. Don't look!" I hissed, when he semi-turned around.

"What's he doing"

"He is reading the newspaper" I said

"Does he secretly have a bomb or something?"

I looked at him disbelievingly.

"You are not being serious now, are you?"

"Cant you tell" he said with a smirk on his face

I shook my head, semi-smiling.

"No, he hasn't got a bomb. It's the newspaper".

"Is that a secret bomb?"

"No, it's the pic on the newspaper"

"Is it a pic of a bomb?"

"No - What is up with you and bombs?"

He smirked that smirk that was somehow cute, sweet, boyish yet cocky at the same time. Damn, my heart was beating twice as fast now.

"It's a guy thing"

"Sure. No, it's not a picture of a bomb. It's a pic of me!!!

Sorry guys have to leave.. my mom is yelling at me.. I'll continue later or maybe tomorrow.

Please comment 😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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That was really good! am all excited already for the next part.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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OMG ! This is amazing .. No joke. 😍
I loved this .. Sorry I couldn't replay sooner .. I was planning to read it .. But didn't get the time .. 😳
But I just read through the whole thing .. And this is sooo good. <3
Pls continue .. Would love to read more about what happens.
P.S. I wish there really was a drama like this .. 😊

Edited by sparkling-star - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Damn why have you left it on such a cliffhanger? 😡 I'm getting more desperate now 😕 Want the next update ASAP 😳 Okay, coming to this update, mannn you are just too good 👍🏼 Kastur doesn't want to go and Mohan has understood it by now because Kastur was trying to save him 😃 Yeah, she was saving him 🥳Yaay! I feel like to dance I bet Mohan will know Kastur's real intention soon 😉 Want them to fall in love now 😳 Please please please update the next update fast 😊
Edited by Bidz_cutegal - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#26

Thank you very much Guys! Sorry for the short update. My mom was shouting at me, because I took more than an hour on computer. When I was almost finished my laptop frowned and deleted everything I got. I was like *beeb beeb beeb* Had to cencore the words lolz.. so I had to re-right the update again. TYPICAL ME!!

So now is the new update going to come.. and thanks alot guys. It got me really happy to read your comments!! I'll start from where I left..

- Kastur is Missing

Omg. Dad worked fast. He's bought them into printing that on every front page - It gave him the image of a caring father. He must have thought it would help his ego or something. No way did he actually care in real life.

"What do we do" Mohan hissed. We?

"Leave now!"

He nodded in mutual agreement, I hid my face by pressing it into his jacket. Mohan ran his fingers through my already messed up hair ( We didn't have a hairbrush, Okay?😕), I'm guessing to make me look different from the photo or something. There was practically no need - when that photo was taken, I had long, cropped hair, and make-up on. And trust me, my make-up artists are REALLY good. Maybe that's another thing that increased my dad's whole ego - He had the "perfect" pretty daughter. Damn him!

- We went towards the parking. " Where did you park the car?" I muttered, peeked in the direction we were going. He gestured vaguely at the car park A, and we slowly made there.

"Shit!" he hissed.

"What?"

"There are cops around my car !" They're checking my license plate!"

I drew back completely, to look at his face.

"Please don't tell me you changed your license plate😡😡?" I said, in a calm voice that was so not what I was feeling inside."What kind of god-damn kidnapper are you?!"
"Shh," He whispered, covering my mouth with his hand. " The cops will hear you!"

"I doh coo!" I said, muffled. I don't care! was what I was going for. " Let me go you idout" Let me go you idiot! I licked his hand, and he actually let go.

"OH GOD! That's gross! What the hell did you do that for?" He yelled, forgetting the cops. He rubbed his licked hand on his shirt, glaring at me reproachfully.

"Your the one who stopped me from breathing," I said, calmly, but dragging him behind the bushes, away from the cops at the same time.

"I left your nose open! you could breathe fine!" he hissed, but following me all the same.

"I don't like breathing through nose!"

He glared at me.

"Why the hell do humans have noses, then?"

I thought about that one, as I peered through a big bushy thing and stared at the cops. They were indeed writing his number plate down. Maybe it was a ticket? Actually, if it was, why were there about five of them, looking all serious?

"To smell food?"

"Yes, but you need to breathe in through your nose to smell. Don't you know that?"

I sighed. He was really not letting this one go. God, he was such a clean freak. I shoved a finger into his mouth, and pulled it out, wiping the gross saliva on my jeans, turning back to the cops.

"there" I hissed. "We're even, Can you please let it go, and concentrate on what's important?"

He didn't respond. Maybe he was in a shock.

Oh crap. One of the cops had a paper, with my face on it - I'm pretty sure Dad would have put a reward up. I think a hundred thousand dollars would be enough incentive for a cop to go snooping around. The cop holding giant picture of my face pointed at it, and gesturing the car. His colleagues nodded. Shit, it was really about me.

"ARGH" Mohan yelled, exploding suddenly. "What's wrong with you?! Are you still a bloody girl?That was disgusting!!"

"Arh!!!... " I sighed "Now you've done it. The cops are looking over here now".

He fell silent, FINALLY!

He took his hoody off himself

"Take this on, and thake the hoody on now!" he said looking really serious. When he took off his hoody, he had an tight t-shirt on underneath which was showing his abs.. I couldn't resist but keep looking on his body, like I was undressing him with my eyes. 😆😆😆 Suddenly, he pulled it down my head. It smelt amazing just like he did. I smiled, slipped my arms through the sleeves.

I had the hoody on my head, looking like a little gangster girl.. He then grabbed my hand.

"Let's go now, hurry up." We should walk over another place, maybe get a motel somewhere near here. I could feel his cold hands, but I felt an warm breeze inside my body, it made me shiver.

We walked like we were an couple, and tried to look as normal as we could, even though it was quite weird, that I was supporting him through this. Didn't he find out that I was helping him.. I don't know, he was holding my hand and we were walking towards the blocks tried to avoid the cops. We saw a couple of cops cars so we turned to the left into a small side street.. It was a dead end, but then I felt like someone was behind us, like if someone was following us.

" I think someone is following us" I said whispering to mohan

" We should just do what normal people do!" at this moment I didn't know what normal people would do, so I did what just accured my thought. I hugged him, with my face down. He was shocked, and surprise at the same time. my arm's were around his neck. I could feel his body against mine. His hands were numb, like he didn't know what to do.

"Mohan just play along with me" Is someone behind me .. I could feel mohans hands hugging me, and he said " Yes, someone is behind us"

"keep hugging!!" I said with an smirk on my face.. his strong arms around me, I felt like I was in heaven. Like there were no tomorrow. I didn't want stop this hug, I wanted it to be like this forever. In a weird way I felt protective like someone can't do anything to me because he was here. I loved every second of it.

"He is going" Mohan said, I woke up from my dream and was now in the harsh reality.

hope u guys liked this update.. please please please comment and like it.. I'll write wright away when u comment. Next time the romantic part will be up, so as many as comment's I'll be on with my romantic update right away from there 😊

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Posted: 14 years ago
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I was undressing him with my eyes. - Kastur is so .. Well I don't know what to say! She's just too good 🤣 I love this Kastur .. seriously man! I freakingly love this gurl! 😆 In this update, I find Mohan very cute and buddhu at some parts but Kastur .. she was damn hilarious 🤣 Yeh kaisi ladki hai yaar? Kya kya imagine kar rahi thi aur woh bhi apni kidnapper ko ... Chi chi mujhe bolne mein bhi sharam aa rahi hai 🤣 I'm laughing like a retard 🤣 Mohan still didn't get that Kastur wants to stay with him? Kitna buddhu hai yaar! 😆

"I don't like breathing through nose!"

He glared at me.

"Why the hell do humans have noses, then?"

I thought about that one, as I peered through a big bushy thing and stared at the cops. They were indeed writing his number plate down. Maybe it was a ticket? Actually, if it was, why were there about five of them, looking all serious?

"To smell food?"


The above part is absolutely something beyond HILARIOUS 🤣 I totally loved this noses-and-breathing-and-smell-food conversation 😆 The last part was dreamy 😍 Made me remember of Hum-Dil-De-Chuke-Sanam scene 😍 They hugged 😍 They were close .. Oh gosh I'm blushing ☺️ Aur yeh idea bhi kiska? The great Kastur ji ka 🤣


Please please update the romantic part soon .. Can't wait to read that 😃 Gosh I have become a fan of your story 😍 You are doing GREAT job in it 👏 You proceeded the story in an absolute professional way ⭐️


-Bidushy❤️


PS.- What's your name? 😆 Okay so I wanted to suggest you that you should PM about your updates to your readers, so that they can read on time .. that's what the FF writers usually do 😊 And please PM the other DPians [maybe who haven't seen this FF thread] about this FF, so that they can read this awesome story too 😃 I bet you'll get loads of comments then because your story is really commendable 👏 It's just a suggestion, don't mind hun! 😳

Edited by Bidz_cutegal - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: Bidz_cutegal

I was undressing him with my eyes. - Kastur is so .. Well I don't know what to say! She's just too good 🤣 I love this Kastur .. seriously man! I freakingly love this gurl! 😆 In this update, I find Mohan very cute and buddhu at some parts but Kastur .. she was damn hilarious 🤣 Yeh kaisi ladki hai yaar? Kya kya imagine kar rahi thi aur woh bhi apni kidnapper ko ... Chi chi mujhe bolne mein bhi sharam aa rahi hai 🤣 I'm laughing like a retard 🤣 Mohan still didn't get that Kastur wants to stay with him? Kitna buddhu hai yaar! 😆


"I don't like breathing through nose!"

He glared at me.

"Why the hell do humans have noses, then?"

I thought about that one, as I peered through a big bushy thing and stared at the cops. They were indeed writing his number plate down. Maybe it was a ticket? Actually, if it was, why were there about five of them, looking all serious?

"To smell food?"


The above part is absolutely something beyond HILARIOUS 🤣 I totally loved this noses-and-breathing-and-smell-food conversation 😆 The last part was dreamy 😍 Made me remember of Hum-Dil-De-Chuke-Sanam scene 😍 They hugged 😍 They were close .. Oh gosh I'm blushing ☺️ Aur yeh idea bhi kiska? The great Kastur ji ka 🤣


Please please update the romantic part soon .. Can't wait to read that 😃 Gosh I have become a fan of your story 😍 You are doing GREAT job in it 👏 You proceeded the story in an absolute professional way ⭐️


-Bidushy❤️


PS.- What's your name? 😆 Okay so I wanted to suggest you that you should PM about your updates to your readers, so that they can read on time .. that's what the FF writers usually do 😊 And please PM the other DPians [maybe who haven't seen this FF thread] about this FF, so that they can read this awesome story too 😃 I bet you'll get loads of comments then because your story is really commendable 👏 It's just a suggestion, don't mind hun! 😳

Aww.. So sweet of you ❤️ .. I wanted to make Kastur alittle crazy but still cute..
And my name is Zara 😊😊.. Aww I'm trying my utter best to sound good, and tell their views in my writing which is a bit hard. But I'm sooo happy that you liked it, and about the Pm's ! I have never Pm'ed anyone lol .. but sure I will do that on my next update which I'm getting on with right now!! 😉😉... So as Promised I'll get on with my "Romantic" Update ( Even thoug it's one sided at this moment.. can't make them both fall in love right now, it's waaayyy too quick lol) Sorrryy I know you wan't them to be together now! but I have to make it a bit realistic aswell.. 😆 😆 .. And tell me what kind of track you guys want from me.. Like typical indian soap type or different..?? 😕😕 And believe me even now I don't know how the story would go, I go with my instict..
And thank's again sweety.. I'll update now!!! 😃
Best regards,
Zara
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Please no typical indian soap type...it should be different yet romantic and of course with a happy ending :)
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(Chapter 6)
- Kasturs p.o.v
I have my arms around Mohan, I want to forget everything around us. We hear a guy tell another guy
" Oh it's just some lovebirds" When I heardit, it made me smile, I don't care of what Mohan is thinking right now, I just want to take the full advantage of the situation..
"I think he is gone by now" I hear mohan whispering.
"We don't know that fully, just be here for few minuts so we can be sure that he is gone" I smug, feeling like som pervert who doesn't care a damn about the other guy is there, just that I'm in arm's of Mohan. I have never felt like this before, I don't know what I'm doing and why I'm doing this. Just that I was happy being here with him. After few minuts I feel that Mohan has take his arms off me, even though I didn't want to get off him but had to. I looked down feeling my cheeks went all red by embaressement. There was this silent in between us, which went on for many hours, okay okay - only few minuts but it felt like loads of hours.
"We should go now" Mohan said looking at me with his big cute eyes. They were soo deep that I could sleep in them..
"Oh I guess yea" I looked down, still blushing as hell.
When we were near the hotel.I grabbed his hand, he got shocked by my action
"Ok," I hissed to him. " If you want to get in without raising any suspicious, we have to pretend we're a couple."
"Why can't we just say we're related?"
I gave him a minut to look at ourselves. Him, with his brown eyes and brown hair, and me with my dark brown eyes and long black hair
"Fine" he said giving in " And I can't let you take a room seperately. You might escape. But you seem to be in charge here, I thought I was the kidnapper. "
I grabbed his hand, we were at this really cheap motel, I have always been in wealthy five star hotels, but this one looked like some one night stand motels; uerghh - even the thought gave me the creeps. I had tightened his hand with mine, I was totally in the wife role (yep guys your thinking correctly I took full advantage of the situation ;) lols). We went towards the reception counter which was actually a little brown filthy table with the big computer on it, seemed to me like it's really old one. The receptionist was some old tharki man, he gave me a dirty glare. I felt like slapping his head on the counter. Wow I've never had such a brutal thought before; I guess Mohan's aggression was infecting on me.

When Mohan looked what kind of glare the old man was giving me, he took my hand and led me behind me, like If he is protecting me.

" Jee Saab ji, ek room chahiye" the old man said with this disgusting smirk on his face.
"Haan, ek do din ke liye" Mohan replied looking at the receptionist like he is going to kill him.
"bounty ke papa, room acha se Lena" I had the biggest smile on my face, Mohan looked shocked because I called him "bounty ke papa". He then looked weird at me, but I found it fun so I continued,
"Aap ko pata hay uncle aaj humari 5th Saal ki anniversary hai" saying to the old man who was checking us in. "Oh wow, badayi ho, Aap ka beta nahi saath aya?" he said looking still with this disgusting look.
"Oh, haan woh abroad parta hai, you know London. Uske papa usko apni tarah police commissioner banana chahte hei na" I said and help Mohans arm tighter, and laid my haid on his shoulder like If I was really in the moment, mohan just at looked me with this stern look in his eyes and came close "don't push it" he whispered. I just ignored him,
"here the key of room 598" he said looking down. Mohan was surprised of the mans behavior how it changed from this dirty man to a sharif man. "kitne paise hoye?" mohan said.
"Saab paiso ka kya, baad mein dekh lenge" he smiled.
Mohan took my hand still protective and led me toward the room. When he opened the room, it was this small room with a bed beside the bed there was a table with a lamp on it. I ran to the bed and laid there. "itni relax hone ki koi zaroorat nahi hai," he mummered "bounty ke papa" all of a sudden he had a cute little smile on his face, when I saw his face I couldn't stop but to smile myself. He had this cutest smile on his face uff, I could literally drool over him, he had this little dimple down his cheek. I had stared in a long time now, because Mohan was looking at me as well. "found something good?" he said, he had this cockiness over him. I looked down, I realized that I had been looking at him in a long time now. "erm you got something on your face that's why I was looking at you" I answered, I felt like saying HAHA, but obviously I didn't. He tried to take it off with his finger. "ab theek hai?" he asked like a little boy. He still hadn't removed it. "No, wait let me" I walked towards him, and took my hand on his face -and cupped my hand on his cheek, then took it away with my thumb. I was few inches away from him. I could feel his breath, I just looked at him. We both were really close and my hand were still on his face. I couldn't look away from him. His front-hair was covering his one eye. Our eyes met and we kept looking into each-others eyes..

SUDDENLY The door knocked, we snapped out of the moment and I jumped backwards because I got scared of the sudden noise.
Mohan went to the door and opened it, the old creepy man was smiling "room thik hai na?" he looked at Mohan, I got a bit annoyed because now I don't know what would've happened if that dumbass old man didn't knock the door. Mohan also annoyed said "haan sab thik hai, don't disturb us next time!" he said angrily to the old man.
"Jee sir, sorry for disturbing" and closed the door behind himself. If this was anyone else I would've said so where were we, but I couldn't because he is my kidnapper not a boyfriend. I was in my thoughts when I saw Mohan waving at me, I snapped out of my thoughts and said "huh?"
"didn't you hear what I said?" I shacked my head "No"
He looked annoyed at me like I'm not taking him serious. Which I was.. Oh shit kastur snap out of this, he is your kidnapper, nothing can happened between you two.
"I'll take the floor" Mohan said
"I'll take the bed then" I said smilingly, while Mohan's annoyed face got more annoyed. He took one pillow off the bed and laid right next to the bed. He looked at me and said
"go to sleep now!"
"Already!? - it's only 9 0'clock" I said,
"So!? Your not in a picnic!! I have kidnapped you" he said angrily.
"which you suck at!!" I said getting annoyed of his attitude.
" You should thank me, for rescuing your ass from the cops, or else you would've been in jail!!" I said getting up to the bed looking down to his side.
"why didn't you?" he asked out of curiosity.
"why didn't I what?" I said trying to avoid him
"why didn't you get me arrested then, your chance were there and as you said it yourself I wasn't that good at it" he said
"I don't know" I answered
"maybe because I know that you really need money, and you won't hurt me" i said looking straight into his eyes.
His eyes got wide, even I couldn't believe I said it like this..
" you can't know, what if I rape you" he said trying to look dangerous.
" I wish" I said in a silent voice.
"WHAT??" he said..
I pretended like I never said it and said "you won't, you ain't like that - I can feel that" I Said looking at another direction.
" how could you know I'm not like that?" he said..
"my gut feeling tells me that your a okay guy, and that's why I'm helping you out" I said
" oh okay!" he said like he didn't know what else to answer, I then looked up and went down to him.
"ab kya hua?" mohan said with his closed eyes
"nothing, I was just wondering..."
" wondering what?" he interrupted
"hmmm you really want to know what I was wondering?"
" hmmm yes, what were you wondering" he said while sitting up (we were facing each other both on the floor)
"you promise not to get mad or annoyed right?".
"yes I promise now tell what were you wondering?". He said looking really serious at me.
" is it true that one of my eye is bigge than the other" I said playfully. I had this huge grin on my face. He first looked like if I'm stupid or something.
"hmm let me c he said" I was surprised by his answer.
"oh yes your right eye is bigger than your left eye" he said looking really serious.
"what??? Is it for real" I asked.
"yes yes yes, and look at your cheeks, one is bigger than the other" he said pointing on my face. I got afraid and ran towards the bathroom to see if he is telling the truth, after 5 min when I came back I saw him laughing really hard like he pulled a joke on me.
"ohhh you stupid ass!!!" I ran towards him and took my pillow and started to hit him with it. He then took his pillow and started hitting me with it.. I ran back.. And he ran after me, I ran to my bed.. He throned the pillow on me, and then all of a sudden we were having pillow fight he then took my pillow and got on top of me, I couldn't stop laughing and I started to scream because it was so hilarious:. He then put his hands on mine and for a while be both got still. Our breaths were out of control, I then realized that he was on top of me. We stared at each other,

then all of a sudden mohan got off of me.. His face went from big laughter to a stiff face. He took towards the floor. And laid down, I couldnt understand what just happened. He turned off the lights. And I just looked up on ceiling like couldn't react on what just happened. Did I do something wrong??

Okay guys that was my update hope u guys liked it!!!! Comment please
Best regards,
Zara

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