Pyaar Mein-ManVeer ff

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey guys I was re watching DEK, and thought what if Akash was the villain from the moment it
was found out that M was a princess and what if using ...navina...'s version of Akash villainy cause I thought that it was pretty perfect just add in M being there but like J unseen and to protect Uday she keeps quiet and life goes on in DEK and everything she did up to episode 111 was a smart well thought out ploy except for her grieving Akash she felt bad that he died, she was also hurt and angry., However she was grieving for Uday also because she could see what the guilt was doing to him even though he hid it so well from everyone and she started realizing that Uday truly loved her. Which was also apart of how their friendship was formed. But mind you NO ONE knows that Manyata knows that Akash is dead which brings my spin starting from episode 111
...navina... : Journey of a Wife
Chpt 1.4:

http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3138053&TPN=7

Akash's Truth - using only the flashback scene

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Posted: 9 years ago
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...navina... : Journey of a Wife
Chpt 1.4:

http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3138053&TPN=7

Akash's Truth - using only the flashback scene


Akash is standing on top of a hill- checking his watch every now and again...anxiously waiting for someone. A car arrives and then 2 jeeps. Uday gets off the car- he has a bag in his hand. 8 men get off from the jeeps and stand behind Uday.
Akash: Udayveer...right on time - I see u brought it, gesturing towards the bag.
Uday: Yep, 1crore- as you asked and threw the bag to Akash. Akash looks inside it. He smiles when he sees the money.
Akash: You know, Udayveer - I asked for this money just half an hour ago- & in that short time, u arranged for it. That means (he throws the bag back to Uday), that when I marry Moniya- I'll have access to much,much more than that at any time of the day.
His eyes were now shining with greed & Uday was now boiling with anger. He grabbed onto Akash's collar and through gritted teeth he spoke: U said that if I give u the money- you'll get out of Manyata's life.
Akash: (removing Uday's hands from his collar)-Well, LOOKS LIKE I CHANGED MY MIND. You see Udayveer- MONIYA IS MY TICKET TO THE POT OF GOLD AT THE END OF THE RAINBOW!!!
Uday: YOU FILTHY, SLIMY, GOLD-DIGGING PIECE OF SHIT, (moving forward towards Akash, taking a swing at him). You stay away from her -You Hear Me! - STAY AWAY FROM HER!!!
Akash: Hai! Kya Pyar Hain!!! (he says mockingly, whilst wiping the blood from his lip). Tum Moniya UFF, SORRY; Manyata se pyar karte ho...wo mujhse pyar karte hain aur main...uske daulat se pyar karte ho.
Akash was smiling evilly & he sees that Uday is now trembling with anger. He also looks at Uday's hands which were curled into fists. To further aggravate Uday's fury, he starts again:
Akash: Udayveer (stressing on the Veer part of Uday's name) itna gussa kyun ho rahi ho! OKAY- I'LL MAKE A PLAN WHERE WE ALL CAN WIN. Moniya will marry the man she loves (pointing to himself) - SO SHE'LL WIN! I'll get married into the filthy rich Devgarh Royal Family- THEN I'LL WIN! And for you, Udayveer...hmmm (thinking)...aah ya; I'll record my suhaag-raat with Moniya...I'm sure you always wondered how she looks naked- I'll fulfil that wish of yours-SO, YOU ALSO WIN!
Uday: SHUT UP U B******(he punches Akash), JUST SHUT UP (he punches him again), STAY AWAY FROM MANYATA-STAY AWAY FROM HER GODDAMMIT!!!(he kicks Akash in the stomach).
Now the fight officially begins...finally it culminates in Akash's fall.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Characters

Yuvraj Udayveer Singh- Every word in the that says he's handsome charming and an ambitious Rajwade from the tips of his hair to the tip of his toes. Accidentally causes Akash's death because of his love for his princess. He is a great prince to his riyasat Jaighar, a good businessman, good son to his father Maharaj Giriraj and an awesomely overprotective brother to his sister Rajkumari Unati. The favorite of Rajmata Mirnalini Devi, like a son to Maharaj Brijraj and Maharani Komal friends with Rajkumar Vijayendra Singh Rajkumari Jainandini's unattainable crush and finally the love of his life his princess's best friend and advisor.

Yuvrani Manyata Kumari- Was the stubborn Monya but when she found out Akash truth decide to become Manyata because Monya loved Akash. Soni Monya's friend told her where Akash was because she overheard Akash telling his mother where he was going. However no one knows that she knows Akash is dead because she said that she had a flat tire and by the time she reached there was no one there. Since she knew the truth, knowing that Uday was innocent of murdering Akash but would still be found guilty she kept quiet to protect him and also has some contingency plans if the truth comes out. As Manyata she is calm, poised, elegant... etc. A great Princess to her Riyasat Devghar becoming like her grandmother Rajmata Mirnalini Devi . Best friends with Uday, good friend for Unati and Vijay, her sister J's nemesis, a good daughter to her parents, nice to her aunt Meinka and with Uday's help becoming a good businesswoman. Seeing how Uday truly loves her she is slowly falling for him too but she doesn't realize as yet that she's falling for him.

Akash Verma /Aryan Rai Chaudhary- Of course he survives and comes back to haunt Uday and Manyata. He's will try to cause problems for them because of his revenge will team up sometimes with J.
Rajkumari Jainandini Kumari- Princess of Devghar she is calm elegant poised etc when she want to be but mostly manipulative, hates her sister Manyata, has a crush on Uday for which she is always jealous, 2nd daughter of Maharaj Brijraj and Maharani Komal, but due to Manyata being crowned Yuvrani she isn't on good terms with anyone in her family.


Rajkumar Vijayendra Singh- Manyata and J's cousin brother, not on good terms with J because she insulted him now Manyata's close friend, advisor and confidant her right hand man. Is secretly in love with Unati thus is scared of Uday.

Rajkumari Unati Singh- The calm sweet and elegant princess of Jaighar, loves her brother tries to help him understand his heart. A good daughter and princess, doesn't like J because J is always rude to her , great friend advisor and confidante of Manyata her Left hand woman. Secretly loves Vijay because he has always been nice to her.

Jagat Singh Rathod- An astute businessman, engaged to J but has been abroad for business but knows everything happening back in India will be back soon.


Rajmata Mirnalini Devi- The head of the Devghar royal family, loves her family but being who she is Devghar always comes first. Rules her family with a firm hand and is grooming her grand daughter Yuvrani Manyata to take over reins of the Riyasat, and the family. Has already handed over the reins of the business to Manyata because she has proven more apt than her father Brijraj and since then the failing business has been rising again.
Maharaj Brijraj- King of Devhgar but in name only because he's very irresponsible, Son of Rajmata Mirnalini Devi, Father of Yuvrani Manyata and Rajkumari J, husband of Mahrani Komal Devi, brother of Meinka Singh, uncle of Rajkumar Vijayendra Singh. The reins of the family business has been taken from him due to him making bad investments and has been handed over to his daughter Yuvrani Manyata


Maharani Komal Devi- Queen of Devghar but in name only because her mother-in-law is ruling over Devghar. Mother of Yuvrani Manyata and Rajkumari Jainandini, wife of Maharaj Brijraj, sister-in-law of Meinka, aunt of Rajkumar Vijayendra Singh. Is very happy with what she has, not ambitious.

Maharaj Giriraj Singh- King of Jaighar rules his Riyasat and family with an iron fist, isn't a very good father but a great king grooming his son Yuvraj Udayveer to takeover as king. Loves his daughter Rajkumari Unati but unable to express himself.


Rajkumari Meinka Singh- Mother of Rajkumar Vijayendra Singh, sister of Maharaj Brijraj, sister-in-law of Maharani Komal, aunt of Yuvrani Manyata and Rajkumari Jainandini, daughter of Rajmata Mirnalini Devi. Wants to rule devghar but is unable to so wants her son Rajkumar Vijayendra Singh to rule very ambitious but can't move ahead with her ambitions because of her mother.

Important: The Devghar Riyasat is separate from the business so that matters of the Riyasat can't affect the business and vice versa. They have their fingers in a lot of pies businesswise. Thus the Riysat was profiting but not the business because Brijraj was in charge but now it is because Manyata is incharge.

Edited by Priya46 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Teaser
There was nothing she could do but let her tears fall because his truth was out now she had to use the plans she made to save him but she knew doing so would invite anger and hate not just from him but from her family too because no one would understand. Wiping her tears determinedly she told one of the servants to call the police loud enough so that everyone heard shocking them.

To save him she would get rid of the evidence be whatever it maybe or she had to do

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Title plus CS and Teaser looks fabulous... 😊
Do count me to pm in. 😊 and post 1st part soon... 😊
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Chapter.#1

Scene opens with J telling Manyata that Akash is dead. That proceeds into the yelling match between sisters where J says that she has proof that UV killed Akash. This shocks everyone but mostly M because she didn't know that J was at the cliffs but she remembered seeing J's friends K&L where Akash and UV were at. M starts panicking that UV's truth will come out and he would have to go to jail for Akash's murder. UV however is cool because he knows that he removed J's memory card from her phone which is in DS's possession. J plugs her phone into the tv where it is UV is shown exiting his car at the cliff.

M determinedly walks up to the tv unplugs J's phone and throws it on the ground thus breaking it, grabs J shaking her and yells at her : "Meri Uday kisi ka khoon nahi kar sakti hain voh bekasur hain tumhari jhuti aarop ko leke aur nikal jao meri nazron se." Then pushes her away and walks towards UV to stand next to him so as to show her support for him which shocks everyone especially where M calls UV hers causing UV, Rajmata, Unati, Komal, Giriraj and Vijay to become happy and causing J, Brij and Meinka to become unhappy. To which J tells M that she will regret her words. "Aap dekh na Yuvrani Manyata (emphasing bitterly) ek din tum yeh zaroor pachhtaogi. To which M replys: Nahi pachhtaogi J kyun ki meri Uday (stressing empathicly)kabhi galat nahi ho sakti. Causing J to leave in a huff.

UV walks up toM and says: "itna bharosa karte ho tum hum pe princess?", which M replies:" haan apni jaan se bhi jyada, aankhen band karke." To which UV guiltylyreplys:" kisi pe itna bharosa achi baat nahi hoti", "kisi pe, kaun?" M walks up to UV and takes one of his hand and enfolds it in her hands and looks up to him staring into his eyes trying to convey to him that he doesn't need to feel guilty for anything and says:" Mein tho meri Uday pe meri best friend pe bharosa karti hoon koi sadak chhap ajnabee nahi" To which she chuckles lightly and moves away from him releasing their hands. To which UV looks up, M turns around and they see everyone staring at them especially at M as if she has grown a second head.

M looks at them and says:"are aap saab yahan?", to which Vijay teasingly replies:" kyun hum sab ko gayab hona chahiye tha aur tumhe tumhari Uday (teasingly emphasing)ki saath akela chhod dene chahiye?" M warningly says:" Vijay bhai aap bhi na kuch bhi aise kaise keh sakti." Then normally says: aur rahi baat savaal ki toh aap kijankari ke liye mein toh sirf Uday ko samjha rahi thi ki meri liye woh ajnabee nahi hai jis tarah mein baki sab pe bhi bharosa karti hoon."

Rajmata walks up to M and lovingly frames her face and holds her cheek and says:"jaane ke liye acha hai ki aap sirf Uday beta pe bhi nahi par hum sab pe bhi bharosa hai" and kisses M's forehead, M replies:"Bharosa kyun nahi karungi tum sab meri parivaar ho kisi ki parivaar unke bura nahi soch thi hai, karti hai aur nahi kehti hai who sirf apni parivaar wale ki achi chahiye". To which everyone except Rajmata who leaves for her study since she already packed in the night before she slept disperses and leaves for their room to pack to for M's raj abhishek in Devghar, after taking leave the Jaighar Royals left too so that they can be ready to leave on time with the Devghar Royals so that they can all leave together.

M is walking to and fro in front of the door and keeps looking at, mumbling and fumbling with her dupatta. Which is how Vijay sees her once he too is finished getting ready he's curious as to why M is acting so strangely so he quietly walks down towards M and hears her wondering where is Uday and why he hasn't arrived as yet and then wondering if she should call him or not. To which Vijay put his hand on her shoulder and yells:"Boo!", scaring M causing her to scream in fright as she turns towards him Uday and Unati come in with Giriraj behind them and so does everyone who heard M's shout but they remain quiet when they see M hitting and cursing Vijay.

After she tires of hitting and cursing Vijay she turns around and is shocked to see the Jaighar royals, also realizing that there is others present also and says:" arre tum sab kab aaya?" To which Unati teasingly answers:" tabi jab tum ne voh daravani cheekh" M answers:" mein isiliye cheekhi kyun ki Vijay bhai ne mujhe daraya tha aur upar se mein itni nervous hoon raj abhishek ki baare me". To which Uday teasingly replys:"Very bad Vijay banna, aap ko pata hai ki halal honewali bhakri ko daraya nahi jati voh pehle se hi admara hoti hai" and M replies with a smile:"correct" and then realizes what Uday said causing everyone to laugh a her, to which she angrily threatens him:" Uday ki bachi Vijay bhai ki tarah mein tujhe bhi mardungi".

"M bhai mujhe nahi pata ki tum baat ko itni asani se badal sakti thi" Vijay teasingly says. To which M defensively replies:"kya matlab",Vijay teasingly replies:"matlab ye ki kisi ne bhi M bhai se ye nahi pooch ki voh darvase ki samne kya kar rahi thi" while moving his eyebrows up and down. M defensively replies:" Kya matlab kya kar rahi thi mein to sab ke liye intezar kar rahi thi aur kya." Vijay teasingly replies"sab ke liye intezar kar rahi hi thi ya phir kisi ek ke liye" causing M to blush in embarrassment and walk towards her mother to hide because she knows that Vijay will open her pol in front of everyone, Causing Rajmata ask:"Vijay beta aap ko jo kehna hai saf saf kaho" vijay replies:"kuch kehna nahi kuch dikhane hai" then he starts to imitate M when she was waiting, for 'everyone':"Uday ab tak nahi pahunche nahi, kaha hai voh, mein use phone karu ya na karu?" Causing almost everyone to look and smile teasingly at M and Uday, and making Uday especially happy because of M's behavior towards him it felt like today was his birthday.






Edited by Priya46 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Very intresting start plzz continue soon
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A very interesting start please continue soon
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Heyyy Priya Dear Ur Idea.. Then CS And Teaser And Now Chapter 1 Was Very Nyccc.. I Liked It Soo Much.. 😊
But Chap 1 Was Short.. Anyways Do Post Chap 2 Soon.. 😊
And PM Me.. 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hii...chap and cs are both fab really happy that our members and activity are increasing

Hey did u posted pics from mobile if yes can u help with how u did it because mine is giving problems.

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