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Posted: 13 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: -Tannu-

Shabiii >:D<
a new FF.. pehle do FF to complete nhi kiye.. third waali shuru kardi.. :/
if u dnt complete those two.. i wont read dis.. :|

Good start.. :)
seeing ua past work.. i dnt want dis a saddy one...to yaad rakhiyo..

cont soon :) :*



>:D< u knw i love my FF's unhe end karne ka mann nahi karta ;)
But few things has to cum to an end ...such is life :P
Saddie i dnt knw but u'll defo love it :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: mahara23

loved it yr continue soon as soon as possible


Thanks :)
Will update soon :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#23

Originally posted by: vampire12345678

awesome wonderful and fantastical please update soon and pm me if u can😃



Glad u liked it :)
Surewill PM u :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#24

Originally posted by: ilvuday

doode...woww man i loved it...plz upd8 soon n plz plz pm



Thank u :)

Will surely PM u :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#25

Originally posted by: rocker12

it was awesome well written loved it too much suspense cont soon





Thank u :)

Will update soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
#26

Originally posted by: udaymanyata07

👏👏thanks.brillaint.amzing...pelas eupdate sooon...and pm mw when you do udpate...👏👏



Glad u liked it :)
Wil update soon :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#27

Originally posted by: Khawaunju

loved it plz cotinue soon



Thanks anuu :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#28

Originally posted by: mahi0809

Good work dear... but plzz in future don't make 1 big paragraph. It makes it hard to read. Divide it in smaller paragraphs or use different colorings for quotations so its easier for the reader to focus.



Thanks :)
I ll make it a point dear this is just a intro part :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#29
hey all thanks for ur support here's next update

~*~part 1 :~*~

It was a new day ..but der was pure nothing to be called new ..but
today was little different from other days ..because the younger
daughter of the devgadh will be back after completing her studies
abroad..the palace was little chaotic ...the preparations were on
swing as jay was very specific about her things .all the servants were
busy with preparation for the jay's welcome. before the arrival
of little demonic princess...yes she was a brat ..and royals pet ..she
was jay nandini loved by everyone once upon a time yuvrani manyatas
weakness now the case is different der is nothing in this world to be
called manyata's weakness.


Rajmata was in her study smiling within herself "aaj se ek nayi
shuruwat hogi ...ab is rajmahal aur manyata ki zindagi mein sirf
khushiyan pravesh karengi"..DS was interrupted by a servant "gustakhi
maaf rajmata..rajkumari jaynandini aa chuki hai" DS smiled n nodded at
the servant ..DS leaves to welcome her younger granddaughter...jay
nandini came running and hugged DS at the entrance "khama ghani DS
humne aap sabko bahut miss kiya" "humne bhi aapko miss kiya beta"
replied DS with a genuine smile nd moist eyes komal comes der with
aarti ..and does jay's aarti "mom i missed sooo much" komal hugged
her daughter with teary eyes..."mom DS ab hum aagaye hai to sab thik
ho hi jayegi...haan nahi toh in jiji's style" said jey cheering up
the ladies mood.."waise humari jiji hai kahan??" "beta chaliye saari
baatein yahin khade khade karogi??" all the three ladies moved into
the lounge area ."seriously DS jiji ka kuch karna hoga wo to aap se
bhi zyada chup hoti hai...week mein once mujse videochat karti poore
10 mins k liye can u believe it ".DS smiled at jay who was ray of hope
manyats new life .."DS mom hum abhi aatey hai" jay excused herself nd
walked towards BR room she silently walked in "dad this not fair...u
still taking rest i miss u dad ..as well as jiji now wake up we need u
..jiji needs u" said jay holding BR hand in hers nd tears rolling
down her cheeks.."as promised to jiji i 've completed my studies nd u
are still resting ..this is cheating..come back soon" she kissed BR
forehead wiped her tears nd walked straight to her room her room was
beautifully designed according to her likes ...walls painted in pink
with oakwood flooring nd creamish curtains flowing pure faiytale
princess like room...she freshen up nd walked towards manyatas room as
she walked in she saw it was just a four walled cage with pale white
walls and cream curtains flowing the bed was again covered with white
sheets nd covers the cushion had a light golden print to be noticed,
der was no hint of any colour around the room. "jiji" no response she
looked out window to see manyata walking in "hmm sabse pehle iss room
mein kuch rang bharne honge..life will automatically walk inn "

Sydney :-

it was evening time in sydney where UV was partying in celebration of
again cracking another successful deal..he was surrounded by girls u
can call it bunch of droolers who were throwing themselves on him
...he enjoyed being the attention he enjoyed being surrounded by
beauties...just than he gets a call he excused himself from the flock
of butterflies..."khamha ghani dad" he greeted his father UV may the
casanova but he was very well rooted to his traditions "jee dad humne
ye deal crack kardiya dad...der is nothing dat can stop us" he give
his trademark smirk GR "hume apne competitors ko kabhi kam nahi
samjhna chahiye" "hum unhe mauka hi nahi denge aap fikar math kijiye"
"udayveer hume aapse doosri baat karni..aap jald se jald india aajaye"
"anything serious dad" GR"haan kuch bahut zaroori hai " "i will be der
dad" GR smiled to himself. UV smirked and walked back to the party

Devgadh palace:-


Manyata sat in the study looking into some files .. Someone closed her
eyes from behind "jay" "oh noo aapna pehchan liya" said jay hugging
her sister from behind "kab aayi ho ?? Sorry hum yahan nahi thay" jay
sat across manyata "haan jab aap nahi thi aapne humara room tayyar
karwa diya par aap nahi thi " said jay making a grumpy face "important
kaam tha jay" said manyata looking back into her file "how bad of u
jiji ..i m here after 6 years and ur are interested in that lame
papers" said jay sulking "kuchh" "important hai i knw...every other
thing is important than me" said jay completing manyatas sentence
manyata closed her file and looked up at her sister who looks grown up
and still child at behavior and talks ..while jay was looking at
manyata who seemed to lost the twinkle in her eyes replaced by...ermm
dunno something but dat was hurting ..manyata lost her cute chubby
cheeks her face looks pale she lost her weight and how can anyone miss
she lost her SMILE her life... jay felt a pang of ache in heart
looking at her sister who was nothing less than a breathing robot "u
need to grow up jay" jay was brought back to reality with manyatas
sentence "and i think u need to come back" replied jay nd walked out
of study leaving manyata amused at little sisters sentence .
Jay went to DS room she knocks at the door "aiye jay" jay sat beside
DS "kuch kehna tha jay" jay hugged DS ..DS understood jay was worried
about the present scenario of her family "y DS why did this all
happened to us??" DS patted jay's back assuring jay "sab thik
hojayega" jay was amused at the old lady's composed attitude towards
everything "par DS jiji she is nomore the same i want my jiji
back..who loved laugh..who loved colours...who loved life " "jay beta
har waqt ek jaisa nahi hota ...ye manyata ki kathin pareeksha hai"
"but how long DS" "ye waqt bhi jald samapth ho jayega" "i wish ye bad
time bahut jald khatam ho jaye aur bahut saari khushi jiji hug kare"
"hoga beta aisa hi hoga" DS smiled at jay..."kuch rang hume bhi bharne
hoge DS" "haan beta" she kissed DS nd walked out smiling

manayata walked to her fathers room sat there for good few minutes
holding his hand..which gave her strength nd inspire her to live...yes
live !!
manyata walked to her room and locked the door she opened her closet
took out an old trunk she sat down on the floor opening her chest she
saw pictures old memories came rushing back to her giggles,laughs,and
her LIFE she took a frame in which she is tieing rakhi on her brothers
wrist she wiped the framed and put it aside ..she took out another
picture of her spraying water at her bro..next was the picture of her
hugging her nd her holding a laurel in her hand next was the picture
of her and jay nandini irritating aarav..next was paint box..next was
again a picture of little manyata nd aarav holding baby jaynandini in
hr hand next was a picture of aarav manyata nd guy same as their age
but the face was not clear as the face was striked out waith a red
marker ..next was a holi picture of manyata aarav jay nandini nd the
same unknown boy here aarav and the boys faces were covered with
colours...next was the pic little manyata nd the same guy in some
pooja manyata turned to pose for the picture covering the guys face
only his back is seen ..next was baby aarav n baby manyatas next was a
picture manyata holding the paint try nd paint brush in other hand
with her cheeks paintd gree nd aarav laughing at her.. last picture
was manyata nd aarav 's 16 birthday picture she hold the picture close
to her heart "saare twins main ek jaisi aadat hoti one smile other
smile one cry other cry...and m still alive "

Sydney :-

It was night in sydney UV walked into hotel only to be welcomed by a
young beautiful girl who came running nd hugged him "got ya" "tum
yahan ?? Wat a pleasant surprise" said UV hugging her back happily
"aap toh hume bhool gaye..toh humne socha hum hi aapko surprise visit
de" said unnati her hands on hips now "hum tumhe bhooley aisa kabhi
nahi hosakta hai choti" stated UV "jhooth ..u love ur business more
than anything ..dont u get bored??" "choti tumhe pata hai kaam se hume
sukoon milta hai" "yeah ryt...kyunki wo apko humsha busy rakhta
hai..dada ye kaisa idea khudko kisi cheez se door rakhne ka"
"choti...lets not talk about it" "par dada life mein kisi saathi ka
saath hona zaruri hai" "i have many companions "said UV making a drink
for himself "companions hone ke bawajood bhi apko kuch cheez aur kuch
pal bhulane k liye drinks ki help leni padti hai" "choti ""no dada y
dont u understand...u need to forget things to move forward in life"
"choti kal savere humari flight hai dad ko kisi important cheez
discuss karni hai" said UV cutting unnati midway unnati kept quiet
understanding the reason behind UV diverting the topic "anyways dada i
secured second place in university" "second??" "dada im not genius i
tried but i lost it" "to??" UV questioned looking at unnzie "jagat my
friend" "just friend" "come on now ur being the bossy brother..nd i
shared my rank with my best friend jay " "u've been making frnds in
university choti" "dada they are my dear frnds nd i love them" "will
they always be part of ur happiness" "ofcourse dada" "and ur
sorrows??" unnati kept quiet at UV question "choti none have time to
share our sorrows so why share our happiness with those people??"
"ohh..than dat reminds me u havent seen ur best frnd for ages who has
been living life just for the sake of it dada...will meet u in
morning" she left the room leaving UV flabbergasted.


PREV: ~*~Teaser~*~

NEXT:~*~Part:2~*~

do let me know ur response

~shab

Edited by sweetshab - 12 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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gr8 update dear loved it the description was good of the past short simple and expressive cont soon :)
Edited by rocker12 - 13 years ago

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