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Nirjhor105

@Nirjhor105

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Posted: 13 years ago

#881

21&22: i am not exactly a romantic person, i usually roll my eyes during romantic scenes but this 2 are making me mushy

23: ok. i must be the minority and everyone will probably hate me. but actually I am with Mina. andy was only hers. Uday should not interfere in their life and let them be. Mina had already endured enough pain. He was involved in the process of his birth doesn't make him andy's father.

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180506

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Posted: 13 years ago

#882

Originally posted by: Nirjhor105
21&22: i am not exactly a romantic person, i usually roll my eyes during romantic scenes but this 2 are making me mushy

23: ok. i must be the minority and everyone will probably hate me. but actually I am with Mina. andy was only hers. Uday should not interfere in their life and let them be. Mina had already endured enough pain. He was involved in the process of his birth doesn't make him andy's father.

LOL! Trust me, I'm gagin half the time I'm writing them too. It's mainly what people want, so I say, Let them eat cake!

21 and 22 are essentially fillers- but were needed to shape the two meetings Uday and Manyata had with Andy and his Nanny.

I don't think you're in the minority at all, it's something many people would feel- I think you'll like the next update. We're having a Mina flashback.

😊

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180506

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Posted: 13 years ago

#883

Originally posted by: xxDaydreameRxx
Nooo... Reeha you did just not... 😲Yes, yes I did😉
im literally speechless right now! seriously there was so much I wanted to say about the first two chapters but really everything has fled from my head after reading the third one!! All i can say is that thats just GENIUS Reeha. Like OMG, UDay and Mina's son - Andy - no Aditay!

seriously i have read a lot of well-written stuff but this beats all! So frikken amazing really ur FF is!

No i wont tell you to udpate soon...update wen you have the time 😊 but also dont ever forget this FF or your fans 😃 Trust me, no one lets me forget (*Cough Mais* Cough Wendy Cough*) Plus the stuff is in my head, so until I type it out, it's there harassing me!.. this update was so amazing that I dont even know where to start .. well okay the first chapter - this was the BEST ever..literally had me laughing! :

Great, she hasn't even agreed to married me and she wants kids.
Can't I do something in order for once in my life?

Please?

🤣 EPIC!

Then the second chap at the pizza place was awww so cute! loved the interaction between UV and that little girl-forgot wat her name was- Maria? But that whole fairytale thing adn then her response to Manyata whens she like OBVIOUSLY all Princes are like that! That was just amazing..

Obviously the third chap beats all...the proposal, Manyata crying, them having their moment, UV okay with leaving his kingdom for her..Oh my god it was just too beautiful for words to describe and you know I totally understood how UV had been feeling for so long..he's the devotee this time and honestly I think it makes the most sense this way that his love is at a whole new level! 😳 Even more than Manyata's! The feminist side in me feels happy LOL, especially since hes always had the upperhand in all his relations until now, its a good thing that this time tehre is someone there to punish him! 😉 Exactly- I think we need to see a playboy be the one madly inlove- or at least the one who doesn't have the upper hand for once.

Going to that end revelation...im extremely curios to read how you're going to go about this..The fatherly side in Uday awakened so fast I wouldn't call it fatherly- Uday doesn't like kids too much- It's more about "Right" And you'll see it within the next few parts- Uday feels he has a RIGHT to know is son- he doesn't care WHO his son is. ..right now im thinking a couple future scenarios: For some reason I feel like Manyata is going to want to back down and leave Uday for Mina You're pretty close. Manyata will be the one who feels Uday wants to get to know his son; Mina won't give up her son. Manyata will try to play traditional Indian Martyr. Key word: Try., she won't feel right depriving a son from his father. But if that was to end like that than ManVeer wouldn't end up together! so although thaht might be the plan initially obviously by the end something has to end up happening to keep ManVer together! Manveer is never out of the picture- I should just spoil it for you and let you know that This is about Manveer- and Manveer shall happen! Promise ; ) They just need a few bumps, first.

Or Uday may try to take his son away from Mina..but then that wouldnt be fair to her would it? 🤔 Oh no. Not fair at all. And we shouldn't - or Uday shouldn't forget- Mina isn't helpless, she comes from a wealthy family.

So in the end I'm going to come up with the conclusion that eventually Mina is going to die and M and UV will bring up the son together. Nope. I know that seems like the easy way out, but I can't kill off Mina- I like her too much. Her - Yash, and Andy are my brain children- I can't kill my brain children! LOL! 😳 I don't know any other way that things are going to resolve! Or you could always bring in a different dude for her instead 😃 But then she wont give up her son still!

^Okay feel free to ignore all that but seriously ur FF sure maeks me THINK...ill definitely give you the credit that whatver happened was the most unexpected twist for me and seriously greaattt jobbb!!! I think Maisy had it the closest when she thought Mina was pregnant or something, I was surprised no one saw it coming. It happens all the time in western romance novels! LOL! But there the couple usually re-unites: I don't want that.

When did you figure out where I was leading the Dhamaka to? Was the phone call in the washroom, a big giveaway?

ALright I think you've had enough of my rant 😊 Now go back on working on that essay and you better ace it! 😃

Yeah...about that. Just 2,500 words to go -_-

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180506

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Posted: 13 years ago

#884

Originally posted by: xxDaydreameRxx

Reeha I am sure that we all will love to continue reading ur FFs but its totally up to you. Being an SS writer myself I dont even know where I stand right now as I am kind of confused whether after DEK ends, that am I going to want to update anymore or not? I don't mind, tbh it's all in my head so why not 😆 But then again I have always felt that the FF that you have created is beyond the show..its a different story all together, a different kind of magic that you've created! There is so many other layers and dimensions that you have added to this FF that I swear that I am not kidding, many times I find myself searching for the UV in this FF in the one in the show. Really most of teh time we try to find a glimpse of the UV in the show in the FFs we read, but this is that one FF for me where I do the opposite! Thanks to all your amazing hard work you have created your own original UV and your own original story which I think doesnt have anything to do with the show. And honestly I would love to continue to enjoy reading this piece of magic. However, it is still entirealy up to you and honestly Ill say that there is no point in continuing if you yourself dont feel any personal satisfaction from doing so. However I hope htat you do enjoy writing this as much as we enjoy reading it!

I would be so happy if you did continue so try not to break my heart alright!? 😃

LOL! I will continue for sure, I'm just confused about where I would post it: This forum would close down, right? So I'll have to make sure the FF section is updated with all of the old parts. I'll have to post a link or something I guess.

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Malangan

@TeriMalang

Sparkler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#885

OMG!!!
Wat a fantastic update...correction updates;)
u actually did it...
Manyat n UV were actually getting knw each other..manyata accepted his proposal just mins /hours back nd u threw a bomb at us..ahan it isnt inny minny bomb but missile..
Awww :O andy is his son o_O

fantabulous update dont keep us waiting
Did i mention i loveddd the updates :)
Cont soon

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sourmisery

@sourmisery

Stunner

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Posted: 13 years ago

#886

Before i go on my long comment, READ MY SPECIAL UPDATE YOU WITCH! :@ WHAT WAS THE POINT OF ME HACKING YOUR FF WHEN YOU DIDNT EVEN READ IT!? Ya know, I was honestly counting on some ManVeer separation thats why I had racked my brains to write that flashback. Though my UV was a lot different from yours :p mine was colder, royal and too close to the UV of the initial episodes of the show. Yours tou is completely outta this world lolz. I mean...

...inna love?

This brings to my comment (i know i had resed a spot but meh, too lazy :p) most of the update was fillerish and too cheesy. But in a cutesy way. Some moments were duds but some shone the brightest!

Part 21 - loved the jealous UV at the airport. Hahaha, UV jealous of J for stealing away M? Too precious! Adored the way he was being jealous and how M caught onto that. The first encounter with Andy (dun like that name much, his real name is just wow!) was nice. He didnt like the kid, the kid didnt like him and M totally fell for the kid. Someone to put UV into place, thats gotta be cherished. And here it is a 4 year old. My alarm bells didnt ring at this point and i brushed it off just as a random encounter.
OMG! The triplets part was hilarious! Just when UV was getting worried about M not wanting to commit to him, here comes M acting all authoratative! Poor brunettes :p was laughing so hard at UV's happiness that M was jealous! Awesome! Didnt like the bedroom part much and the bathroom part was okayish. Loved the kiss though! The happy end tone to the chapter was also cool.

Part 22 - depressed J? Me no likey! I guess i will have to hack the JNCs as well. A scenario is jumping in my head. And this depressed J who is too scared to leave M alone with UV, the heart goes out to her. Oh she despises UV and i love it! Which means she can be possible kanta in manveer in the future but meh, i dun care! At last we know why M isnt happy with UV. He didnt proposed. Loved the girls' outing and the J-U banter. Lolz, Unnzie told UV his mistake, no surprise there. The M giving Adi (i will call him that, andy is bleh!) UV's pancakes was awesome! Bechara UV! :D bache se kaise larega? :p
khair, the library part was nice. Maria was too sweet. Though i found UV opening up to Maria all these years ago a lil weird but whatever rocks your boat. A chubby UV? Hahahaha, reminds me of AK's old photos :p golu mollu! So anyway, nothing much happened...fillerish :p

part 23 - the bomb! Loved how you just jumped on the oxford ball! The first paragraph was just wow! The description of the selfish relationship everyone shared was so bang on! Defo my most fav part of the huuugggeee update! I could so picture UV standing with a wine glass and M entering the hall. It was so magical! Truly beautiful! M's nervousness, her worries, that little fear felt so real. And that small kiss was magical.

"lets give them something to talk about."

i just melted there! M's confidence after that was pleasing. Their encounter with the Randhawas was so coool! The bite of the words, the prick of the tone, the coldness surrounding them; i could literally feel it. Seriously enjoyed reading it!

Balconies are my fav! You made it all the more special. How he just came and kissed her scar. Ufff! So beautiful...! The proposal was awesome! Her worries and fears and his reassurance that the world didnt matter. Easy said than done my boy but whatever. Love can make anyone go crazy :p i love you for making him propose her with a necklace of the old ring. I just love necklaces! And she said yes! Yaaay!

M in the washroom and Mina following her talking on the phone, thats when the alarm went off. I just knew that something is wrong. And surely it was! Adi is UV's son! Dun dun dun! Loved the way Mina was shielding him and UV just wanted to see him. Hated the way he pushed her away. I just could not connect with UV's eagerness of taking his son away. Is he crazy? Outta his mind! And whats with the challenging tone?! No, i am not saying this in context of manveer but i just could not comprehend his reaction. M looked too much like a mary sue standing there. She felt unneeded. Would have loved it if the confrontation happened between VeerNa only. Khair, lets see how you shape it all up in the future.

All in all, the update was worth the wait. Lolz, sorry for nagging you too much :p but i just love it! Anyway, hope you liked this looong detailed comment! My fingers are aching from all this typing on the phone.

P.s - i am serious about the JNC hacking -_-'

p.p.s - all the best for ur assignment! :D

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sourmisery

@sourmisery

Stunner

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Posted: 13 years ago

#887

Originally posted by: reeha...k

</div>LOL! Can I just ask where you got pregnant from (the last time they slept together was years ago!)? I mean, you were very close, she was pregnant, like 5 years ago when they broke up :P
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Still waiting for your Jumbo Comment! You're my loyal reader, Polo is a lazy bumb and never reads them! 😭

just a hunch :p

ok, actually that enraged sex session had me thinking. I mean, UV wasnt in his senses. He was furious. Anger kills the little grey cells and gives birth to troubles. In his case, a kid :p also, something similar to this happened in a nora roberts story that i had read. Only, there the girl had twins :p but i remebered that just now. Honestly, a kid felt like a perfect conflict at this point of the story.

hope u liked my jumbo comment! Polo is busy with her life.

Just a request - dont make M like those sacrificing satti savitris of television. Hope from some sense from your side! :D

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180506

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Posted: 13 years ago

#888

Maisy, I'll reply later when I'm on my computer, but I'll get the worriedness out of your head now-

Only his Nany Calls him Andy (because it's easier): Mina and her father (Aman) call him Aditya- also because it's easier for him to say to other people- they never say Aditya correctly: He'll explain that.
Plus, Uday hates his name too. LOL!

Aditya Veer Randhawa.

Aditiya Veer Singh.

Both actually sound Killer.

I was contemplating Yash being named Aditiya. It could have been the other way around to be honest :')

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Inkpen4877

@Inkpen4877

Inactive

Posted: 13 years ago

#889

Originally posted by: reeha...k
I'm surprised no one caught on...or was suspicious:
- Mina flipping over a photograph when Uday came into her hotel room with Manyata in Mumbai

- Her listing off all of the wrongs he did to her; but stopping at the last one

-The fact that she was missing for a year after their break up and the media wondering where she was

When did you guys- and I guess it's to all of you- throughout this Update finally Realize what I was getting at? Anyone?

Honestly? I didn't see that coming until the washroom bit- Mina being gone for a year after their break up? Yeah I just thought she was in an asylum because she tried to kill herself...Your idea was much better 😊

btw- I actually think the forum wouldn't close down even after DEK ended, I mean Shubh Vivah's forum is still up- and running- granted its pretty empty...but I think you just can't hit the Chaska meter anymore...