Aditya Sir's B'day Investigative Story Rating Thread (Results on Pg 2)

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Investigative Story Contest Rating



Three stories are being submitted for this contest. Third one is a late entry. Rate them on the scale of 10 by July 21, 2016; 12 noon IST.


Abhijeet was on a road trip to a nearby hill station of the city where he had gone on a solo vacation when his bike met with an accident. While he was under treatment for the injuries he suffered, he came across a piece of news in the television of his hospital room which said that a serial killer is striking the city, apparently at random and the local police is having no idea about any connection between the victims. The numbers of dead are on a constant rise. This news is a hit on media, both social as well as mass media. Abhijeet, decides to solve this case on his own with the help of internet only as his injuries don't allow him to go into the field and investigate.




1] Story should be built around the above plot.


2] ONLY Abhijeet should be involved from CID team. At most two OCs unknown to him can help him with the investigation, but the interaction should be through internet.


3] Avoid inclusion of unnecessary characters, ONLY those who help built the plot.


4] Story can be in written in Hindi or English. Use the language you are most comfortable with.


5] The Story can be either in an Essay format or Scene by Scene with dialogues format. Choose what you are most comfortable with.


6] Short forms are not allowed.


7] Keep Formatting simple and easy on the eyes. Use normal size font in black color.


8] Avoid using Emoticons, you should be able to express emotions through your writing. However if you feel that you HAVE to use then then don't use the same one several times in a row, use just one.

ENTRY 1


THE DANGEROUS SERIAL KILLER

Scene 1: City hospital

Time: 8.30 am

A man aged 30 was roaming around the corridor outside the ICU. His face showed the tension he had been undergoing for the past 48 hours. The doctor came out of the ICU room. The man asked the doctor, "What is his condition now doctor? He replied calmly, "Now he is out of danger. He can gain consciousness at any time. Nothing to worry. Please get the medicines mentioned in this prescription. The man got the prescription from the doctor and went away to get the medicines.

Scene 2: ICU

Time: 10.30 am

Abhijeet is seen gaining consciousness slowly. He could hear the beep noises created by the machines around him and dripping sound from the dripping cylinder. He opened his eyes slowly but he couldn't see anything clearly and everything around him were appearing blurred. He couldn't move even an inch because of the dreadful pain he was experiencing in his entire body. He murmured Daya's name continuously. The nurse who was near him came out of the ICU room. She called the man waiting outside and said "He had gained consciousness. He's murmuring the name Daya continuously. If you want please go and see him and went away. The man immediately rushed to the ICU and sat beside Abhijeet's bed.

Abhijeet slowly said, "Daya

The man said, "Sir I'm not Daya. I'm Arjun. I was the one who admitted you in the hospital.

Abhijeet asked Arjun in a low tone, "What happened to me? Why I'm here?

Arjun said, "Sir two days back, I was on the way to Pune going in bus. While the bus was near Karjat hills, we saw an accident. The bus stopped and we got down to see the victim. You were lying on the road pathetically and no one came to help you. It's my duty to save a CID officer who struggles for the welfare of the people. So I admitted you in the hospital two days back. Your condition was really critical for these two days. I prayed to God hoping for your recovery. Thank God.

Abhijeet started to recollect the past. Two days back, He took a travel bag with many of his accessories and was riding in his bike towards Karjat hills. It is dangerous to ride bike in that way as the roads were mostly slippery. At one point the bike skidded and he rolled on the road. His hands and legs were severely injured. He got hit to a big rock and his head was injured very badly. Arjun, who helped Abhijeet was seemed quite familiar to Abhijeet. When he was about to open his mouth, the nurse entered inside and said to Arjun, "Sir, please don't disturb him. You can meet him after sometime. Doctor wants to meet you. He had instructed me to give sedative to the patient and injected the sedative through the cannula. Abhijeet started to sleep. Arjun left the ICU room.

Scene 3: The doctor's room.

The doctor was discussing with some other patient's relatives. Arjun was waiting outside the doctor's room. He read the name of the doctor which was printed in bold white letters as

Dr. Stephen Jones M.B.B.S., M.D., F.R.C.S

After they came out, Arjun entered inside the doctor's room. He asked the doctor regarding Abhijeet's health condition. Doctor said, "Since the injuries are deep, it will take few weeks to heal. So Abhijeet needs a complete bed rest for a month. If he cooperates with us, he will recover soon and can be back to work. Take care of him. Arjun thanked the doctor and left the room.

Two days later...

Scene 4: ICU

Abhijeet was quite better than those four days. Arjun was sitting near his bed. Abhijeet asked Arjun, "Arjun, I think I have seen you before. What's your job? Arjun gave a sharp look and said, "Sir, I think you still remember me. Abhijeet, little shocked by answer, asked Arjun "What do you mean? and started to think. Five years back, Arjun was one of his informers. Suddenly one day he had vanished from Mumbai.

Abhijeet asked little excitingly, "Arjun, you were one of my informers five years back isn't it? What happened to you? Why you didn't tell me this before? Where were you all these years?

Arjun replied, "Sir I know about your past. You suffered a memory loss after a dreadful incident. When I saw you lying on the road, I was shell shocked. My only aim was to save you and nothing else was there in my mind. I also feared that something wrong would happen as happened in the past. Thank God, everything happened fine. Yet I didn't want to reveal it immediately since your condition was critical. So I didn't want to trouble you and decided to tell you about myself later. Actually five years back, there was a land dispute in my home town near Ahmedabad, so I left Mumbai. I had to settle the debts so I worked there. Suddenly my mother died last month. I have settled all my debts. I am almost an orphan now. I just came here in search of a job.

Abhijeet felt pity for Arjun and said, "Don't worry, I will arrange for your job. Don't hesitate to ask me if you need any help.

Arjun said, "Thank you for your concern, sir. Please have your medicines and take rest, sir. I'm leaving now. I will see you tomorrow morning. Good night, sir and left the room.

Next morning...

Scene 5: General ward

Abhijeet was shifted to general ward but was kept isolated on doctor's advice. Abhijeet felt an emptiness in his heart since he thought of returning back to job after two days' vacation, but everything ended in vain. He requested Arjun not to reveal his situation to his teammates since they will be worried. He didn't even switch on his mobile.

Abhijeet's room had a small TV so he switched on the TV and was listening to the news. Suddenly he saw a news scrolling on the screen about a serial killer who is now a great threat to the city like this...

Serial killer creates havoc in the city: Mumbai Police struggles to solve the mystery

Abhijeet got shocked after hearing this news and tried to inform about this to his team. Later, he decided to solve the case by himself regardless of his condition since ACP won't let him to work in the case. He immediately sent a mail to the local inspector...

Hello,

This is Senior Inspector Abhijeet from CID.

I want the photographs of the crime scenes and case details of the serial killings to be mailed to me immediately.

This mail should be confidential and should not be revealed to anyone, even to the CID team. I will be in touch through mail.

Thanks and regards,

Senior Inspector Abhijeet,

CID Mumbai bureau.

Abhijeet secretly maintained a Facebook account and a group with his informers. So he posted a message regarding this issue in his group.

Few hours later...

Scene 6: Abhijeet's room

Time: 12.30 pm

Arjun came to Abhijeet's room with a fruit bag. He noticed the tension in Abhijeet's face. Arjun sat beside Abhijeet's bed and asked him calmly, "Sir, what's wrong with you? You are looking so restless. Do you need any help?

Abhijeet (in a serious tone): Arjun, I am currently working on a case. I am waiting for the mail regarding the case details from the local inspector. So please don't disturb me. Since you were my informer I am sharing this to you.

Arjun (shocked): Sir, you're supposed to take rest. Why are you straining yourself?

Abhijeet (in an angry tone): Arjun, duty is important for me more than my life. I am not in the state of taking advises from anyone. Please leave me.

Arjun (in a sad tone): Sir, I'm extremely sorry. I can understand your feelings. I'm really happy to help you. At the same time, I'm worried about your health. So please take care of yourself, sir.

Abhijeet (embarrassed): Sorry Arjun. I shouldn't have been rude to you. Since I'm handling a sensitive case I don't want anyone to be involved other than myself. So you can leave now. I will meet you after few days. Thank you for taking care of me all these days.

Arjun left Abhijeet's room without saying a word. After he left, Abhijeet checked his mail. He got a mail from the local inspector...

Abhijeet sir,

Thank you for helping us to solve this case.

Here are the case details.

Abhijeet found an attached file which had the case details collected by the city police so far.

The case details stated that totally ten people were murdered by the serial killer. All the ten people were staying in different localities of the city and they were not connected by any means. The list of victims are below:

ASHUTOSH

60

ANDHERI

AYSHA

42

MALAD

HEERA

38

MATUNGA

BALAJI

26

DADAR

GANGADHAR

35

MAHIM

DEVADUTTA

46

BANDRA

MALINI

53

POWAI

RAZAK

45

BYCULLA

ISHITA

29

PAREL

RISHABH

37

GOREGAON

Similarities in the case are all were killed when they were alone in their houses. The post mortem reports clearly stated that the murders were committed by a single person because of the wounds traced in their bodies. But there were no fingerprints in any of the victims' bodies. The photos indicated that the murders were execution-style murders. Execution-style murders are murders caused at a close range where the murderer brings the victim completely under his control, and the victim gets no chance to escape.

Abhijeet studied the case details carefully. He immediately posted the photos of the victims in his Facebook group, to collect information about the victims. He gave a glance to the photos of the various crime scenes.

One of the informers in his Facebook group said that he saw a man aged nearly 50 wearing a black jacket and a black hat, hanging a bag on his back on the day of Rishabh's murder since he was in Goregaon.

Abhijeet immediately enquired the local inspector regarding the CCTV footages of various localities via mail. Abhijeet was checking the criminal database patiently. He received the mail from the local inspector with CCTV footage recordings of those localities.

Abhijeet started checking the CCTV footages carefully. In most of the footages, a man aged nearly 50 wearing a black jacket and a black hat, hanging a bag on his back was visible. Yet his face was not so clear. In the last footage, there were possibilities of finding the murderer. When the murderer was about to turn his face, suddenly a strange file opened and completely crashed his computer with virus. Abhijeet got shocked and enraged. He started shouting like a mad out of frustration. The doctor rushed into Abhijeet's room with nurses. The nurses tried to control him but everything ended in vain. Somehow the doctor managed to give sedative to Abhijeet which made him fall asleep.

Scene 7: Abhijeet's room

Time: 7.30pm

Abhijeet's room was completely dark. Abhijeet was sleeping in his room. Suddenly a black figure entered his room. The figure took a long syringe and inserted into a drug named "Halocephine which makes the victim to get controlled by the murderer. He injected it to Abhijeet. Since he was asleep he didn't move even an inch. The black figure took a knife and started scratching him rigorously. Then it checked the heartbeat and pulse rate of Abhijeet. Abhijeet was dead. When the black figure was about to leave, Arjun came inside and switched on the light. He was shocked to see the corpse of Abhijeet. Then he was astonished to see the black figure who was none other than the doctor Stephen Jones. Arjun started to shout at Stephen Jones, "Why did you kill Abhijeet sir? Stephen Jones laughed viciously and said, "Because Abhijeet intervened my mission of relieving people from all pains and sufferings of life. Even he was suffering with more pain. I am not a killer. I am a saviour.

Arjun (enraged): Do you think CID will spare you? One day you will be caught and sentenced to death by the law.

Stephen: Can you prove that I'm the murderer? See I'm a devil in an angel's dress. No one can save you from me.

Stephen takes the knife and takes his arm back to stab him with a great force. He turns his head outside a little and got stunned by seeing another Arjun standing outside.

He got confused and didn't know whom to kill. Suddenly another man emerged from the backside of Arjun who looked like Stephen. Arjun who was standing inside Abhijeet's room shot him with the gun. Arjun then tore off his face mask and it was none other than Abhijeet. Abhijeet said with anger, "No criminal can escape from the eyes of CID, Mark! and gave a tight slap.

Flashback

Few hours ago...

Abhijeet woke up from his sleep and moved straight to Stephen's room without anybody's knowledge. Stephen was not inside the room. He checked the patients' record and was shocked to see the list of patients as they were the victims of the serial killings. Stephen entered the room and was taken aback as he saw Abhijeet in his room.

Stephen (angrily): How dare are you to enter my room?

Abhijeet (with the same angry tone): CID is never afraid to do anything. We go to any extent to make the truth triumph.

Stephen (confused): I couldn't understand what you are trying to say.

Abhijeet (gets enraged and places the gun towards the doctor's forehead): What do you think about yourself? Aren't you ashamed to kill your own patients being in a respectable position? Your pen cap had become an evidence against you.

[Abhijeet saw the pen cap when the doctor gave him sedative. Something flashed in his mind as it was the same pen cap which was found in one of the crime scene photos. It had been printed as Dr. Stephen Jones].

Stephen said that he did not do anything and he started crying. He said that he had a twin brother named Mark Jones and he might have done those things. He added that he had lost his pen cap and replaced it few days back. Abhijeet didn't believe anything at first, but he understood everything after seeing a photograph of Mark Jones and Stephen Jones. Mark Jones had the right hand slightly dislocated as Abhijeet watched in the CCTV footage. Arjun, who was standing outside the room, was watching everything that happened inside. The three men made a plan to trap Mark.

At Present:

Mark confessed that he was a neglected child by his parents. He said that he had a passion to pursue medicine but his parents did not agree. So he developed an enmity and towards his brother. This changed him as a psychopathic serial killer. He had an access to the hospital since he was a good hacker and hacked almost every detail in the hospital. He also confessed that he was the one who hacked Abhijeet's laptop. Abhijeet informed the local police and after sometime they came and arrested him at the hospital. Arjun again agreed to work as an informer for Abhijeet. One month later, Abhijeet re-joined CID as a fit officer.



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ENTRY 2


!! Riding the Case !!

Daya Entering inside the Bureau found His Team mates already Talking about Abhijit Absence, so Smilingly included in that Discussion with;

Daya (coming with): abhi bhi 5 din kay liye Usy aur Miss krty raho.

Freddie: pr Sir, (shocking tone) kyun, Abhijit Sir tou 2 Din ki Chutti ly kr gaye thy na.?

Daya (naughtinly teasing shaded tone): Freddy Sir, Aap kay Abhijit Sir Jhoot Bol kr gaye thy; (Freddie Embarrssed Heard) (Daya adds) Sir nay Usy poory Aik Hafty ki Chutti dii hay, bas Dost ki Shadi Attand ki aur Bhaag liye, aisi Class lii hay na Main nay Phone pr (casually opening His Laptop after sitting on His Chair feeling Smiles of Cops with) Kaha hy, agar 5 roz sy Pehly Mumbai ki Seema Parr ki tou, Sir sy keh kr CID sy Pakka Tari Parr krwa dun ga.

Freddie: phir tou Abhijit Sir (hiding smile with) Darr gaye hon gy.

Daya (makes face): Phone hee Band kr diya (seeing Freddy Smiling face and added in wink) itna jo Darr gaya tha.

All started Laughing and Busying in their Reported Cases; Surprisingly Abhijit got a Week Holidays when He just Telling Casually about getting His Friend Mohit Wedding Card to ACP Sir and ACP Sir Sanctioned a Week Leave to Him really Stunned Him.

He told His Teammates that He got 2 days Leave as He feels that Attending Reception is Enough so He will come Earlier and if His Team mates knowing about His Week Leave, it's Difficult to Handle their Silence and Rage even there is a Chance that They will Complain to ACP Sir about it when He will Back after 10 days Visit to Outside Country so it's better to give them little Misleading Information, especially Daya.

But Luckily when He called Daya and Telling Him about His Flight Time to Pick Him Up, got a Big Threatening Lecture as ACP Sir went after Telling This to Daya by Simply saying to Be Alert as Abhijit is on a Week Leave too, bursts Abhijit Secret Balloon and now He has No option just to Spend those 5 days Alone and obviously not in Mohit Area.

In Searching any Hill Station through Internet, He Spotted a Small Lovely Valley around a Hilly area near the Area in His Return Road-trip so Picked His Bag and moved there as He is Less Weighted.

"Oh My Gawd; the First Statement He uttered seeing the Beauty of that Place really gives Him Pleasure and now He is giving Silent Thanks to His Buddy Scold who Realize Him what He was Missing, Exploring in that Ride.

The First day was Good as Sight Seeing especially over Heavy Bike, Yes, there is a Spot where Visiters or Tourest Hired Heavy Bikes in really Reasonable Rent for their Journey Nudged Him to come on His Masti mood so after getting of His Desire, He started His Venture really Refreshes His Heart and giving Sooth to His Soul; He found New Visions of things, He feels the Weather giving Him Glimpse of almost Every Season.

The Back Ride to Small Motel was so Joyful, His Hairs Flying as No Traffic Playing a Major Role in His Enthusiasm, while His Lips Singing few Nice Filmy Oldie Goldie Song either Missing His Buddy but tried to Fill the Absence of Him through His Nice Voice, filling His Heart with Purity and makes it Light even His Mind only Revolving those Natural Scenes although He is Missing His Family but Next Time;

He was very Near to His Motel and Suddenly Slipped with His Bike, the Song as " Suhana Safa aur ye Mausam Hasee'n completely Miss Matched as He got a harsh Pain on His Ankle and before Understand anything, got another Firey Fire inside His Thigh makes Him Flat over Uneven Road with a Heavy Weight of His Bike which Tangled His Leg Badly.

He looked around but as the Motel having Only Few Workers, Some Guests and the Loud Listener Motel Owner.

He tried to Stand but Failed, except that He takes out His Injured Leg from the Bike; He knew He has No Chance except taking his Body to Motel through Dragging Himself so started His Journey.

After Reaching at Motel, He started Screaming, Calling and for His Working Luck, the Owner Personally Heard His Shouts, came and what He did for Treatment was not seeing by Abhijit who Lost His Consciousness till that Time.

His Eyes Opened with a Bad Smell of Tincture Iodine, tells His Mind about His Entry already in any Medical Centre so now Settling Himself, trying to Sit, got He is in any Small Hospital having Pale Yellow color Walls, Steel Bed having the Mattress now only Telling They were Mattress having Fluffy Stuff inside at Sometimes, the Dominance of White Color, the Same Environment of Hospital and the Most Important thing, Angered and Irritated Him to Core, His Hanging Left Leg from Few Pulleys which He Delibrately Ignoring to Reveal from the moment, He Awakened.

Right now, He wanted to Expel His Anger to whom except those Staff, Roaming here and there so Called the Near one;

Abhijit (look at Running Staff so Call in Loud with): Excuse Me.

The Staff looked at the Source and Rushed to Call Doctor again Annoying the Sharp Shine of CID Mumbai.

The Doctor arrived and after Checking Him, Call out Motel Owner, the Bike Stall Owner and few Khaki Wardi Guys giving a Deep Sigh to Abhijit.

Obviously They are there to take His Statement as its really Shocking that in such Small Town, a Tourest/Visiter was Attempting for Killing while the Motel Owner gave His Statement where He told the Cops that Someone trying to Kill the Client of His Motel just to Defame the Popularity of His Small Motel, brings Small Smile on His Lips having Badly Irritating Mood.

Abhijit knew that He must go though this Interrogation, but before that Questionare session, He came under Net of so many ShockingGestures and after a bit when Inspector showed His Own ID CARD and Gun, understands Him the whole even Inspector heard.

Voice (teasingly): Verify karwa liya.?

An Embarrsing Smile came over Inspector Lips gives a Spark to Abhijit who asked Impatiently;

Abhijit (again): kahan say?

Inspector (look at Him Confusingly, replied): Sir, Mumbai sy.

Abhijit: CID, Mumbai sy?

Inspector: Nahi Sir, Hum nay Aadhar Card Data sy Confirm karwaya hy, (softly) aur kuch Apny Resources sy bhi, wahan kay Police Station sy bhi.

Abhijit (with Relaxing sigh): Direct CID Mumbai Call kr lety.

Inspector: kya Sir, Aap bhi, (in tense tone) kesi Baatein kr rahy hain, wahan kaun Phone krta.

Abhijit Smiled as He knew that Small Places People always Scared with Big Cities People; Now He is Relaxed that Nobody knew about His Injury News even His Colleagues as He did not Contact to His Team as He knew after knowing about His Injury, His Collegueas turned Panic especially Daya who come here Urgently so to Relax Him and All not to give them any Burden from His Part, He Pretends to be Angered with Daya and Enjoying His Vacations Alone.

Inspector: Sir, Aap ko (ask) kisi pr Shak hy?

Abhijit: Dekhyey Inspector, Mujhy Maarny walun ya Mujh pr Ghat laga kr rehny walun ki tou koi Kumi nahi (Inspector nodded after getting the Point so Abhijit adds more) magar haan, yahan kisi ka yun Hamla karna, aur agar koi Mujhy Maarna chahta tou Bike kay Tire ya Mery pair pr kyun Hit krta, direct Mujhy Goli sy Ura deta.

Inspector (again softly): Aap nay Us Bike ka number dekha tha.?

Abhijit: Nahi aur shayed Make/Model bhi Main Nahi bata paon, aik tou Main itna Alert Nahi tha, kyunky Soch bhi Nahi skta tha kay yahan koi Mujh pr Hamla karay ga, Dusray Meri Bike ki Speed bhi kafi Taiz thi; koi Pol Light Road kay Side pr Nahi thi tou Andhera bhi Kafi tha, sirf aik is Baat ky kay Wo Bike jis nay Mujhy Hit kiya, wo bhi Heavy thi; Main kuch aur Aap ki Madad nahi kr paon ga.

Inspector: Jee, I can Understand (stand up with) chalein agar koi aur Baat yaad aayey tou Batayey ga, Take Care.

He Saluted Abhijit and Left the room while after this session, from Cops to Motel Owner, Dr to Hospital watchmen coming just to seeing the CID Mumbai Sr. Inspector Abhijit, makes Him a Public Figure in Outbreak of this News in Minutes.

After Reaveling of that News, gives Him a VIP Treatment as Hospital Personally Arranged a Small 14 inch TV in His Separate Room which They also Specially Cleaned for Abhijit.

Abhijit Enjoying Caring of these Simple People who thought that CID Officer from a Big City is not Less than any International Celebraty.

On His Personal Request, Police Stricly Ordered Hospital Staff and Motel Owner about Not Leaking that News to any Outsider especially over Media or Social Media.

During Reading a Local Newspaper provided to Him by Hospital, the Tv Scren got His Attention where the Local News Channel Repoter giving News of Killing of a Guy Studying at Local University, where the Local Inspector Briefing about the Murder which is the 5th Murder in 4 Consecutive days, makes Abhijit Shocked.

He always thought that Crime Rates only Higher in numbers in Big Cosmopolitan Cities but after Hearing the News and few Analyst Comments, He feels that Crimes rates are also Increasing in Small Places as well.

Today, after His Accident, He First time takes Interest in anything as He was getting Irritatable with days Passing.

He has a Choice so ask Doctor about calling the Inspector whose name He still don't know and Regret on His Luck.

Doctor called Out that Inspector taking Abhijit Statement, and Abhijit First getting His Intro after Offering Him a stool;

Abhijit: Sorry, (apology tone) Us Din Main Aap ka Naam Poochna hee Bhool gaya tha aur Aap ky Name Badge pr bhi Saheh sy Dekh Nahi paaya.

Inspector (extending hand with): I m Inspector Freddy.

Abhijit (shout): kya.?

Inspector (in loud voice): Freddy, Freddy; Inspector Freddy.

Abhijit nodded with Mysterious Smile not getting by Inspector Freddy; so Directly come to the Point ask;

Abhijit: Inspector, (serious tone) ye Aap kay Area mein 4 roz mein 5 Murders?

Inspector: Jee Sir, Hum Log Buht Pareshan hy, Acha hua, Aap nay Humari Help krnay ka Socha (Abhijit Stunned asHhe has not such Idea, but its OK, Inspector said more) warna Shayed, Aaj Raat Main Khud Aap sy Baat krta.

Abhijit (come on His Professional Avtar): Koi Clue.?

Inspector (Sadly): kuch Nahi Sir, Paanchun Victims ki Umrein alug hain, Un ka Background alug hy, Profession, Area sub Alug; yahan tak kay 2 Aurtein hain aur 3 Aadmi; sub Logun ki alug alug tareeqy sy Maara gaya hy.

Abhijit (confusing tone): tou Aap Log isy Serial Killing kyun Keh rahy hain.?

Inspector: sirf Daily Qatal hony ki wajah sy aur Sir (embarrassingly) Media aur Logun ko thora Shaant rakhny ko bhi.

Abhijit: kya Aap Mujhy Us Saaray Victims kay Statements aur Crime Spot Dikha skty hain, matlab (sadly saying after seeing His Hanging Leg with) Us ki Tasweerein ya Video.?

Inspeector (with Big Smile): tou Aap Is Case mein Humarai Madad karein gy.?

Abhijit: haan, magar Private tour pr (little strict tone) Mujhy Apny Kaam mein kisi ki beja Madakhlat Pasand Nahi (Inspector looking towards Contable meaning fully, Abhijit Ignored that Meaningful look and adds) Main Apnay Tareeqy sy Kaam krna Chahun ga.

Inspector (buttering): Sure Sir; jesa Aap Kahein.

Abhijit: Theek hy tou sub sy pehly ek Latest Laptop arrange karein with High Wi Fi Device kay Sath, Mujhy 24/7 Fastest Internet Access chahyey; is Case ka Saara Data, Case File, Pictures, Statements, Clues, Evidence aur Aap Logun ki Investigation kahan tak ki hay, Sub ki Briefing chahyey. OK.

Inspector: Sir, (obediently) Shaam 7 Bajy, Aap ko Sub kuch Yahan Mil jaye ga.

Abhijit nodded while Inspector and Constable Leaving room with Salute Discussing the Professionalism of CID Mumbai.

Inspector (applause): Wah bhae, jesa Suna tha, wesa hee Paaya; kitni Taizi sy Abhijit Sir nay Saara Intaizam Sanbhal liya.

Constable (starting Jeep with): Sir, aisay hee tou Nahi CID Mumbai ki wah wah hoti hy.

Inspector nodded and Both went to their Destination although starting Arranging items and Organizing things.

At Sharp 7 Pm, Constable came with Brand New HP Laptop, He also came with a Technician who Settled a Wi-Fi Arrangement either giving a Fastest Speed Dongle to Abhijit for any Emergency, with a Small Brief.

Constable (briefing): Sir, Inspector Freddy nay Saari Files ki Soft Copy, Desktop pr Folder mein Save kr dii hy, agar Aap ko Hard Copy bhi chahyey tou Main Arrange kr deta hun.

Abhijit: hmmm (opening Laptop, checking Net Speed and after Satisfying, opening Folder with) ye batao, kub sy yahan Posted ho.?

Constable: Sir, 8 Months huay hain, Simla sy yahan Posted hua hun, (Shyly) Pehli Posting hy.

His Shyness Brigthened a Face in Abhijit Eyes, gives a Smile to Him so asked again.

Abhijit (signaling for sitting with): Naam kya hy Tumhara?

Constable (sat with): Dayaanand (Abhijit Stunned, Constable more) wesy Sub Daya Bulaty hain, Aap bhi Bula lijye ga.

Abhijit look at Him in Shock, Scared the Man who started Looking Downword giving a Broadned Smile over Abhijit Lips.

Constable: Sir, (Softly) Aap ko kuch aur Information chahyey?

Abhijit (ask): Tumhara koi Jurwaan Bhai tou Nahi?

Constable Eyes having so many Confusing Colors giving a Laugh to Sr. Inspector of CID Mumbai, who Avoiding the Scene.

Abhijit: kya (asking) In Victims ka aapus mein koi Connection Tum Logun ko Mila.?

Constable: Nahi Sir, koi Connection Nahi Mila, (adds) yahan tak kay Hum nay Sub kay School, College's, Higher Studies Institution's, Office, Ghar, Tution, Past; Sub ko Achy sy Dekha hy.

Abhijit: hmmm... (reading First Murder Report Dated 13th July 2016 with) Naam Mayank, Umr 37 years, ek Shop Keeper, Single, Maut ka karan: Buht Buri tarah Chakoo kay Ghao.

(reading 2nd Murder Report Dated 14th July 2016 with) Naam Usha, Umr 17 years, ek Student, Single, Maut ka karan: Gala kata gaya kisii Taiz Dhaar hathyaar sy.

(reading 3rd Murder Report Dated 15th July 2016 with) Naam Ramji, Umr 47 years, ek Cashier, Shadishuda (biwi aur 2 shadishuda betiyaan jo Dehli aur Manali mein rehti hain apny Parivar kay sath), Maut ka karan: Zehr.

(reading 4th Murder Report Dated 15th July 2016 with) Naam Kaanta, Umr 30 years, ek Montessory Teacher, Divircee, Maut ka karan: Gala ghont kr Maara gaya.

(reading 5th Murder Report Dated 16th July 2016 with) Naam Johny, Umr 25 years, ek Medical Rep, Married (no kids), Maut ka karan: Chati pr Goli ka Ghao.

Hmmm, (ask to Dayanand) magar Hatya kin Hathyaarun sy hui hay, wo is mein Mention Nahi, yahan tak kay Goli sy Gun ka Make bhi Pata nahi kiya gaya hy.

Constable: Sir, Gun tou Desi Katta hy, magar Make pata krna Mushkil hy, kyunky Goli Exit Wound sy Nikl gayii aur Mili bhi Nahi.

Abhijit: Daya (Constable Shocked although a Sweet Smile appeared on His Lips, Abhijit Realized so said) Mera matlab Dayanand, Ghao sy bhi Make Pata hota hy,(telling their Mistakes with) Forensic Report ki koi Copy Nahi lagi hui is mein, acha Raamji ko kaun sa Zehr diya gaya, is ki bhi koi Jaanch Nahi hui hay.

Constable (stammering): wo Sir, wo Sir.

Abhijit (rude tone as now His mood started spoiling with): Mujhy Aik Ghanty mein Forensic Report la kr do aur haan Inspector Freddy ko kehna Mujhy Raat mein Mily.

Constable Dayaand Hurriedly Left the Cabin after seeing the Bad Mood of Senior and send His Message to Inspector Freddy who also Shivered.

Abhijit go through the Reports in Detail and now He started Verifying things after picking His Cell and started Calling to All those Number's He found over those People giving Information about those Victim about their Behaviour, Job even Family and Habits too.

At Night, Inspector Freddy and Constable Dayaanand arrived with few Papers and after handing them to Abhijit who Teased to Dayaanand;

Abhijit (teasing tone): Tumhara Aik Ghanta 4 Ghatun ka hota hy.

Constable started Stammering so He goes though those Reports and then Ordered Inspector.

Abhijit: Mujhy abhi ek Scanner aur ek Printer bhi Chahyey, Papers kay Sath aur haan, Files or Pictures ki Hard Copy bhi, haan, Un Sub Witnesses ko Bulwayey jinhun nay Lassh ko Sub sy Pehlay Dekha ya Police ko Khaber ki aur (to Constable Dayaanand) Tum (Dayaanand look at Him who adds) Kal Mujhy is Area ki Un Saari Jaghun ki Report chahyey jahan kisi bhi Qism ka Zehr Banta ya Milnay kay Chance ho skty hain, Area kay aas Pass sy bhi Pata krna aur haan aas pass kay Police Station sy bhi kay kahein sy kisi Zehr kay Chori hony ki Report tou Nahi (Dayaanand nodded while Abhijit focused over Inspector Freddy whose body starting little Jerking found such Strict Straight tone heard) aur Inspector, Mujhy Kal Subah, Un saaray Logun ky Naam aur Paty chahyey jo Area meiin Illegally Hathyaar Bechaty hain.

Both nodded and Left so Abhijit started His work, He first started taking Information about the Entering and Exit Points of area, He already got Data Footages of those Spots after Calling to Traffic Department on His Mailing ID.

He was Checking those Points Footage and found a Small Clue as He Spotted a Bike which He feels the Same Bike Hits on His Bike and Responsible for His Hanging Leg, seeing the Leg Angirly again.

Abhijit (murmuring): magar Us Roz jis Roz Mera Accident hua tha, us roz tou kisi Murder ki koi Report hee nahi hy aur jub sy ye paanchwaan Murder hua hy, 2 roz sy Khamoshi hy, kyun.!

Yes, This KYUN roaming around His Mind whereas Dayaanand came with Scanner and Printer with Hard Copies of All Files and after arranging and Installing them, Left the room.

Abhijit in a bit, Scanned the Photo's of Both Victim Died through Poison and Bullet Shots and started taking Information through the Size of Wound, its Color, Texture of Skin and after Half an hour of Extreme Working, Repetidely Reading the Data, He is Accessing from CID Main Database, He got the Similar Case found in their Database.

Next Morning Inspector Freddy coming with 4 Peoples who are the Prime Witnesses found or Reported about the Body to Police. Abhijit look at them Keenly and started His Query session either He found All are Simple People, He asked to Inspector Freddy;

Abhijit: aur (scanning and ask) Panchween Laash ki Ittila kis sy mili.?

Inspector Freddy: Sir, wo Laash Isi Hospital ki Pichli Gali sy mili, kafi Andhera rehta hy wahan, koi Gate nahi hy wahan.

Abhijit: hmm, in Witnesses ka Background Check krwaya Aap ny.?

Inspector: Jee Sir, kuch Khas Hath Nahi aaya aur (handed a List with) ye Un Logun ki List hy jo Area mein 6 months mein Dekhy gaye hain aur jo Illegally Hathyaar Smuggle krty ya Bechty hain.

Abhijit (scanned the list and Spotted the Man with): acha, Theek hy, Us Shaks ko Bulayey jis nay Paanchween Laash Hospital kay Back pr Sub sy Pehly Dekhi thi.

Inspector Freddy Left while now Constable Dayanand comes Forward and started His Investigative Report with;

Constable: Sir, Kahein sy bhi kisi Zehr kay Na Chori hony ki Report hay, Area mein 1 hee Lab hay, wahan sirf Research hota hy aur Area kay aas pass kay Areas mein 2 General Labs hain magar wahan koi aisi Na Machine hy jis sy kisi Disease ki Diagnose ho paye, Zehr tou Buht Durr ki Baat hy.

Abhijit (again ask): Tumhary Area kay Cases, Post Mortem ky liye kahan jaty hain.?

Inspector Freddy (entering with): Sir, yahein aaty hain (showing a wordboy) Sir ye hy wo Banda, (signaling a wordboy with) Vishal.

Abhijit (to Vishal): Vishal, Tum Hospital ki Pichli taraf gaye hee kyun thy.?

Vishal: Sir, Main Kachra Dump krnay wahan gaya tha.

Abhijit: aur (keen tone) Laash wahan pehly sy Pari thi.?

Visha (nodded): Jee.

Abhijit: acha, Tum jao (to Dayanand after Vishal Leaving) Daya (He looked Abhijit in Shock who again Bite His Tongue and adds) haan tou Dayanand, aisa karo Us jagah ki aur wahan sy aany jany waly saaray Raastun ki Clip Apny Mobile Camera mein Bana kr lao, jao Shabash (He Left while Abhijit look at Inspector Freddy and asked) Aap logun ko Hairat Nahi hui kay 2 Roz sy kisi Murder ki Ittila Nahi aayii.?

Inspector: Jee Sir, pr (worried tone) ek Missing Report hy (detailing) ek 30 Saal kay Aadmi Arun Dutt ki jo Parsun hee Bangalore sy Wapis aaya hy, wo bhi Sight Seeing pr Nikla tha.

Abhijit: aur Wo Bike.?

Inspector: Nahi Sir, (down head) Us ka kuch pata Nahi chala.?

Abhijit nodded while Constable Dayanand arrived and giving His Cell to Abhijit who Transferred that Clip over Abhijit Cell and then Both Leaving the Hospital.

Abhijit Transferred that Clip and Watching it in Great Detail over His Lappy Screen while Side by Side Contacting His Informer over His Cell and asking them to Dig Out Information about KAALIA who is the Supplier of Illegal Arms Spotted on that List Provided to Him by Inspector Freddy.

Abhijit watching that Footage but now feeling Sleepy so after Closing His Lappy, went to take a Nap.

A Big Room having Five Bodies while There is No Door Visible for Entry or Exit; A Man Checking any Point to Pick any Clue to atleast Figure out to Flee from that Place; He Hurriedly Diagonising Every Body but did not get any Evidance and when He was Stuck with Empty hands, got a Knock.

Abhijit Eyes Opened, found a Doctor on Visit and during Checking Him, asked Casual Queries and then asked;

Dr: Aap ka Case Solve hua? Hospital mein tou (Smilingly) kafi Rounaq lug gayii hy.?

Abhijit (embarrassingly): Sorry Doctor, halanky Main Buht Try krta hun kay Rush Na lagy aur Na Zyada Shor ho, wesy ye (signaling His Hanging Leg with) Merii Tang ko kub tak is tarah latakna paray ga.?

Dr (with small laugh): I think, 2 Din aur lagein gy, Aap ye Sub (signaling Printer/Scanner Devices including Laptop and Cell with) Machines ko Chalany ky liye, Buht Move krty hain, is liye Tang kay Muscles thora Stratch ho gaye hain.

Abhijit: ohhh, (irritatingly) bas kya karein, Kaam he kuch aisa hy.

Dr: chalein as Your Wish, (moving with) Mujhy bhi Intaizar rahy ga kay Aap Qatil ko kesy Dhoondty hain.

Abhijit nodded in Smile and suddenly a Scene Appeared on His Brain started His Mind Speedly;

He Opened His Laptop again and Watched that Clip agin and Pause it at Frame where He saw Something which He is Missing;

He saw a Pair of Gloves on that Dumping Drum, it's Casual that Hospital Bin having many Pair of Gloves but, the thing which Pinched Him, those Gloves are typical Rubber Gloves so whats the Reason of Presence of those Rubber Gloves as Doctors and Staff of Hospital using Medical Gloves (He searched about Medical gloves found Information through Internet) Medical Gloves are made up of Non-Latex materials such asVinyl, Nitrile Rubber, or Neoprene have become widely used.

Abhijit instantly calling Inspector Freddy who Picked His Call in 2nd Bell and asked Worriedly;

Inspector (ask in tension): kya hua Sir.?

Abhijit (hurriedly): Freddy, ye batao, is Hospital kay aas pass kya hy.?

Inspector (shocked to Hear such Casual tone with): Je... Jee...

Abhijit (irritated tone): kya Jee Jee lagai hui hay, jo Pooch raha hun, Batao.?

Inspector (composing): Sir, ek Khali Plot hy Sath, wo Hospital ki Property hay pr Disputed hay tou Court nay Usy Seal kiya hua hy, Dusri taraf ek Pharma Shop hy aur us sy aagy, ek Baby Garment Store, phir Sarak kay Parr,

Abhijit (interrupted): Theek hay, bas, wo Vishal sy Mujhy Foran Milna hy, aur Us Missing Report ka kya hua?

Inspector: Us ka abhi tak kuch Pata nahi chala, Hum nay Phone Records bhi Niklwaye thy, magar; wesy Main Vishal ko Dayanand kay Sath Bhijwata hun.

Abhijit: aik minute, aik Kaam aur karo, is Area mein jiny Local/STD/ISD Phone Booth hain na ya Net Caf, Sub ki Call List Mujhy do, Pehly Murder kay 2 din Pehly sy abhi tak aur Area mein jitney IPS Active thy ya hain, Sub ki Jaankaari bhi aur Yes, Shaam ko in Sub Reports kay Sath aao aur Vishal ko bhi ly kr aana.

Inspector (obedient tone): Yes Sir.

He Cuts Call while Abhijit Murmuring Smilingly as "ye Freddy kuch zyada hee Quick hota ja arah hy, He really could not Realize that His Freddy and this Freddy are Two Different People;

Voice 1: Lagta hy Sir, (to someone) Abhijit Sir Sach mein hee Darr gaye.

Voice 2: haan, Kal tou itny Khush thy, keh rahy thy, Kaash Pehly aa jata is Jagah Pankaj, kya Beauti hy.

Purvi: aur Pictures dekhein jo Watsapp sy bheji hain.

Daya who was Hearing this Conversation after coming out from Record room feeling Sad as now He is Badly Missing His Friend, who on Revenge did not Pick His Call, giving Replies of His SMS/Messages, Mails even He does not Send Him any of Picture through Watsapp and now He feels that His Idea of Staying His Pal turn Completely Wrong for Himself.

The Sharp Shine Intelligence at His Peak, He already in Contact with His Colleagues even Send them Few of Sights Pictures after Googling them from Different Sites;

He knew if He is Totally Absent from the Scane, makes His Absence Suspicious in His Teammates Eyes so its Better to atleast In Contact with them through Different Mediums.

Somewhere Abhijit still in Confusion that why Killer Suddenly Stopping doing any Attempts or Murders meant, Murderer got Something but What.

Abhijit (murmuring): Samajh hee Nahi aa raha, achanak kyun ye Murders hona Band ho gaye, kya Killer ko bas in 5 Logun ko Maarna tha (thoughtful) Shayed, ya phir (again) najany yehi Baat Mujhy Khatak rahi hay; agar aisa hota tou wo Aadmi jo Missing hy, phir Us ka kya Role hy, kya Usy kisi aur nay Kidnap kiya hy ya (stressing on His Mind) sach mein, is waqt Pata chalta hy Team aur Head ki kya Importance hoti hy, (Sadly) abhi Hum sub Discuss kr lety tou koi na koi Point tou Nikl hee aata, Sir sy bhi Baat krny pr koi Achi Advise ya Clue Mil hee jata (look at his Hanging Leg and in Irritative tone) is Langri Taang nay Mujhy kahein ka nahi rakkha (angrily to His Leg) Jahil, Bewakoof, abhi hee isy Tootna tha, Daant Waant Toot jata tou Chal bhi jata, magar nahi, Tooti bhi tou Tang (again back) wo Goli, hmmm, Desi Katta, Kaaliya ka yahan maujud hona, Mujh pr Hamla (wait for second and then added) Nahi, Mujh pr Nahi, hmmm, kya kaha tha Inspector Freddy nay kay (taking Similarities) kay Arun Dutt Bangalore sy aaya tha, matlab Visitor tha, Main bhi is Area mein Visitor hun, wo bhi Sight Seeing pr Nikla tha aur Main bhi, wo bhi Tourest Bike pr tha aur Main bhi (rubbing his finger on his lip with) kahein Us nay Us aadmi yani Arun Dutt kay Dhoky mein Mujh pr tou Fire Nahi kr diya (after a bit) aur kahein Us ny ye Saaray Murders krnay is liye tou Band nahi kr diye kay Main, (shockingly) O' My Gaud, ye mery Zehn mein kesy Nahi aaya Pehly, ye ho skta hy, pr, Mujhy Inspector Freddy sy is Mamly mein bhi Baat krni paray gi.

Voice (appeared): kis Mamly mein.?

Abhijit Shocked Hearing a Sudden Voice got His Doctor so Smilingly Welcoming Him by saying;

Abhijit: Nahi, wo bas aisay hee, (smiley way) Aap batayein, is Samy.?

Dr: bas Socha, abhi Free hun tou Visit kr lety hain, wesy bhi (starting seeing Readings over Devices with) Shaam mein tou Aap Busy ho jayein gy na.

Abhijit: Nahi wo bas (suddenly stopped and then asked) wesy is Tang ka kya Dr Shahab.?

Dr: Khul jaye gi, (regular tone) Be Relax.

Abhijit: wesy (sweetly) Aap Buht Achy Doctor hain.

Dr (stunned tone): wo kesy.?

Abhijit (in laugh): bhae, Aap nay Mujhy koi Injection nahi diya na, na Pain Killer aur na koi Sedation etc (smilingly) tou Achy tou huay na.

Dr: ohhh, (smiley way) darasal Main Sedation or Injection ka Buht Usage Nahi Pasand krta, jub tak Situation Buht Critical Na ho, Patient ki Will Power aur Immune Back-Up ko main Preference deta hun.


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The News Captured the Attention of Both, where News Anchor giving the News of Bharat Natium Dancing Group having few Participants, Selected for an International Dance Performance at Orrissa.

Abhijit really Astonished found Something although, Look at Doctor who was Keenly Checking Him, asked Casually;

Abhijit: wesy Aap kya Mumbai sy Belong krty hain.?

Dr (straight): Nahi,

Abhijit: acha, (softly) tou Yahein sy hain, jabhi.

Dr: Nahi, bas, (slow tone) Shanti ki Talash mein aaya tha.

Abhijit (asking): tou mili.?

Dr (shocking way): kaun.?

Abhijit: wohi (laughingly) Shanti.

A Big and Loud Laugh really Refreshes the Doctor having a Naughty Patient and after that, He Left.

Abhijit after few minutes, started His Laptop and Scanning those Victims Pictures again and a Mysterious Smile coming on His Lips and the Sparkling Twinkle on His Eye Tells that His Culprit Neck coming around His Fist.

At Evening, Inspector Freddy came with Constable Dayanand and Staff Vishal, Abhijit asked Vishal First;

Abhijit: ye Batao Vishal, wahan kabhi bhi kisi Hospital kay Aadmi ko Dekha Tum nay, ya koi aisi Gari ya Aadmi jo Jana Pehchana ho.

Vishal: Nahi Sir, koi (remembering so yelled) haan Sir, Yaad aaya, Mangro ko Kafi baar Dekha hy wahan, wo Aksar Us Khali Plot kay Pass para Sota rehta hy.

Abhijit (questioning tone): Mangro.

Inspector: Sir, Sharabi hy, Dhut para rehta hy Nashy mein, (irritative tone) hazar baar samjhaya hy, magar;

Abhijit: Usy ly kr aao aur haan (to Vishal) Thank you Vishal, Tum ja skty ho (after Vishal left, to Inspector) Freddy, Un IP Address ya Phone kay Data sy kuch pata chala.

Inspector: kuch Zyada Nahi Sir, magar haan, Marny walun ko Marny waly Hafty mein, ek Local Call zarur kisi nay kisi Social Sites sy mili hy, magar IP Address Change hain.

Abhijit (with Smile): kahan kahan ky hain.?

Inspector: Aik kisi Smuggled Laptop ka hy, jis kay baary mein malum Nahi ho paaya, aik Humaray Area kay Net Caf ka, magar us samy Us IP ko kis nay Use kiya, koi Record Nahi, Teesri aur Cothi baar, Victims kay Cell sy aur Paanchween baar Local Booth sy, Raat ko Us ka Lock Tour kr.

Abhijit (rubbing His Finger on Lips with): hmmm, (to Dayanand) haan Daya, (Dayanand again shocked, Abhijit again Corrected Himself with) matlab Dayanand, (writing something on a Paper and handed to Him with) Mera ye Kaam tou kr do, Jaldi.

Dayanand nodded and grabbed the Paper Reads even Inspector Freddy Peeps on that paper too " Mujhy pata kr kay batao kay kabhi bhi wo Paanch balky 6 Arun Dutt bhi, Orrissa gaye hain, kisi Kaam sy, kisi Choty Moty Kaam sy bhi aur MANGRO ko Protection do, bhalay Jail mein Band kr do, abhi .

Dayanand looked at His Senior who giving Him a Positive Nod and after then nodded to Abhijit and Left while Inspector Freddy Look at Abhijit in Amusement uttered;

Inspector: Sir.?

Abhijit (handed Him a Paper again and then said): Dekhty hain Inspector, Qatil Buht Chalak hy, balky Shatir, wo koi Clue hee Nahi Chor raha jo Humaray Kaam aayey, aiisy Logun ko Pakarna yaqeenun Mushkil hoga.

Inspector who already Reads the Paper " Dunt discusss any Further about the Case in this room, I think Someone Listening Our Talks, Check the Room Now;

Inspector (Standing to Keenly Checking the room with Sigh): Kahein Band hee Na krna par jaye Case.

Abhijit who was in Shock mode and that Sigh as He got that if His Freddy is here, He also Replied like this even takes the Deep Sad Sigh too, gives Him a Broad Smile, Confused Inspector, who Show Him a Small Microphone which was Finelly Wrapped inside His Plastered Hanging Leg on His Own Order so Abhijit Erased that Confusion with;

Abhijit (nodded and reamin it as it is Fixed with): Koshish tou hogi kay Band Na ho, wesy bhi Kal Mera Plaster Open ho jaye ga, Tang ka Pain bhi Kum hy, Shayed Mujhy Kal hee Wapis Jana pary.

Inspector (fake Pleading): ye kya Bol rahy hain Sir Aap, Plz Is Case ko Solve tou kr jayein.

Abhijit (hiding Smile either Appreciate His Acting by showing Him a Thumbs Up sign, Embarrss the Inspector with): Majbori hay Inspector (getting a Chit as Inspector giving Him Something Reads "Aap ko Hospital ky kisi Stafff pr Shak hy) (Abhijit nodded with a Replied Chit writing "Kal sy Aap aur Daya Mujh sy sirf Internet kay through Baat karein gy, Mera Email Id Abhijit.D@gamial.com hy) Jana tou Paray ga, wesy Meray Hath ek Bara Saboot tou aa gaya hy, bas Zara Usy Confirm krna hy, Us kay baad Qatil Aap ko Mil hee jaye ga.

Inspector (shock): kya.?

Abhijit: wo (Suddenly Hit his Medicine Tray over His Leg, broke the Microphone adds) ye.

The Figure Keenly Hearing the whole Conversation, Hit His Punch over His Desk as the Conversation Abruptly Finished on the Critical Tense Line.

He Rushed towards Abhijit room, found Abhijit and Inspector Freddy Hanging His Leg while Pain Visible over Abhijit Face, hurridly Hopped inside;

Dr (shockingly): arry ye kya kiya.?

Inspector: bas Dr, Excitement mein najany kesy Leg pr Pressure (moving behind with) Aap Plz Dekhein.

Abhijit: ahhh... (painful tone) Dr, Plz.

Dr Started Checking the Leg Relaxed finding the Microphone still Hides inside the Bandage so Correct its Position and said;

Dr: Sorry, Sir, pr Aaj (painful smile) Mujhy Aap ko Pain Killer dena hee paray ga.

Abhijit: kuch bhi kijye, (pleading tone) Plz Dr.

Dr giving Him Injection and after a while Abhijit turned Unconcious and Inspector Freddy Left the Room with Dr.

Next Morning, Dayanand in Excitment coming with Happy Face, little Relaxed Abhijit as He felt, He came More Close to Culprit where Dayaanand asked handing Him a Paper with;

Constable: kesy hain Sir Aap, Sir Bata rahy thy kay Kal Aap ki Tabiyet Buht Kharab ho gayii thi.

Abhijit: haan Daya, abhi tou Better hy, Tum batao, Sub Theek aur wo Mangaro Nahi aaya abhi tak.?

Constable: Sir, Usi pr tou Kal Raat Hamla hua hy, Shuker, Hum Log Waqt pr Pohanch gaye tou Us ki Jaan bach gayii, magar (sad tone) Coma mein chala gaya Bechara.

A Soothing Smile appeared over a Figure Lips, Relaxed and Utteriing COME IN after Hearing the Knock on His cabin door.

Abhijit: hmmm, (reads the Mail having Detail on His Email) Persona "Bharat Natium Stage of Art, Orrissa, 1983 mein yahan pr Jo Batch aaya tha, jis nay Seol mein Ek International Dance Performance mein Part liya tha aur First Position lii thi, Us mein Un Saaray Participant ny Hissa liya tha, Jin ka Qatal ho chukka hy, Arun Dutt aur Dolly Martha kay ilawa aur is Group ko Head kiya tha Dr. Malik Jeth thy jo ky is Samy is Hospital mein ArthoPedric Department mein Sr Doctor ki Position pr hain.

Abhijit: hmmm (Replied Him giving Underline the Name Dolly Martha and asking about Where She Is Now) acha (Constable wrote Canada so Abhijit nods with) ye Dard Ja nahi raha.

Constable: Chala jaye ga Sir, shayed Aap ko Zyada Chout lug gayii hy.

Constable again wrote on Mail as " ye Saaray Log yahan kisi ki Call pr aayey thy jo Trace Nahi ho pa rahi, matlab kisi nay inhein yahan bulaya tha.

Abhijit: Inspector Freddy sy poocho, kub aa rahy hain, (telling) aaj Mujhy hr haal mein Wapis jana hy.?

Constable: kya Sir, (shyly) Aap bhi.

Abhijit look at Him seeing the Disappointed Face Remind Him His Buddy, Saddened Him now as really in during this Case, He is Missing Daya a lot and when Met Constable Dayanand, feels Himself More Alone and Far from Daya Frustated Him and now really He wanted to Meet Him and His Team and Head as early as Possible.

Constable coming after few Seconds and then giving Abhijit a Happy News that Inspector Freddy coming although Abhijit started Dialing a Number, Picked on First Bell Uttered.

Voice (uttered Happily): Boss;

Abhijit (with a Satisfying Soothing Smile Updated): Daya (Dayanand look at Him but found Him in Call Confused Looking the Mesmerizing Smile over His Kharos Shehri Gussy wala Senior Lip heard His Teasing tone) kr lii Zid poori, Ain.?

Daya: kya Yaar, ab aa bhi jao, (sorrowful tone) koi Zaruri thori tha kay 5 din ka Package poora hee karo.

Abhijit (laughs with): hmm, (naughtily) Sahab ka hee Hukum tha.

Daya: choro, kahan ho, (ask Impatiently) Main Lenay aa jaon.

Abhijit: haan, aana paray ga, (softly) Mera Accident ho gaya hy.

Daya: kya, Abhi Theek ho na Tum, (Panic tone) Koi Haddi Tooti hy, Kahan ho, Mujhy Jagah, Choro, Main Call sy Location Trace.

Abhijit (interrupts): Daya Daya, Aaram sy, Relax, (found Daya Relax so adds) aa jao, Main Theek hun, Tang ki Haddi Fracture hy, bas.

Daya (confirmed tone): Main Helicopter ka Intaizam krta hun, Tum bas 2 Ghanty Wait karo, Main aaya.

Abhijit's Daya Daya totally Flushed Up as he Buddy Cut the Call and now Arranging Helicopter Ride for taking Him to Mumbai while He takes a Sigh and look at Dayanand who feels Shy on that Continous Unfocused Look gives a Small Smile over Abhijit Lips.

Meanwhile Inspector Freddy coming with Dr who started Checking Abhijit and then asked;

Dr: ab (asking) kesa Feel kr rahy hain Aap.?

Abhijit (smiling): Buht Acha, wesy Orrisaa sy kub Shift huay.?

Dr Shocked and before He is Running towards the Door, got a Gun Barrel on His Back, heard a Strong tone;

Constable: Zara bhi Hily tou Soch lena, (threatening) Dayanand ka Mukka Kaanun mein Baaja Baja deta hy.

How Abhijit Controlled His Outburst Laugh, Only knowing by Him, He Definately seeing the Replica of His Buddy; Dayanand Dragged Him over the Chair and sat Him with Force.

Inspector Freddy taken out a Small Device and started Playing it, Completely Shattered the Dr who really Curse Himself.

Voice: Maza aaya, ab paray rehna, Mera Bhanda Phorny ka Socha, Us CID Officer nay, Dekhta hun, kesy Sula kr aaya hun.

Inspector Freddy Stopped the Tape on Abhijit Signal who started the Investigation with;

Abhijit (Smirk tone): tou Dr. Malik Jeth, CID Officer itna bhi Bewakoof Nahi hota kay Usy Rubber Gloves aur Vinyle Gloves ka Farq malum Na ho paye, (chewing) Usy Bharat Natium ki bhi thori Buht Jaankari hoti hy aur Herat ki Baat ye hy kay Us kay Kaan Buht Taiz hoty hain aur Aankhein(smilingly) tou Aap ko malum hee hoga;

Hoshyaari tou Tum nay Buht Dikhayii, Saaray Victims ko Different Tareequn sy Aik Jagah Jama krna, phir Un ko Alug Alug Tareequn sy, Alug Alug jagah Maarna, No Doubt, Tum tak Pohanchna Kafi Mushkil tha, agar Tum Mery Case mein Enter hoty hee, ye Saaray Qatal Band nahi kr dety;

Tum ny Arun kay Dhoky mein Mujh pr Goli chala dii, kyunky Arun ki Bike, Bike Organizers nay Mujhy dy dii thi, is liye kay Wo Late Pohancha tha, aur wahan First Come First Serve pr base hy;

Phir Tum nay achanak Sub Band kr diya aur yehi Cheez Mujhy Khatki kay aakhir Mery aany kay baad kyun Saaray Murders Band ho gaye, Pehly Mujhy laga Tum Un 5 Logun ko hee Maarna chahty thy, magar Arun Dutt ki Missing Report nay Mujhy Confuse kiya; aur Mujhy Yaqeen hy kay Tum nay Usy bi Maar hee diiya hoga (Dr Reaction Confirms their Assumption), (again) sirf in Do Police walun aur Hospital kay Dr, Motel Owner aur 3 Khas Hospital Staff kay kisi ko malum Nahi tha kay Main CID Officer hun; phir Tum nay Bewakoofi ki Inteha kr dii, (smilingly) itni Bari aur Buri Injury pr bhi Tum nay Mujhy koi Pain Killer/Sedation Nahi diya, kyunkay is tarah Tumhein Investigation ka kesy Pata chalta.

Jis Roz Tum nay Mujhy kaha kay Inspector Freddy Shaam ko aayein gy, Mujhy Jhatka laga kay Tumhein kesy malum hua ye, kyunkay Us Samy tou Room mein koi Nahi tha; Tum nay Mujhy Apny Shehr ka bhi Nahi bataya magar Us News pr Tumhary Reactions Buht Aajeeb thy.

Yaad hy na Us pr News Anchor nay jo Report Dekhii thi, Us mein Bharat Natium Dance kay kuch Moves ki Footage bhi thi, wahein sy Mujhy Victims ki Position mein kuch Similarity lagi aur Main nay jub Un ki Photo's phir sy Dekhi tou hr Victim ki Position, Dance Moves pr thi.

Tum nay Kaam tou Acha kiya kay Humaray Steps Follow krnay lagy, pr Follow krnay mein Hamesha (teasingly) Aik Qadam Peechy rehty hain, Baraber aany ya Aagy Nikalny ki Koshish Nahi krty.

Mangaro wo Gawah tha, jis nay Tumhein Hospital kay back pr Gloves Dustbin mein Phainkty huay Dekh liya tha, aur jub Hum nay Usy Spot kiya tou Tum nay Usy Maarny ki Koshish ki.

Ab Kuch Batana Pasand karo gy ya ye (signaling Dayanand with) Tumhary Kaanun sy Baaja bajwaye.

Now Doctor Confessed His Crime with Slow tone but Hate iis Visible in His tone Clearly.

Dr: Main Leader tha Us Group ka, Humara Group jub 1983 Select hua Us International Dance Performance ky liye, Seol mein tou Sub hee Buht Khush thy, Main Apnay Kaam mein Buht Passionate tha aur is Performance kay liye Buht Excited bhi, Kari Mehnat krny thi, Meri Strictness, Extra Rehearsal aur Daant Dapat sy Participant Buht Tang thy, even Organizers bhi, magar Wo Mujhy Nikalna Afford Nahi kr skty thy;

Jis Din Hum Seol Pohanchy, Main nay Feel kiya kay Sub Mujh sy Thora Khichy huay rehty aur Mujhy Apni Tabiyet bhi Giri Giri lagti; Dance waly Din tak Main Beemaar par gaya, Meri Haalat Dekh kr Arun ko Lead karnay ko kaha gaya aur Mujhy Back Row mein bhi Last mein Jagah mili;

Hum nay Performance ki aur Competition Jeet bhi liya, Jeet ki Party pr Main Nahi ja paaya magar jub thori Tabiyet Behtar hui tou socha Rehearsal room mein Join kr leta hun Un Sub ko; jub wahan Pohancha tou;

(Sadly) Un Sub nay Mujhy Nasha dena Shroo kr diya, najany kya Mujhy Pilany ya Khilany lagy; Martha kay Father Scientist thy aur wo Chemical Us nay Un ki Lab sy hee Churaya tha; Organizers ko is Baat ka Ilm Nahi tha aur Us itny Test bhi Nahi hoty thy ya Unhun nay Mujhy Test kay baad wo dena Shroo kiya hoga ya kya, Main Nahi jaanta (look at Abhijit with) Tum batao, kya Kasoor tha Mera, Zyada Mehnat, kuch Haftun ki Shakti aur Daant Dapat, Tumhein malum hy, Main Severe Allergic hun, Dekha hy Mery Jism ka koi Hissa siwaye Chehry ky, ye Dekho;

He showed His Skin and really the Three Cops feeling Extreme Sympathy to the Doctor whose Skin having only Bristles, Hurts them too.

Dr (again): Wapsii pr Dheery Dheery Meri Outer Skin Jalny lagi, Meri Maa aur Baap Mera Ilaj karwa karwa kr is Dunya sy hee Chaly gaye, batao, kya Main ny Ghalat kiya.

Voice (strong): Nahi.

All turned and found Sr. Inspector Daya and Inspector Fredrics who came inside while seeing His Friend in that Condition Hurts Him although He stated Strongly;

Daya: magar, Tumhara Tareeka Ghalat tha (adds) Un Logun ko bhi Andaza Nahi hoga kay Us Chemical sy Tumhein itna Nuqsan Nahi hoga, Unhun nay wo Sirf Tumhari Sakhti sy Bachny kay liye kiya.

Freddie: haan, agar Tum Un ko Baad mein bataty ya Un pr Gussa krty tou Tum Khud Dekhty kay wo kitna Sharminda hoty aur Tumhari Madad bhi krty, Saari Umer Tumhary Aagy Sar Uthany ki Himmat Nahi krty;

Abhijit: wo bhi Tumharay Jitney hee thy Malik, (Softly Realizing them) Choty, Na-samjh, mehaz Tumhari Daant Dapat sy Bachny ky liye, Un hun nay Usy Neend ki Dawa samjh kr Tumhein dii hogi; Tum Un sy Milty tou Baad mein.

Inspector: aur kya, wesy bhi (Proudly) Meri Wife kehti hay kay jo Darr gaya, samjho Marr gaya.

The two Heads turned to Him in Shock while Freddie look at the Person and said Shockingly;

Freddie (telling): Meri Wife bhi yehi Bolti hy.

Inspector (happily): Sach.

Abhijit (murmur): aye Bhagwaan.

Constable (to Abhijit): Sir, isy bas 2 minute Mery Sath rehny dein,(again) Tooty ki tarah Bolny lagy ga.

Again two Heads turned towards Him and their Gazes gives the Deep Red Grin over Cheeks Stunned the Gentle Gaint who looked at His Pal getting a Naughty Wink turned Him Embarrss gives a Big Smile over Abhijit Lips.

Abhijit (call out): Daya.

Two Heads turned towards Him gives Him a Laughing Blaster, who now Introduced all Four as;

Abhijit: ye Sr. Inspector Daya aur Inspector Fredric from CID Mumbai, (Police Cops Stunned while Abhijit adds more Hiding His Smile with) ye Constable Dayanand aur Inspector Freddy.

His Team-mates really Shocked and after Shaking Hands, His Friend really in Panic, giving Orders to take Culprit and Presented Him against Court after the Proceedings while taking His Buddy on Stratcher giving a laughing Fit to Abhijit which roaming the whole Hospital Corridor till the Helipad which is now in Air and Abhijit Closed His Eyes with Complete Soothing after Solving the Case, Alone or say with His Two Pals coming on His way in Disguise.



ENTRY 3 (Late Entry)


Zehriley Bichoo

1st Scene

CiD beaurue:

"Arey Sir, ye aap kia keh rahey hein, yahan kitney cases sir pe heinAbhijeet ne jhunjhlatey hyey kaha

"Abhijeet Tum bachon ke jesey zid mat karo, Abhi Tum Beemari se uthey ho aye Doctors ka kehna he ke Tumhei Tension free rehna chahiye kuch dino TakACP sir ne unhein samjhaya

"Magar Sir Wo bechargi se kuch keh hi rahey they ke ACP sir ne tok dia

"Agar , magar Kuch nahi, Tum aaj hi Kuch dino ke liye Goa ja rahey ho, and that's my Order ACp sir ne Ticket Abhijeet ko thamatey huey kaha

Un ke ghussey me bhi Piyaar chupa tha

"Aur Haan Zara dheyaan rakhna, kahin Pichli dafa ki tarha apna cell phone aur wallet mat gum kar aana, warna phir kisi truck ya lorry me sawaar ho ke aana parega Daya ne shararat se Abhijeet ke kandhey pe haath maartey huey kaha to Abhijeet bhi hans diye

"OK sir, jesey aap ka orderAbhijeet ne ticket dekhtey huey kaha

"Abhijeet, har waqt murder, laashon, drugs , mujrimo me lag lag ke hamara dimaagh bhi thak jaata he isey thora relax dena hi chahiye ACP sir ne kaha to wo khul ke muskura diye

"OK sir, magar aap to jantey hein ke cid hi mera pareewaar he, me ziyada din is se door nahi reh sakta, jesey hi koi case aye, aap mujhey foran call kareingeyAbhijeet ne kaha to Acp sir ne hanstey huey haan me jawaab dia

"Sir aap bohot lucky hein ke aap ko khud ACP sir ne ghoomney ke liye chuttiyan di hein ek hum hein ke... Freddy ne Abhijeet se kaha

"FreddyAcp sir ne awaaz di

"yes, yes sir Freddy bokhla gaye

"Kaho to tumhein mustakhil chutti de doonAcp sir ne poocha

"Y...Yes sir , no, nosir freddy ne bokhla ke jawaab dia to sabhi hans parey

...

2nd scene:

Abhijeet bike pe bethey Goa se aagey apney dost ke farm house ki taraf ja rahey they, unhoon ne Goa me Hotel me karma book karwaney ke saath saath bike bhi rent pe le li thee

Achanak hi Abhijeet ne zor se break lagaye

Ek aadmi sadak ke beechon beech para karaah raha tha, aur aaspaas koi bhi nahi tha

"Arey , ye kon he, is ko kiya ho gaya Abhijeet ne socha aur bike se utrey Halmet utaar ke bike pe rakha aur us aadmi ki taraf barhey, abhi wo jhuk ke usey palat hi rahey they ke kisi ne un ke sir pe peechey se waar kar dia

"Aaah, aahWo sir pakar ke murey hi they ke neechey para hua aadmi turant utha Aur us ne revolver ka but poori quwat se un ke sir pe raseed kar dia

Aur Abhijeet behosh ho ke gir parey

...

3rd Scene:

"Ye, ye me kahaan aa gaya, ye kon si jagah he Abhijeet ki aankh khuli to wo khud ko ek anjaan jag ape dekh ke chonk gaye

Kamra saaf suthra tha un k eek side pe drip stand laga tha jis pe bandhi drip se qatra qatra glucose un ke shareer me dakhil ho raha tha

"Ye, ye hospital to nahi lagtaWo ulajh se gaye

Achanak hi darwaza khula Aur ek Aadmi andar daakhi; hua

"Arey aap ko hosh aa gaya, Thank GodUs aadmi ne khush ho ke kaha

"M..mm..mein kahan hoon?, Aap kon hein, Aur me yahan kesey aaya?Abhijeet ne pareshani se poocha

"Relax Mr. Abhijeet, relax, aap 24 ghanton ke baad hosh me aye hein, aap ke dimaagh pe bohot gehri chot aai thi, is liye please aap koi tension na leinUs aadmi ne bataya to abhijeet ek dam chonk gaye

"24 ghantey, O my God, aur aap mujhey jantey hein kesey?Wo uthney ki koshish karney lagey magar achanak hi unhein bohot zor ka chakkar aaya

"Arey me nekaha na aap aaraam kareinUs aadmi ne nazdeek aa ke unhein litatey huey kahaMera naam Dr. Narayan he, city hospital me job karta hoon aur mera yahan ye chota sa private clinic he, me raastey se guzar raha tha ke me ne aap ko sadak pe ghayal parey dekha aap ke sir pe gehri chot lagi thee aur bohot khoon beh chukka tha, aapki haalat bohot serious thi, aap ke nazdeek hi aap ka I card para tha jis pe aapka name likha tha, abhi bhi aap ko kam se kam 3, 4 din tak yahan se hilna nahi he, magar ye to bataein ye sab hua kesey?Dr.Narayan ne poocha

"Actually meek cid officer hoon, ek hafta pehley Mumbai se chuttiyan guzaarney yahan aaya hoon aaj bhi beach pe hi jaa raha tha ke raastey me...Abhijeet ne un ko saari daastaan batai

"Oh lagta he ye usi loot paat karney waley group ka kia dhara he, wo sarko pe khuley aam loot maar kartey hein, mobile, cars, bikes cheentey hein aur faraar ho jatey hein, aaj tak koi unka chehra bhi nahi dekh sakaDr. Narayan ne bataya

"Yahaan ki police ne koi kaarwaai nai ki?Abhijeet ne poocha

"Sir , local police ne bohot koshish ki, magar naakaam rahi kesey talaash karey koi clue bhi to nahi heUnhoon ne mayoosi se kaha "Poora sheher in gundon ke haaathon pareshaan he, kisi ki jaan, maal , surakshit nahi

"Oh ye to bohot bari problem he, is ko to jaldi se jaldi hal hona chahiyeAbhijeet ne sochtey huey kaha

"Aap,Aap ke paas cell phone to hogaAbhijeet ne poocha

"Sorry sir, actually hum cell phone nahi rakhtey kiunke yahan mobile ke signals nahi aatey, ye jungle ka ilaaqa heDr.Narayan ne kaha to Abhijeet ek taweel saans le ke reh gaye

"Aap abhi aaraam kijye, koi azroorat ho to intercom a button press kar dijyega

Dr. Narayan ne kaha, Abhijeet ne ek baar phir unka shukria adaa kia

Ab wo yahaan ke haalaat ke baarey me soch rahey they, unka cell bhi chori ho gaya tha Aur Dr. Narayan ke paas bhi cell phone nahi tha ke wo apni team se contact kar saktey

Boriyat ki waja se unhoo ne kuch deir to paas pada magazine utha ke parhney ki koshish ki, magar unka dimaagh uljha hua tha, is liye wo jald hi uktaa gaye, sir me bhi is qadar dard tha ke uthtey huey hi chakkar aaney lag jatey they

Aakhir tang aa ke unhon ne corner table pe se remote utha ke Samney mojood TV on kar lia, searching kartey huey unhon ne ek news channel lagaya to wo ek dam shocked reh gaye

News caster jo kuch bata rahi thi wo bohot shocking tha, jesi ghatna yahaan ho rahi thi aisi hi desh ke taqreeban tamaam chotey shehron me ho raha tha, or pichley teen dino se ye waardatein hona shuru hui theen, newscaster ke mutabiq tamaam sheron ki police harkat me thee magar mujrimo ka suraagh lagane me naakaam thi

"Ye jaal to bohot buri tarha pheil chukka heAbhijeet ne hont bheenchtey huey khud se kaha phir kuch sochtey huey unhon ne intercom ka button dabaya

"ji sahib chand hi minutes baad ek boorha aadmi wahaan aaya wo huliye se servant lag raha tha

"Kaakaa, mujhey Narayan ji se baat karni he, wo busy to nahi heinAbhijeet ne poocha

"Barey sahib andar hi hein, me abhi bula deta hoon beta Kaakaa ne kaha aur wapis mur gaye

Kuch hi deir baad Dr. Narayan andar rakhil huey

"Ji sir kia hua kia tabiat ziyada kharaab ho rahi heDr.Narayan ne tashweesh se poocha

"Arey nahi Dr. Sahib, sorry me ne aapko disturb kia, magar jis tarha ke yahaan ke haalaat hein, me aisey chup saadh ke nahi beth sakta Abhijeet ne kehna shuru kia

"Magar aap kam se kam 3, 4 din tak bilkul chalney phirney ki position me nahi hein, aap ke spinal cord pe zakham aaya he jis ki waja se aapki back bone pe bhi asar para heDr. Narayan ne kaha

"Me kuch nahi kar sakta magar aap to kar saktey heinAbhijeet ne eye brow utha ke kaha

"me, me kia kar sakta hoonDr. Narayan ne hairat se poocha

"Aap yahan ke local police incharge se meri meeting karwa dein, me un se current situation maloom karna chahita hoonAbhijeet ne kaha

"Zaroor, desh ke liye kaam karna to har naagrik ka farz he, me subha hi police station jaata hoonDr. Narayan ne jawaab diya

...

4th scene:

"Inspector sahib aap bataein kea b tak in cases me kia hua he?Abhijeet ne Inspectar khanna (of local police)se poocha abhi abhi Dr. Narayan un ko yahan chor gaye they

"Arey sir aap yahaan is haalat me,us ne poochaMujhey jaisey hi doctor sahib ne bataya me foran aa gaya

Abhijeet ne saari kahaani repeat ki ke kia kia hua tha or wo kesey yahan tak pohnchey

"Sir me Sheher ja ke Mumbai inform kar deta hoon us ne kaha

"Nahi, me nahi chahta ke wo log merey accident ka sun ke pareshaan ho jaein, pehley me ye case solve karna chahta hoonAbhijeet ne jawaab diyaaap mujhey merey sawaal ka jawaab dein

"Sir hum ne bohot koshish ki tracing ki magar koi clue nahi mila abhi takInspector khanna ne jawaab dia

"Me aap ko ek clue de sakta hoonAbhijeet ne sochtey huey kaha to inspector khanna uchal para

"Wo kaisey sir?us ne hairat se poocha

"Jab me us neechey parey huey aadmi ke paas pohncha or usko seedha kar raha tha to uske baazo pe me ne ek tattoo bana hua dekha tha jis pe do scorpions baney they or WE likha thaAbhijeet ne kaha

"Magar itni si cheez se hum mujrimo ko kesey dhoond saktey hein sirKhanna ne mayoosi se kaha

"Kiun nahi dhoond saktey, Hum to ek baal se bhi mujrim tak pohonch saktey hein, khair aap sketch artist ko bulwaein me us se tattoo ka sketch tayyar karwata hoon

Usey aap social media pe upload kar dein, kuch na kuch pata zaroor chal jayegaAbhijeet ne kaha

"Yes sir, aap cid waley waqai bohot door ki sochtey hein sirKhanna ne kaha

Thori deir ke baad hi sketch artist aa gaya or us ne tattoo ka sketch bana dia wo tattoo Facebook aur twitter pe upload kar dia gaya

Thori hi deir baad Facebook se ek massage aaya

"Hello sir desh ki seva kar ke mujhey khushi hogi sir,ye tattoo asal me ek khufia club ka nishaan he white eagle ka, jo yahaan ke har member ke sharer pe mojood hota he, ye club yahan street 48 pe he sir, is se ziyada me kuch nahi bata sakta

"Ok itna bhi bohot he, street no. 48 ki taraf jao aur wahan ka chappa chappa check karoAbhijeet ne khanna ko order dia

"Yes sirWo salute kar ke wahan se chala gaya

"Thehro me bhi saath chalta hoonAbhijeet ne kaha, aur uth ke beth gaye, un ka sir chakra gaya

"Sir hum kar lein gey sab aap chintaa na karein, aaraam kareinKhanna ne kaha

"Nahi jab tak merey desh wasi takleef me hein mujhey aaram nahi aa sakta, me theek hoon abAbhijeet khud ko sambhaltey huey uth kharey huey

Thori deir baad wo ek car me sawaar strwwt 48 ki taraf barh rahey they

Ye idea Abhijeet ka hi tha ke polce jeep ki jaga car me or civilian dress me jaya jaye

Achanak hi Abhijeet ko ek khayaal aya to unhon ne khanna se un ka cell phone maanga

"Kalloo me ne suna he ke tum aaj kal Goa me ghoom phir rahey hoDoosri taraf se baat sun ke wo muskuraey

"Haan 2 bichoo hein jo zara ziyada hi das rahey hein saphed rang ki cheel ke paas rehtey hein, zara pata to lagaoPhone band kar ke unhoon ne Khanna ko bataya ke Kalloo CID ka purana khabri he jo aajkal Goa me he

Adhey ghantey baad wo street 48 ke paas pohonch chukey they, abhi wo car se utrey hi they ke samney se ek shakhs unki taraf aaya

"Namastey Abhijeet sir Ye kalloo thaArey ye aap ke sir pe patti, kia hua aapkoUs ne poocha

"Kuch nahi tum ye batao ke tumhein kuch pata chala,Abhijeet ne poocha

"Haan sir yahan ek charch ke neechey khufia club banaya hua he, in logo ne har type ka crime hota he wahanKalloo ne bataya

"My God, in logo ne charch ko bhi nahi choraAbhijeet ne ghussy se kaha

"Sir me ne ye charch dekha hua he,aaein "Khanna ne kaha or Us ki team Abhijeet ke saath us charch ki taraf chal pari

Kallo un ko khufia raastey se andar le gaya

"Arey ye to CID ka inspector Abhijeet he ek aadmi ne Abhijeet ko dekhtey huey kaha

"Bhaagokisis ne shor machaya, hall me afratafri mach gai, firing dono taraf se start ho gai thi

Abhijeet ki nazar counter k paas baney office ki taraf gai jis ka door blind glass ka tha

Wo foran wahan pohnchey, Aur kick maar ke darwaza khola andar ek aadmi jaldi jaldi kuch files briefcase me rakh raha tha

"Bas beta bas, bhaag kahan raha he, baaraat aa gai he tujhey le janey ke liye Abhijeet ne us ko cover kartey huey kaha

Doosrey din ka newspaper Abhijeet ke ek aur karnamey se bhara tha

Ye club is gang ka sab se bara adda tha jahan desh ke tamaam hisso me mojood un ke agents ki detail mojood thi aur Senior inspector Abhijeet ki waja se aaj ye poora gang griftaar ho gaya tha

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Originally posted by: Kousar-Aditya

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Same Query Himani baccha...
plz Tell...😃
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Review is not asked. So I am not pakaoing more all of you writers. 😳 Here are my ratings...😊

Entry 1: 7/10

Entry 2: 9.5/10

Entry 3: 6/10

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My ratings and reviews
Entry 1- 7.5/10
Good story. Still you should have some more things to improve the thrill of the story
Entry 2- 9/10
Good story with thrilling twists. Good job.
Entry 3- 8/10
The story started well and I think it should have added some more stuff. Nice attempt.

All the best for all the participants.
Edited by swathi17 - 9 years ago
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A Big Round of Applause to All Three Participants for their Fabulous Entries...👏
Thank You so much Writers for their Wonderful Work...👏



Entry # 1: Simple, Casual Narration...👏👏
Like the Flow of Story especially Clearly Each and Every Small Information...👏👏
Arjun Character was really Nice...😳👏
I Liked His Background with All His Approach...👏👏
Liked Abhijeet Sir Recognizing Part...😳👏
again No Police Investigation by Kajrat Hill area Police Station or Pune Police station about that Accident...😕😕
Might be its a Killing Attempt by any Gang over Abhijeet Sir Secretly...😉😉
its quite Surprising that, Mumbai Case was Transferred to Other Place as Kajraat or say Pune Police handling the Case as Abhijeet is Not in Mumbai...😕😕
the Case already Dealing by Mumbai Police so hows Inspector on His Own Behalf without any Investigation, sending such High Profile Case Papers on a Id...😲😲
He must Verified ID, even Existence of Sr. Inspector Abhijeet in CID Mumbai or if He knew that, He must come that News under CID consideration or His Higher Officials ...
the Execution-Style Murder was a Nice Term and its really gives Information to Readers...👏👏
The CCTV Footage sent via Mail is Another Not Convincing Idea...
Like Inspector Discussion with Him regarding the Man Spotting...👏👏
the Story Suddenly becomes Finishing Soon by showing Twin Bro and especially that Cap...🤔🤔
the Attempting Idea with Help of Arjun, John and Inspector was Nice...👏👏
Somehow Writer Finishes it Abruptly although Writer taking Story so Nicely...😒🤔
The Motive was OK, Acceptable but not much Appealing...😊😊
all and all except These Few Small Mistakes...👏👏
Story is No Doubt Awesome...👏👏
Writer really makes it Consize, Concrete and Complete...👏👏
Excellent Attempt by a Writer...👏👏
Thank You so very much...😳😳


Rate: 8/10





Entry # 2: Story is Quite Long in Written...🥱🥱
Start is Nice to have atleast few Sparks of Indirect Conversation of Teammates...👏👏
the Idea of Accident was OK...😊😃
then the whole Investigation giving Good Approach...👏👏
the Story taking Twist when Suddenly Daya and Freddy appeared...😲😲
Honestly, its really giving New Taste in Old Wrapper...😆⭐️
A really Innovative Idea to Use those Characters in New Format...⭐️⭐️
The Investigation Part was Extremely Cool either having Loopholes...
There is so Less Part coming as Online Communication...
why Dr. Malik not tried to Hack Abhijeet Sir Laptop Data...?😕😕
the Cooperation of Both Dayaannd and Freddy was really Excellent...👏👏
Like Writer taking CID Team in Background...👏👏
Loved the Confession...😳👏
Motive was Acceptable...😊👏
Dance Moves Idea was also Nice...😊👏
End was Humorous...😆😆
Excellent Attempt...👏👏
Thank You so much Writer...😳😳


Rate: 9/10




Entry # 3: the Start was Nice...👏👏
Like the Idea of that Loot Paat with Abhijeet Sir during on His way...👏👏
I m Surprised as how the Serial Killing Idea changed into Robbery...😕😕
Dr. Narayan Character given Good Support...👏👏
Somehow Story is Lacking Good Investigation...
Tattoo Idea was Not much Appealing...😒🤔
How Dr allowed Abhijeet Sir to Move to Spot...❓😕
In Story there was Online Conversation through Internet was Completely Missing in this Attempt...❓❓
the Phone Convo of Abhijeet Sir with His Informers was Absolutely Fantastic... ⭐️⭐️
Rushy Raid with Abrupt Finish...
Writer did really Good Effort...👏👏
Thank You so much...😳😳


Rate: 6/10
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I am very sorry, I am busy with office work... couldn't read the stories. I think story contests should be given more time. They are not like siggies!

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5 months ago

Daya sir and Aditya sir talk about their ACP sahab

https://youtu.be/KU_QzX0fbQo?si=lSru7Z9Qc9-hsiCr I loved how politely yet bluntly Daya sir stated that ACP's shoes are impossible to fill and...

https://youtu.be/KU_QzX0fbQo?si=lSru7Z9Qc9-hsiCr
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Posted by: Minionite

5 months ago

CID Banner Contest 2025 Results

Hello everyone, it is with great pleasure that I announce the BC is now over and we have a fresh new banner for the forum! Firstly our runner-up...

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Posted by: appisuri

5 months ago

Hrishikesh sir aka Inspector sachin ka new interview

https://youtu.be/3PUe3flBTZs?si=J95J3cqtkY9NDfoZ Hrishikesh sir Interview with Siddharth kannan

https://youtu.be/3PUe3flBTZs?si=J95J3cqtkY9NDfoZ
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Posted by: HIDEnSEEK06

8 years ago

::The Star With Sparkling Smile:: Aditya Srivastava AT#25

A man who needs no introduction, Aditya Srivastava is the King of our Hearts. The loyal TV and Internet viewers of CID know him as Senior

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Posted by: Chocolava5

2 months ago

Episode rating 59

Let's discuss abt the episode here till the page is created

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