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I loved how you incorporated FW scenes in your story and wound a story around those.
I think he was the same psychiatrist from 'Yeh Phool Chaman mein Kaise Khila' to whom Abhijeet sir went and that he refused to take any risk regarding him was being loyal to his duty on his part.
I also liked that Abhijeet understood team's point of view and was accepting his mistake of almost strangling that culprit. Another thing, the explanation that you gave to his rage and ignorance towards the team was befitting the situation.
And what I liked the most is that he, being a cop, didn't succumbed to the dream to an extent that he lost his brain. Despite being in stress how he managed to extract Dilip's identity was the high point of the story. The Asha-Abhijeet conversation was so sweet, especially the part where Abhijeet asked her not to call him sir and when Asha said that he never calls back.
It was quite thoughtful of you that you sent him in disguise to Dilip's house and the conversation that followed was beautifully executed. In the end when he lost himself to emotions and realised that he was in disguise only when Dilip's father mentioned about US gave a realistic touch to the scene.
I too noticed this thing that Abhijeet was to share with Daya and was soft towards him in that episode before he realised that ACP sir was accompanying him.
The reason you provided behind his resignation was way more acceptable than that of FW's.
Daya's decision to go to Abhijeet's house to dig out the matter spoke of duo friendship, sans OTT and his words, 'do chaar galiyan sunadi toh bhi theek hai' were so sweet and somehow reminded me of the same sweet Daya from the qualis scene of 'Mysterious Gift'.
Abhijeet's dilemma about the true reason of his leaving the job and city was another beautiful thing u added in the story.
Then how he gave up and confessed to Daya about all what happened to him in these few days was eventual and the writing here had a practical approach which I appreciate. Then how Daya narrated all what happened years back and how you brought in ACP Pradyuman in the scene is another good thing you did to the story.
How the information about something regarding arms smuggling to be printed in the next day's newspaper was conveyed to Abhijeet who further conveyed to Dilip and how the two digged it out from the newspaper had an intelligent and professional approach. I liked this little thing when Abhijeet while configuring where Dilip was heading in car with others revealed his name to that lady on the reciever end. It showed that cops are human and are prone to mistakes even when on mission.
Then, how and in what circumstances Dilip was shot were in accordance to the story.
The best part of plot development was how you connected Dilip's missing to Abhijeet's kidnapping.
And then, how duo found about Ranvijay aka Ronnie and Ronnie's side of story that how Dilip was killed by him, his decision to confess his mistake in front of Abhijeet due to his inner voice and then again burying the secret in his heart after Abhijeet's memory loss was amazingly penned down.
Then the last scene between ACP sir and Abhijeet was like icing on the cake and 'ek aur baar resign ka drama kiya toh main resignation accept kar loonga' by ACP sir brought a smile to my face.
How you portrayed Abhijeet's emotions in between and Daya's and ACP sir's support and concern towards him is praiseworthy.
A scene slipped into another very smoothly and in any part, it never felt to me that the progress is sluggish or hushed up.
I thoroughly loved the story. It was sweet, straight, simple and most importantly, meaningful, sans OTTs and YSPTs.
I really want you to join in as a writer at FW . It would be a boon to us viewers.
I think he was the same psychiatrist from 'Yeh Phool Chaman mein Kaise Khila' to whom Abhijeet sir went and that he refused to take any risk regarding him was being loyal to his duty on his part.
I also liked that Abhijeet understood team's point of view and was accepting his mistake of almost strangling that culprit. Another thing, the explanation that you gave to his rage and ignorance towards the team was befitting the situation.
And what I liked the most is that he, being a cop, didn't succumbed to the dream to an extent that he lost his brain. Despite being in stress how he managed to extract Dilip's identity was the high point of the story. The Asha-Abhijeet conversation was so sweet, especially the part where Abhijeet asked her not to call him sir and when Asha said that he never calls back.
It was quite thoughtful of you that you sent him in disguise to Dilip's house and the conversation that followed was beautifully executed. In the end when he lost himself to emotions and realised that he was in disguise only when Dilip's father mentioned about US gave a realistic touch to the scene.
I too noticed this thing that Abhijeet was to share with Daya and was soft towards him in that episode before he realised that ACP sir was accompanying him.
The reason you provided behind his resignation was way more acceptable than that of FW's.
Daya's decision to go to Abhijeet's house to dig out the matter spoke of duo friendship, sans OTT and his words, 'do chaar galiyan sunadi toh bhi theek hai' were so sweet and somehow reminded me of the same sweet Daya from the qualis scene of 'Mysterious Gift'.
Abhijeet's dilemma about the true reason of his leaving the job and city was another beautiful thing u added in the story.
Then how he gave up and confessed to Daya about all what happened to him in these few days was eventual and the writing here had a practical approach which I appreciate. Then how Daya narrated all what happened years back and how you brought in ACP Pradyuman in the scene is another good thing you did to the story.
How the information about something regarding arms smuggling to be printed in the next day's newspaper was conveyed to Abhijeet who further conveyed to Dilip and how the two digged it out from the newspaper had an intelligent and professional approach. I liked this little thing when Abhijeet while configuring where Dilip was heading in car with others revealed his name to that lady on the reciever end. It showed that cops are human and are prone to mistakes even when on mission.
Then, how and in what circumstances Dilip was shot were in accordance to the story.
The best part of plot development was how you connected Dilip's missing to Abhijeet's kidnapping.
And then, how duo found about Ranvijay aka Ronnie and Ronnie's side of story that how Dilip was killed by him, his decision to confess his mistake in front of Abhijeet due to his inner voice and then again burying the secret in his heart after Abhijeet's memory loss was amazingly penned down.
Then the last scene between ACP sir and Abhijeet was like icing on the cake and 'ek aur baar resign ka drama kiya toh main resignation accept kar loonga' by ACP sir brought a smile to my face.
How you portrayed Abhijeet's emotions in between and Daya's and ACP sir's support and concern towards him is praiseworthy.
A scene slipped into another very smoothly and in any part, it never felt to me that the progress is sluggish or hushed up.
I thoroughly loved the story. It was sweet, straight, simple and most importantly, meaningful, sans OTTs and YSPTs.
I really want you to join in as a writer at FW . It would be a boon to us viewers.
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