*CID And Mr Bean's Encounter*~Result (Pg 2) - Page 3

Congrats BT & Sri 👏
Saman lovely siggies 👏

I apologize not to rate within deadline...🤔
I have started reading but could not complete. Sorry!

Ahhh!!!! My doubt was right that 2nd one is written by Mao.. yippee.. *Shabash chiryu*

Congrats Mao.. great work shreya di..

Liked ur stories..

Wonderful siggies Saman..
And Deba di amazing tag..
Thank you so much

Thank you Deba, Chiria and Titli 😳
@Deba,
Your review pending 😈

Originally posted by: Abhi-Anamika

Story # 2- 9/10

OMG...jumanji in your story...wow....I appreciate your creativity...😛👏.

I really enjoyed the story...😛

A cute scene of Mr.bean talking with teddies..😛

machine description was really enjoyable...⭐️

Trio interaction with Mr.Bean was superb...

Yes dcp chitrole is a man of strange actions...🤣 wow...our sharp mind Acp sir...⭐️

The end was really enjoyable...😆

Bechare freddy sir...🤣 duo part was also nice...😆

Great work by the writer...👏 i m stunned with the creative minds you people have...😛.👏⭐️ i think i can guess the writer...😉😛

Both the writers have done a wonderful job...😛👏👏

And Thank u so much Saman sis for such an awesome contest...⭐️

Thanks for the review 😳 Did you guess the writer correct? 😉
I guess all like epilogue better than story 😛

Originally posted by: visrom

story 2: I am sorry about my own ignorance, I didn't know what's jumanji. I thought it was a person. Then I googled it. 😳 The story is lovely...cid team searching for Teddy? 🤣 at one point I thought it'll lead to the Teddy in mysterious blast. Enjoyed the story. Freddoe's wife's reaction in the end was hilarious. 8.5/10. ( for the jumanji thing)

Both writers have done a wonderful job. This contest was very tough and you both deserve applause for attempting! 👏

Thanks for the review Vis.. 😳

Originally posted by: ANGELICEYES

Story 1 :

Story 2 : Marks - 8/10
Good story overall.. I felt intial part was a bit dragged and then everything was wind up quickly.. ACP kidnapped by an alien looking like foreigner and Daya stealing teddies are heights 🤣 ..

Thanks for the feedback angel, Actually end was wrapped up because I was very busy with work. At least two paragraphs are missing in how things wind up. I just wanted to complete somehow and submit 😳. Also once it crossed 4 pages in word, voices started telling me lamba hogaya 😆, pata nahi how other writers have so much patience to write long ones 😲. Must appreciate them 👏 👏

Originally posted by: dreamfanatic

STORY: 2

I loved the whole story overall. 👏

Fantastic imagination by author I must say as including JUMANJI...😲 lovely...😛👏

I really loved jumanji inclusion as the scenes further than automatically began clear as FICTION...👏

Starting scene of Mr.bean talking to his teddy was very natural...👏 though I had always loved his coats...😛😳
[BT] even for jogging/ morning walk 😛😉

Then came the super heroes...😎

Fantastic job with their description..👏⭐️ though I am little confused as to who was leading and who two were irritated?

[BT] It's Abhi leading and Daya , Freddy reluctant 😃, Just realized I didn't make this point clear.😳 Bunny has sharp eyes ahaan ⭐️

The game started now...😉

Loved the progression...👏⭐️

Ohh...I am set to watch jumanji again...😃

The phrases were aptly framed...👏

I really enjoyed the whole time machine description...⭐️

The author really providing feel of every moment through words or sentences which I personally enjoyed allot...😳👏⭐️

Then TRIO officers landing in Mr.bean flat and the way they interacted with Mr.bean was mind blowing...👏⭐️

I was really hoping that Mr.bean providing details and the TRIO sketching...😉😆
[BT] Good idea add karte toh bahut maza aata 😆 cos with Mr Bean sketch kabhi nahi banta 😆

But the thing that Mr.bean was unknown to those words...😲

Fantastic and real..⭐️👏

The way you described ACP sir feelings thoughts and then his interaction with Mr.bean...absolutely praiseworthy attempt...👏

ACP sir was sharp and sweet...⭐️

The story wrapped up in hurry after that as I was waiting for more drama...😛
[BT] Busy with work, at least 2 paragraphs of what I wanted to write missed 😳

But yes the whole journey was very unique for me..👏

Last two para's abt how things unfolded after all that was mind blowing...😆😆

Daya sir ate cereals...😉😆
[BT] This was actually planned as part of wind up, once they figure out how to end game, they had to wait for Mr Bean to be back, in in mean time I planned some fun with Duo, Freddy with Mrs Wickets and a bully neighbor of Mr Bean (my OC) par time nahi tha.. toh epilogue me thora add ki thee 😳

Salunkhe sir teasing ABHIJEET sir abt free rides...🤣

Very good job..👍🏼

TO BOTH WRITERS...

A wonderful job guys honestly. it was a very difficult task and you both carried it such brilliantly...👏⭐️.

You both are the TRUE WINNERS as both the stories are really awesome...👏⭐️

It's your both hardwork, talent and creativity that has really made this difficult task possible and i really applaud you both..👏⭐️

CONGRATS GUYS.

SAMAN

Very IMPRESSIVE PLOT!👏⭐️

I HOPE IN future too you coming up with such things and i hope more that in future i could participate...😳...

Thanks for review and pointing improvements Bunny 😃😳🤗

Originally posted by: MysticVibe

STORY 2

Really liked the way author started the story.. that talk of Mr. Bean with his Teddy.. so sweet.. 😛 😛, the inclusion of Jumaji.. 👏 👏

all his f urnitures turned to tiny toys.. 😆 😆 😆 and next time super heroes.. ⭐️..


bichare officers jogging karte karte 1990 me pouch gaye.. 🤣

loved Mr Bean's innocent query.. "Are you super heros?" aww so cutee 😳 😳 😳

Mr. Bean to time Machine leke furr.. 😲 😉 🤣

Liked the acp sir and Mr. Bean part.. 👍🏼 👍🏼
and Time machine description as well as Acp sir's alertness.. 👏 👏
finally Mr Bean got convinced and our cops came Back ..

Dr Salunkhe teasing abhi sir.. 😉😆, daya sir accused by abhi sir.. 😆 and Freddy sir.. bichare.. ghar se bahar Rehna padha 😆

Liked the epilogue 👍🏼 👍🏼

thank you so much author . 😊😛

Rating.. 8. 5

Thanks for review Chiria 😳
Epilogue is now more famous than story itself 😆

Originally posted by: gadhadada

STORY # TWO

Rate: 9/10

Honestly, that JUMANJI idea stole the whole concept of that story...👏👏

It's really Classical cz in this week, I saw JUMANJI quite few times...😉👏

it's really refreshing to read how Bean got that game during Strolling and started the game...😆👏👏

I really Loved that initially in Bean turn, U used another Trick of Miniature..👏👏.

Then that Time machine coming on DUO way was little Shocking (typical FWish)...😉

[BT] saalon ka sangat ka asar hi boss 😆

Now the Exchange of TRIO and TEDDY...😆

I really loved how both parties Introduced with each one and DAYA sir stressed about corrected FREDDIE Sir name as TEDDY...😉🤣

Then the Question of Bean about Superheros and FREDDIE Sir Reply was really Classical and laughing blaster...🤣🤣

I really liked that u showed that touch system was little new or say weird in that era when bean entered in Time machine...👏👏

Then the lonavla journey...😃

The best part started when Bean Approached ACP Sir and his counter Verification...⭐️⭐️

Excellent, feeling I watch again Golden Era ACP Sir...⭐️⭐️😳

I really Enjoyed that whole part...⭐️👏👏

Mr. Bean back to his flat and TRIO back to India...😉😉

Hmmm now the End was really Rushy and honestly ruined the mood and flow of story and spoiled Reader enjoyment...

[BT]Yes yaar even I have complaints on it, At least 2 paragraphs add karna tha 😳

Cops only taking Cereals, talking, Sleeping but did not do anything means they really needs a Yummy, Relaxing Break...

[BT] Nahi na, They figured out how to fix the things. So when Mr Bean came back, Abhi did tell him how to fix, but Mr Bean coldly replied like I know 😉. Basically Lonavala to Mumbai is about 1 hr journey. So it should take 4 hours considering traffic cos Mr went and back to Lonavala after landing. ACP sir alerting cops, figuring out time machine, getting Salunkhe sir , explaining and convincing Mr Bean and teaching him how to make a perfect 6 with dice ko bhee time lagega. Par SS ko itne hrs nahi lagte na figure out karne me, so they had free time after figuring out.

Again there was some missing parts where it is shown how Duo and Freddy figure out things and then realize about there no status in London. That caused this confusion 😳

BTW, U did not show that bean got his Teddy back after that Return of TRIO...😕😕

[BT] He got back na, epilogue me Bean told all these stories to Teddy na

It's one of really zabardast Attempt...⭐️⭐️

A Big Thank You so much...😳😳

Thanks for review and critics GD 😃 😉 😳 🤗