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cid_duo

@cid_duo

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#11

thank u pari for lovely story..
its awsm

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MysticVibe

@MysticVibe

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: cid_duo
thank u pari for lovely story..
its awsm

wow.. Very fast..
thank u dear..
for liking it..

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@Twilight123

Sparkler

Posted: 11 years ago

#13

Read the first part/post.it's really interesting...😃

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Secret

@Twilight123

Sparkler

Posted: 11 years ago

#14

Read it...😛
OMG...pari...so..lovely story dear😛.thank u so much for it.😊...i really enjoyed a lot reading this.every scene was nice...Loved duo conversation at the beginning..when Abhi sir kidnapped,i was 😒..mujhe rona a raha tha unhe aise dekhkar.😭.last scene with li'l shreya was awesome...👍🏼..really a Very sweet story...thank u so much...😛

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Himani

@.mOSAIc.

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#15

First of all sorry for this super late fb coming in ur way. Tell me one thing Pari, is this a short story!!??😆

OK, coming to the story, it was nice. A different plot, at least for a birthday story. So, first of all, congrats for handling a unique story line so very efficiently⭐️👏. At most of the places, dialogues are appropriate and flow of emotions, realistic, but at few, emotions are bit exaggerated, what I felt, so don't mind. Otherwise, the story is very promising and has the power of holding the reader throughout.

Loved duo conversation and the last sweet fight was also good. The gift by Daya sir was so touching...

And yeah, the underlying message, that u wanted to convey is so very true and noble.

Great attempt👍🏼. Looking forward to read more from u😃

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PAYEL DEY

@--PAYEL--

Sparkler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#16

1st of all congrats on ur 1st story pari..
i've read the 1st part nd its very insteresting...👍🏼i'll read the next parts soon..

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pappais

@pappais

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#17

Pari ur story is awesome
teams birthday decoration was great

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Riya

@dreamfanatic

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#18

I already read it once..😉😆

reading it again...

going to same ups and downs of emotions..😳

feeling same fear..👏

same happiness..⭐️

cuteness and sweetness...⭐️

I like the idea, the plot..⭐️

though i feel it was bad to give him "pitaai" on his birthday..😆

But enjoying the story as it's nice, and yaar it's actually A BIT LONGER VERSION OF SHORT STORY...😆

I like team arrangements and excitement for his birthday...

I like the birthday gift daya sir gave to abhijeet...⭐️

Though you know, i feel this topic repeated too much..shreya ones, but it's nice and lovely to read always...though i expected this, but i wanted a different gift..😉

Well that's my point of view, you see..😉

Overall a nice lovely story, you adopting my pattern of story posting..😉😆

nice nice...😆

Thank you so much for the lovely story..🤗