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I just started and ya beautiful beginning (Except i dint want them to smoke.)😉 will finish anytime soon...within 17520 hours🤣...meanwhile a suggestion...please go apply to FW for story writing👏

So sorry GD for late reviewing nt late actualy i cross the limit of late reviewing bt sorry Dost 😊

here is my review to the story
DNA 2

Daya leave the house ...han ye to hona hi tha
Acp sir plan to get him back was also wel proofed 😃
News telecast dn Ambulance...strecher ...dn Daya sir fall down , Abhi's hidden smile ...lovely scene it was ⭐️⭐️

Daya sir nt interested to talk his buddy nd again leave the house ... hmmm he realy hurt badly 😭

Acp sir n daya sir convo was just amazing 👏
wt he said nd in reply wt Daya said was realy nt expected bt i lv dis part 😊⭐️
nd Abhijeet in home... wt he wanna do ...suicide 😲..i was shocked 😲😲

hmmm...bt GD wt did nxt was just incredible n awsome work 👏👏

Wt Abhijeet find in Daya's bed drawer ..the bag or lots of polythene with tag line...amazing yr realy ⭐️👏

nd Daya find Dairy in his luggage ...nd wt Abhi wrote in dis was also fabulus 👏
u knw wt these things remind me the whole CID best moments...i enjoy dis journey realy 😳😳

nd 2013 n 2015 part of writing i just lvd it alottt

nd thank u so much Gd for dis story ...realy i enjoyed every part of dis story ... nd hats off to u for ur work 👏👏...u realy did great hard work on dis part na...nd it shown clearly
Hugss to u Gd 🤗🤗

Here's my review to
Tujh say Naraz Nahi ZINDAGI,
Hairaan hun Main...!

lovely story Gd..⭐️⭐️
name of the title is also very nice 😊

story start with khana...mujhey bhi bhookh lg gyi yr 😛..meko bhi khana h 😛😃
Abhijeet got injured...arey yr aaj kl ke bcche na acche se gaadi bhi nhi chlate ...ab lg gyi na Bade Bhai ko chot
anyways Daya's tension for His Abhi... its lovely bt its litle over 😉
Abhijeet got fever nd wt Daya sir's cndition...i enjoyed dis whole

Rahul said ' is duniya mein or bhi doctor h ' bilkul sahi kaha...arey agr Tj , salukhe sir wagera nhi h to kisi or ko phn krdo 😉
bhai bhi na Abhi ko kuch ho jaye to inka deemag to bilkul bhi nhi chlta 😆

nd in more scene wn Rahul said 'thandey paani ki patiyan lgao'
nd wt Daya said 'kahan ??' 🤣
Bhai apne peit pe lgao...thandak milegi or accha feel kroge 😆

Daya's irritation i undrstand dt...bt Rahul also right ...Daya-Rahul jhgda hmmm nice part it was 😊
Bt Daya sir bhi na kuch bhi bol diya ...
wt Daya told to Abhi y he is so tensed for him is realy so funny 'han to pehle kbhi bukhar nhi hua...tum seedha coma mein chle jate the ' 🤣🤣
i mean kmaal h yr...reasn diya bhi to kya 🤣

Aman n Abhijeet Convo..it was fantastic👏
Aman realy said a great things 😊
nd nd nd last part Abhi thinking ... aahaa just too gud 👏👏
so lovely , cute n sweet story where Daya sir nt using his brain 😆

New story 😃.. Will read it soon Dada👍🏼.

Finally finished reading your story... The idea was amazing... Actually what Daya sir must have thought after Abhijeet sir fiasco?? His concern shape up the bond they share today... I always thought if it would have been anybody else then Adi sir I wouldn't be so much hooked up to CID, Though I use to like Ashutosh as Viren but Adi sir's entry got a human touch to CID especially with respect to Daya sir and their friendship.

Coming to your story... Reading experience was awesome... I liked the emotions you portrayed... The last part loved the way you showed years... Loved Rahul characterization... The way you portrayed Daya sir's concern towards Abhijeet sir... His transition from Abhijeet sir to Abhijeet and sometimes Abhi, transition from boss to yaar... Loved it

Though I felt there was too much of crying for Daya sir... For me Daya sir always was a strong man with soft heart... But I don't expect him to cry so often... You would have shown him disturbed, that's okay but not crying yaar... I mean that's what I feel No Offence Meant haan... (But anyways it's a fan fiction what Daya sir is for me he can be different for you)

No complaints jus for your knowledge, you mentioned about Disney hour and Tom and Jerry... GD Tom and Jerry is Warner Brothers production while Disney is Walt Disney production so Disney hour can never features Tom and Jerry (Even though I loved the conversation regarding Tom and Jerry between Abhi-Daya)

P.S You mentioned Abhijeet sir Hug Daya sir after Abhijeet sir's mother's demise... I wish there is one scene atleast where duo actually hug each other... In 16 years span they haven't done it even once. I was expecting it during Beehropiya but it never happened.. Koi FW se kaho ek baar ek hug toh dilwa de

17520 hours...maths kharab hai mera...

No PM this time GD? I might have missed it then..

super duper as always😆

Originally posted by: neha_dna

Ah Lovely Story GD 👏⭐️

Jo FW ne khaali chhod diye thay, un spaces ko tumne bohot hi khoobsoorti se bhar diya!!!

Padh ke bohot achha laga... A very nice story GD!!!

Thank you so much for writing this 🤗