Index:Page1,OS: Young Love (NI)-127,Our Miss Daggers(P)-125 - Page 60

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As many of you must have read in my last story, (If you haven't , there's still time :P) brought in Survi as a forensic doctor and she will remain so in most of my stories.

Raghu hummed a soft tune to himself as he got ready for office. His business, one of the most successful in the field of agricultural resources, was now funded by major organisations and there was a meeting with a potential investor today. He hastily climbed down the stairs and started his car to leave as his mobile rang, and the conversation drenching him in sweat.

He pressed the accelerator as hard as he could in the heavily crowded roads as neared R.K.Hospital. In no time he was in the lift and later on in the reception. He asked crisply and his voice drowned in his dismay as he asked for "Ms.Goel", his sister ,whom the caller claimed to have been admitted in the hospital. He couldn't have contacted her as she was a mere girl of 10, away on a school trip.It was surprising to many that he had such a young sister but she was the apple of his eye.

The receptionist smiled through heavily made up face and replied that no one of that name was admitted in the hospital.

Raghu literally punched the lift button when he realised someone had take on him on a wild goose chase .By the time he reached the ground floor, the clocks turned to 11:59 and the meeting was at 12.He sighed in frustration as he was already late for the meeting and hoped that the guy who pranked him was counting on his fate to be saved.The clock struck twelve and Raghu's face contorted in unexplicable pain as crumbled in a heap in the hospital. Somewhere far away, the sirens blared.

Abhijeet shook his head in disappointment at the dismally low pulse quietening under his fingers.

Abhi:Daya yeh toh mar chukka hai.Isne kalaayi kat li hai.

Daya:Haan par aascharya ki baat yeh hai hume aas paas aisi koi cheez nahi mile jisse woh kalaayi kaata ho.Aur waise bhi hospital pe aake khudkhushi karne ki maksat hi kya ho sakta hai? Ghar pe bhi toh ...

Freddy:Haan sir yeh baat bhi toh hai. Shaayad woh hospital main koi baat sun li ho jisse woh zindagi se pareshaan ho gaya.Ab yeh lo watchman aa raha hai.

Abhi: Yahaan aao aur batao is aadmi ko tumne aaj dekha hai kya?

Watchman:Haan sir , abhi paanch minute pehle toh hi aaye the.Bohot pareshaani main the.

Daya:Haan kya? (To the staff)Kisi aurne dekha hai ise?

Receptionist: Jee sir maine dekha (with fake accent).Ye abhi Ms.Goel naam ke ladki ko dhoondte aaye the.

Freddy:Kaun hai yeh Ms.Goel? Pata hai aapko?

Receptionist:Jee nahi sir.Is naam ka koi bhi admit nahi hua hai.Par haan , ye apne par bata rahe ki "Raj , meri behen hospital main nahi hai".

Abhi:Dekho iske call log main bhi isne kisi Raj ko phone kiya hai.Hain, ab yeh kaun call kar raha hai?

On phone: Sir aap kahaan reh gaye? Client bohot naraaz ho rahe hai , ab chale na jaaye.

Abhi::Yeh kaun bol raha hai?

: Sir main Jay, Raghu ji ki company ki manager.

Somewhere in the leather infused scents lingering in the boutique, Mira gasped in wonder as she saw a pink diamond encrusted watch in the showcase .As she strapped it on her hand, she set to admire it and somewhere close by the clock struck three and by the third chime , Mira collapsed and the delicate glass of the watch , broke into a million pieces.

Purvi:Sir ye dekhiye, iski kalaayi bhi usi tarah kaati gayi hai jaise ki Raghu ji ki.Par iske haath main do do watch hai.Kaunse iske hai?

The Owner:Ye white watch toh inka hai.Ye humaari sabse mehangi watch tod di.

Abhi:Sharam nahi aati aapko? Yahaan pe ek aurat mari pad hai aur aapko apne paise ki lagi hai.(Phone rings) Haan Daya? Oh! Teekh hai.Aur ek ghante main aate hai.

Purvi:Kya hua sir?

Abhi:Woh Daya ne bataaya ki Raghu ji ek choti behen hai jo ab school main padhti hai.Par ek do din se woh kahinn di,khaayi nahi de rahi.

Sachin :Sir ye dekhiye, inke purse main 50,000 ka cash waise ki waise hi padha hai ar inke ek bhi ID proof nahi.Bilkul Raghu ji ki tarah.

Abhi:Haan Sachin iska matlab ek hi ho sakta hai, ya toh woh khooni iski pehchaan chupaana chahta ho, jo mujhe thoda hajam nahi ho raha hai, ya toh log hi kuch galat kaam main phase hue ho.

Purvi : Sir aur ek baat hai.Yeh khooni paise ke liye chori nahi kar raha hai aur ye khoon dekhte dekhte hi hua hai.Matlab shaayad inke body main...

Sachin:Haan sir mujhe hi waise hi lagta hai.

Abhi:Dekhte hai .Forensic lab ko laash bhijvaane ka intezaam karo.

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Daya: Arre Abhijeet, aaj kal toh tumhe forensic lab jaane se chehra hi khil jaata hai...

Abhi:Daya, aisi koi baat hi nahi.Main toh bas ek puraane joke ko...

Daya:Jhoot bolna bhi nahi aata teekh se .Par sach main , main tumhaare liye aur Survi ke liye bohot khush yaar.Baat kuch aage badhi?

Abhi:Ab tak to maine kuch nahi kahaa hai Daya.Waise bhi itne saal ho gaye, ab main kaise ..

Daya:Chinta mat karo.Agar meri help chahiye to bolo.

Abhi:Haan ab chalo , chalte hai .Doctor saab bulaaye hai...

Daya: Mocks surprise and sings Dil pukaare , aa re aa re aa ree...Abhijeet gives him a friendly punch in the stomach and says "Bohot ho gaya chal abhi".

*****

At the lab:

Freddy:Sir hum sab ko laga ki ye khoon bohot hi planning ke saath ki gayi hai kyunki hatyaar toh aas paas mila hi nahi .Ye toh iktafaak to nahi ho sakta na sar... Turns back- Ab ye lo Abhijeet sir aur Daya sir bhi aa gaye.

Salunkhe:Aao Abhijeet aao.

Abhi:Sir woh ...kuch ...

Salunkhe:Mere dost jo poochne hai seedhe se poocho na ..Survi abhi ghar chali gayi post mortem karke.Uski tabiyat kuch teekh nahi lag raha tha.

Abhi:Oh ! Main ek minute main aata hoon.

Salunkhe:Ye kuch zyaada hi phasa hai (smiles). Freddy, tum bilkul teekh keh rahe the . Inki maut ki itni planning ki gayi hai ..ki main kya batao? Pehle jab humne baahar se body ko dekha, hume bhi laga ki kalaayi ki ek bohot hi naazuk nerve ko kat liye hai .Par nazdeek se dekhe toh pata chala ki ye nerve andar se kati gayi hai.

Daya:Andar se ? Ye kaise mumkin hai sir?

Salunkhe: Hua toh wahi hai Daya.Oh Abhijeet bhi aa gaya.Haal chaal poocha tumne?

Abhi:Haan sir woh toh (Gives an embarrassed smile)

Salunkhe:Teekh hai ...Main kya keh raha tha? Haan ye scan karna ke baad pata chala ki iske body main choti se che chips lagayi gayi hai.Waise aapne watch ke baare main ek baat notice ki?

Freddy:Haan sir tabhi se ruk gayi hai.

Daya:Arre waah Freddy ! Tum bhi dinbadin itne smart ho rahe ki kya pata , ek din tum bhi Sr.Inspector ban jao.

Freddy straightens up and dusts his collars.Duo stifle a smile.

Salunkhe:Bilkul sahi kaha tumne Freddy.Ye kuch aise hua . Ye chips jo hai, unka bhi sim card jaisa kuch sensor hai .Isko activate karne se inka hi ek magnetic field induce hota hai. In watches ke saath bhi aise ched chaad ki gayi hai inki crystal paramagnetic hai aur iski back casing ek khaas daur ki plastic se bani hai.Jab ye sensors ko kisine activate kiya, woh crystal plastic ko thod ka force se baahar aaya aur kalayi ko kaat di.Abhi bhi shaayad kahi andar phasa hua hai. Ye sensors ki design bhi kamala ke hai.

Abhi:Aisi kya khaas baat hai sir?

Salunkhe: Aap logon pata hi hai ki kalaayi ke andar ke ek hi nerve kat jaane se maut tak ho jaati hai, par woh nerve kalaayi ke teek beech main nahi hota.Inki sensors jo magnetic field induce karte hai, sab alag strengths ki hai, taaki ye deflection exactly wahaan pe jaaye.

Freddy:Baap re kitna dhimaag lagaaya hai isne!

Daya:Haan sir, ye kaam hone main itne saare log involve hue honge.Ghar ka koi, doctor , scientists, watchmaker.Asaan nahi hai ye.

Abhi:Sir humaare liye koi leads mila?.

Salunkhe:Dekho, fingerprints jaisa toh kuch bhi nahi hai. Par ye watch ko jis kisine bhi repair kiya hai, woh bohot hi khaas kaarigar hai.Aur ye sensors aur crystal se bhi kuch kaam chala sakte ho.

Daya:Jee sir.

*****

Sachin and Freddy go around asking the watchmakers if they have made the watch or if they know anyone who is capable of such work.And at one place, they suggest that this certainly should be the work of a certain Niranjan.

Some 1.2 km away, Niranjan, a youth of 30 , came to his workshop and smiled in self satisfaction at the piece he was making.A true beauty it was, a fine handcrafted watch with a sandalwood needle.Sometimes , he almost found it weird that the things people asked him.But for him work was worship. He picked up the sandalwood needle he had placed on the table and he failed to notice the sniggering shadow that slinked away close by.And faster than the clocks stroke, his last seconds of life ticked , noiselessly.

Sachin and Freddy drove the 1.2 kms in less than 20 mins and people were eager to direct them to Niranjan's workshop.A famous man he must have been , they thought. And as they entered, in the otherwise noiseless room, a clock ticked and the nauseating smell of fresh blood welcomed them.

Freddy:Ye kaise hua Sachin? Abhi bees minute pehle toh humne wahan se nikaala tha...itna jaldi khooni us tak pohonch gaya?

Sachin:Yahin toh mujhe bhi aascharya hua.Baad main check karte hai, ki car main ya humpe tap kar rahi koi ya koi bug lagaayi gayi hai.Ye dekho, shaayad iski maut is needle se hui hai.Zeher lag gaya haan isko.

Freddy:Ungli poora neeli pad gayi hai.

Sachin:Dekhte hai , kuch aur milta hai kya?

They search and Freddy finds a tiny emerald encrusted cufflink.Sachin however, finds no fingerprints.They arrange for the body to be sent to the forensic lab and search for bugs but finding none.

Freddy's phone rings and it happens to be his wife.And as an after thought he says how fanciful it would be if they had James Bond style watch cum phones.Some idea flashes across Sachin's mind and signals to Freddy to continue the conversation . Freddy catches the cue and removes the evidence bags and checks the watches. In both of them, in the centre is a tiny chip almost invisible to the naked eye.He pulls it out, and they continue the journey in silence.

Somewhere on the other end of the city, Purvi and ACP reach a neurosurgeons office, after following the work of one of their spies.But even after continued waiting , there seems to be no one at the office .The secretary hurries into the office and on seeing people there gets annoyed.

Sec: Bola tha na aapko, appointment lekar aao fir bhi mera sunta kaun hai?

ACP:Bakwaas band karo samjhe? Ab sasuraal jaane ka appointment doon kya?

Sec: Kyun saab? Kya kiye maine?

Purvi:Tumne nahi aapki doctor saab na do logon ki jaane li hai.

Sec:Ye ho nahi sakta sahib! Humaare doctor saab kisi ko maar nahi sakte.

ACP: Uska defence lawyer baad main banvavunga, ab batao ki woh hai kahaan?

Sec:Pata nahi sahab, ek hafte se chutti par hain.

Purvi:Khoon karke chutti bhi mana rahe hai? Chalo unki address aur photo do hume.

Sec:Photo ...ye lijiye , mere mobile main hai.

ACP:Arre ye ? Ye toh..

Purvi :Haan sir ye humne...

ACP:Abhi chalo yahaan se pata nahin aur kitne logon ki jaan khatre main hai.

Abhijeet drove his Fortuner to Survi's house after his duty was done.Pari welcomed him and said she had to go out for an extra class and the sight of Survi, pale and tired on the couch scared him.

Abhi:Survi, kaisi ho ab?

Survi:Teekh hoon Abhijeet.Kya hua hai mujhe?

Abhi: Par tum itni ghabri hui si kyun ho? Kisine kuch kaha kya? Main toh uski..

Survi: Shaant ho jao Abhijeet, waise koi baat nahi hai.Woh bas...Raghu.

Abhi:Tum Raghu ko jaanti ho?

Survi: Kaise nahi janoongi , woh toh Aakash ke bhaiya the.

Abhi:Kya? Isi wajeh se ghabra gayi thi...Kya pata hai tumhe uske bare main?

Survi:Ab taikikaat hi shuru kar diya aapne..ek min ruko main kuch banaake laati hoon.Aap toh kitne thake hue lag rahe hai.

Abhi:Arre aap takleef mat lo..

Survi:Apnon ke liye kaisi takleef?

Abhijeet bends his head before a mixed expression of shock and embarrassment comes on his face.Survi briefs him after a snack that Raghu , though a man of great status and respect in the society is a man of low moral standards. He had got into trouble many times when he had kidnapped young girls for his needs.

Survi: Woh shareefat sab ek nakaab hai. Main bas ..koi mujhe pehchaanke kuch inzaam lag gaye toh?

Abhi: Tum bilkul chinta mat karo, main tum tak ek kharoch tak nahi pohonchne doonga.

And as the evening slowly slipped into night , a comforting hand on the shoulder made two worlds meet , with silence completing the game.

Daya:Chalo Abhijeet khaana khaate hai...Maine khaaskar tumhaare liye pastries laaya hoon, dessert ke liye.Aur uske saath aloo ke parathe aur..

Abhi:Pastry mere liye rakho , baaki sab khalo.Mujhe bhook nahi hai, abhi khaake aaya main..

Daya: Kiske saath khaana khaaya? Kahin tum interrogation kisi restau...Oho Samajh gaya.Survi ji ki ghar gaye te na tum.

Abhi:Haan yaar bas aise hi..

Daya: Khaana kaisa tha? Mujhe bhi bula dete saath main haan...

Abhi:Khaana toh achcha tha..tumko... main toh aise hi gaya tha aur Survi ne

Daya: Haan boss.Privacy...

Abhi:Ab tum poora baat sunoge ki nahi..?

Daya:Arre gussa mat karo , cake khao .(And stuffs the whole piece into his mouth)

Abhijeet tells him about Raghu to which Daya says that he hacked into Raghu's laptop and fund that he had created not one but five fake Facebook profiles and in one of those accounts, Mira was his friend.And other than that, several young girls.

*******

Freddy: Sir abhi pata chala hai ki Mira ji ki account main har mahine 1lakh rupiya deposit kiya tha Raghu ne .

ACP: Itna bada rakham , aur woh bhi har mahine.Ya toh Mira use blackmail kar rahi thi ya, woh uske liye kaam karti thi.Waise koi conversation mile unke FB account se?

Freddy: Nahi sir, saari msgs delete ki gayi hai.Par Daya sir ne abhi bataaya ki Roshni naam ki ek 15 saal ki ladki ek account pe baar baar msg kar rahi hai ki kahaan pe aaon?

ACP: Ye Raghu itne gande kaam main phasa hua tha aur uske aas paas waalon ko iska ek khabar tak nahi hai.

Freddy:Daya sir ab us ladki ko bureau la rahe hai...

ACP: Teekh hai.Aur ye Abhijeet kahaan hai?

Freddy:Sir woh toh Sachin ke saath Cyber cafe gaye hai, jahaan se ye saare msgs bheje gaye hai.

Daya comes with the girl.

ACP: Baitho Roshni.Ye lo paani pi lo.

Roshni: Sir mujhe samajh main nahi aa rahi hai ki mujhe kyun bulaaya gaya hai yahaan par.

Daya:Roshni, jo aadmi ko tumne Manu samajhke baat kar rahi thi, jisse tum milne chahti thi , woh bus ek pohoncha hua aadmi hai aur uski maut ho chuki hai.

The glass of water drops from her hand.

Ye kya keh rahe hai aap?

Purvi:Baith jao ghabrao mat.Ye batao ki tum dono ke beech kya baat cheet hui?

Roshni explains to them that she was introduced to Manu by a lady named Mira.And after a month or so of contact , he asked if he could meet her out for coffee.

****

Abhijeet and Sachin find out that not Raghu, but a man named Vineet has been logging in to the profiles from the cyber cafe.They ask if he comes everyday and lay a trap for him with the help of Roshni.When Vineet arrives , they are shocked to see who it is.

Sachin:Arre tum toh wahi ho joh woh neurosurgeon ke wahaan secretary the na?

Abhi: Bohot bhole hone ka naatak kar rahe the na tum? Ye lo tumhaare liye mithai...slaps him.

Vineet confesses that he Raghu and Mira were involved in trapping young girls and sending them to Raghu.

Abhi:Sharm nahi aati tumhe? Itne choti ladkiyon ko phasaate hue?

Sachin:Ek baat batao , agar tum Raghu ke liye kaam karte the toh use hi kyon maara?

Vineet:Nahi sir main use nahi maara.Woh doctor kisi aur ke liye kaam karta hai.Aur woh jo koi bhi hai, bohot shaatir hai.Main secretary wecretary kuch nahi hoon, bas us din us doctor ko dhoondne aaya tha.Pata nahi kahaan chup gaya hai..

Abhi:Aur woh Niranjan, uska khoon bhi tumhine kiya?

Vineet:Nahi sir, maine kisi ka khoon nahi kiye hai.Mujhe bas paise chahiye the..

Abhi:Paise dhoondte raho jail main, ek sikka tak nahi milega.

*******

Abhi: Ye case ka ek hissa toh solve ho gaya.Par jis kisine bhi in dono ka khoon kiya hai, abhi tak chupa baitha hai.Aur woh doctor wahi tha, jo watch boutique ka owner tha.

Daya:Haan aur humse kab tak bhagega? Jaakar wahaan pooch taach karte hai.

Abhi: Haan aur Survi keh rahi thi ki...

ACP: Ab Survi kahaan aayi beech main?

Abhi: Sir woh yeh Raghu hai na ..woh uska ...

Daya:Brother in law hai sir.

ACP: Yaani ki woh Aakaash ki bhaiya hai? Ye baat tumne mujhse chupaayi kyun?

Abhi:Woh ab tak kuch khaas baat nahi tha sir . Ab woh keh rahi thi ki kayi saal pehle , Raghu ne ek watchmaker ke beti ko kidnap karke uska faayda uthaaya tha.Aur ladki ko lauta jaane ke baad police koi complaints bhi nahi li.Fir baad main us ladki ne aatmahatya kar lit hi.

ACP: Ab kuch kuch samajh me aa rahi hai.Bilkul ho sakta hai ki yeh saara khel racha ho?

Daya:Abhijeet, kya Survi unki naam ya chehra kuch yaad hai?

Abhi: Usko teekh se yaad nahi sir, par woh keh rahi thi ki unke ghar ke paas Shyaam naam ka ek watchmaker tha.Shaayad wahi ho.

ACP: Abhi pata lagao ye shyaam hai kahaan aur Freddy aur Purvi jaake pata karenge us watch ke boutique main.

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Daya, Abhijeet and Survi drive to the locality where she stayed earlier on.On further interrogations, they learn that Shyaam had shifted to Madhav Nagar after his daughter died. Similarly, at the watch boutique, they learn that the owner also stays in Madhav Nagar.

They both reach the destination which happens to be huge bungalow with servants quarters behind.They figure out that the owner stays at the bungalow and Shyaam stays in the quarters and works for him.As they enter, they find both of them sharing sweets.

Daya: Oho mithaayi baant rahe hai Doctor saab.Hume bhi dijiye...

Both of them run only to be caught.They both confess to the crimes and Doctor, whose name is Akshay says he was very passionate about watches and hence opened a watch boutique from his savings.Then, he heard about Shyaam who was a very skilled worker and later heard about his worries and decided to help him and hatched a plan.Both Raghu and Mira, who were stressed and afraid of being caught, were recommended to him as his patients.And one fine day as opportunity arose, he anasthesiased them and inserted the chips he had gotten prepared into their bodies. And when they had decided upon the time, they activated the chips from his home and they died.And they also confess to misleading Raghu about his sister so that it seems like the motive of his death.

Daya:Insaafi kaam toh kanoon karti hai , aap nahi. Niranjan ko bhi tumne hi maara?

Shyaam:Haan maine hi maara use.Kyunki agar woh pakda jaata , humaara raaz pardafaash ho jaati.

Abhi:Kanoon ko apne haath main uthaake teen khoon kiye hai aapne.Aapka saza toh court hi tair karegi.Tab tak minute second sab ginte rehna.

Please do read and give your honest feedback😛

Just finished reading. Story plot was good overall, but there are some bits I didn't understand. Who was that Ms Goel and was she found in the end? Am I missing something?


When cid team saw Raghu dead how did they assume it is khudkushi?


Now the survi forensic...😆 I found it a bit odd. Whether it is T or Survi...diversion of attention in the lab and Abhijeet talking to Salunkhe about it and vanishing to call her and enquire about her health is the same. I just don't want anyone within the cid team or forensic to be involved with Abhi or Daya. They can have GFs like the original Survi or Sonali...an outsider. Just my personal view. Don't be offended.

Originally posted by: visrom

Just finished reading. Story plot was good overall, but there are some bits I didn't understand. Who was that Ms Goel and was she found in the end? Am I missing something?


When cid team saw Raghu dead how did they assume it is khudkushi?


Now the survi forensic...😆 I found it a bit odd. Whether it is T or Survi...diversion of attention in the lab and Abhijeet talking to Salunkhe about it and vanishing to call her and enquire about her health is the same. I just don't want anyone within the cid team or forensic to be involved with Abhi or Daya. They can have GFs like the original Survi or Sonali...an outsider. Just my personal view. Don't be offended.

I really don't know. I wish they show a nice mature relationship. They have spoiled it beyond repair. so if there has to be a girl in either of duo's lives, it's better if it's shown offline...matlab outside the investigation scenes with someone not connected with cid team. I don't mind if someone writes a story like that.

And please. ...no dead friends wife or a lady with a kid or tragedy queens . A nice active cheerful girl.

Okay ur wish my command...a NI coming up next week :P

I enjoyed the story di, it's a complete dose of a episode and nice concept...the way u connect each event one after another is good...thanks for pm.

Originally posted by: binod.abhijeet

I enjoyed the story di, it's a complete dose of a episode and nice concept...the way u connect each event one after another is good...thanks for pm.