Adi Sir BDay STORY CONTEST -- **RESULTS on pg 16** - Page 8

Originally posted by: visrom

Arey...by now most of us know each other's style...I am sure many have guessed mine too. People are mature enough to judge the story on its own merit...not look at the writer and then give marks. 😊

Aisa kuch nahi hai Deepz! all the stories are worth reading here and each of them have Flaws I am sure. C'mon you should be sporting like always 😊

would request others to post the reviews as well :-) thanks gd n vis!

I have not yet read all the stories...

I have already read 3 stories the day they were posted...will soon write the reviews for them...
Just now read story 1 - So here is the review for the same...

Story 1 : A nice interesting case... I like the way you brought back the characters of CID + Adaalat...👏. I was actually wondering how would you connect the TV's eagle encounter with the Eagle... did Nik turn back with the the TV programme schedule ..??🤔 I think i missed that part... but then you brought in a real eagle... The story was well paced... no where I felt it was being dragged.. and you managed to put in enough duo scene though initially you said that Daya sir was on some other mission 😆

There were two things which were a little tough to digest.. . 1. keeping eagles as pet in india is illegal.. well. this is something which can be ignored.. doesn;t strike much when you enjoy the case😆 but the second one is that... Abhi sir remembers his police Academy training... Now this is something which keeps striking your mind whenever in the story Abhijeet remembers his past.. We all know he doesn;t remember anything since the accident took place and that accident took place after he joined police.

There were also two things which were very nice to read .. you didnt hurt any of the CID team members .. didn't divert from the track and kept the story crisp...interesting... well paced... maintained the suspense... concept was less complicated.. and bureau less crowded 😆👏
👏

will read and post reviews this week end. till then have to look after relatives and finish appointment with doctors. looks impressive I must say.

Story 2 - Wow... ⭐️ Wonderfully written.. You have created the suspense from line one and maintained it till the criminal is caught... 👏 Totally a Abhi sir centric story...and DEAGLE.. was wow.. 👏The background to the case was kept only to a discussion level.. like 3 rackets were solved.. and so on.. Nice style of presenting it that way.. alteast it doesn't make the story lengthy and dragging 👏


The thing was too rushy.. that was as soon as Abhi sir changed his cell Jitu comes and explains the whole plan to Raghu aka Abhi sir...You could have added some twists here.. or some stuff in between ..like Abhi sir doing something to gain their confidence and then getting information out of them..

Short Circuit camera.. 😆 For a minute even I was like if the full form is Short Circuit then why is it called CC camera 😆 I literally googled and realized that its Closed Circuit... 😛
Well... All in all ..it was a wonderfully written story.. with suspense .. action... and a bit of drama and emotion too 😊 Great Job 👏

Only one person has sent in Marks to me ! What about others??