ENCRYPT/DECRYPT (STORY for CONTEST)...!!! - Page 6

Originally posted by: shreela

Wow! I was waiting for this GD!😃 again an awesome treat for us. 👏👏👏 thank u so much!😃😃

Originally posted by: Shruti_HR

@Dada - Aap ke sare attempts best hote hain. You're the best pyare dada 🤗

Originally posted by: gadhadada

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hey first you must atleast read before commenting...

its highly great story yaar.....

Originally posted by: Padmpriya

PADMA its READER point of VIEW and everyone has HIS/HER own perspective... plz dunt HURT and comment on anyone FEEDBACK...😃

buri baat hay na baccha...!!!😳

Originally posted by: Padmpriya

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dada!!!! superb story...lovely expressed every feelings...

i felt it infornt of my eyes...

great job...keep it up wid ur lovely creations...👏

its for you DADA!!!!!

Originally posted by: debasree04

I am giving very honest feedback which i felt at the time of reading...

thank U for ur honest feedback DEBA...👍🏼👏

After a long time i read your story (i think last one was of Daya Sir's Birthday contest)...little disappointed...last one is better than this one...

absolutely correct...😃

As a reader i am requesting you please don't use SMS LANGUAGE in the story & if possible then please use proper sentence either in Hindi or in English...both of it will certainly enhance your writing...this is just my suggestion...actually i don't understand few sentences clearly because of these mixtures...and one more try to use only one tense either Present or Past...

yaar mostly i m not using SMS language but might be possible😲 ... haan i m trying to eliminate that uppercase thing😡... so sorry for all these...👎🏼

Now come to the plot...if it is your first story then i will certainly say it is wonderful but i am sorry i cant say it...there is no fresh element...same sequences followed as in other story of yours like Daya injured--he tried to hide himself---Abhijeet was with him---ACP didn't know & after that realized they must be together---Daya did something wrong with DCP or DIG...don't you think all these are very common factor of your story ??? Don't misunderstand me...If you remember then i am that person who became active member just to comment on your story...I am sorry but I missed that GD...You have lots of potential to write a much better story than this...

here u are also right👍🏼... there is no fresh element except the title😆... and abt the confusion n length😕... buht saari mazrut...😔

You did lots of research for this story but those things are not able to enhance the story...some point it became more complicated & confused the reader...
I don't understand why Daya sir did those things with DCP sir...
I didn't impress with what you did with Code name Banjara or Col Banjara...

i m also not impressed with MYSELF wat i was doing😆... so sorry again...

"SALUNKHY cumes and pierced a NEEDLE on his NERVE"--------------- I don't understand how can a needle pierce a nerve ?? I mean it can be a blood vessel but nerve 😕

"DAKSH was KILLED by ACP as HE was a TRAITER in CID at 2007 " -----Totally wrong...Daksh was not killed by ACP sir...ACP sir shot him & Daksh admitted in the hospital...Nakul killed him as Daksh leaked some secret information to Nakul...And this incident occurred in 2005 not in 2007...

thank U for correcting me...😃

I am waiting for a dhamaka from you...all the best for that one !!!

thank U for ur wish but to be honest dunt waste ur time for any dhamaka from my side...

DEBA buht saari MAZRUT kay aur tumhara by had SHUKRIYA..!!!😃😃