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gadhadada

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Posted: 13 years ago

#91

Oh Man... Still Incomplete😲.😲... I m waiting n Waiting n Waiting kay kub Tumhari Story Complete ho???

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143CID-Abhi

@143CID-Abhi

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Posted: 13 years ago

#92

aww man we've been waiting forever for you to update and u write such a small chapter. Next time please make a longer update. The story is really good btw

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ramarathore

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Posted: 13 years ago

#93

NEXT PART-

(DAYA,FREDDY AND SACHIN arrive at their location.AS Soon as they step out of the they sees ajay who was talking to someone on phone.IN FRONT of a building.SACHIN calls him,ajay sees them nd then enters in the building.)

SACHIN-sir ye hume dekhke bhaag kyun raha hai...

DAYA-pata nahi sachin picha ker ke dekhte hai...

(all of them enter the building they follow ajay through stairs.BUT suddenly ajay vashines from their they decide to go till the top.as soon as they enter the terrace they found a man lying their his head was bleading badly.DAYA nd others turn that men.ND what they saw was UNBELEIVABLE!!!!!(srry for the spellings)

DAYA(instantly call)-ABHI!!...

FREDDY nd SACHIN-ABHIJEET SIR!!!!!

(daya tries to make him concius but he doesn't respond)

sachin-ho sakta hai sir ki ye koi behrupiya ho...

DAYA EYES him angrily.BUT he knows that what he was telling can be the truth.BUT DAYA's heart says that it's his abhijeet only.

DAYA controls his emotions nd says...

DAYA-main ABHI i mean...iss aadmi ko hospital leke jata huin main wahape DR.salunkhe ko bhi bula lunga wohi batayenge ye kaun hai...daya's eyes are filled with tears seeing abhijeeet he again controls himself nd tell's to others- tum log ajay ko dhundhne ki koshish karo ho sakta hai woh yahi kahin ho aur uski jaan ko bhi khatra ho...he then picks up that man nd goes...

(DAYA with the man arrives at the bottom of the building he places the man in the car nd then goes to driving seat.HE turn's the A.C on.ND within few seconds becomes unconcius.)

HERE freddy who was at the terrace sees 5-6 men carrying DAYA nd abhijeet with them he shouts

fraddy-hey cho do unhe...

they turns towrds him nd two of them who were free starts shooting by then sachin also comes nd sees this he too starts shooting...

AT this time the other goons places abhijeet nd DAYA in the car nd starts the vehicle...

FRDDY nd sACHIN came down as early as possible but all goes in vain one of the kidnappers who was firring was dead nd the others were left...

FRDDY-damn sir hum kuch bhi nahi karpaye...

SACHIN-iss gadi ka no.plate bhi gayab tha warna ussi se kuch pata chaljata...

FREDDY-sir ek kaam karte hain building achi tarahe chaan marte hain ho sakta hai yeh inka adda ho...kuch na kuch jaroor milega...

SACHIN-thik hai freddy...nahi pehle ek kaam karte hain ACP sir ko phone karke sub kuch bata dtee hain...he tries to call ACP sir but his phone was switched off...

SACHIn-ACP sir ka phone to band aa raha hai...

FREDDY-kya lekin ACP sir to apna phone kabhi band nahi rakhte...ho sakta hai battery low ho gayi ho sir aap vivek,kajal ya phir purvi mein se kisi ko karke dekhiye na...

SACHIN-haan good idea...vivek ko karke dekhta hoon...he calls vivek nd he picks up the phone...

SACHIN-vivek tum log kahanper ho...aur ACP sir ka mobile switch off kyun aa raha hai...

VIVEK-sir hum log to beureu mein hain aur ACP sir ko to unke kisi informer ka phone aaya tha to wo wahan chale gaye...sir aap logo ko kuch mila...

SACHIN tells him everything what happened...

vivek-KYA!!!!sir lekin daya sir aur abhijeet sir yaha phir unki tarah dikhne wala uss aadmi kidnap koi kyun karega...

HERE salunkhe was at the door step he heard every thing nd then says...

DR.-vivek wo jo khoon tum log laye the wo abhijeet ka hai...lekin wo laash(he put's his head down n says)-wo ABHIJEET KI nahi hai...maine tum logo se jhoot bola tha...

SACHIN AND FREDDY had also heard this as they were still on phone nd sachin has kept the phone on speaker...

EVERYBODY-KYA!!!!!!

KAJAL-sir apne humse itna bada jhooth kyun bola...

DR.main majboor tha kajal...main nahi aur kuch jaanta aur naahi tumhhe aur kuch batana chahta hoon bus itna samajlo ki abhijeet jinda hai...

(everybody had a mixed expression on their faces they were happy that their ABHIJEET sir is alive but now the fact that he nd daya has been kidnapped was a big problem for them...nd now ACP sir's phone also switched off.AT last sachin spoke nd break the silence...

SACHIN-vivek tum ek kaam karo sub ko lekar main tumhe ek address mssge kar raha hoon wahan aa jao...

VIVEK-yes sir...

DR.main bhi chalta hoon tum logo ke saath...

(vivek nd others arrived at the place where sachin had called him.THEY found freddy nd sachin outside the building nd goes to them.)

SACHIN-thik hai to phir pehle hum iss building ko achi tarah se chaan maarta hai ho sakta hai un kidnappers ke bareme kuch pata chal jaye...freddy tum mobile company walo ko phone karo aur unse pucho ki ACP sir ka mobile switch off hone se pehle kahan tha...as soon as freddy was going to call mobile company he got a call from an unknown no.he received it nd

CALLER-sahab main mangu bol raha hun sahab main abhijeet sahab ka informer hun sahab...

FREDDY-haan bolo...lekin tumne mujhe kyun phone kyun kiya...aur tumhare pass mera no.kahase aaya...

MANGU-sahab mujhe aapka aur baaki subka no.ABHIJEET sahab ne diya tha aur kaha tha ki agar kabhi mera no. nahi lage ya kuch aur baat ho to in mese kisi no. per hone karlena ...sahab merre paas ek bahut bari khabar hai sahab...

FREDDY kept the phone on speaker so that others can also hear...

FREDDY-haan batao...

MANGU-sahab wo aap ke ACP sir ko kisine kidnap karliya hai...

EVERYBODY-kya!!!!!

MANGU-haan sahab,sahab maine apni aakhoein(eyes) se dekha sahab...wo kisi aadmi se baat kar rahe the aur achanak se aadmi pichese aaya aur unke sir(head) pe mara,sahab main to usi samai wahanse nikaliya sahab...phir daya sir ko phone kia to unhone uthaya hi nahi...

SACHIN-tum jhooth tou nahi bol rahe ho naa...

MANGU-kaya sahab apun ABHIJEET sahab ka itne saalo se informer hai sahab jhooth kyun bolegA...

PURVI-kahi tum paise ke liye to nahi...

MANGU-nahi madam,apun aisa aadmi nahi hai..aur haan apun ke paas un logo ke bare ek aur khabar hai par apun abhi bata nahi sakta...

FREDDY-KYUN!!!!

MANGU-kaya sahab apna bhi dhandha hai sahab kal sahab raat ko batayega apun...

FREDDY-chal thik hai kahan aana hai...

MANGU-sahab woh apun aap ko baadme batata hai...

abhi apun ko jana hoga sahab...

(nd the call get's cut every body is in tension now first they thought they atleast have ACP sir but now they came to know that he is also kidnapped.)

DR.-ab ye sub chodo ak kaam karte building check karte hain ho sakta hai kuch mil jaaye.chalo...

(every body starts searching the building but they were not able to found anything.NOW all of them were exhausted nd returns to beureu.)

Edited by ramarathore - 13 years ago

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GIRL_SHERLOCK

@GIRL_SHERLOCK

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Posted: 13 years ago

#94

The Story is getting very interesting.
Please complete it fast.

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143CID-Abhi

@143CID-Abhi

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Posted: 13 years ago

#95

omg its getting intresting and thanks for updating quickly
please update the rest

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Soniya..Shapath

@Soniya..Shapath

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Posted: 13 years ago

#96

its going intresting plz update soon

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ramarathore

@ramarathore

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Posted: 13 years ago

#97

continued...

(THE TEAM except ACP,ABHIJEET nd DAYA reaches beureu.they all were very quiet missing their seniors.THEY hve not ever dealt with type situtions alone.WHERE they don't any of their seniors in such critical conditions.AT this moment salunkhe took the charge.)

DR.-arre dekho tum log pareshaan mat ho sub kuch thik ho jayega aur waisebhi ACP,ABHIJEET or DAYA se to maut bhi darke bhaag jaati hai phir ye kidnappers kya cheezz hain.

FREDDY(in teary tone)-sir hum log kuch bhi nahi karpaye...woh log humare saamne ABHIJEET sir aur DAYA sir ko kidnap karke le gaye.

DR.-arre freddy lekin...

SACHIN-sir freddy bilkul sahi keh raha hai...hum to apne abhijeet sir ko tak nahi pehchaan paye the...

DR.(controlling the situation)-acha chalo ab sub log apne apne ghar jaao kal baat karte hain...aur haan kal beureu 10 baje tak aa jana...thik hai...

EVERYBODY-thik hai sir...

(every body says good night to eachother nd leaves.)

(salunkhe sits in his car nd thinks..)

DR.-mujhe ussi din abhijeet se pooch lena chahiye tha ki aakhir uske dimagh mein chal kya raha hai...ek number ka pagal hai wo...pehle mujhe kaha ki main us laash ko uski laash bata doon aur phir khud hi saamne aa gaya...)

(HE still in his thoughts drove the car towards his house)

(a dark,big room where trio is kept.A man is seating in front of trio with a gun in his hand.TRIO is still unconcious.)

BOSS(to his men)-arre dekh chintoo ajj CID ke teen subse jabaz,cid ki shaan kaha jata hai jinhe aaj wo teeno mere saamne babus pade hain...ajj mera boss se kia hua waada pura ho gaya ab ye teeno marenge mere haatho...aaj to bada maza aayega...

CHINTOO-boss lekin inhe to hosh hi nahi aaya ab tak...

BOSS-to laa na inhe hosh mein maar paani inpe...

(CHINTOO throw water on them.ACP nd DAYA regain conciusness but ABHIJEET was still unconcious.)

ACP-aah!!!mera sir mein yahan kaise...(he then looks around nd sees daya)

ACP-DAYA tum to wahan...

BOSS(interrupting)-arre ACP tum to yahan aake bhi apni investigation mein lag gaye...

DAYA-kaun ho tum aur hume yahan kyun laaye ho...

BOSS-are are inspector DAYA aap to bilkull AbHIJEET KI tarah sawal puchte ho waise chalo main tumhe tumhare dost se milwa hi deta hun wo dekho apne ACP ke side mein tumhara dost...

(ACP nd DAYA looks at their side nd saw ABHIJEET.DAYA was not much shocked as he had met him but he had a doubt that WHETHER he was really abhijjeet or not while ACP seeing ABHIJEET was VERY much shocked.

ACP-lekin...lekin salunkhe ne to kaha tha ki woh laash...

BOSS(IN anger standing from his chair nd coming towards trio)-woh...woh laash mere bhai ki thi jise tumhare iss ABHIJEET(pointing towards abhijeet nd pointiong gun at his head)

ne maut ke mooh me daal dia tha.isse to mai...(boss slaps abhijeet harder nd then again goes to his seat.)

ACP-to phir salunkhe ne...he looks at abhijeet some precious tears comes in his eyes...he bows his head and after few minutes he again looks up straight...smiling...

BOSS-aye ACP yahan maut ke mooh me reh ker bhi tujhe hasi aa rahi hai...APNI maut se dar nahi lagta kya tujhe...hain.,

ACP(now his smile turned into a big laugh)-are maut ke mooh me main nahi tum ho...maut se dar mujhe nahi tumhe lagna chahiye...

BOSS-aye ACP chup...ye hasna band kar sub kehte the tu bada pagal hai par ab saabit ho chuka...

(at that moment many things happened simmutaneously ABHIJEET nd DAYA got up from their seats DAYA knocked out the terrorists that were beside him nd ACP sir while ABHIJEET took the gun of the BOSS nd pointed it on the boss head nd said.)

ABHIJEET(to the boss)-ab main tujhe bataunga ki dar kise kehte hai aur pagal pan kise...

ABHIJEET looked at DAYA nd then ACP he looks at their watery eyes nd smiles then he got back to his bussiness...

ABHIJEET(to other kidnappers)-apni apni gun tumhe niche kar leni chahiye (at that time boss tries to escape from abhijeet's grip but abhijeet again gets back hold of him nd hits on his head with the gun nd boss becomes unconciuos while because of this DAYA's concentration on others also became loose nd others put's their guns up to shoot when ACP got himself free nd shoot one of them ,DAYA takes care of the three nd ABHIJEET shoots on the other's hand nd DAYA makes them unconcius...ABHIJEET put's the unconcious body of the boss down nd turns to meet the eyes of ACP nd DAYA which had now became fiery in anger...)

ABHIJEET(clears his throat nd says in a little hesitation)-to chale sir...

ACP nd DAYA moves forward while ABHIJEET at the back releases a sigh of releif nd then smiles...)

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143CID-Abhi

@143CID-Abhi

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Posted: 13 years ago

#98

thats it? please make longer updates btw is the story finished??

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ramarathore

@ramarathore

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Posted: 13 years ago

#99

I'm sorry for small updates but i am updating through mobile so it's really hard to update big chapters.ND no no the story is not over yet nd i will post all the chapters together for ur convenience nd will complete the story as soon as possible.ND plsplsplspls review.

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Nicole DashWoods

@NicoleWoods

Beginner

Posted: 13 years ago

#100

Nice work...really have the potential but i do have a confusion.

earlier in the story, ( when the team finds abhijeet's car wreck), it's said that the person who found the wreck found a cid badge, ID card and that's how he contacted the bureau, right! (scene 10, if i'm not mistaken)

and later when salunke answers the call from some doctor, we hear that the doc found only a cid badge with the deceased person which made him contact the cid.

so how does this all fit ! ...sorry if this is a misunderstanding on my part but my hindi hasn't become fluent yet

Edited by NicoleWoods - 13 years ago