STORY - Khooni Building(completed) - Page 6

@Viz I forgot to metion I like Freddie's Car-Airport clue.

nice story...simple and beautiful....
Loved the start, 'the coat' everyone hates it!
The plot was nice and the characterisation too....i prefer to have some more drama in scenes...anyway not a khooni story at all... 😆

Thx fr liking. Bhav, you hit like to Prabha's post, but no feedbk???

Visrom Just finished reading it !!

Ok coming to your statement that it might be similar to any SS or NK creation is wrong !!!! If it would have been similar to them then there would've been atleast 3 laashes and 1 kabar !!!

Anyways I really liked the way you handled the plot !! The plot was decent with no over taam jhaam !! Nicely handled !! Something that can never be done by SS or NK !!
When I read upto the victims wife's confession for a second I thought story over ?? then I saw it wasn't the end as yet !!!

Now the fake bullet idea was nice and I really liked that Freddy giving Airport clue part !! Well you had the newcomers but still managed to keep them away !!! Thank you for that !!

So finally it's proved that your story is nowhere near to NK+SS combination !!! Your story even after being a khoon story was nice to read and with suspense being maintained till the end !!

So👏 for you !!! Indeed a very nice effort !! Really a very nice story to read !!

Suspense. wow. Twist. Liked it. you handled khooni story in very good way. 👏. All logics crystal clear. Enjoyed reading it.

the story has all potentials to turn out a good episode .

visrom
the main part i mostly liked is d twist which took in deepa case 1st thought of deepa which took fully to concentrate on her den sudddden twist ke woh fire uske baad pata chale ki bulleet nakli hai mind blowing yaar.👏👍🏼
👏keep it up

visrom actually to say accha stry hai lekin phele sayaad tumhara stry kuch ka naam kuch coat wala case if m not wron
bt not to say wrong ur r good at the story plotting but
as sony style u also stated with conversation with out topic n went out n contected very nicely which sony misses most probably
par pata nahi phele ke stries se ke tarah nahi kyun ki kuch toh missing hai pata nahi kya mujhe aisa lagtha hi
srry if any wrng written by me
last but not least ur story was nice andvery well executed

Nishal, thx fr ur honest opinion. What was missing was focus fm my side. I started one month bk, wrote half, then got busy and it was lying there. I 4got what I wanted 2 write, the flow was lost. :-)