CID stories : By CHINNU - Page 14

I can understand that chinnu i know he is flirter never leave even kidnaper girl..but still he is shy also...this is the magic of his charector.but still as a writer what you felt is more importanat.at a same time you must consider his eatch traits of personality and attitude next time...eak bolu ye FW wale to charector puri tarah se spoil karate hein.ye koi badi baat nahi hein...lekin atleat hame apane taraf se ye koshish kare k charector ko hum puri tarah se jo dikhaya hein jo hein waise picturised kare...i hope you understand.

@chinnu------

wow 2nd part of Target Abhijeet. Will read it later tonight.
then will review it.

Great story Chinnu di.... Just finished Reading Part 2.... Your stories are getting better and better....!

thanks buddy.
Thanks for the comments everyone.

Chinnu Di... Once again u rock Ur story is superb n awesome. <3 this story very much. The description was really good. It seems that u r a professional writer...👏

Wow Chinnu !! I'm spell bound !! You're description is just so beautiful !!! Wow !! I mean I'm just speechless by the way you described each and every scene !!! Who says CID stories in English don't connect with us ?? They connect with us beautifully !! This story is definitely one I'll never forget !!! I don't want to go into details about that kiss on forehead scene and all because even though I wouldn't want Abhi sir to do that but still you've described that so beautifully !!! Daya sir again was very very sweet re !! I could actually see that in front of my eyes when Daya sir was hit by the bullet and the team reacting to it !!!

Most Importantly 👏 for your description !!! The nearly last scene from Devika being hit by the bullet to her taking her last breath and dying has been described in such a lovely way !! It touched my heart directly !! I got so involved with your story !! Seriously Chinnu you're a lovely story writer re !!! I don't want to get into the details !! Just want to enjoy your description as it has created a place in my mind and I really don't want to forget it !!

One more thing !! The last scene between Abhi-Daya is also very nice re !! I could see Daya sir saying the last line to Abhijeet !!! You've really shown language is never a barrier !! keep it up sweety !!! Would love to review each and every scene in detail once I read both the parts together !!!

read it. Ok just focusing on points and parts which I focused while reading😉. you created suspense at end of first part and saved Abhijeet in unexpected way (atleast I was not expecting), so I love when someone beat my imagination. Then story was fluent, leaving aside few scenes I liked flow. Daya in hospital 😒.

Your narration is marvelous. 👏. full points on that. excellent. story wise somewhat on expected terms but build up of story was very good.
With every story you are taking one step ahead. good going. 👍🏼

thank you so much sunny. Was waiting for your comments.