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Jessica

@jessicad

Rocker

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Posted: 12 years ago

#131

I'm on my phone actually and I hate using my phone for IF. Its too slow :(

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Kalyaani B Rao

@Kalyaani

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#132

Originally posted by: SamiyaIPKKND
I am here

Abbu is asking abt you guys

Hey Sami, salaam to your dad, how is he doing?

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RasgullaSP

@Rasgulla_sp

Trailblazer

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#133

Kahan gaye sab??? Is the tone and writing and characters even similar to what I wrote last?

K write PoL tomo. Take break. You can use your Sun for Mistake then. Readers have lots of hopes from you

Sami what is ur father asking abt us?

Soni chai bana aur padh ke review de

Jess salam and khuda hafiz together?

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Samiya

@SamiyaIPKKND

Inactive

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#134

Originally posted by: asrcraze

Sami...🤗

we've been waiting all day for you !!

What's he asking ??

Who called me... Saiyu called me and i had to explain how i knkw you guys

He wants to read my ffs... Kill me now

I dodged his question

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Samiya

@SamiyaIPKKND

Inactive

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#135

Saiyu i am so busy... Abbu and apu infront of me

I will read and review later

Bye guys

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Kalyaani B Rao

@Kalyaani

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#136

Saiyu, apart from a few typos, this is good. It can get better (ignore if you want to I will not mind) their meeting needs a few more lines, I felt it could do with a little more. NK wanting Lavanya to be J is too abrupt as well, unless you want to add to it later or maybe here. Also more on why Arnav dislikes Lucknow, not just the Chacha angle, maybe because of the inviting and friendly culture, he dislikes the place more.

This idea can be a SS and for about 8 to 10 parts, think about it,

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RasgullaSP

@Rasgulla_sp

Trailblazer

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Posted: 12 years ago

#137

Of course K noted.

The thing is I have not planned anything for this. I just type whatever that comes to my mind. I tried typing even this because these guys asked me to. I don't even know again what more can I add to this story.

Isn't the entire getting kicked out of the house, sister wedding cancelled, parents death enough to hate Lucknow?

Sami you read later. Bye