SwaRon TS: Raising the SummerTemperature [Final Part Pg4]

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i_yatharthk

@i_yatharthk

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#31

you have fifty shades trilogy right?

uski clear zalak dikh rahi hai isme...

jo bhi hai bohot badhiya likha hai...

cologne spray wala part was very nice in the last as well as this part...

keep on writing yaar

do publish your work one day...waiting for it...you will definitely rock it...

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bhavika

@BhaviJas

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#32

Amazing it was like really m all red now...
Do write such stuff frequently 😛

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Amy

@Amy21

Navigator

Posted: 10 years ago

#33

Awesome indeed u raised the temperature

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athi_vrushan

@athi_vrushan

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#34

the second update is here

nice update

swaron shocked to find each other at the same

holiday spot

jealous swayam and sharon were a treat to read

swayams jealousy went soo high manh!

swayam after hearing sharons confession

was still concerned abt his

colonge spray

swayam came there to

find sharon...

even swayam loves sharon

but being the extrovert he is

his way of confessing was way too different

the last para was the highlight

thnx 4 d pm

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rosy kohli

@rosyrkohli

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#35

Rese 🤪
finally i m back in my senses
after reading such a chapter
which was a dangerous mix of spice n sexyness
u encompased sensory perception into prose
so readers don't end up with one-dimensional side.😆
wat a visual it was i got a shock of my life after reading it
sharon the hungry tigress n swayam the cool dude
wat a fire and ice combination 😲
the emotional intensity was so high tat i was red in the face
at the end 😳
but the best part is tat u tell
your character's experiences through that character's actions.
n tat clearly makes ur writing exceptionl
Using the senses of sight, smell, and touch,
and describing the scene using common,
everyday words, you've plunged me
into this character's mood--in just two sentences.
i loved every bit of it
n dedicating a thing lyk tis to me 😳
i just dont know i m happy
tat tis tym the sun moon n stars din witness
anything
n i will surely want to know which heaven
u were talking abt 😆
i knew u wanted to be an astraunat lyk pk
from day 1 but itni excaptional n creative imagination toh
uski bhi nahi hai
do write more ☺️

Edited by rosyrkohli - 10 years ago

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Dew..

@Dew..

Explorer

Posted: 10 years ago

#36

nahiii only 2 parts...
but i loved it ...its well written n this part is really hot. . .
& this ts perfectly suit this line '' chota paket bada damaka ''...
loved it...