SwaRon FF : Undead love ch:3(b) uptd pg 8

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@-spongy-

Sparkler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#41

i read the previous 2 updates. They were amazing

quite an amazing story. kinda different. 😲

never came across a sister-brother love story... 😕

Specially with SwaRon. 😕

But it turned out really well. 👍🏼

update soon 😳

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Simran

@swayutaani

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Posted: 11 years ago

#42

Loved it
Plz update soon 😭 😊

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darshita

@sweetydiyafrien

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#43

i finally finish read your part... it was awesome... loved it...
swayan told her everything when she was away what all happen
and also told about rish condition and see it she is got shock
do continue soon and pm me

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Abay

@ikki215

Navigator

Posted: 11 years ago

#44

Chapter- 3(a)

Sharon said between her teeth, 'How readily you reduce everything to cash terms. You know what go to hell with your bloody money!'.. 'Spare me the righteous wrath,' Swayam drawled. 'I know quite well Rish has been paying out handsomely for the honour of -keeping you in the manner to which you've become accustomed. I can't stop him, of course, but perhaps you should remember that there'll come a time when the money train will stop permanently.'

And on that day, Sharon thought savagely, it would give her immense satisfaction to return every unspent penny. She said with assumed lightness, 'You disappoint me. There was I thinking I was set up for life. I shall have to take care I don't lose my looks...'You should just take care generally,' he said gently. He put down the pottery mug and stood up. 'Thank you for the coffee. I'm driving back to Aston tomorrow. I'll pick you up around midday.''Thanks, but no, thanks,' she said. 'I have arrangements to make, and there are planes and trains.'So there are,' he agreed. 'But Rish at least would think it strange that we didn't travel together.I don't deny your attractions, but I'm sure there are other models in London.'

'Plenty,' she said flatly.Then let's have no more excuses about arrangements.' He gave her a long dispassionate look.'Play this my way, Sharon, and I'll see to it that you aren't bothered in future. You can come back here after the wedding and live whatever kind of life takes your fancy. I'll see you tomorrow, and don't keep me waiting.He didn't seem to expect her to show him out, and she was glad of that because she didn't think her shaking legs would support her. She remained on the sofa staring at the door which had just closed behind him and trying to make sense of the last hellish half hour.In a moment, she told herself, she would wake up and find she'd been having a bad dream.Whenever there had been nightmares, it had always seemed as if Swayam was part of them hovering there somewhere on the fringe of her subconscious.

She hoped very much she would wake up soon. She moved restively and her hand caught her undrunk mug of coffee and spilled it across the hearthrug, and she stared for a moment down at the mess, forcing herself to face reality.Somehow, without knowing quite how it had happened, she was going back to Aston to help with Tanni's wedding. She sank her teeth into her lower lip. It was no wonder Swayam was such a success,in business. No object remained immovable for long under the pressure of his irresistible force. She loathed him!

She cleaned up the spilled coffee while her mind ran round and round like a small animal trapped in a net. She could always vanish, she supposed. She had done it once two years ago, and she could do it again. But to do so would be to hurt Tanni who didn't deserve it, and more importantly, it would grieve Rish .Sharon caught her breath at the thought of him in a wheelchair. He had always been such a strong,positive man. This new weakness would irk him terribly, she knew, and found herself wondering exactly when it had happened. At the same time, she told herself fiercely that she wasn't to feel guilty. If her disappearance from Aston had had even a remote connection with Rish's stroke, then Swayam would have mentioned it. A mirthless smile curved her mouth. Boy, would he have mentioned it! So she wasn't to blame herself, although she knew that her conscience would trouble her. Rish had been ill and needing her, and she hadn't known. Why hadn't Rish told her? she asked herself almost despairingly, and then shook her head at her own foolishness. Tanni would have been obeying orders.

Rish would have wanted her to return to Aston under her own steam, at her own wish. He wouldn't take kindly to any sort of pleading on his behalf from anyone. Not even from Swayam.So that was yet another secret she had to keep, because Rish had never known the real reason why she had left Aston in the first place, and that was the most important secret of all. No one knew the truth except herself, and the man who had just left her crouched, trembling like a child, in a corner of her own sofa.

Edited by ikki215 - 11 years ago

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rosy kohli

@rosyrkohli

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#45

amazingg update as always

as a writer your stories are very complex

with the most intriguing connections.

you definitely add elements tat seem to fit a theme,

or amplify the central idea of the story.

thr is a huge contrast b/w swaron

swayam having a rough cold exterior

n sharon the cool calm character

i loved how swayam demended sharon to come along

the small portion i read

about sharon's feeling regarding rish was beautifully penned

thr convo was intense i like how you are breaking

the scene in small convo's

but i really want to read a longer update next tym

do write more

looking forward to ur updates 😛

Edited by rosyrkohli - 11 years ago

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vrushanharshi

@vrushanharshi

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#46

unres

comment updated on pg 8

Edited by vrushanharshi - 11 years ago

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Ananya

@ExpectoPatronus

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#47

just read all d parts... superb just superb... 👏 well penned... waiting fr d next update... keep it up...

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QueenofGreen

@QueenofGreen

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#48

Wonderfully written. There is so much depth and thought behind the language.

I love your characterisation and the pace at which the plot is developing.

Just a quick pointer - you should start a new sentence/ paragraph for interchanging dialogues. It provides more clarity to your writing, and it's easier for the reader to follow.

Otherwise, great update! Hope you will continue soon :))

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Shreya

@swarontruelove

Explorer

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#49

YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Finally an update!!!!!!!!

Abay it was just AWESOME!!!!!!!

i knw i m literally saying the same line again and again, but what to do? your updates really take my vocabulary and speech away but still i try commenting with whatever i am left with.😆

First of all the way you are moulding the story is great, i mean you manage to keep the suspense, the thriller so meticulously.

Classic Writer that you r and i love you for that.

Your stories like i said earlier manages to keep me at the edge of my seat always.

In this update too, though it was short (which i so dont like) you have potryaed each and every part, every emotion aptly and justified their characters. and i dont think we really need character sketch when you describe them so aptly.

I loved Sharon's reaction in the starting when he said that she will be paid. it was really bang on!

Then the preceding convo was nice.

So they will be going to Aston together? can i be hopeful for more Swaron moments? i knw romance will come later, i guess? but i hope there is some Swaron convo at least in their long trip and they don't totally ignore each other.

The way you portrayed Sharon's state after Swayam went away. OMG! you were superb doing that.

i loved it really. commendable job done there Abay . you deserve and applause for that.👏

Man! the way she is afraid of him! oof! hate i understand but so much fear? what for! Suspense! i so hate it!

Secret? Oh god! when will this secret unfold? i so wanna know it. what made them hate each other hate so much? sharon fear swayam so much? Now u gotta update soon ok? whenever you get time that is.

and next time a looong one!!! pleeeaaassseee?????

P.S. Take care of your health!😊

Love

Shreya

Edited by swarontruelove - 11 years ago

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darshita

@sweetydiyafrien

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#50

that was a fabulous and amazing chapter... finally the conversation of both of cleared...
and after hear it she had decided to go for the wedding...
do continue soon and pm me