Forever and ever - SwaRon OS , 2nd part page-8

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Sowmya

@Joshua_TANHA

Trailblazer

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#71

Lovely Update!!!

Sharon proposal was cute!!

Phew , swayam is alive ..but was a roller coster ride!!

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sky_fighter

@sky_fighter

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#72

u didnt kill him 😃 perfect ending for perfect swaron

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mili1987

@mili1987

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#73

loved it...

beautifully written

👏👏

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Binuja(binju)

@Anomic_loner

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#74

when i started reading this os i really thought its gonna have a sad ending...but u really made me grin at the end...which is still there on me now when i m commenting...😃

sharon's feelings were so beautifully written...and ofcourse she was so thoughtful and sweet to come up with such an idea at the last moment...😳

overall...kudos to u...and next time when u update something like this, then do pm me too...😊

Edited by binuja_ - 12 years ago

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Snowey

@Snowey

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#75

I am sure glad that you took the happy ending for SwaRon but i sure would have liked it even the way you had conceived it as a writer. This update was a step ahead to the previous one, the start was just awesome..i liked how you gave the details on the phone being smashed as she could not take the news of her, Swayam in any kind of trouble. The drive was painful..the hospital part nicely done..the marriage idea, adorable and something a soulmate would do :) Overall a very nice OS Tanuka *hugs*

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pratik vyas

@pratik54000

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#76

Heya Monster... You updated finally... I am so happy to see the update...

well well well somebody has done a very good job in depictitng the correct emotion at correct time and space. Monster very well done with everything in the update. I really liked how you developed the update in the whole. The reaction of sharon which was in suspense in the first part was showed beautifully in this part. And you really nicely showed that what effect it leaves on us when we see somebody in that situation.

And than all the efforts that sharon did to cheer swayam up and make him believe that he will live and they will have a happy future together was really beautiful. She actually inserted that hope in swayam to live and as they say medicines and doctors comes into play only when the patient responds to the treatment positivly. Sharon brought that positivity in the mind of Swayam by doing all that antics.

In between you showed one happy memory that sharon recalled with swayam as to how he used to tease her about death and when that moment was actually coming near sharon made herself strong and decided that she won't let anything wrong happen to swayam in any wild stage of his situation. So very well linked memory in the course of the situtation. Briliently crafted events one after another.

And finally after all the hard work and hours of endless wait of sharon her prayers were answered and swayam survived safely. Doctor really scared sharon and that situation was like that doctor had to say that she was serious that swayam is safe and than came most awaited expression of sharon that made me jump on my bed with sharon. And finally cute SwaRon moments came along with the proposal. Really liked the ending part though it was changed but this forever thing remained in the same. Really very well done job monster. I am really proud of you...you are a wonderful writer and do write more so that we can have a pleasure to enjoy such wonderful works of yours more and more.

And I read the final point in which you stated that you changed the ending for friends...so i wanna say aaj tak meko bat bat pe dhamka rahi thi ab khudki bhi bari aa gayi na. Ab pata chala kaisa hota hai ye dhamikiyan sehna ahahahahha...well done guys jis kisi ne iss monster ko dara diya sach me bahot bada kam kardiya yar tumne isko dara diya...ahahahahha...

Thanks for PM...loved the update to the core...do write more...

Pratik...

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Aashik MS

@Aashu14

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#77

Awesome update.. a pretty nice and happy ending for d story.. In the initial it was really scary and finally u gave happy ending.. nice..

Thanx 4 PM.

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Priyambada Subudhi

@pri_tanvi

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#78

Gosh!! I nearly cried on the thought that Swayam might die!!!! But thanks to u for giving this beautiful ending to this beautiful OS!!

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ananya randhawa

@Ananya.SwaRon

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#79

Bestie 😳

First of all,apologies to be accepted. You know how forgetful i am. 😆

Enough of my stupid talks, talking about the 2nd and the final edition of this OS of yours, i loved it to the core. The frantic Sharon made an intriguing read. The backdrop was soothing on the other hand. At one moment,i thought it would end as a melancholy but thanks to you,it didn't. The idea of marrying in the hospital wasn't just a plain simple idea of bringing out love but beyond that. Nice thought. The vows,which SwaRon exchanged were nicely written. An over-all-Awesome OS.

Thanks for the PM.