SwaRon FF: If you could see me now

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Snowey

@Snowey

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Posted: 12 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: Sawyer_Tom

Why? Shaadi hai kya teri? 😆

Nidhi and Kanks i will edit in 2 days as well. and Shishir ka patha nahi meri Shaadi nahi hai
I wanted to comment but stopped myself thinking why spam but looks like you guys are in to it 😛

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Kankshita

@thegameison

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Posted: 12 years ago

#32

DO NOT SPAM. Seriously. Shoo, women and Marauder! 🤬

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pooja123456

@pooja123456

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Posted: 12 years ago

#33

prologue was interesting...
thanks for the pm...do continue to pm me!

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Meera

@MirageSwaron

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Posted: 12 years ago

#34

***Unres***

Brilliant idea the two of u to get together on this one - which indeed was the cherry on the cake if I culd say so among the collection of one-shots that u had written, Nidhi... and now the two of you, Nidhi & Kanks, working on this together means nuthing less than an aesthetic treat for us...I'm so luking forward 😉

The prologue Kanks is as awsum as u always r with ur writing...but there is a welcome broadness to ur approach in this case...u do it so beautifully, perhaps we can request u to indulge in this more often😳

Especially luved the lines: "She was the love of his life. And she had programmed herself to slip farther away from him by the minute. Hence he savoured the proximity however he was still firm that he would not let himself go astray. Yet another discussion about them would not remain open-ended.

"If only you could see me now you'd know you're overanalysing our problems. You would know none of it makes any difference to me. We do have problems but they're not unsolvable. I need you to know that we'll find a way out of this. Most of all, we'll find a way to be together."

That very much in essence puts in a nutshell what the equation of their relation is, and gives a thoughtful start to this FF...luking forward to REGULAR UPDATES from two of the most skillful writers we have on the forum...

Edited by meevee - 12 years ago

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ABI

@ABBY92

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Posted: 12 years ago

#35

Finally, the prologue is here and I'm as confused as ever !! They're together but not together ??!! What isn't Sharon seeing about Swayam ?? Or does she see it but is choosing to ignore it ?? So many questions !! I just hope the next update answers a few of my questions !!

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Deepika

@_Deepika_

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Posted: 12 years ago

#36

Hey Nidhi & Kanks ...WOW...just WOW...the prologue is captivating ...i loved the OS ...and m sure i am going to love this FF for sure ...they are in love...he is the love of her life...but still there are some problems...holding her back...i loved the way u gave us slight hint regarding her being blind...

"All I can see is many, many shades of black every day. And they all look the same, exhaust me alike and leave me feeling the same."

I could feel her pain...she is reluctant because of her blindness...he doesn't care about that fact...for him...being in love is more important ...

"If only you could see me now you'd know you're overanalysing our problems. You would know none of it makes any difference to me. We do have problems but they're not unsolvable. I need you to know that we'll find a way out of this. Most of all, we'll find a way to be together."

He is positive about their relationship...loved the start...awesome work...as expected...plz continue soon and plz don't forget to pm me for the next part ...thanx for the pm ...

Edited by dips098 - 12 years ago

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muskan

@LoveShantannu

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Posted: 12 years ago

#37

Res...
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This os was one of my favorite and reading d whole ff on d plot would be a treat to us. And d best part is dat too of d amazing writers on d forum are presenting. I have a lot of hope from this story. And hope you give us regular updates.

Coming to d prologue it was a splendid piece of work. You penned Sharon's each and every emotion perfectly. From her inhibitions and insecurities to her naughty side. Happy to see dey are together in it.

All I can see is many, many shades of black every day. And they all look the same, exhaust me alike and leave me feeling the same

These lines were something which made my day. How perfectly you described not only Sharon but every other visually challenged person's pov. Splendid.

"If only you could see me now you'd know you're overanalysing our problems. You would know none of it makes any difference to me. We do have problems but they're not unsolvable. I need you to know that we'll find a way out of this. Most of all, we'll find a way to be together." He asserted but when he was done he collapsed into her shoulder. Delicately he continued to press his forehead in her shoulder.
"I do see you." Sharon thought to herself and but refrained from verbalizing it, having finally reached the hem of her sweatshirt to grip tightly.

This part was d soul of d prologue. It was a marvelous pice of writting. Gal you have great talent in weaving a web out of a few words.
This ff would be something I don't wanna miss.

Edited by LoveShantannu - 12 years ago

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Marium

@pehlanasha.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#38

is sharon blind in it?????? seems like...

Update soon and PM me...as i have liked the prologue... :)

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Sawyer_Tom

@Sawyer_Tom

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Posted: 12 years ago

#39

Dear Lil Kanks,

I don't know how to tell you how well have you done justice to the theme of our FF. It is beautiful. It is perfect. It is more than I had imagined. It's brilliant.

The first paragraph, dedicated entirely to the establishment of the setting was more majestically written than I give you credit for. It's things like that that sets you apart from the rest.

Her description was striking and those subtle hints that you dropped indicating that she was blind was by far the best aspect of this piece. It was perfect. There is just no other word for it.

And their interaction was so soft yet so loud that i couldn't remove my eyes from the screen when I was reading this.

And one of the things I liked a lot was the way you used the title of our FF more than one time. And it felt perfect every time you used it.

THANK YOU for writing this. It's going to be a total in-your-face for certain people (Re: Rafi) when they read it. 😆There is nothing more except that I love it and I would like to cover you face with slobbering kisses and hug you like a mad woman for writing this. ❤️ 🤗

Love,

En.

P.S. It feels weird commenting on one's own FF. 🤔

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Phantasm

@Phantasm

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Posted: 12 years ago

#40

Ah I remember this OS from Nidhi's OS collection and now you guys have decided to write a FF on the same. Well we all know how awesomely you guys write so its definitely going to be interesting, since it's one of a kind!!

Coming to the prologue, nice start Kankshita and I loved it how you ended the update when Sharon thought "I do see you" somehow relating to the title of the FF as well.

PS: Thanks for the PM Nidhi, if you hadn't send me one, I would have never come to know about the FF. And rest assured I will read this FF, as and when I get time so do PM me, I don't wanna go on a hike by avoiding this piece😆