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beeny

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Posted: 13 years ago

#31

hey it's nice ...😊

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Snowey

@Snowey

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Posted: 13 years ago

#32

Thanks for all your likes and comments friends

I am on cloud nine 😳

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ananya randhawa

@Ananya.SwaRon

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Posted: 13 years ago

#33

well,i'm short of words!

my vocabulary stands nowhere infront of this work of yours..!

honestly speaking,i'm not really fond of poems but this one of yours had a certain charm about it...which made me fall for it! each and every word of yours goes beyond SwaRon journey from the very beginning to the coming future! loved this para 'the' most:

A new dawn broke

When you finally outspoke

And things did change

When we exchanged

I was your's Sharon

Always your's****

p.s:waiting for your OS!

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Amruta

@.CoffeeStains.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#34

Wooaaahh..!!! Sudha di dat was AWESOME...👏 👏 👍🏼

Beautifully penned...😳

Hats off Sudha di...👏🤗

Proud to be a Swaron fan...❤️

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Neeraj

@nature2

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Posted: 13 years ago

#35

Awesome poemsry for tooo late

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Ardour.

@Ardour.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#36

Sudha, u are a brilliant poet too sweetie. The last para depicts the real Swayum. Beautiful poem for SwaRon. Thanks for pennning it down so outstandingly.

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Sreya Roy

@sreya19roy

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#37

So madam writes poetry as well huh 😊

What do I say about it sudha...by far u must have known what my reactions r always like after I read ur updates...obviously I'm speechless AGAIN 😊

Like I said u today, u'll always rock in everything that u'll do, n after reading this I can only say that, u have just proved me correct 😃

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Jum

@-Jum-RulzZ-

Dazzler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#38

Haatss off to you sudha for inventing this poem..

I dont know i can seriously feel a Melody when i read it from the start till the end.. Some sort of a Beautiful melody was buzzing inside of my head when reading, and a small view of it came in my head..
Sharon was inherent inside of him and he was amid by the Beauty of sharon gleaming into his Life.. he outspoke these words which was amid of all the Grieves and lamentations, He was dancing around swaying to the music running in my head all alone without anyone and dreaming bout his beauty queen and him dancing! :) his eyes were shut and he lets these words while moving around and sighs at times remembering all the nasty moments! and was berating himself for making her Uncomfortable at that time.. and i can feel him being twinged off on Discomforting sharon, and going above her words all the time, i could feel him wrinkling his forehead at the times they regretted and he sprinted off to the Happiest moments of his life with her, He then realized that most of his moments with her was the Unhappiest since she was Always uncomfortable by his presence, He stops moving and starts breathing heavily, and opens his eyes to see her.. her in his dreams.. She was angelically dressed in a Beautiful gleaming white dress, Her smile Spreading abroad and her eyes glinting into His and he was paralyzed by her Appearance, and he smiled softly but his eyes were spreaded widely! and i can sense him spreading his hands widening to the fullest and waiting for her to Purge the distances and his eyes were Shut..
She walked right up to him and Approached for his arms and as expected purged the distance between them and intertwined their fingers brushing each others soft skin..
Swayam could literally smell her appearance.. and so could sharon..
sharon was glinting as one spark in a Current gone house at midnight! :)
She was at the center of attraction over there.. She was the reason for him to breathe, she was the reason for him to live.. and mainly she was the reason he fell in Love! :)
she tightened the hug and continued to purge any distances remaining and the song goes on.. they are still Smilingly hugging and cuddling in the Middle of the Dark den..
and swayam had finally smiled from a Long time..
The melody in that song continues and they both remain in silence, cherishing the moment and willing to last forever, and Swayam could literally now feel her soft cheeks brush against his and cuddling in.. through his neck leaving him a Tickle! :)
the hug continued and suddenly.. everything was just a Dream.. is what he realized..

OK! sudha here goes my comment !! :)
firstly i've never been emotionally attached to any other poem, be it even regarding swaRon.. i have never officially Fallen for any swaRon stories being prescribed as a Poem.. but in my life for the first.. i've been melted by a song.. a beautiful Melody runnning in.. and a Beautiful view of both of them swaying to the music.. now frankly speaking i've never actually been an amazed fan of anyone's POEM's! but in my life.. I've *seriously* for the first time.. FELT the poem..
a Beautiful melody was running in my head enhancing the eager to know whats next in the story running in my head.. i felt it was some Simple random story running in my head, But then i thought of reading it again.. and then again i realized it was Something new.. and different,

You are mine Sharon

You are mine

A dream I've tried

To make in a reality

Only to fine you

Question my morality

But deep down I still knew

You are mine Sharon

You are mine

Ok now this part made me feel like swayam was pacing through the untraveled world of a new dimension where is Paces all alone walking in all guts wailing and keening these words in order to search of sharon.. :)
be it even that Hot desert, Or even an Icy mountainous rocks Splintering down into fragments of rocks and slowly melting into cold breezy water.. He wont give up looking for his soul.. His heart runs behind her like anything and He still is.. with all hope that "His love" is waiting for him..

From the very day i saw you

Till the day for now

One thing i always knew

That I'll never allow

myself forcefully on you

Because

You are mine Sharon

You are mine

He just proves in these lines that he wont ever Make her uncomfortable by his presence/ absence.. but will always Comfort her Indirectly without his vision or even with his Vision.. but wonders of is it him? :) from the day he saw her he has fixed its her.. and continues to walk through that untraveled word of "LOVE"

Something's Changed

Passion's engaged

The looks we exchanged

At a close range

But you'd always deranged

Few things still remain

Very much unchanged

You are mine Sharon

You are mine

the misunderstandings they walked through, the Unwanted messes they cooked up,
the Looks they exchanged, be it even in Pain.. all he want to do is Slain those ppl who makes his girl Uncomfortable! and even at close range he admires only her heart and not her beauty or body! :) and doesnt expect anything from her.. but only wants to see her Happy! :)

A new dawn broke

When you finally outspoke

And things did change

When we exchanged

I was your's Sharon

Always your's

the day when they Confessed their love for each other.. was a *NEVER WANTING TO END* moment.. and nevertheless, Wanting it to be a Forever moment! :) when she approached right into his house and trampled all the lumps in her throat that was blocking her from ages and lets out these words of needing him.. and admitting her love for him.. and always wishing him to be with him.. now that is seriously something unexpected on that day, She stomped her way right into his eyes and glinted her beauty and he cupped her face and accepted in Happiness :)

Why the black clouds now

Why the outrage now

What have i done to allow

I so need the know-how

To clear the accusations aroused

You are still mine Sharon

You'll always be mine

the misunderstandings to be Dugged out of both of their Opinions and clear them was intense.. and still continuing the Hope of love.. and admitting in Eyes was ~ speechless ~ He leaped for a Sudden moment to remove all the MU...

Why push me Away

From anywhere u stay

You ain't the kind to betray

Then why the shades of grey

I'll never cause you any dismay

Because

You are still mine Sharon

You are mine

And your wish my command

aww.. on the recent track of the episodes Establishing and exhibiting the love by making him stand beside her for any reason.. be it even on the fact that she didnt any wrong.. but she didnt do it officially..
And still having the hope and exhales these words :)

"Your mine sharon.."

"And your wish is my command"

And im speechless for this.. and i cant say anymore! :) Im seriously in love with this poem!:)
Thanks alot sudha! :D
Love you ❤️ for making this AMAZING poem.. i can feel everything uttered here.. i seriously am in love with this Poem! :)

p.s. :- Sorry for the inconvenience of posting a LONG comment! just said the things which were patched inside of me and i let out the emotions of what i truly think bout this Poem! ☺️

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Snowey

@Snowey

Rocker

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Posted: 13 years ago

#39

^^ Jum - Where are you gal, I can give you one tight hug right now

So before i get all emotional and blush a deep shade red, let me just 🤗 U

So my lil poem could get you fell all that, i felt your comments and thoughts on it were more beautiful then the poem itself.

For everyone and you to know on how i came up with this poem, i was trying to get in to the skin of Swayam for my future work and this one line " You are mine Sharon " from the recent episode stuck with me.

Then just few lines here and there and i tried my best to get it rhyming fearing no one will accept this as a poem if not 😆

So i was not sure, to what i ended up expressing, but was glad that it was so closely related to the SwaRon journey and the recent track.

Thanks Jum and thank you all my friends 🤗

All your comments mean a lot to me

Love you all 😳

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Jum

@-Jum-RulzZ-

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: Sudha-SK
^^ Jum - Where are you gal, I can give you one tight hug right now
So before i get all emotional and blush a deep shade red, let me just 🤗 U
So my lil poem could get you fell all that, i felt your comments and thoughts on it were more beautiful then the poem itself.
For everyone and you to know on how i came up with this poem, i was trying to get in to the skin of Swayam for my future work and this one line " You are mine Sharon " from the recent episode stuck with me.
Then just few lines here and there and i tried my best to get it rhyming fearing no one will accept this as a poem if not 😆
So i was not sure, to what i ended up expressing, but was glad that it was so closely related to the SwaRon journey and the recent track.

Thanks Jum and thank you all my friends 🤗
All your comments mean a lot to me
Love you all 😳

im here Gal.. (Accepting thr huggies) 🤗
Yes it had Literally made me Fall for it, i love reading the poem.. believe me i used to hate reading poems, be it even if regarded of swaRon.. but im really telling you.. when you sent me the link i just thought of pushing in a try, and when i read it the first time.. a short story was going in my head.. With a beautiful soft background music.. which was cute! :) and lovely.. and i again thought of reading it and when i read it again.. the Story waas something different.. it makes me remind of something that i dont know and is clutching my attention on it to the fullest! I seriously wanted to write down the things that i felt when i saw this poem.. im sorry for the inconvenience of a Long comment.. if offended! but its something that i felt and is nothing Expressible when written,
Arrey nahin re, the poem made me feel the story! So the credits OBVIOUSLY goes to the poem.. and for making me melt onto it and fall for each and every line in it..
good that you cooked up something like this.. i was like "aawww..." on reading when i imagined that! i seriously went flying to cloud 9 ! :) i felt every emotions in this Chote chote words! :)
usually in a Story they would use millions of words to make us understand and make us feel and fall for their story, and write something attractive to read and in a very intriguing manner..
but let me tell you one thing gal..
When you made this poem justifying the current episodes.. i Seriously didnt at all feel the poem was worth it for the current episodess and in fact it suited more likely to some other story..
It dragged beautifully to something which i dont know! a beautiful story.. regarding his love for her! Seriously.. something was there in those sentences.. that maybe you didnt realize but i think i recognized it very well.. cz its nearly my 7th..or 8th.. time reading dis Poem..
people usually cook up THOUSAND's of vocabulary words.. to make us understand a story !!
but u..?
u.. had the least no. of words in a Sentence which made me understand one whole story in just 4 lines! 👏

A huge round of applause for that sudha!! 👍🏼👏

Love you to! ❤️