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ABI

@ABBY92

Sparkler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#41

Loved Sharon's train of thoughts...All of it was so Sharon !! You described what she would be feeling perfectly and the end when you wrote that she gave Swayam the pride of claiming her as his own in front of everybody..That was just beautiful !!! Can't wait for the third part !!

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flirteyed

@flirteyed

Dazzler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#42

Nd yet again you beautifuly portrayed swaron or i thnk i shud say sharon! Lovd d way u described hr state f mind! Nd d last part ws jst 2 gud ! It ws so unxpctd f sharon yet so perfctly portrayed! Nd i realy mean it wen i say i wish dis ws fr real! Loving each nd evry bit f ur OS! Eagerly waiting fr d nxt update! Plz plz plz dnt 4gt 2 pm!

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Snowey

@Snowey

Rocker

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Posted: 13 years ago

#43

RES

Will edit it soon.

Shalini this was awesome 👍🏼

The fear in Sharon so vividly shown its not very easy for her Diva self...the thoughts she battled from the charity event and the aftermath, may not have been comforting..but i guess..it helped her realize her intensity and love for him. And what can i say about the last para you wrote, that deserves 👏 ⭐️

Can't wait to read further..so please update soon.

Edited by Sudha-SK - 13 years ago

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shaani2209

@shaani2209

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Posted: 13 years ago

#44

that was beautiful shalini...m speechless...will give detailed comment later...

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BeulaSwaRon

@BeulaSwaRon

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Posted: 13 years ago

#45

m sorry shalini...didnt comment...actually cudnt comment...

beautiful first part...second part yet to go through bt can make out its abt sharon's POV...

i loved how swayam asked for getting her something and gets angry when sharon refuses...that is swayam and sharon are like...this is the thing that swaym shud get angry abt...nt abt silly fiasco abt taani and nonsesne...

i wonder when this gift thing will be brought in the show...i really want them to discuss on gifts...swayam shud bring it out juss lke how u had put it...i loved swayam more than sharon...in hre...

sry cannot reply more on this now...no time...i will come back...

shalini plzz go give swayam POV on the third part...cozz he seems in pain of pressurising sharon and yess i loved sharon's state of conflict...

Edited by luvSwaron4ever - 13 years ago

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BeulaSwaRon

@BeulaSwaRon

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Posted: 13 years ago

#46

hey read secnd part. Hats off 2 u. U r a geniuos writer u knw dat? Wat thoughts mann. A bow 2 u by me. Her fears abt simi n rini was bang on. Its nly in the end i realised therz not gona be much of swayam.oh i so wanted to knw swayam pov through ur writng yar cozz his pain n conflict is no less than sharon. She hugged him n i think dats d nly way she cum out of the conflict. Sharon is lke a waterfal n swayam is the river may i say a ocean. the Waterfal noises lows dwn when it meets d river. Datz hw i felt in the last end. Amazing os shalu. Write mny mre yar. Ur os is gvn a beautifl feelng. Lookng frward fr the nxt part

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Shalini

@lyfisbeautiful

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#47

Originally posted by: luvSwaron4ever
hey read secnd part. Hats off 2 u. U r a geniuos writer u knw dat? Wat thoughts mann. A bow 2 u by me. Her fears abt simi n rini was bang on. Its nly in the end i realised therz not gona be much of swayam.oh i so wanted to knw swayam pov through ur writng yar cozz his pain n conflict is no less than sharon. She hugged him n i think dats d nly way she cum out of the conflict. Sharon is lke a waterfal n swayam is the river may i say a ocean. the Waterfal noises lows dwn when it meets d river. Datz hw i felt in the last end. Amazing os shalu. Write mny mre yar. Ur os is gvn a beautifl feelng. Lookng frward fr the nxt part

Thanks beula n dats a wonderful way of describing them.. writing sharon pov is easier than swayam's.. i jst gt lazy😆.. bt i'l try n give u swayam in the nxt part.. it'l b a while before i update tho!!

Thanks agn..🤗

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Winds.of.Winter

@Winds.of.Winter

Navigator

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Posted: 13 years ago

#48

🤔so sorry for being late.actually im sorry to myself that i didnt read this earlier! GOSH! BEAUTIFUL.incredible talent to express beautifully, sure. but there's somethng more to it.u read sharon's mind beautifully.😳
the last para...☺️ i had to re read it.very beautiful.
but since you gave me SUCH a beautiful picture of sharon's mind,i need one of swayam's too. i would love to see swayam through ur eyes.😳
n when u update ur part 3 we ll be wanting a part 4 n so on so forth...😉
awesome job👏

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Shalini

@lyfisbeautiful

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#49

Originally posted by: D3fan_forever
🤔so sorry for being late.actually im sorry to myself that i didnt read this earlier! GOSH! BEAUTIFUL.incredible talent to express beautifully, sure. but there's somethng more to it.u read sharon's mind beautifully.😳
the last para...☺️ i had to re read it.very beautiful.
but since you gave me SUCH a beautiful picture of sharon's mind,i need one of swayam's too. i would love to see swayam through ur eyes.😳
n when u update ur part 3 we ll be wanting a part 4 n so on so forth...😉
awesome job👏

Hey thanks for such a colourful comment!!:D well yes sharon's mind is my comfort zone! n swayam's isnt😳 bt i'l try my best to get into swayam's skin n write out the nxt part!:)