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Ankita

@radhikarani

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#31

ya jodi nyc
mujhe dhriti pasand h, par woh zyadai choti ho jati. N i lve aasika so its a gr8 jodi!! Age matchng thk h

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Anuja

@anu93

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#32

Nice update Ritu...Akshay ke peeche doggy😆overall nice concept brilliant writing👏...Thanks for PM

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Bhargavi

@Historylover

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#33

brilliant update ritz 👏 ..jai's part is very emotional and u have written it very well 👍🏼
i like madhav gupta ...unexpectedly..he is not that serious here 😉 non stop family introduction 🤣
loved it ritz ..keep updating ⭐️

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peihu

@peihu

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#34

@ritu - read both de parts..i really liked it..school k din yaad aageye yaar😊
n every character k intro with pic is awesome...yahan k bade to bade chote bhi itne
talented hai..aur mujhe dekho..good for nothing😆
akshay &dogs lov story ekdum mast😆..bus mujhe titli pasand nahi aayi (dnt mind swthrt..its
jst my pov )..aur haan jai ki jai ho😳 keep writing.

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Arunita Chandra

@RoseFairy

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#35

bhargu peihu...khus khabri khaus khabri...at last cgm's competitor...is coming..with big bang promo...paras was looking so good ...and everything looks very promising...hope jkr makers sagars jaise nirash nahi karenge hume...well its just hope

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Bhargavi

@Historylover

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#36

Thanks aru 😃 does that mean the show is coming at 9 pm slot 😉 ..cool...lets hope for the best 😛 weekend pe hai...toh definitely i'll b able to watch it coz weekdays pe remote control mere control mein nahi hota 😆 and i've noticed that periodics give better results on weekend slots 😉 ..ab aagey promo dekh k bolungi coz i havent seen it yet

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Ritu Aigal

@Ritu278

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: peihu
@ritu - read both de parts..i really liked it..school k din yaad aageye yaar😊
n every character k intro with pic is awesome...yahan k bade to bade chote bhi itne
talented hai..aur mujhe dekho..good for nothing😆
akshay &dogs lov story ekdum mast😆..bus mujhe titli pasand nahi aayi (dnt mind swthrt..its
jst my pov )..aur haan jai ki jai ho😳 keep writing.

Yaha pe sabse achi shayari kaun likta hai?
Sabse jyada Rushi se pyaar kaun karta hai?
sabke daat kaun thik karta hai?
And u say u r gud for nothing?😕
Aur titli to mujhe bhi pasand nahi hai...par sab Ashka aur Rushi ki jodi banarahe the..son i thot I'll do something different😃

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Bhargavi

@Historylover

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#38

Dont worry Ritz 😉 ur titli attempt is nice and different and peihu ko rushi k opposite apni koi bhi competitor pasand nahi aane wali 😉 😆 ab main piti 🤣 waise its quite normal isnt it..people get possessive in love 😕 ...mere is post pe koi plz dhyaan mat dena 🥱 kabhi kabhi i talk in a strange way 😆

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Ritu Aigal

@Ritu278

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#39

Part3
The next day at school
Football Practice session...8 AM
Yash is the team captain...
Yash: Class 8 or 9 ke sabhi students hai?..hmm..grt..Class 8 se Dhiraj, Gautam aur...ummm..
Dhiraj: Jai is also gud..
Yash: But he hasn't played for the junior's team..😲
Dhiraj: Usko ek mauka to do...
Yash: Ok Jai...done
Jai: Thnx..I wont let u down..trust me😊
Yash: Ok..ab class 9 se...Tushar and Praveen...thats all..
''Mera naam kaise bhul gaye Pandit ji?''
Yash: Dont call me that you...
He turned behind and suddenly became quiet...
Yash: Oh sorry...Yuvi bhi hai team me...
All began speaking in low voices...
Yash: Quite...Thakur sir ne khud kaha hai mujhse...
Jai: Bechare President sir ke aage kya bolte..
Yuvi: Oh ye chirkut bhi hai team me?😡
Jai: Ha...Team me deserving log bhi hai...
Yuvi: How dare you...(He holds Jai's collar)
''Kya ho raha hai yaha...''
It was the PT teacher...Jagdish Thakur...

Yash: Kuch nahi sir...nothing...(slowly speaks to Jai and Yuvi).stop it warna dono ko team se jaana padega..😡
Thakur: Ok..get back to ur classes...now..everyone...
Everyboby disperse...
Akshay: Jai, kyun subah subah apna mood kharab kar rahe ho...ab Economics class bhi hai...
Jai: Jab bhi wo Yuvi muh kholta hai to...
Yuvi: toh...kya chirkut...
Yuvraj Dev(Yuvi) was the school bully...He was the school president's son..so uske aage teachers ki bhi bolti band ho jaati thi...

Akshay: kuch nahi..plzz...hamari class hai..
He pulls Jai's hand and goes to the classroom...
Mr Shah is already in the class..
Shah: Aaye..itni jaldi...gud😳
Jai: sorry sir..😔
Shah:Baitjaye..aaj ka class..hum deal karenge India ke exports aur imports...So Jai Ahuja hume batayenge ki trade ka matlab kya hai...
Jai had not revised the topic earlier..he is quite...
Shah:Trade ke baare me nahi pata...how come...tumare papa ne nahi sikhaya ki trading kya hai?...I guess he was a master in it..
Jai lifted his head and gave a stern luk...his eyes went red..'
Jai: Aap students ke personal matters class me na laye to acha hoga sir...
Shah: How dare u talk to a teacher lyk that..aankhen neeche karo..
Jai: Kyun?...aapka sawwal ka jawwab acha nahi laga😡
Shah: Out of my class now..😡
Jai banged his fist on the desk and left...Akshay was almost in tears...
Jai stood outside watching the playground...It was clear...and he had tears in his eyes...he hid his face and began crying...
after some tym he felt a hand on his shoulder...It was Mr Gupta..
Mr G: Jai...u crying?...come wit me...
He took Jai to the canteen which was almost empty except a few boys who had taken advantage of Mr Khanna's hindi class..😉
Mr G: Sirf class se bahar nikalne pe rona..I didnt expect this from u..I thot u were strong
Jai: Nahi sir..Shah sir ne mere papa ke baare me...
Jai stopped...he wiped out his tears and looked at Mr Gupta...
Mr G: I know..luk Jai...tum abhi chote ho, emotional ho...par jindagi jeene ke liye strong hona padta hai...aage jaake kitne shah's ko face karna padega...to tum kya haar maankar baithoge?
Jai felt a bit relaxed...He felt lyk he cud share all his sorrows wit Mr Gupta..
Mr G:..dekho..aaj school ke baad mere ghar aana..room no 49..mujhe baat karni hai...abhi class hai..I've to go..ok..
Jai: Ok sir...

It was almost 5 PM when Jai reached Mr Gupta's house...Mr gupta had not returned from school..so Jai had to wait outside...

''Om jai jagdish hare..Swami Jai jagdish hare''
Jai had heard the aarti many times..but this tym it was different..It seemed God himself had made a special request from this sweet voice...
Jai luked to the other side...
Jai: Ye awwaj to Khanna sir ke ghar se aarahi hai..
Jai went and knocked the door..He himself didnt know why he had done this..😊

Titli opened the door with pooja thali in her hands...
Titli: Yes,...
Jai kept luking at her..
Titli: Yes, kaun ho tum?
Jai: wo mai..wo..🤔
Just then Mr Gupta came in..
Mr G: Jai..wo nahi..ye mera ghar hai (Pointing to his room no 49)
Jai: sorry..
Jai ran in as soon as Mr Gupta opened the door...Titli was still there..
Mr Gupta: kuch nahi beta..wo mera student hai..Jai...
Titli smiled and offered prasad to him...
Titli: Ek aur lijiye aur aapke bhatke hue student ko bhi de dijiye
Mr G: Zaroor..😆