CN SS: ~REVENGE~ part 11 updated at page 31 - Page 21

Originally posted by: shailusri1983

Stuti that was a very fascinating update. There are several things which struck my notice at the first glimpse itself. I will try to list them out:

Thanks a lot Di! I had ended this chapter hastily and so was not sure if it is able to draw enough fascination or not... Thank you for jotting down the points you liked particularly. 😃

1) You have succeeded in showing how there is a subtle undercurrent of physical attraction and magnetism that draws both Chandra and Nandini together like the opposite poles of a battery. This is very evident in the Surya Namskar scene. I was happy to see that you did not shy away from portraying the sensual side of this relationship which will go on to become a relationship of true love in future.

So happy to see that you liked this part. I think this subtle attraction is important to build the love-story here...

This can be seen when Nandini is seen ogling not even so discreetly at the well-toned physique of Chandragupt. Similarly, it is evident that Chandragupt is also not so comfortable at his being glimpsed in his state by Nandini. His embarrassment at this shows that he too is aware of what they have between each other, an unsaid, unspoken, but at the same time palpable emotion. However, he thankfully saves himself and Nandini from anything further by taking refuge in the angavastram which he hastily wraps round himself.

@bold: 😆 😆 😆

I found your observation very interesting... Though I assumed Chandra, being a novice about women, would have responded same even if there was a Dasi in Nandini's space. 😆

But, there was surely a flow of unsaid emotions in the particular moment when Chandra turned back and saw Nandini to gaze at him. 😉 (If only I could see the change of expression of them in TV screen. 😆) And also, I don't know if you noticed or not, there was a line where CHandra has observed that Nandini is looking beautiful in the soft rays of Sun...

2) The other thing you effectively brought out in this chapter is the gradual way in which their relationship has progressed by steady stages from enemy to a person, from a person to an official duty and responsibility like, he is the king and she is the queen. Now it has become even a bit closer like preserving appearances before a third person like the guard, messenger, etc, by telling in an indirect way that both of them are one functioning unit, a husband and wife, and that there is no space for a third. Whatever happens is between them only. Perhaps it was unconsciously there even before. But what is interesting to note is their calm and formal acceptance of it.

You described it so beautifully. 😳

3) Another thing I have always loved in your FF is the historical intrigue angle. The functioning of employees in the palace, the administrative procedures, the elaborate discussions between Chanakya and Chandragupt to demonstrate how they think and function, etc. In this part too, I found Nayanika's irritation at being so carefully watched and being observed by the efficient spy system established by Acharya Chanakya very telling. That Bhadrasal found a loophole here does not tell negatively on their capabilities. Because for one, criminals always manage to find loopholes even in a tightly knit security system. Second, it could also be intentional to gather more information about the enemy side and lull them into complacence.

Glad to she that the trial of projecting the efficient spy-system of Chanakya thorugh Nayanika's irritation has caught up your mind. No system can be 100 percent efficient, and everyone seeks that 1% loophole only. Otherwise how the story will proceed. 😆

4) I did feel sorry for Nayanika that she is being used like an object by all these men like Dhananand and Bhadrasal. But then she is to blame for it because she chose to live this life voluntarily.

Yes, I feel at least till now Nayanika is not in a state of being pitied. She is just been assigned with some duty by her lord which she is enjoying to complete somehow...

5) The final last point that is intriguing me is the final choice Nandini is going to make between her father and husband. She is still wavering like this and that like a ping-pong ball. One moment, she is admiring Chandragupt, the other moment the feeling of revenge and disgust dominate her.

Yes, now she is in a very confusing state of mind. Where her conscience feels that Chandragupta is good and her father was not a good man, the love and affection for her father in her heart is pulling her back, and from that love only the thirst of revenge is getting its way..

So what will be the factor that will break the camel's back. Is it going to be this attempted regicide without involving her that will make Nandini realize the true character of her blood relations? It will definitely be a very telling blow to her if Dhananand and Co implement their plans without telling her anything. It will show her how they do not trust even her.

Let's see, but it is going to be a slow process...

My feeling is she should have begun seeing sense after the reaction from her Praja. But still she is indecisive showing her fixation. Something drastic has to happen now to change that!

Yes... And I am in search of that drastic plot. 😆

Originally posted by: jayaks02

Stuti Devil,

Another Dhamaakar Chapter.

🤗 🤗 Thanks Di! 😃

Loved the morning sun's glorius description. Nandini - Chandra interaction is zig zagish leaving Nandini with confused thoughts. I do not know whether C purposely said that kiiling her father has been his biggest achievement. It sounded a bit pompous to me . Is it a statement to induce her into something ? Otherwise he is not the kind to make statements likes these. I am glad that Nandini got back the revengeful quality back. In fact she should take a reasonable time to come out of that mould and you are spot on in keeping her in that state.

😳

Yes, Chandra's statement may sound a bit self-praising, but in the moment of excitement he only blabbered out what he believes from his heart... His agenda behind this whole meeting was only to understand Nandini's temperament and the status of his enemies through her. Anyways, this only helped Nandini to get back her revengeful mind which was losing its way in many confusions. Here Nandini is going to take longer time to change the team. 😆

Also liked the conversation between N and B . B tried hard but N is unrelenting. Just a few Questions.

Killing a King or Head of state is a big project. Typically all arrangements, Know-how(What, When, How and Who) is hatched, reviewed again and again before the mission gets executed. Here B tells N to kill CGM by day after tomorrow. Is it left to B to design the scheme all be herself ?!!!!! 😕

Have you noticed that B told N that someone is coming to help her in the palace? The whole scheme will be revealed slowly.

Or you are keeping all the cards close to your chest and will reveal the plans slowly in next chapters. Now the story is at such a stage I am unable to take a guess as to which main character will do what next, how CC will unravel the plot, will N be caught red-handed , Will B get complacent , will anyone turn double agent or who will turn approver . 😆

😆 I can see you're giving a lot of thought behind this. 😉

Kudos to your writing and character/story sketch, I am totally clueless on what next and will eagerly await your next.

😳 I am now nervous. 😆

Between, there are all serious plots, sub-plots and heaviness. You should introduce some comic relief or light hearted stuff somewhere. Just a suggestion.

I know... I want to put some comic-relief too... but you know, the life is so stressful nowadays that humour hardly comes. 😛

Keep it coming and absolutely fantastic !!!!!!!

😃
Only thing I am sure of is C slowly falling for N and he will be caught in a mental turmoil here. 😉

And vice-versa. [;)]

Originally posted by: .Avengers.

I finished this in one go. Such an amazing story, something we deserved to watch on screen!

Nandini, damn I want to feel for her and yet I can't...Sins of the father sigh. As layers of cover getting off her eyes my heart is achingfor her , a sense of losing identity. She's in worst shape and still trying to survive, her only fault was being too blind to her father's true side. And now she wants to do some good but nayanika arrived. It will be interesting to see this three way tug of war- Chandra chanakya using her as pawn, nand using her to kill Chandra and her own heart which can very well distinguish right and wrong. And Chandra such a mystery he is! Childlike and naughty with durdhara/Chaya, still trying to find footing with Helenas changing mood and toeing the line between courteously manner and outright hatred. His each scene is a delight to read and visualize.

Thank you for sharing the story with us. If possible send me pm for next time and update soon!

Originally posted by: .Avengers.

Oh btw was that Malayketu in temple whom Chaya saw? He will be a snake like the show?

Originally posted by: jayaks02

Stuti - You changed DP ? Are you Jodha Bhakt ? Or pS fan ? 😕