Written by Destiny and Etched in Blood: A FF (Ch 54: Pg 100 NEW) - Page 50

Originally posted by: sashashyam

My dear Shailaja,

This is getting to be better and better.

I thoroughly enjoyed all the parts of this chapter, but most of all I enjoyed the new horizons, the development of your supporting characters, especially Helena and, just as much, the total absence of the Chandra-Nandini romance. A break from that was clearly indicated, and I am very pleased to see that you can manage perfectly well without that prop!

Shyamala Aunty

Originally posted by: shailusri1983

Thank you, Aunty! I loved reading all of your comments. Regarding your question about Chanakya, he makes an unintentional goof up. He still does not have information about the presence of Rakshas and Dhananand in Magadh. He still assumes they are in Uttara Meru with Malayketu and his uncle Veerabahu. He knows that none of their other enemies are capable of pulling something like this off.

Originally posted by: sashashyam

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">Well, my dear, in a man of his stature, unintentional goof ups are not acceptable. And in any case, he should have acted on the principle that it is better to be safe than sorry, and had enough guards at hand to secure and sanitise the area around his family residence that he would be moving around in, right up to and including the river.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">Besides, how does all the detailed info about his travel plan leak to that loquacious soldier, and thru him to the Nand spy? It was so glaring that for a moment I thought that it was deliberate.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">Finally, you have not commented on the unfairness of Arjun's plan to get a royal nanny for his son, whom he intends to be his one and only child.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">Shyamala Aunty</font>

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti

It's getting more interesting day by day! Can't wait for next!!⭐️

Originally posted by: jayaks02

Shailaja - Thanks for the PM.

I read the latest chapter and it is written very well.

I liked that Kuthi Papa falling on Floor and his interactions with Nandini - I loved how she beat the floor to give a reassurance to the Kuthi Papa. Arjun's wish of not deciding to give a child to his would be wife is a very contemporary thought. In BC period, polygamy was quite a common thing even among citizens ? And it is too much of a condition for any woman to accept especially in arranged marriage. I have a feeling this marriage may not materialize.

CK being caught off-guard. Compared to Serial one, this one is far better. When I was going through the story, I thought CK is setting up something for Nand & party . I am hoping an anti climax comes and CK will emerge the move maker.

Helena is given a positive trait in your story. This is very good.

There seems some action in previous chapter as well - Will catch up soon.

Originally posted by: amina1

Very good mix of both political and personal

Love how you sketch ed out his wives and i like this arjun character hes a mystery to me