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Sabdabhala

@Sabdabhala

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#11

REALLY GOOD TO READ SHAILAJA

TO ME IT SEEMED THAT UNDER THE LAYERS OF ENMITY, THERE IS A DEEP SENSE OF ACCEPTANCE AND KINSHIP BETWEEN THE TWO

I JUST HOPE YOU KEEP ON UPDATING REGULARLY. I DO UNDERSTAND THAT THERE ARE TIME CONSTRAINTS, BUT, TO BE FAIR TO THE READERS, IT IS QUITE IRRITATING TO WAIT FOR LONG PERIODS

CHEERS,

LAVANYA

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Sabdabhala

@Sabdabhala

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: jayaks02
Beautifully written. Fantastic characterization. Both Nandini and CGM look believable, likeable and with dignity.

Is it too much to ask for ? CVs should take a leaf from your line and balance.

DREAM ON VIDYA 😆

THERE WERE SO MANY LOVELY STORIES IN JA FORUM TOO AND NOTHING EVER MOTIVATED EKTA OR THE CVS TO GET MOTIVATED 😆

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Shailaja

@shailusri1983

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#13

I am really happy that the sense of acceptance between Chandra and Nandini, good or bad, and their kinship got translated in my words. My attempt in this chapter was really for this connection to reach out to the readers despite all these superficial layers of enmity. I am happy that I achieved it. I will manage to give three or two updates per week. I can't specify the exact days. But I will surely try to keep this going without making readers wait too much. Thank you for the response.

Originally posted by: Sabdabhala
REALLY GOOD TO READ SHAILAJA

TO ME IT SEEMED THAT UNDER THE LAYERS OF ENMITY, THERE IS A DEEP SENSE OF ACCEPTANCE AND KINSHIP BETWEEN THE TWO

I JUST HOPE YOU KEEP ON UPDATING REGULARLY. I DO UNDERSTAND THAT THERE ARE TIME CONSTRAINTS, BUT, TO BE FAIR TO THE READERS, IT IS QUITE IRRITATING TO WAIT FOR LONG PERIODS

CHEERS,

LAVANYA

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Shailaja

@shailusri1983

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#14

I too wrote this SS because at some point, just like you, I was getting frustrated with how the story and onscreen personas were being taken forward in the show. Anyways glad you enjoyed reading this as much as I enjoyed writing this!

Originally posted by: mishtidoi
What a profound characterization, not only of Nandini but also of Chandra.👏
I've to forget onscreen personas to really get lost in this story...onscreen version is making me difficult to stomach their love story.

But you as a writer are superb👍🏼

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Shailaja

@shailusri1983

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#15

Thank you for this appreciation. I too find dignity and relatability missing in Nandini's character. She is an intriguing character. I wish her script would improve giving scope for the vast potential I see in this character. To some extent I understand Chandragupt's point of view. But even here at times I find his dignity being needlessly compromised to justify the female lead.

Originally posted by: jayaks02
Beautifully written. Fantastic characterization. Both Nandini and CGM look believable, likeable and with dignity.

Is it too much to ask for ? CVs should take a leaf from your line and balance.

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@su_94

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#16

👏beautiful ... waiting for more 😳

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Shailaja

@shailusri1983

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#17

I loved your response Stuti. I will try to do justice to all your expectations from me and the story in the remaining chapters of the story as well. I am actually working on the next chapter. So it may be up in a day or two.

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti
A marvelous attempt Shailaja Di...😃 Something that the viewers really expect from the characters of the show, you have presented them in the form of a beautiful picture made of alphabets and words...
The tale is told from Nandini's perspective, and you have successfully pictured her anger, her frustration and dilemmas... Nandini's murder attempt failed and Moora became the victim- this is an awesome twist.😉 It surprised Nandini how Chandragupta did not question her or punish her... and the fact that he knows the truth- that she was going to kill his MOTHER, made her not only ashamed, but full of guilty... And that feelings of guilty gives her heart and soul a strong jolt... The whole portion from Nandini is very clear and relatable.

Obviously the star of the update is Chandragupta!⭐️👏 His appearance, his dialogues and his sensibility all are majestic and great! I loved each and every words of his dialogues...

"I still hate you. But pity is, I understand you!" ... 👏

"My pains and pleasures are very different from yours.You don't know me neither do I expect you to trying do so!" ...🥳😉

"If you die as a result of it, I don't have even tears to waste over you. You will have died leading a redundant life without establishing your own identity!"... ⭐️

This is someone like real Chandragupta I would look for. I hope cvs steal your ideas and dialogues and give them to Chandu. 😆 ⭐️😛

Waiting for the next update. Don't keep us waiting for long. 😃

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Shailaja

@shailusri1983

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#18

You can call me Shailaja Di if you want. Makers surely have different plans from the story but we too can have our own plans and ideas here on the forum. Thank you!

Originally posted by: cute.manasi
Dear shalija di (i hope i can call you that )...😊

i have always liked your writeups , analysis & this one too fascinated me . very well written...👏
we can only read such pieces here on forum because makers surely hv some different plans .

Edited by shailusri1983 - 9 years ago

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Shailaja

@shailusri1983

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#19

Thank you Lashy! Nandini is definitely confusing but half of it is because her side of the story has not been clearly written or etched. If only she had got a few more layers apart from the Pitha Maharaj ki Putri stuck LP Record, she would have been fantastic. Of course the acting also has to improve correspondingly!

Originally posted by: lashy
👏👏 Lovely stuff Shailaja
You breathed life into a very confused character by giving her confounded state some basis

Especially these paras - beautiful stuff!

He neither questioned her nor sought her explanations. He knew the truth. It somehow pained Nandini that her husband instinctively knew her truth without the need for explanations. How badly he must be thinking about her or her character. Of course it should not have actually have mattered to her what Chandragupt thought about her. But it did!

My pain and pleasures are very different from yours. You don't know me neither do I expect you to try doing so." Nandini stared on wordless and unable to grasp whatever was happening around her. Were she and Chandragupt the same people she knew? These were unsuspected depths. She was drowning in them.

Keep it up... keep it coming!😳

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Nimm

@Snimmr

Beginner

Posted: 9 years ago

#20

Hey Shailaja!

I'm fairly new on this forum and I was hoping to come across some fan/viewer written work because I'm thinking (like a lot of others are, I'm sure) that certain bits or characters can be better portrayed. And I was curious about people's ideas but it seems like there's not very much - perhaps it's because there's some sort of a taboo, or people are put off as it is a historical show and they don't want to offend other viewer's sentiments, or perhaps just because there's nothing or no one to write.

I really do get frustrated with certain instances of the show like you do so it's nice to read things like this for a change - and I know others are seeming to get exasperated too so it'd be good to see more stuff like this popping up in the forum as people can vent their frustrations through writing and share their ideas of how they'd like particular events to go.

In any case, this was a beautifully written piece - realistic also (maybe not for where the current track is at the moment) but I don't think it was too out of character because I can definitely imagine something of the sort going through Nandni's head (and some of what Chandra says to her) happening at some point further along the line. Truly, a lovely OS.

Keep writing if inspiration wills it.

Lots of love and best wishes,

Nimm xx

Edited by Snoopysez - 9 years ago