Yati's creations :TOOTATA TARA(CHAPTER 7(Page 13)) - Page 6

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Posted: 14 years ago
#51
Really great FF...just read all 3 chapters...different but interesting none the less. Many thanks
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Posted: 14 years ago
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CHAPTER 4
Raaga steps in the classroom. She looks around and finds a room for a person near to a girl. She goes and sits with that girls. That girl smiles at Raaga. Raaga also reciprocates.
The girls starts first, "Hi, I'm Antara." Raaga also introduces herself. Antara asks," So, how was your first day experience raga?" Raaga replies," Hmmm, so far it was quiet OK." Then Raaga tells Antara about whole the incident over there at the classroom stairs.

Antara tells Raaga, " Raaga, Now we are friends, so you don't have to worry from now on." Raaga asks, " woh kaise?" Antara replies, " Actually raga, my big bro is also studying here. He is in his 3rd year. Aur mere bhaai ke kaafi chalti hai iss college main. Mera matlab, woh leader hai apne group ka,aur saath hee saath woh topper bhi hai apne batch ka isseliye usko faculties bhi kaafi like karte hai. So, aage tumko koi bhi problem ho toh mujhako bata dena. Main tumko milwa doongi apne bhaai se." Raaga nods.

Raaga is on her way back to her place after spending her first day at medical college. Suddenly her scooty gets punctured. She is standing alone on the road, little tensed she is looking here and there. She turns and sees a bike is coming towards her. The biker stops near her. She gives biker a strange look who is wearing helmet. Then biker takes off his helmet. Raaga gets a shock. It's Aalap.

Before Raaga thinks anything, Aalap asks," Kya hua, any problem." Confused Raaga replies , "woh actually, scooty ka piche wala tyre puncture ho gaya hai." Aalap informs her," Yaha se thoda hee aage ek mechanic hai, waha theek ho jayega. Tum kaho toh main chaloo tumhare saath ." Raaga assures him that she would manage. Aalap leaves.

Raaga reaches at mechanic's shop. She gets surprised after seeing Aalap there. She stares Aalap. Aalap comes near to her, " Woh actually meri bike main bhi kuch problem aa gayi thi, socha theek krwa loo."

Then Aalap calls mechanic and says ," Bhaiya ji, aap pehale inke scooty theek kar do, mera kaam baad main kar dejiyega, mujhe koi jaldi nahi hai." And he looks at Raaga with a naughty smile. Raaga goes forward and stands under the shed of a tree near the mechanic shop so that she can avoid Aalap.

Aalap is looking at Raaga while she was standing under the tree. She is looking stunning in her green kurti and cream colored chudidaar. Because of some breeze, her curly hairs are caressing her face. Her Jhumkis (earings) are also trembling and kissing her face. She is looking so innocent and gorgeous that Aalap couldn't manage to get his eyes off and he is just beholding Raaga's beauty.

Aalap recollects himself when mechanic calls Raaga and informs her that her scooty is fixed now. Raaga takes her scooty, thanks Aalap for his help and leaves.

Mechanic asks Aalap, " Ab aap batao…apki bike main kya kharabi hai…" Aalap smirks," Meri bike main….. meri bike main kya problem ho sakti hai bhala, kuch nahi...ye toh ekdum fit hai…" Alap starts his bike and leave for his place. Confused mechanic keeps looking at Aalap until he disappears.

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Posted: 14 years ago
#53
Wow Yati...Antara's big bro is Aalap???
Loved the scene Yati..loved Aalap waiting in mechanic shop and looking at Raaga..😍..Who would not watch such a cute and innoncent girl..
Loved this Meri bike main….. meri bike main kya problem ho sakti hai bhala, kuch nahi...ye toh ekdum fit hai…"
Aalap is awesome character..Though the names are different, can imagine Nivren in this..
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Posted: 14 years ago
#54
Lovely... can imagine only KinHa as see them while reading ...imagining Aalap looking at Raaga... and thought as much that Aalap ke bike mein problen nahi thi 😳...
You have kept the attitude as Viren had.. love it
Edited by Raj_Luv_NiViren - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#55

waw.its awesome chapter😊

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Posted: 14 years ago
#56
Yati what a wonderful chapter. Esply his reply to mechanic I am still laughing remembering the whole scene. So Aalap has a sister to befriend Raaga interesting. Luved the whole thing.
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Posted: 14 years ago
#57
awesome ff dear...loved te story n ur writin style a lot 😃
read all four chaps in one go 😊
havn't talked with u b4...hii..myself reshma..
pls continue soon...waitin to read aalaga(aalap-raaga) love story 😳 ...imaginin KinHa as them😃
Edited by Resh_kinhafan - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#58
awesum chapter yati
luvd da way aalap tells da mechanic dat his bike is fit !! n antara is aalap's sis ryte ??😉
r u planning to keep alll musical names 😛 just kidding !! da names r really beautiful 😊
continue soon yati :)
Edited by kinha123 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#59
Very nice chapters. I like the way story line is proceeding and raaga,aalap both were beautiful namesArchana
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Posted: 14 years ago
#60
very nice ff...liked the characters...i can clearly imagine nivi and viren in those characters...please continue soon..

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