|A ZaYa OS ~ Blissful| - Page 3

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Posted: 11 years ago
#21
beautiful one-shot..👍🏼
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Posted: 11 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: vinu127

res

unres

"I am a writer but not a good one"

jhooti kahin ki!

Aap se accha jhoot toh Bobby bol leti hai! Kam se kam who bewakoof Abdullahs use sach maante hai. Aap ki iss statement ko sun ke who bhi has padenge!

Toh agar jhoot bolnahi hai toh kam se kam aise boliye ki atleast suraiyya use sach mane!

Now coming to this Blissful OS,

1st of all, u hav written it so well that I could imagine each n every movement of theirs in all camera angles with all sorts of extra effects and BI title track in the BG(not title track but Ishq Khuda)!

Be it Zain or Aliya, the thoughts were brilliantly potrayed...

Especially loved the part where Aliya regrets having tried to behave bold

And the next parts was definitely blissful

The way you explained their first kiss was so aesthetic... not in a single line did things feel above the line...

It was very beautifully written

And the kitkit of ZaYa is the main USP of their relationship according to me... and u kept itintact all through.. especially after the kiss, their kitkit was cho cute...

Aliya beigcaught off guard byzain and his smirks and smug smiles are always a bliss to imagine... I so wish I could see this too .. but damn the 9pm slot!

Chalo koi baat nahi... I imagined it all thanks to u ;)

So all in all, what I can say is- I liked it as much as Aliya liked the kiss :P


Aww thank u so much vinu! I have this huge goody smile plastered on my face ri8 now, thank u!

Arre, don't praise me so much yaar, I'll land up on cloud 999.😆

This is seriously one of the best comments I've eer glt in all the stories I've written. I always want my readers to actually get in the shoes of the characters when they read my work, not that I do any work of that much satisfaction each n every time but reading ur comment, I'm really happy n quite satisfied with what I've wrote(but I hope u weren't just being nice!😆).

Oh ho! Kya baat hai, itna pasand aaya aapko? Isse beheter kya ho sakta hai?(plz don't mind my horrible horrible hindi , I wud consider it an achievement kf u merely understood what I was trying to say😆)Thank u so much for ur awesome review vinu! :)








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Posted: 11 years ago
#23

Originally posted by: vinu127

unresed on pg 1

250 words approx- I kept it as short as possible... but if u want a longer one do let me noe


Arre! U gave me such an awesome long review, I don't get many long reviews n when I do I feel extremely happy coz it really helps me improve so i'm very vey happy with the review u gave me, this itself is a very big thing for me. :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
#24

Originally posted by: ..Ramya..


Aww thank u so much vinu! I have this huge goody smile plastered on my face ri8 now, thank u!

Arre, don't praise me so much yaar, I'll land up on cloud 999.😆

This is seriously one of the best comments I've eer glt in all the stories I've written. I always want my readers to actually get in the shoes of the characters when they read my work, not that I do any work of that much satisfaction each n every time but reading ur comment, I'm really happy n quite satisfied with what I've wrote(but I hope u weren't just being nice!😆).

Oh ho! Kya baat hai, itna pasand aaya aapko? Isse beheter kya ho sakta hai?(plz don't mind my horrible horrible hindi , I wud consider it an achievement kf u merely understood what I was trying to say😆)Thank u so much for ur awesome review vinu! :)

hehe.. u deserve the praises n parody darling😃
and yes, i'm not being nice! aliya nahi hoon main! i'm just telling the fact
n as much as i noe hindi, this sentence was perfect👍🏼
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ..Ramya..


Arre! U gave me such an awesome long review, I don't get many long reviews n when I do I feel extremely happy coz it really helps me improve so i'm very vey happy with the review u gave me, this itself is a very big thing for me. :)

lolz.. i hav a record of a 2.5 word page long review!😆😆
i write long ones when i really like a work..
u wanted this fast.. so its short..😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: vinu127

hehe.. u deserve the praises n parody darling😃

and yes, i'm not being nice! aliya nahi hoon main! i'm just telling the fact
n as much as i noe hindi, this sentence was perfect👍🏼


Aww thank u! I'm glad u really like it! :)
Omg! There were no mistakes?
Plz excuse me for a minute...

😆 Soz! I'm just really happy that I managed to write a proper hindi sentence without any mistakes. I need an oscar for this. 😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: vinu127

lolz.. i hav a record of a 2.5 word page long review!😆😆

i write long ones when i really like a work..
u wanted this fast.. so its short..😆


Omg! I can hardly do mlre than 100! 2.5 pages is something which is totally outta my reach 😆.
Haha lol, u call this short?😆
I don't exactly know ur definition of long so next time I write something, plz do show me this exclusive talent of urs.😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
#28
Aaa
Kash aisa kuhc hota 😭

humko mila babaji ka thullu... CVs ne promo dikahya ke banaya humko ullu😭 lag raha hai duba do unko in pani of chullu😡

That was sad🤢 excuse my overflowing sentiments😆

I have one serious question😳 couldnt aaliya have told her ram katha..AFTER err... (for want of a better word) the Deed😆

Coming to ur Os.. girl u were fab🤗 It was perfectly penned. Aaliyas shyness, her upar-se-dikhawe-wala-boldness...👏👏👏

And the Besharam n Playful zain... totally how i wud picturise them as😊

Keep writing :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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AWEESSOOOMMMEEE! That was a Beautiful piece of writing Ramya! 👏

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