Kuch pal...(FF) updated 6/2

Prologue

"Kya hua inhe?"

"Sagar...utho Sagar...kuch to kaho."

"Mama...Papa ko kya hua?"

His mind was reeling. Too many words. Too many voices. What was happening? His throat felt raw...dry. He needed water. Taking a deep breath, he slowly opened his eyes. A woman stood close by. She was looking at him concerned, with tears in her eyes...tears for him? He opened his mouth to say something but he didn't know what to say. He couldn't take his eyes off her. She was beautiful...in a very simple but ethereal way. He wanted to hear her voice. As he continued looking at her, a slow smile spread over her lips. She walked towards him and slowly extended her hand and touched his forehead. He flinched. She jerked her hand away and took a few steps back.

His mind screamed "No...don't leave!" but his lips wouldn't utter a word. He cleared his throat and the woman was pushed back as everyone surrounded him. Aniket jiju, Maa, Chinu, Bharat, and...Sindoora di. His fist clenched as she drew near the bed. His narrowed eyes continued looking at Sindoora while the rest of the family were still asking him things, concerned. His eyes finally left hers and slipped past Chinu, Maa, Bharat and finally landed on the woman in the back. She was silently clenching a chain in her hands, with her eyes closed shut tightly. She seemed to be praying. He smiled softly looking at her.

A few moments later, he turned to look into his maa's questioning eyes. He slowly whispered, "Maa..."

Immediately, the flood of tears began. The voices raised as everyone began speaking at once. His head was pounding...and the woman wouldn't open her eyes. She wouldn't open that clenched fist. And he couldn't stop looking at her.

Edit: I guess I forgot to mention the setting's a hospital room😳😆

I suppose you all know who the woman is😆 Sorry if it's boring. I just couldn't get that scene out of my head...so had to post it😳

Yay me 2nd 😃

Sravi great start👏👏👏
The way you described everything was superb!!!
It's not necessary to be Hermione to know that it's Vidya😛😆

Please continue soon.

Wow! That's so good! So I'm guessing Sagar is better and forgot who Vidya is. 😆 😃 That was a great start! Please continue this soon!

exellent!! its just brilliant!! 👏 👏


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Tried to stop myself till friday but its your FF Sravi...must read it. Awesome!! So thrilling with the description. I hope the lady is Vidya 😳 Great job Sravi!!! 👏 👏

Oohhhhhh Sravi, you've finally started one...!! Haii, and it's too good yaar 😳 .. wow..... and yesh, also hope the lady is Vidya of course, you've got some lovely descriptions as well, it's great!!!! 😳 👏

Marvelous start Sravi! 👏 😛 Looking forward to read more of your fan fiction. 😛 How can one let boredom kill them from the episodes, when such amazing fan fictions breathe in life into that boredom space? 😛 Do continue soon!

Keep smiling...
Love
Soni

OMG Sravi 👏 that is reallly nicely written yaar....Great start....and yes I can guess the woman 😳 and don't call it boring its great I can't wait for the next part 😛

Thanks so much everyone for the sweet comments! 🤗 I'll try to continue tomorrow 😛