FF- Jalte Huwe Naseeb Last Update pg 33

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Posted: 16 years ago
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~I know what you're all thinking. I already have an FF but I'm also starting a new one. Well sitting here on a boring and dull Saturday I have nothing better to do. I'm still going to continue my FF but I am also going to go on with this FF but only for a while since I am only writing a story and nothing extra. So as you can see from the title it's called Humare Naseeb. I'll go you a character overview and most likely come up with an update by tomorrow.. Hopefully I have the same readers and even more.. And on a side note.. since there are two FFs and I have school im going to stick to updating one on Saturday and one on Sunday.hopefully that will work for you guys.~

Character Overview:

Amar is a wealthy owner of a Mall in Lahore, Pakistan called Lahore Plaza. He's happily married to his wife Seema and has a four year old daughter Saira. They have no other family except each other. He keeps them very happy and never complains about his life. He considers himself the luckiest man on earth until kismet takes a wrong turn for him.

Seema is Amar's wife. She loves her daughter Saira but pretends to love her husband Amar. She's happy with him and respects him but sadly she was once in love but her love died and she married Amar hoping to forget him. She couldn't forget him though as Amar was exactly like him. She never let Amar know that she doesn't love him.

Vidya is a pre-school teacher. She works at the Lahore Pre-School for young girls. Her mother is the only one part of her family. They are poor and hardly get to buy extra things in their life. The only reason Vidya works is not to feed herself but her mother. Her mother is a heart patient and can die any moment if not treated. She has very bad luck and considers her self unlucky. One day her kismet changes too but for good or bad is unknown.

I hope you guys enjoy my idea.. If you are not so fond please tell me and I wont continue.. I just wanted to write this FF for some reason and I will so hopefully I'll succeed in entertaining you guys.

Oh and one more thing.. updates won't be as long.. 😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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you started it!!
first!!!!
so its like a movie?....i bet its gonna b so good that when you do start to end it...we'll want it to b more like reg ff...it'll porbly b too interesting to end
INTERESTING!!!!! i think its going to b about cheating but i dont think so at the same time...cuz vidya is too nice...i rly cant wait to see where your going with this...ocntinue soon!!!!!!!....and since you are bored..how about an update (either on this one or tujhse naraz nahin)? pleaseeee👏
Edited by kmishra - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Kalee... Thanks so much! And I don't mind updating but it looks like no one but you liked the update..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Probably only silent members saw this. I doubt anyone who comments saw it because it's too great for anyone to not comment...i wasnt going to comment rite away becasue i was feeling lazy but then as soon as i finshed reading it...i rly rly rly rly rly rly rly loved it!!!!! and commented obviously...but trust me once more people read it...they'll love it and comment...update when you can please!
you're a brilliant writer!!!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Ok then... If you say so I'll update..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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This is for my only reader .. Kalee ...

Part 1:

The scene starts off with a wide door opening and a waiter walking in. The waiter is holding a glass of juice in a tray. He walks into the room and we see a gentleman with his head down working on his laptop. The waiter clears his throat. The gentleman looks up and smiles. "Put it here," he says while pointing to the table. The waiter does so and steps back. "Will there be anything else sir?" he asks. The gentleman looks up and shakes his head. "Ehh Papu! Ktini bahar bola! I'm a three years younger than you! Call me Amar not sir." Papu smiled. "Sorry Amar. But what am I supposed to do. This was the only job I could fine in Lahore. Now I must work for mundas younger than me." Amar laughs. "Thanks for the drink papu. I don't need anything else." Papu smiles and turns to leave when Amar stops him again. Papu turns around as Amar asks "Did Seema call?" Papu smiled. "Not even one hour without her and you're already crazy. No she didn't but why don't you call for a change instead of waiting for her to." Amar shook his head. "I think that's a better idea. Thanks you can go now." Papu smiled and left. Amar took his phone out and dialed.

A lady dress in a white shalwar kameez was running around holding a underwear. A little girl was running away from her half naked. The lady yells. "Oye Saria! Do you want papa to find out that you won't get ready?!" The little girl, Saria, quickly stops and looks at the lady. "No mama! Please don't tell papa! He won't bring me candy then!." The lady smiles. "Then come here and wear this." She waves the underwear in front of her face. Saria runs over and finally her mother dresses her. When she's done she says "Now you can go and play!" Saira jumps and down. Suddenly the phone rings and Saira's face lightens up. "Papa!" She runs over to the phone and picks it up. "Papa! Papa!" Amar on the other phone smiles. "How's my little angel?" Saira smiles. "Perfect! I just got dressed." Amar says, "That's great and where is your mama?" Saira looks at her mother. "She's watching me eager to talk to you." The lady's smile fades as that is not truth. Saira hands her the phone and runs away. The lady shaking holds the phone to her ear. "Hello," She says in pain. "Hey Seema my love" Amar says with such excitement while Seema closes her eyes and listens. "Hey Amar. How are you?" "Missing you desperately." Amar smiles huge. "But you just left for work and already you miss me?" she says. Amar laughs, "Aik munda kare bi kya jab itni soni biwi ghar par ho." Seema shakes her head.

Amar is in his car driving home while he passes by a poor person selling flowers. He stops his car and ushers the man to walk over. The man walks over. Amar, "Do you have kajras?" The man nods and shows it to them. Amar smiles, "Give me all of them." The man's face lightens up. "But sir they are worth 1000 ruppees." Amar shakes his head. "So what 1000 rupeees are worth it if it means feeding you and making my wife happy." The man smiles and hands Amar all the kajras while Amar hands him the money. "Thank you sir," the man says. Amar smiles, "Anytime. And make sure you have them tomorrow. I'll be sure to drop by." Amar starts the car again and drives away.

Seema is in the kitchen making tea deep in thought. Soon enough she smells kajras and looks behind herself to see Amar holding them out. She smiles and puts her hands out as Amar puts them out but then Seema sees there are a bit too much. "Why'd you buy so many?" she asks. Amar smiles. "For Saira. You know how much she loves them." Just as he says that Saira runs up to the them and starts jumping up and down. Amar hands the kajras to Seema and picks Saira up in his arms. "How's my little angel?" Saira smiles. "I'm great papa! Did you know I'm turning four in three days?!" Amar pinches her cheeks. "Of course I knew! How could papa forget? And look I brought you kajras." Seema smiles and puts them on Saria's wrists. Amar smiles and takes Saira out as Seema goes back to making tea.

Amar is carrying Saira to her room as she has fallen asleep. Saira is asleep in Amar's arms. Seema is following them. Amar enters Saira's pink and purple room. He goes over to her Barbie bed and lays her down. He tucks her in and pulls the blanket over her. He kneels down and kisses her forehead and then leaves. He enters his room to find Seema deep in thought. Amar worried walks over to her. "What's the matter?" He holds her hand. Seema smiles and looks at Amar. "Nothing. Just thinking how quickly Saira grew up." Amar smiled. "Yea. It was just yesterday we fell in love and you found out you were pregnant. And now look. Humare pyar ki nishani char sal bari hogai hai." Seema smiles as tears well up in her eyes. Amar sees her tears and wipes them pulling her in to hug him.. "I've already started looking for pre-schools," he says.

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Posted: 16 years ago
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awww i feel really bad for amar...he loves her sooo much...but seema..doesnt...i guess i cant blame her...luckily she is still nice and sweet to him btu at the same time i think she should tell him that she doesnt feel the love...even though that'd be really hard and heartbreaking....but anyway....i really loved the update

MAGNIFICENT UPDATE!!!!!

i really enjoyed it....i cant wait for your nex tone....vidya is gonna come in so i cant for that...and see what she has to do with their life...anyway amazing update once again!!!!! continue soon!!!!!! pleaseeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Edited by kmishra - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Ohh you started another FF...i like it..it really different im sure it going to turn out great and don't worry you'll have plenty of readers coming in hehe
Edited by *|Heena|* - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Omg I love it!
Aww poor Amar....Seema doesn't love him. wonder how he'll handle it when he finds out. And Saira is soo cute! can't wait to read your next update. And don't worry I'm sure everyone will love this ff. They probably aren't on I-F yet but I know you're gonna get a bunch of comments
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Moomoo
This is an amazing story! I really enjoyed reading it....great start..please continue soon...

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