Fan Fiction: Bairi Piya Planning 2 MOVE, chk Pg 4

Hey Guys, I m Planning to write this FF of mine in the Fan Fictions Forum as well,
Don't worry I'll be posting each epi as a separate topic as suggested by Pankaj205 as it is directly related to the rankings of our forum,
But I think posting this on a global forum like Fan Fictions can get it noticed by more people as it 'll be read by all those who visit it not just BP fans, since BP forum is archived now, though it has better ranks than most ongoing serials, it isn't coming to the notice of random visitors who could've just passed by n got interested in out forum.

Posting it on both forums can help a lot and who knows my plot might just get the notice of Balaji n they can get inspired for a second season of BP.
Please do comment and tell what you think about this decision of mine.


N I am really sorry the 4th epi is getting delayed, but it is because it'll feature DV's selfish style of working a nd also a direct contrast between DV and Amoli's characters and why DV loves black and Amoli is always seen in white, I've got the concept clear but m not getting the perfect dialogues and since I am not a professional writer and hence m not being able to do this fast. So plz bear with me guys..........

Hey folks, Here I am back again, for those who aren't familiar with me, I am Niharika aka nikkie and I was an active part of the Bairi Piya forum some time back but then, I stopped, don't ask me why, its a long story, but yes this forum gave me some really good friends like Deeba, Maha, Nitu and Savita and we still converse and keep in touch despite the fact that I am no longer a Bairi Piya Fan anymore.
Upon Nitu's request, I thought of sharing one of my scripts with you which goes really apt with the title Bairi Piya, and since we are so used to the names Digvijay and Amoli, I'll use the same names as used in the season 1 of Bairi piya, please read it and comment if you really like the plot and we can suggest this storyline to Balaji, what say?????


So all those who read Episode 1 and liked it, thanks a lot for your responses, and those who didn't? well..... there are lots of other interesting stuff in our Bairi Piya forum, go check those out ....
So First of all, a poster dedicated to this fan fiction........



Featuring DV and Amoli in the looks that this FF wants them to be portrayed in (I am waiting fr some likes and quotes 😳)
And now the most vital part, a new Episode....
here's presenting episode 2 of this fan fiction.....

Link to Episode 1
Link to Episode 2

Episode 3:

The door opens and Urmi's expressions turn pale, she goes up to the bed holds an arm, probably to wake the sleeping person up and shouts, "GET OUT!!!! What the hell are you doing here?" The bedsheet moves and we see a really haute blonde, (and do I need to mention what she was doing there? Those who know our DV can guess it well. Please all of you make assumptions)
So the blonde carelessly opens her eyes and say, "Hey baby!! Got the Coffee for me?"
Urmi had had enough and all we heard was, "Get Lost, What the hell are you doing here? and where's DV?"
"Here Baby!!! Just behind you...." Urmi turns around and beside the blonde's feet the sheet moves and a face pops out, "Here am I as hot as ever!!!" and that he was, dressed in a black vest and black shorts he emerges from his black bedsheet smiling naughtily towards Urmi and checks her out from top to toe and exclaims, "Aaj kitno ka khoon kiya yahan aate hue? Tumhe phaansi pe kyun nahi chadhaa dete ye police waale?" (How many did you kill today while arriving here? Why don't these policemen get you hanged?)
But Urmi was not in the mood to listen, she points her finger to him and says, "DV tum na...."(DV you....) and he holds her finger, pulls it to hold her wrist and then twists her hand and forcibly makes her sit down on the bed and looks at the blonde and says, "Sarah, your work's done, reach the shoot at 12:30 sharp and you'll get the role"
"Thanks DV!!!" she moves and her hand to touch his face which he holds back with his other hand with which he wasn't holding and says firmly, "Leave!!"
The blonde snaps "Ohkay..." picks the gown beside her, wears it n leaves the room shutting the door behind her and muttering "b@*$%#d.....".

And then DV while firmly holding on to the wrist of Urmi, touches the shoulder of Urmi's other hand which he wasn't holding and caresses his way up to the tray which was in her hand, takes it from her and puts it on the side table. Urmila frantically tries to free her held wrist from him and say, "Mera haath chodo DV mujhe dard ho raha hai?" (Leave my hand DV its paining)
DV leaves it and Urmi looks at her wrist which has turned red due to tight holding. She looks angrily and DV and is about to get up but DV pulls her back, lies back on his bed and Urmi falls over him and he says "Aur jo dard mujhe hoga uska kya, agar tum mujhe choddh ke chali gayi?" (And what about the pain I'll have when you leave me and go?)
"Really?? To wo angrez yahan kya kar rahi thi?" (Really?? so what was that blonde doing here?) Urmi retorts.
DV: "Apna kaam!" (Her work)
Urmi: "Achha? Kaunsa kaam?" (Really? Which Work?)
DV: "Are hamare agle album ke video ki model ke audition pe aayi thi, I asked her for a PROPER audition, aur wo maan gayi! That's it..." (Oh, she just came for the audition for the model of my next video, I asked her for a PROPER audition, n she agreed! That's it...)
Urmi: "That's it? To main yahan kya kar rahi hun?" (That's it? so what am I doing here?) she pushes him off and gets up from the bed and stands in fornt of the window while looking out and still speaking "Jaake ek aur angrez le aao, tumhe to roz ek mil jaayegi na? Krishna Kanhaiya ki bhi itni gopiyan nahi hongi jitni apne Rockstar DV ke one-night stands hote hain" (Then go and get another blonde, you'll get a new one everyday right? Even Krishna Kanhaiya might not have had that many gopis as our Rockstar DV have had one night stands)
DV gets up from his bed goes up to her and holds her from behind, she tries to free herself and he starts humming,
"Gopiyaan taare hain, Chaand hai Radha.....
Phir kyun hai usko Vishwaas aadha....
Gopiyaan aani jaani hai, Radha to mann ki rani hai..."

Urmi's facial expressions change to blushes, she turns towards him and puts her arms around his neck and says, "You know you are a b@*$%#d"
DV: "I know"
Urmi: "Scoundrel"
DV: "That's me...."
Urmi: "Irritating"
DV: "yaa...."
Urmi: "n still I love you"
DV: "I know that too"
Urmi: "But I still don't know why I love you...."
DV: "But you know why I love you? Because you give me so much space...."
Urmi's face bears an uncomfortably surprised and she shouts "WHATT??" n is about to punch him when,
"VIJAY BHAIYA!!!! RECORDING STUDIO SE CHAAR BAAR PHONE AA CHUKA HAI, JALDI KARIYE, BREAKFAST READY HAI!!!" (VIJAY BHAIYA!!!!RECORDING STUDIO HAVE CALLED FOUR TIMES, PLEASE HURRY UP, BREAKFAST' READY!!!)
Radhe's voice breaks their conversation and Urmi snaps "Lo Krishna Kanhaiya, aa gaya tumhari Radha ka bulawa" (Here Krishna Kanhaiya, here comes the call of your Radha) DV looks in an irritated way towards the shut door, "Abe Bauji ke chamche, tere Vijay ki to main...... kitni baar kaha hai mujhe DV kaha kar" (You Bauji's stupid follower, and your Vijay thing... how many times I've told him to call me DV) and looks at Urmi and continues "It goes with the IMAGE" makes a disappointed expression and says, "Time to go baby, Love is not food of life, you know!!"
Urmi: "Yeah, I do, jao nahaa lo, main tumhare kapde select karti hoon, waise bhi ye kaunsa mushkil hai, tumhare saare kapde sirf black hi hote hain" (Yeah, I do, go n bathe, I'll select your clothes, and its so easy too, all of them are only in black) She opens his cupboard and while running through the all-black wardrobe asks "Tell me one thing DV, tumhe koi aur rang kabhi kyun pasand nahi aata? why only black?" (Tell me one thing DV, why don't you ever like any other colour? why only black?)

Wow, Nikkie! I am relatively new here, so i don't know you, but you've returned at the right time 😉

welcome back,first ov all🤗,i always liked ur posts and analysis of BP episodes👍🏼,i was a silent member of this forum then.ur script is really something to praise for👏👏👏👏,let's see how the story unfolds,waiting for 2nd episode😍 😉😛
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FEEDBACK REQUEST:
Thanks for the response guys, 2nd epi coming up next weekend 😊

Yes this one is loosely based on exploitation of women too, so we'll have a lot of girl power involved, and I m gonna use many names from Bairi Piya, the serial here like I did Amoli, Digvijay, Kaumudi, and Tani for starters.

Any other names you'd like included? Let me tell you guys, this story has Radhey, Urmilla, Chandana, Dipesh, Shobhna, and last but not the least Puneet, all with their own respective angles, would you guys like anyone else included???

I couldn't add a Maataji since it is a modern version of Bairi Piya a more city-like story about the dark showbiz world and a mother for an anti-hero like Digvijay might just make it outdated.

And guess what since Digvijay is a modern character, he'll be called DV here, most of the times, isn't it cool???
And does anyone remember the name of Amoli's mother? I 've forgotten her name 😕 and m too lazy to surf the forum for one.......

AND Please no names from the original family of Amoli, I mean Amoli's real mother's house, that track was really sick and was the major reason I stopped seeing BP.
I'd also like a suggestion about what song should've been sung by Amoli in the opening scene.

Originally posted by: Pankaj205

Wow, Nikkie! I am relatively new here, so i don't know you, but you've returned at the right time 😉

A blind Amoli......I love it!

Pls don't give her back her eye-sight.....at least not for sometime.

Infact it would be great if the despotic Digvijay could be made to "see" the world

through her un-seeing eyes.

Here's to woman-power on our screens!

Look forward to the next episode....

No, Her being blind is quite a major thing in the story and she won't get cured for quite some time....

Originally posted by: swfer

welcome back,first ov all🤗,i always liked ur posts and analysis of BP episodes👍🏼,i was a silent member of this forum then.ur script is really something to praise for👏,let's see how the story unfolds,waiting for 2nd episode😍 😉😛
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Yes I was the leader of Anti-DV club partnered by ishmine

Nikkie dear, WELCOME BACK....... Even I didn't know u at all till we met today, so am soooooo happy to get to know u too! And Pankaj205 is right, ur back just in the nick of time, dear! 😃

Episode 1:

The scene opens in the slums of Dharavi, Mumbai, where we see the darkest hour of the night disappear and the early hour of morning start and along with it we hear a melodious voice singing, (Space blank.... please suggest a song and I'll fill it here) The focus moves into a small house not very different from the others in the neighbourhood and we see a girl about 18 to 20 years of age dressed in a white salwar kameez singing with her eyes closed and a girl about 10-12 yers of age playing a flute beside her.
The song gets interrupted by a shrill voice calling, "Amoli, Tani, aa nashta kar le"(Amoli, Tani, Come and have your breakfast). The girl playing the flute stops instantly and screams "Amoli Taai, ab gaana band bhi karo, dekho Aai khaane bula rahi hai"(Amoli Taai (elder sister) please stop singing now, see Aai (Mother) is calling us to have food).

Amoli opens her eyes and says, "kya Tani har waqt khaana hi yaad rehta hai tujhe?"(Why are you always after food Tani?)
Taani: "Kya karoon taai, tujhe gaana accha lagta hai aur mujhe khaana"(What to do Taai, you love singing and so I love food)
Amoli gets up and Taani holds her hand and leads her to the other room and we come to know that the beautiful eyes of Amoli can't see.

They enter a room where their Aai is praying to a photo of Ganpati and beside it we see a garlanded picture of a girl who is probably dead and says "Kaash tu bhi zinda hoti Kaumudi to dekh paati ki teri dono behnein kitna accha gaane lagi hai, Amoli ki awaz mein to saakshat Saraswati ka waas hai, par main use kabhi apne is hunar ko kisi ke saamne nahi aane doongi, main nahi chahti ki jaise tu humse door chali gayi waise wo bhi chali jaaye......" (Only if you had been alive Kaumudi, you'd 've been so happy to se your sisters singing so well, Godess Saraswati herself resides in Amoli's voice, but I'll never let this talent of hers come before the world, because I don't want her to go away like you did) And she starts crying.....

"Kaun kahan jaa raha hai Aai, hum to abhi khaane ke liye aaye aur aap hume bhej rahe ho" (Who's going where Aai? we just came here to eat and you're sending us off?)Tani starts shrilling as soon as she enters with Amoli and Amoli has to interrupt her "Bas kar Tani, ab itna chillayegi to khaana thanda ho jayega, chal khaate hain" (Stop it Tani, if you keep shouting so much, the food will cool down, come, lets eat)
They sit down and Amoli asks, "Baba kahan hai Aai?" (Where is Baba(Father) Aai?)
Aai: "Tujhe apne gaane mein kisi ki sudh rehti hai kya, tere Baba kab ka kha ke chale gaye" (You lose all senses while singing, Baba ate and left long time ago)

Tani removes the lid of the vessel and says, "Kya Aai, tune phir idli sambhar banaya hai? pata hai na khatta khane se galaa kharaab ho jaata hai? Mera to thik hai par Amoli Taai ne agar ye khaya to unka gala kharaab nahi ho jayega? Tab wo gaana kaise gaayegi aur audition kaise degi aur singer kaise banegi?" (What Aai? you made idli-sambhar again? You know it well that eating sour food can harm the voice? its OK for me but if Amoli Taai eats this then won't her voice be affected? Then how'll she sing, give auditions and become a singer?)

Aai: (angrily) "Koi zarurat nahi singer banne ki, ghar mein gaati hai wo hi bahut hai"(There is no need to become a singer, she sings at home, that's enough)

Tani: "Par Taai jo jis kaam mein accha hai use wahi karna chahiye na? Kya dikkat hai singer banne mein? Tune Kaumudi Taai se to kabi kuch nahi kaha?" (But shouldn't one do what he's good at? What is the problem in being a singer? You never said anything to Kaumudi Taai?)
Aai's anger crosses all limits and she slaps Tani, in turn Tani pushes her plate away and runs out of the house crying.
Amoli gropes to reach her hand towards Aai's face and wipes her tears, and then holds her shoulder to console her, "Chinta mat kar Aai, mujhe pata hai Tani kahan hogi, main usko lekar aati hun" (Don't Worry Aai, I know where she might have gone, I'll bring her back) then she picks up her walking stick and goes outside.....

Aai runs towards Kaumudi's photo and starts crying, "Tu jaanti hai na main aisa kyun kar rahi hun, ek beti ko khokar main doosri ko bhi us duniya mein nahi bhej sakti. Kitne sapne dekhe the humne tere liye, sab khatam ho gaya, humne tujhe kho diya aur Amoli ki aankhon ki roshni bhi chali gayi, sab........ sab us ek insaan ki wajah se....... Bhagwaan use kabhi maaf nahi karenge, Wo Digvijay, wo kabhi khush nahi rahega......." (Don't you know, why I am doing this? After losing one daughter, I can't afford to send another to the same world. We had so many dreams, everything got shattered, we lost you, and Amoli lost her eyesight, everything........ everything because of one person....... God won't ever forgive him, That Digvijay, he'll never remain happy )

Welcum bac Nikkie 😃

Welcome Nikkie on IF after a long time nice to see you here..

Excellent storyline dear loved it and eagerly waiting for the next episode wel done keep it up👍🏼