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Posted: 14 years ago
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Episode 2:

Cut to the lawn of a beautiful bungalow, where we see an old man engrossed in reading a newspaper and then a male voice breaks the serene silence, "Bauji chai aa gai aapki",(here's your tea, Bauji(father)) The news-paper moves and we see an old man with a face seeming to have the golden knowledge which we can call experience. An instant smile rushes on to his face and he says, "Are Radhe tu kyun laaya, saare naukar kahan gaye?"(Hey Radhe, why did you bring it? where are the servants?) And we see Radhe, a young man with an innocent face but having a firmness and he says, "Naukar le aata to aap shakkar nahi dalwa lete usmein?"(Had a servant brought it, wouldn't you have added sugar to it?)
Bauji's facial expressions change as if he was caught stealing, "Tu nahi sudhrega Radhe, ek din bhi shakkar nahi khane deta"(You'll never mend your ways Radhe, you never let me have sugar) and then he softens "Par main ye bhi jaanata hun ki agar main zinda hum to teri wajah se, tu mera beta nahi hai phir bhi, kaash Vijay bhi tujhse kuch seekh pata"(But I know that today I am alive only because of you, even though you aren't my son, only if Vijay could learn something from you)
Radhe begins making the tea and says, "Seekh lete to Radhe na ban jaate, phir is duniya ko super-singer and composer DV kaise milta, bataiye? Ek baat bataiye Bauji, aap hamesha Vijay bhaiya ko Vijay kyun kehte hain, unhe to ye bilkul accha nahi lagta?"(If he'd have learnt, then wouldn't have become Radhe? Then how would the world have got the super-singer and composer DV? But tell me one thing Bauji, Why do you always address Vijay bhaiya (brother) as Vijay, when he odesn't like it one bit?)

Bauji chuckles n says "Baat ye hai beta ki jab wo paida hua to uski maa Amitabh Bacchan ki bahu badi fan thi aur uska naam Vijay rakhna chahti thi, par main is baat se bahut jalta tha, isliye usko bina bataye birth certificate par Vijay ke jagah DigVijay likhwa aaya"(The fact is that when he was born, his mother was a huge fan of Amitabh Bacchan and wanted to name him Vijay, but I was really jealous of this, so I secretly got the name Vijay changed to Digvijay on the birth certificate without telling her)
Radhe starts laughing and says "unko pata chala hoga to bahut naraaz hui hogi na?" (Wasn't she really annoyed when she got to know this?)
Bauji suddenly turns sad "Haan beta, us raat wo bahut naraaz thi, jhagda karke apni maa ke paas ja rahi thi, aur phir kabhi nahi aayi, accident ho gaya uska" (Yes son, she was terribly annoyed that night, she was going to her mother's home after an argument, never to return again, she had an accident) Radhe stops smiling and turns serious while Bauji continues, "Isliye hamesha Digvijay ko Vijay bula ke is bahane usse maafi maang liya karta hun, shayad aisa main nahi karta to wo zinda hoti" (That is why I always call Digvijay as Vijay and on this pretext I try to ask her forgiveness, because if I hadn't done this, she'd have been alive)

"RADHE!!!! MERI BLACK-COFFEE KIDHAR HAI? SUN RAHA HAI TU?" (RADHE!!!! WHERE'S MY BLACK-COFFEE? ARE YOU LISTENING?) A loud voice breaks the conversation and Radhe gets up startled and hurriedly goes inside, while Bauji looks up in the sky and snaps in a satirical way, "Vijay ki maa, agar tum apne Vijay ko aise dekhti to phir se mar jaati, pata nahi is baar kisko leke aaya tha kal raat" (Vijay's mom, if you'd have seen, your Vijay like this, you'd have died again, heaven knows whom did he bring with him this time, last night)

Radhe rushes to the dining table makes two cups of black coffee, places the cups on the tray and as soon as he is about to rush upstairs, the doorbell rings. The ringing is frantic as if someone desperately wants the door to open. Radhe is about to go up but seeing no servant opening it, he goes to the doorwith the tray and opens it.
The door opens and we see a modern girl dressed in shorts and a tube top, seeing Radhe open the door she exclaims, "Here comes my toy, Good Morning sweet heart" and starts moving her finger on his face while Radhe is feeling very awkward.
"RADHE!!!! BLACK-COFFEE LAA BHI RAHA HAI KI NAHI?" (RADHE!!!! ARE YOU GETTING MY BLACK-COFFEE OR NOT?) the loud voice come again and both get starled. Radhe replies as loudly, "Laaya Vijay bhaiya"(Just getting it Vijay Bhaiya) and the girl resumes her flirting, "Saale tere maa-baap ne soch samajh ke tera naam Radhe rakkha hai, Ladkiyon wala naam, dikhta bhi ladki hai aur harkatein bhi ladkiyon ki karta hai" (Rascal, your parents mush've thought over this and named you Radhe, a feminine name, feminine looks and you act like girls too) she says while continuing her caressing his face.
Radhe seems too awkward and replies, "Urmilla Bhabi, aap upar jaiye na, Bhaiya upar hain" (Urmila Bhabi (brother's wife) please go upstairs, Bhaiya is upstairs) The girl stops and her naughty expressions change into soft and caring ones, she places both her hand on Radhe's cheeks and says "kasam se bolti hun Radhe, tu jab mujhe Bhabi kehta hai na, lagta hai main saatve aasman pe pahuch gayi" ( I swear Radhe, when you call me Bhabi, I feel elated to the core) and then removes her hand and says, "Par tera ye Bhaiya mujhe Bhabhi banayega tab na banungi main teri Bhabhi, nau saal se hamara affair chal raha hai, aur ye hai ki ab tak shaadi ke liye nahi maanta, laa de main jaati hun coffee lekar" (But this can happen only when your Bhaiya wishes to, for the past 9 years we are having our affair and he still doesn't agree for marriage, Give it to me, I'll take the coffee) she takes the tray away and goes up the stairs.

Bauji was witnessing all this from the lawn, he calls Radhe and ask, "Tu us Phuljhadi Urmila se kya baat kar raha tha?" (What conversation were you having with that firework Urmila?)
Radhe: "Kya Bauji aap bhi na, wo Bhaiya se milne aayi hai" (What Bauji? she's come to meet Bhaiya) and then he sits beside him and says, "Main aaj tak ek baat nahi samjha Bauji, aap Urmi Bhabhi ko itna napasand kyun karte hain, mujhe to lagta hai Bhaiya ke liye sabse acchi ladki wo hi hain, unke jaisi Bhaiya ko koi nahi mil sakti, Bhaiya ka har sach jaane ke baad bhi unse kitna pyaar karti hain, unki har pasand-napasand ka khayal rakhti hai, unhe kitni acchi tarah samajhti hai wo aur aap hain ki....." (I never understood one thing Bauji, Why do you dislike Urmi Bhabi so much? I feel she's the best girl for Bhaiya, he'll never get a better girl, even after knowing every truth about Bhaiya, she still loves him, takes care of every like-dislike of his, understands him so well and you.....)

Bauji's usual light-hearted face turns stern as he interrupts and replies "Beta main teri baat samajhta hun par tu meri baat nahi samajhta, Urmila bahut acchi ladki hai, bahut pyaar karti hai Vijay se, use bahut acchi tarah samajhti bhi hai, par Vijay ko aisi ladki nahi chahiye jo use samjhe, balki aisi jo use badal sake, use sudhar sake, aur main jaanta hun aisi ladki zaroor milegi use". (Son perfectly understand what you want to say, but you don't understand my point, Urmila is a very good girl, she really loves Vijay, understands him too, but Vijay doesn't need a girl who understnds him but one who can change him, mend him and I know he'll definitely get one) And then we see Urmila reach the door of a room with a big smile on her face. She is about to knock, and then thinks and opens the door without knocking.
The smile on her face vanishes and shock takes its place.
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Posted: 14 years ago
#12
awesome episode again👏👏👏👏,brilliant👍🏼,u knw urmila and dv having an affair for nine years and still not married and on da top ov it urmi in modern avatar are the best and the coolest part ov ur plot,really liked babu ji and radhe characters,ur character sketches are really good😳,i really liked dv's mom character but if dv's mom can't be introduced,can't dv have any khala,boa or daai maa(maid who've brought up dv like her own child,really love him but doesn't support him in his wrong doings)sort ov character.i'm just giving a suggestion if it cud be added or adjusted in ur plot.😉,really waiting for the hot moment wen dv will be introduced in the story😊😉,u r 2 gud,i can even visualize ur story.😳
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Brilliant episode once again 👏👏 I luv the idea of Urmi in shorts n comtemporary look..... I loved her as a thakurain n i can see her as a modern chic............. As Sobia said try n fit in DV's mum if u can .............she played a pivotal role in BP n i wud like 2 see her in ur story
Awaiting ur nex dhamakedaar epi 😍
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Excellent epi nikkie especially liked the name phuljhadi for urmi
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thanks for your responses guys......
Not that it isn't possible, but Digvijay is a rich spoilt guy who doesn't respect women because he himself doesn't have a single woman in his home. His father and then Radhe took care of him so I don't think a mother figure will suit the story.
Oh n BTW 3rd episode is written, with DV's entry
Are you guys ready???
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Ur welcum Nikkie
N definitely ............im dying 2 see n read about DV's zabardast entry........... naik kam mein deri kyun............. do post it 👍🏼
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Episode 3:


The door opens and Urmi's expressions turn pale, she goes up to the bed holds an arm, probably to wake the sleeping person up and shouts, "GET OUT!!!! What the hell are you doing here?" The bedsheet moves and we see a really haute blonde, (and do I need to mention what she was doing there? Those who know our DV can guess it well. Please all of you make assumptions)
So the blonde carelessly opens her eyes and say, "Hey baby!! Got the Coffee for me?"
Urmi had had enough and all we heard was, "Get Lost, What the hell are you doing here? and where's DV?"
"Here Baby!!! Just behind you...." Urmi turns around and beside the blonde's feet the sheet moves and a face pops out, "Here am I as hot as ever!!!" and that he was, dressed in a black vest and black shorts he emerges from his black bedsheet smiling naughtily towards Urmi and checks her out from top to toe and exclaims, "Aaj kitno ka khoon kiya yahan aate hue? Tumhe phaansi pe kyun nahi chadhaa dete ye police waale?" (How many did you kill today while arriving here? Why don't these policemen get you hanged?)
But Urmi was not in the mood to listen, she points her finger to him and says, "DV tum na...."(DV you....) and he holds her finger, pulls it to hold her wrist and then twists her hand and forcibly makes her sit down on the bed and looks at the blonde and says, "Sarah, your work's done, reach the shoot at 12:30 sharp and you'll get the role"
"Thanks DV!!!" she moves and her hand to touch his face which he holds back with his other hand with which he wasn't holding and says firmly, "Leave!!"
The blonde snaps "Ohkay..." picks the gown beside her, wears it n leaves the room shutting the door behind her and muttering "b@*$%#d.....".

And then DV while firmly holding on to the wrist of Urmi, touches the shoulder of Urmi's other hand which he wasn't holding and caresses his way up to the tray which was in her hand, takes it from her and puts it on the side table. Urmila frantically tries to free her held wrist from him and say, "Mera haath chodo DV mujhe dard ho raha hai?" (Leave my hand DV its paining)
DV leaves it and Urmi looks at her wrist which has turned red due to tight holding. She looks angrily and DV and is about to get up but DV pulls her back, lies back on his bed and Urmi falls over him and he says "Aur jo dard mujhe hoga uska kya, agar tum mujhe choddh ke chali gayi?" (And what about the pain I'll have when you leave me and go?)
"Really?? To wo angrez yahan kya kar rahi thi?" (Really?? so what was that blonde doing here?) Urmi retorts.
DV: "Apna kaam!" (Her work)
Urmi: "Achha? Kaunsa kaam?" (Really? Which Work?)
DV: "Are hamare agle album ke video ki model ke audition pe aayi thi, I asked her for a PROPER audition, aur wo maan gayi! That's it..." (Oh, she just came for the audition for the model of my next video, I asked her for a PROPER audition, n she agreed! That's it...)
Urmi: "That's it? To main yahan kya kar rahi hun?" (That's it? so what am I doing here?) she pushes him off and gets up from the bed and stands in fornt of the window while looking out and still speaking "Jaake ek aur angrez le aao, tumhe to roz ek mil jaayegi na? Krishna Kanhaiya ki bhi itni gopiyan nahi hongi jitni apne Rockstar DV ke one-night stands hote hain" (Then go and get another blonde, you'll get a new one everyday right? Even Krishna Kanhaiya might not have had that many gopis as our Rockstar DV have had one night stands)
DV gets up from his bed goes up to her and holds her from behind, she tries to free herself and he starts humming,
"Gopiyaan taare hain, Chaand hai Radha.....
Phir kyun hai usko Vishwaas aadha....
Gopiyaan aani jaani hai, Radha to mann ki rani hai...
"

Urmi's facial expressions change to blushes, she turns towards him and puts her arms around his neck and says, "You know you are a b@*$%#d"
DV: "I know"
Urmi: "Scoundrel"
DV: "That's me...."
Urmi: "Irritating"
DV: "yaa...."
Urmi: "n still I love you"
DV: "I know that too"
Urmi: "But I still don't know why I love you...."
DV: "But you know why I love you? Because you give me so much space...."
Urmi's face bears an uncomfortably surprised and she shouts "WHATT??" n is about to punch him when,
"VIJAY BHAIYA!!!! RECORDING STUDIO SE CHAAR BAAR PHONE AA CHUKA HAI, JALDI KARIYE, BREAKFAST READY HAI!!!" (VIJAY BHAIYA!!!!RECORDING STUDIO HAVE CALLED FOUR TIMES, PLEASE HURRY UP, BREAKFAST' READY!!!)
Radhe's voice breaks their conversation and Urmi snaps "Lo Krishna Kanhaiya, aa gaya tumhari Radha ka bulawa" (Here Krishna Kanhaiya, here comes the call of your Radha) DV looks in an irritated way towards the shut door, "Abe Bauji ke chamche, tere Vijay ki to main...... kitni baar kaha hai mujhe DV kaha kar" (You Bauji's stupid follower, and your Vijay thing... how many times I've told him to call me DV) and looks at Urmi and continues "It goes with the IMAGE" makes a disappointed expression and says, "Time to go baby, Love is not food of life, you know!!"
Urmi: "Yeah, I do, jao nahaa lo, main tumhare kapde select karti hoon, waise bhi ye kaunsa mushkil hai, tumhare saare kapde sirf black hi hote hain" (Yeah, I do, go n bathe, I'll select your clothes, and its so easy too, all of them are only in black) She opens his cupboard and while running through the all-black wardrobe asks "Tell me one thing DV, tumhe koi aur rang kabhi kyun pasand nahi aata? why only black?" (Tell me one thing DV, why don't you ever like any other colour? why only black?)
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Posted: 14 years ago
#18
Wowwwwwwww
DV is DV ......kabhi nahin sudrega 😉😆
I see how ur getting expolitation of woman in the story........fab work 👏
Black is reallt 1 colour which perfectly suits Dv....... really brings out da devil 😈
Waiting 4 nex..........
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wow this is amazing...the way you have etched out the characters and the dialogues is awesome and also your so thoughtful that you have put the dialogues in both hindi and english and also posting teh links for teh previous episodes...

not only are you very good at creative writing but your also very thoughtful

hats off to you👏👏👏👏👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Great Nikkie, thanks.

A suggestion....
Could you start a new thread for each episode you post? It makes it easier to read & at the same time will help promote the BP rank here.

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