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umayal

@LuvSSever

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: peeyara

Modest toh mai hoon :P Radio pe suna tha 😆
I wont be bothered infact I will be happy to read ur comments 😳 and cos of u i am revisiting my own stories❤️
It was silent love story n they had hardly 2-3 stories 😆

Pleasure is mine to read And comment...i shuld thnk u for the links..

Ok u heard on radio and visualized it this way...too good...

Edited by LuvSSever - 8 years ago

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: peeyara

Hahaha u read it
Its my fav work...i love this Os very much 😆
Bht bht Maza aaya tha...and comments bhi bht entertaining the 😆

S it was super one naseem...my fav too indeed among i read now..chancelesss, the humour in it was awesome...

Oh comments were also entertaining, then i will go thru tht too once😳😆

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#33

Hi,

I now finished reading another two Os of urs..

First one is Rekindling love Os ...its too good,beautiful emotional writeup...

Its always touches you when u are taken thru a emotional ride on raya..

Raya binded by real time difficulties, ram took the unwilling decision of divorce, priya went ahead with it due to her guilt too but same time with her thought process tht she can rekindled their love with her condition... And it did worked, those six day helped her and finally raya ended up again being one...

And the final scene of ram asking for a remarriage and priya, oh culd image Rashi there... :)

Nice one, title , story ,Raya all picture perfect.

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#34

Second one i read is Humdard..

I shuld tell you that, as a writer , u did succed in making our brain work for some time...😆

Atleast brain did work for sometime to guess whom you are talking about...

First i thought it wuld be Ram,and oh the story is after 25yrs of their relationship, but now why they are separating like tht...

Then when story progress and there is a stress on HIS entry into her life, then got ok, this HIS represents Ram, then its someone else or something related to Priya.

Second thought after ram, was on her fav things... may be her diary or book...

For a second, i thought was it the couch on Ram bedroom😆,bcoz u said priya accidently slept by it side, then thought nah nah,priya isnt so fond of couch, neither she spend her thoughts with it nor its a part of her life for past 25yrs...😆

So finally when u said ram doesnt like her ex-love, then finalized, ok its priya's fav books, b4 ram they are the only one travelled everywhere with priya, even to honeymoon...😆

And its thought of hw pretty she looks while smiling, so true it is...g😳

And cannot he hug her outside the room was...😆

And book's humdard laptop, ram ex- love..😆

Too good, i am surprised u came up with such a love story ...

Based on raya's life...

U shuld hv focussed on Ram's tablets...tablets luv story with ram wuld be like a balaji one with triangle rectangle luv story with priya in pic,and too masala it wuld be...😆

Here ur book was a cute genuine exlover who respected priya happiness ...😳

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#35

😆Hi naseem,

Me again..

I read your Os Aankhon Aankhon Mai..

Cute os with love at first sight for Raya.

Shaadhi mei , such match does happen at times..heard it.

U had written nicely, raya mesmerized by each other thru eyes only, love happening, priya taking first step, ever helping neha helped and finally Raya together ...so not so willingly they came to marriage but their match happened.

Sab kuch fast paced...

Story was nice dear, for reading,fictional its always ok.but real mei na, I don't believe in love at first sight yaar... I don't understand it at all , how could it happen so fast like that...😕😆.. For me love is something that happens with time and understanding each other...

I mean this cannot live without each other and more intense ones does happen only with time and understanding..that feel cannot happen all of a sudden for me at least...

Edited by LuvSSever - 8 years ago

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#36

Other two os mumma I will marry you and saigal one I HV already read and commented in respective thread.

And the remaining one is Step Mom..since u quoted it as incomplete , I first left it...not to read now, but couldn't stop😳😆..read it...

With the title and ur intro, I came to know ok,the story is to be focused and emphasised on priya pihu relationship, where priya is a step mom to pihu..

I got it...and reading first part ,I thought, since ur thought was to emphasis on priya pihu, u thrown little efforts on ram priya back story and ram ananya story...

Bcoz focus on those were less on first part..

I thought , just to come direct to the place were pihu,priya stand as mom and daughter, u even rushed ram and priya marriage too..bcoz it cant happen in such a hurry..

But Ur second part was a total ulta...all those focus which I thought u left in first part due to the main centric story, u focussed in second and told details...uff...itna happened and Ram was portrayed as who sticks to his name..😆

But fine, I loved ur writeup on pihu,kush priya conversations..too good enjoyed...I think you are the one who could come up with such cute funny convos ..

Priya way of handling pihu was nice.

Hmm from one place, priya is able to get all details..grt...

I would love to read further of this story .

Dear , if you are interested, have time, intended to continue, then please continue... I would luv to see a happy ending of it...

Edited by LuvSSever - 8 years ago

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SakshiAddict

@SakshiAddict

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#37

Finally able to finish all the stories

Awesome👏

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peeyara

@peeyara

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 8 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

S it was super one naseem...my fav too indeed among i read now..chancelesss, the humour in it was awesome...
Oh comments were also entertaining, then i will go thru tht too once😳😆

read that entire thread.it was hilarious 🤣

this OS n thread is my stress buster 😆

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peeyara

@peeyara

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 8 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: LuvSSever
Hi,
I now finished reading another two Os of urs..
First one is Rekindling love Os ...its too good,beautiful emotional writeup...
Its always touches you when u are taken thru a emotional ride on raya..
Raya binded by real time difficulties, ram took the unwilling decision of divorce, priya went ahead with it due to her guilt too but same time with her thought process tht she can rekindled their love with her condition... And it did worked, those six day helped her and finally raya ended up again being one...
And the final scene of ram asking for a remarriage and priya, oh culd image Rashi there... :)

Nice one, title , story ,Raya all picture perfect.

yeh bhi chori ka hai 🤣

fb pe 1 min ka video clip dekha tha toh usey Raya story bana diya 😆..i so loved that video k i decided to write OS on it 😆

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peeyara

@peeyara

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 8 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: LuvSSever
Second one i read is Humdard..
I shuld tell you that, as a writer , u did succed in making our brain work for some time...😆
Atleast brain did work for sometime to guess whom you are talking about...

First i thought it wuld be Ram,and oh the story is after 25yrs of their relationship, but now why they are separating like tht...
Then when story progress and there is a stress on HIS entry into her life, then got ok, this HIS represents Ram, then its someone else or something related to Priya.

Second thought after ram, was on her fav things... may be her diary or book...
For a second, i thought was it the couch on Ram bedroom😆,bcoz u said priya accidently slept by it side, then thought nah nah,priya isnt so fond of couch, neither she spend her thoughts with it nor its a part of her life for past 25yrs...😆

So finally when u said ram doesnt like her ex-love, then finalized, ok its priya's fav books, b4 ram they are the only one travelled everywhere with priya, even to honeymoon...😆

And its thought of hw pretty she looks while smiling, so true it is...g😳
And cannot he hug her outside the room was...😆

And book's humdard laptop, ram ex- love..😆

Too good, i am surprised u came up with such a love story ...
Based on raya's life...
U shuld hv focussed on Ram's tablets...tablets luv story with ram wuld be like a balaji one with triangle rectangle luv story with priya in pic,and too masala it wuld be...😆
Here ur book was a cute genuine exlover who respected priya happiness ...😳