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Posted: 12 years ago
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Part 3: Something lost

Ram has tears in his eyes.. How could he have done this? Tears trickle down his eyes.. Rajat cannot see the pain in his friends eyes..
Rajat: Ram sab tik hojaayega.. Isme teri galthi nahi thi..
Vikram: Neha yeh is insaan ko maaf kaise karsaktha hai.. With Anger in his eyes..
Neha: Aap dono fresh hojaayiye..
She is unable to react.. Is she angry? Upset.. She looks at Vilram an gives an empty look..
Nutzgoes to Dadi and Krishnaji and explains to Krishna jii that its better that she takes the children with her to Amritsar for a holiday till things settle down.. Though they are unaware of whats happening.. They decide to support Nutz..

She comes down and Asks Bansi kaka to maje breakfast as the children are leaving for a holiday..

She is worried for Rishab and give him a call..
Nutz: Bhai aap kaha ho?
Rishab: we are coming.. Woh police station mein kuc kaam tha.. Did bhabi tell you about Amri..
Befor he could finish..
Nutz: Haan Rishab.. She thought it would be nice if the kids could spend Cristmas.. Tumdono ki cheezon kocpack kardiya hai.. Aaj aap jaraheho..
Rishab: Abhi?
Nutz: haan zaroori hai.. Bacche zid karrahe hai..
She cuts the call to avoid further questions..

Why did bhabi not allow me to.. She is a little worried as Priya asks her to stay back..

Nutz: Bhabi.. Aap..
Priya: Haan woh.. she closes her eyes as h speaks.. Mujhe kuch kaam hai.. Aur gha mein tumhaari zaroorath zyada hai..
Nutz understood what Priya was talking about..
Nutz: Priya.. Haan.. An call me when you reach..

Nutz.. ek taraf pyaar ek taraf nafrat.. Aur dusri aur.. Years fill her eyes.. She rushes to the kitchen making some chai and goes into Rams room..
Rajat is sitting on the couch looking at a picture of Ram and Priya..
Rajat: Im sorry Priya.. Ram ko:.
Nutz come kneels down an wipes his tears..
Nutz: Kya meun aapko bhai bulasakthi hu?
Rajat: haan.. Mein woh..
Nutz: aapko kuch kehene ki xaroorath nahi hai:. Philhaal toh aap yeh garam garam chai pijiye.. An smiles at him..
Ram comes ou of the washroom..

Nutz leaves the extra cup of chai on the table and leaves..
Ram hides his teara and has his chai..

At Airport:

Priya.. Should I call him.. I was too rude to him.. Aur unki galathi bhi kya hai..
Picks up the phone..

Priya: Suniye.. Meon kuch zyada hi bolgayi.. Closes her eyes tightly as her name is being called out.. Walking towards the check in.. : Im sorry..

To be continued..

Hi everyone.. I hope its interesting for all of you..
I am open to your guesses.. Infact your curiosity i my inspiration! So enjoy commenting.. Th more you comment the faster ill keep updating.. Enjoy!
If thwre is something youd like to suggest or want me to add.. Plz do let me know!
Good noght for now!

Thankyou.

Love,
L.
Edited by nehaprasad1994 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#22
aww raya fight...😕
mat jao priya...ram needs you
waiting for next
thanks 4 d pm
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Posted: 12 years ago
#23
Continued...

Priya senses a relief.. In a whisper Priya.. Sorry woh.. And a smile creeps on her face..
Priya: Ji.. It's ok..
Sensing a smile on the other side she whispers a bye..

She walks swiftly and boards the flight..

Scene shifts to KM:

Nutz Rahul and Rehaan make sure the kids get ready.. Everyone is seated at the table.. There is laughter and smiles on everyones faces seeing the children chirp away.. Rishab an Soumya join them after freshning up.

The children set off with Daadi Krishuji Rishab and soumya..

Nutz: Ite already 7.00.. Papa abhi tak ute nahi..
She rushes to their room.. She slowly pushes the door only to find the couple in deep sleep.. She comes back with chai.. And wakes Sudhir up..

Sudhir: Thankyou beta..
Nutz: Thanks kisliye.. Papa aap yeh sab chodiye.. Aur jaldi se tayaar hojaayiye.. Aaj aap dono ko aaj Amritsar jaana hai..
Sudhir: mein to tayaar hojaaunga.. Lekin.
Nutz: mein dekhlungi papa.. Aap fikr mat kijiye..

She leaves..

In RAYA room:

Ram: Tum isi room mein rukho jab tak..
Rajat interrupts as he notices Ram's voice choking..
Rajat: Ram tum aaraam karo.. Mein office jaaraha hu..

To be continued..

Priya thinking.. Yeh kaisi bechaini hai..
Lawyer: knocking on the door.. May i come in Nrs. Kapoor?


How is this everyone.. ? Im a littl worried if im writing properly..

Thankyou.. Waiting for your comments criticism and suggestions..

Love,
L.

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Posted: 12 years ago
#24
yah i am liking it
waiting for the mystery to unfold
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Posted: 12 years ago
#25
ya i like it and its very interesting !!!! plz continue soon!!!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#26
Continued...

Priya senses a relief.. In a whisper Priya.. Sorry woh.. And a smile creeps on her face..
Priya: Ji.. It's ok..
Sensing a smile on the other side she whispers a bye..

She walks swiftly and boards the flight..

Scene shifts to KM:

Nutz Rahul and Rehaan make sure the kids get ready.. Everyone is seated at the table.. There is laughter and smiles on everyones faces seeing the children chirp away.. Rishab an Soumya join them after freshning up.

The children set off with Daadi Krishuji Rishab and soumya..

Nutz: Ite already 7.00.. Papa abhi tak ute nahi..
She rushes to their room.. She slowly pushes the door only to find the couple in deep sleep.. She comes back with chai.. And wakes Sudhir up..

Sudhir: Thankyou beta..
Nutz: Thanks kisliye.. Papa aap yeh sab chodiye.. Aur jaldi se tayaar hojaayiye.. Aaj aap dono ko aaj Amritsar jaana hai..
Sudhir: mein to tayaar hojaaunga.. Lekin.
Nutz: mein dekhlungi papa.. Aap fikr mat kijiye..

She leaves..

In RAYA room:

Ram: Tum isi room mein rukho jab tak..
Rajat interrupts as he notices Ram's voice choking..
Rajat: Ram tum aaraam karo.. Mein office jaaraha hu..
He leaves with an awkwardsness.. Thinking.. (Yeh kaisi bechaini hai.. Mujhe aisa kyu lagraha hai ki meri har saas pe koi karz rakha hai..)

Ram: Talking to himself.. Priya yeh tum kya kar rahi ho? Ek galthi ke karan.. Tum itne saari zindagiyon ke saath.. Kyu?
The heavy dosage eventually puts him off to sleep..

Scene shifts to the living room.. Surprisingly Shipra has quietly got her stuff ready and silently comes down behing Sudhir..

Nutz: Bansi kaaka!..
BK: Ji madam..
Nutz: Inke saaman rakhdijiye.. Aur waha yeh sab aapke responsibility hai..
BK: Ji madam.. Aap befikar rahiye..

Nutz: Papa.. Mumiji.. Looking into Shipra's eyes.. Aap apna khayal rakhiyega..
Shipra: Nutz beta.. Mujhe maaf kardo...
Her eyes filled with tears..
Nutz: Jaathe wakt muskuraana chahiye.. Engulfing both of them in a hug..
Sudhir: Chalo beta.. Sab ka khayal rakhna..

They leave.. Nutz turns around and suddenly bumps into VikNeha who have been dilusional.. All they hav been doing the entire day is watch Nutz running around..

Nutz: Neha aapko Cafe jaana tha na.. Cady aur Daijaan aapki wait karrahe honge..

Neha remembers that Cady an Daijaan had stayed over at a hotel as per Priya's instructions..
Neha: haan woh mein.. Ill get ready and leave..
Vik: Nutz tum.. Yeh sab.. Thankyou..
Nutz: Sab apne hi toh hai bhai.. Aap chutti lijiye na.. Rajat bhai office gaye hai..
Vik: Haan.. Ofcourse.. Yeh bhi koi kehene ki baat hai..
Nutz: Tik hai mein Khana banaleti hu..

Scene shifts to flight:

Ther is a serinity in Priya's mind after the conversation.. She is tired.. Her eyes shut.. And she quickly dozez off..
The fight lands in Frankfurt for a stop.. It jas been 4 hours..
She quietly freshen up to catch th next flight to NY.. She completes the next check in procedures And boards the fight.. She sits lost in her train of thoughts..

In KI:

Rajat is restless.. He is not able to comprehen what happened.. He wants to talk to someone.. But whom?
He switches on his laptop.. Open s his IM.. Creates an accout Ehsaas: status update.. Aap se gila aapki kasam.. Sochthe rahe.. Karsake na hum..
He finds a member 'Ajnabi' whose status update says.. Rukhe rukhe se kadam, ruke baar baar chale.. Khayaal aisi hai ke dar ke bekaraar kare..


(Imagine their entire convo in bade acche paragraph tune.. Not the chorus but medle)

He clicks on it and sends a message..

Ehsaas:
Raahe bikere, manzil chute,
Kaisi hai yeh jeevan..
Sooni sooni hogayi kaisi,
Chaahat bhari yeh mehefil..

He lets out a sigh..

He walks and looks outside the large glass window of the cabin.. Hos world seems to be falling apart.. He walks back..

There is a reply..

Ajnabi:
Raahein kaisi manzil kaisi,
Adoori hai yeh jeevan..
Sooni sooni aankon mein kaisi,
Sapne sajaaye the hum..

Rajat has tears in his eyes.. He knows exactly what it means..
He types..

Ehsaas:
Dosti tooti, pyaar chooti,
Sapne roote humse..
Ghoongi hai hasseen yaadein,
Adoori dil ki dhadkan..

There are tears on the other side... Reading the message by Ehsaas.. Ajnabi signs off..

Rajat doent notice but signs off as he tries to gather himself..


To be continued..

Priya thinking.. Yeh kaisi bechaini hai..
Lawyer: knocking on the door.. May i come in Mrs. Kapoor?


How is this everyone.. ? Im a littl worried if im writing properly..

Thankyou.. Waiting for your comments criticism and suggestions..

Love,
L.



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Posted: 12 years ago
#27
Awesome...Plzzz continue...Wanna know the reason wats happening...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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its getting more n more interesting
continue soon...you write very well
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Posted: 12 years ago
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It's interesting no doubt, but u r creating suspense mire than to give a story, try to be a little clear in ur ideas, I don't want to hurt u but thus us what I feel actually and stop being tensed,u r writing is gud and its going great, continue ASAP
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: jineejiggs

It's interesting no doubt, but u r creating suspense mire than to give a story, try to be a little clear in ur ideas, I don't want to hurt u but thus us what I feel actually and stop being tensed,u r writing is gud and its going great, continue ASAP



Thankyou..
I will untangle things soon.. Thanks for telling me.. I build on the story and character now.. :-)

Love,
L.

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