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Posted: 12 years ago
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Part 7

They hold on to each other for a very very long time. After a while Ram cups Priyas face in his hand.

R: Tumhe pata hai, tum bahut smart ho. Tumhe pata hai ki mein tumse bahut der tak gussa ho hi nahi sakta. Haina ?

P : Ram mujhe pata hai ki saas lena kitna zaroori hota hai. I am really sorry for what I did. But now I promise I will never leave you.

R: I am sorry Priya. Meine tum pe bahut gussa kiya.

P: Puts her finger on his lips and one hand still on his chest. Jisse pyaar karte hai, usi se gussa karte hai. Jab bhi aapka gussa dekhti thi na. Mujhe yeh maaloom padta tha ki aap mujhse kitna pyaar karte hai.

Ram wipes her tears and says now no more tears ever.

P: Checks his hand again to see if its ok.

R: Priya mein thik hoon. Jab tumne mera haath apne haath me liya tha car mein. Tabse mujhe zara bhi dard nahi hua.

P: Thik usi tarah jaise aapne mujhe apni baahon mein liya tha us raat hotel mein. Jab mujhe bukhaar tha ?

R: Tum tum tum

P: Chuckles. Haanji. Mein mein mein

R: Par tum to behosh thi.

P: Par phir hosh mein bhi to aaye thi na. Mar toh'..

R:Ram puts her finger on her mouth and says bas''Aage kuch mat bolo

Just then Rams phone rings. He cuts the phone without even looking at who is calling.

R: Peehu kitne baje wapas aati hai school se?

P: abhi 3 ghante baaki hai.

R: Priya kya mein thodi der tumhare saath so sakta hoon. Bohot saalon se nahi soya.

P: Takes Ram inside the bedroom and makes him comfortable. Lies down next to him and puts her hand on his head and whispers in his ears I love you.

As soon as she says that Ram smile and next he is snoring. She sits there for a while and then goes to the kitchen to cook before the father daughter duo asks for it.

She just about reached the kitchen and Ram screams Priyaaa

She rushes inside and ram is sitting in the bed with sweat pouring down his head.

Ram mein yahi hoon. Mein kahi nahi gayi. Tum yahin par baitho. Par khana, hum bahar khana khayenge aaj. Tum, mein aur peehu. Tum bas yahin baitho.

She quickly understands his fear and slips in the bed in his arms and they both hug each other and take a nap.

Alarm goes off and Priya gets up. Gives a kiss on Rams forehead and says Peehu. Like a robot Ram wakes up.

R: Kahan hai.

P: School mein

R: toh toh kya hua use

P: Ram relax kuch nahi hua use, bas use lene jaana hai ab.

R: Haan chalo. Gets up freshens up and they both leave in the car.

They reach Peehus school and sees her coming from far away. Peehu looks at them and feels very happy.

Ram to show her that mumma papa and peehu will stay together, puts his arm around Priya. Peehu starts jumping and comes in his arms.

They sit in the car and just then Rams phone rings again. He sees its from home. He takes the call and its KrishnaJi. He takes the call''''''''''''.

Kris : Ram tum kahan ho ? Maa mein priya aur peehu ke saath hoon. Mere chote se parivaar ke saath.

Krishnaji almost starts jumping up n down. And in joy she says

"Beta, Zindagi mein bas yahi sunne ke liye mein taras gayi thi, khush raho "

She cuts the call.

Ram takes them both and goes to Priyas house. Ram helps Peehu in her homework and Priya is making food for them.

Priya: Chalo khana taiyaar hai.

Ram and peehu run excitedly to the table and find all their favourite food.

Peehu whispers in Rams ear. Papa aisa to kabhi nahi hua. Aaj hume apna pasand ka khana kyun mil raha hai.

Ram : Khao sawaal mat pucho nahi to Hitler wapas le legi.

They both eat and then Ram puts Peehu to sleep.

He comes out and looks around. Finds Priya standing at the window looking at the ocean. Ram goes and holds her from back.

Ram: Darlinggg. Kya soch rahi ho ?

Priya : Vikram-Neha aur Ayesha ke bare mein.

Ram: Aaj kya hum sirf hamari baat kar sakte hain.

Gently kissing her on her neck.

And it continues in the bedroom.

Morning light falls inside their room and them sleeping in each others arms.

Part 8 on Pg 12
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Part 2 1
Part 3 2
Part 4 3
Part 5 4
Part 6 7
Part 7 9
Part 8 12
Part 9 13
Part 10 14
Part 11 15
Part 12 19
Part 13 24
Part 14 27
Sp 1 21
Sp 2 21
Edited by kchinoy - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#62
Haaye my RaYa are back... That was sooo good... I loved it man...awesome... Finallyy the small and sweet family is together... Hope to see it on the show soon...
But u are a fab writer yaar... Just love u and ur writing... Plzz continue...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#63
Awww dat was so cute very well written so golu is back finally loved it
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Posted: 12 years ago
#64
Guys,
I have fallen into writers mental block now. So next one might take a little time. I dont want to write I am not sure about it. I want to make it interesting and still keep it about RAYA only.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#65
man it was yet another awesome update :) really loved it... hope u will give us next part asap ;D
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Posted: 12 years ago
#66
great writer u r!!!! i want same track in BALH as well:))
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Posted: 12 years ago
#67
glad to see that Ram's love win over his ego.. loved priya peehoo and ram altogether as a family.. wish we could see the same in real BALH soon too
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Posted: 12 years ago
#68
Beautifull..! Kaash in serial also ram love won over his ego. But until then u writters r there for as naa.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#69
i loved it !!! ...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#70
read the remaining partz krish they r fabulous priya was sick @ ram taking care of her whole night @ then jealous ram @ finally ram has forgiven her 4 what she did beautifully written 👏👏👏

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