Just these Bars in between... A poem.. chk pg 7

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Posted: 13 years ago
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A few months ago(Dec 7th to be precise) I wrote a poem about the HM episode of Raya..

For those of you who have joined here later here is the link for the poem titled..

" Just a glass inbetween" : the link is given below
At time love was just budding but never felt by Raya..Those were days of shyness and awkwardness giving away to easy friendship and camaraderie..

But things are starkly different now..

The last scene of thus's episode(7th June) stuck with me..And hence this new poem.
Its suggested that you read these 2 poems;
"Just a glass in between" and "Just these bars inbetween"..
The similarites and differences are so striking on comparison..

Now without further ado, lets get on with this poem..

Just these bars in between!!

Just these bars in between us

Mere barriers and nothing else
Lines that seemingly dividing my face

Yet indicative of the lines of fate

Bars and barriers looking like abacus

Counters of time and distance between us.

These bars are never a barrier

For charges levelled are all absurder

Leaps of faith and trust was never a suspect

Leap into the future a resigned prospect.

Tearful eyes tearing me apart

Painful face piercing my heart

Love will ease all that's wrong

Lets hold to it and just be strong.

Adversity and hardships for testing times

Happiness and miracles to relieve us sometimes.

Months and years soon to separate us

Blissful togetherness; all cherished moments.

Don't cry my love

For I love you more than ever

Don't hate me my love

For I love you more than myself.

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PS: Please leave your valuable comments and hit the like button if you like this poem😆..Thanks.😃
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SriB thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Maris, awesome dear, the abacus part with counters of time and distance between us was an amazing line. Totally khoob dear
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Very touching didi...thanks a lot for this beautiful post😊...really lovable 😳...keep rocking with your beautiful and unique posts..👏👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow this is awesome 👏👏👏👏👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Maris🤗

Amazing poem! Jst WOW!~👏👏Every line just oozed the essence of RaYa's love for me!

Its your creation? Then I am your fan!

Missing those RaYa moments now:(

Thanks for such a great Post! Do keep making more!👍🏼

Love,
Mayu
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Posted: 13 years ago
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woot woot... Well done poetess...! :)

Loved these lines to the core...

Love will ease all that's wrong Lets hold to it and just be strong...

Aha... I'm always amazed at how much effect RaYa have had on me!
M on d go... Will come back 2 say more... Jus couldnt wait 2 tell u dat loved it...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: naznin17

Beautiful poem! ❤️

Thanks Nazin..😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: SriB

Maris, awesome dear, the abacus part with counters of time and distance between us was an amazing line. Totally khoob dear

Thanks Sri..Am honoured..😳😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: TVserialfreak

Very touching didi...thanks a lot for this beautiful post😊...really lovable 😳...keep rocking with your beautiful and unique posts..👏👏

Thanks kishore.. Glad you like it..😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: jakther

wow this is awesome 👏👏👏👏👏
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Thanks lakhi


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