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manasvi..

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Posted: 8 years ago

#171

Originally posted by: neelpari
horrible update
poor riya face alot
its very tough for arjun ,he is blaming himself
arjun understand her so well
please update asap
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thanks dear

hmm its very tough for arjun too

will update soon

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manasvi..

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Posted: 8 years ago

#172

Originally posted by: aarushi04
Saddest update!!
Riya is really a hero...
She is even better than arjun...
She is so strong!!
Arjun shouldn't blame rosh...
He was d one who couldn't identify his jiya...
After telling her dat he vil no its her anytym...
Disappointed wid arjun...
He doesn't deserves ri...after all dis!!
Continue soon
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yup i know

ya ria is brave girl like hero

you can say she is better then arjun its all ur pov

but i am glad u like riya here

no its his helplessness which led him to tell him such words. bcoz amomg all he is the one who dont know truth

n abt arjun all i can say that plz dont be judgementle , wait for story to unfold.

n above all that he is also a human,

n believe me you will say he is the one who deserve ri.

plz believe in ariya love which can fall but never fail

will continuing

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manasvi..

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Posted: 8 years ago

#173

Originally posted by: aashi24
nice update
thanks for pm
waiting for next part

thanks dear

will conti soon

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manasvi..

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Posted: 8 years ago

#174

part 58

ishu n dustin are crying . n here dr vaani n subhash are treating riya.

dr subhash come out of OT

ishu hug him n cry

ish - babu didu .

sub - abhi nahi gudiya . hume riyu ki jan bachani hai.

he look at dustin

sub - dustin hume jaldi se neck surgeon bulana hoga, uska neck strangle kiya gaya tha , bleeding bahut bad gayi hai.

dust - aap no dijiye mai le kar aata hu

he give him no,n dustin leave to bring dr verma.

dr verma come with him after 1 hour. he check riya, her condition is very bad.

dr vrema - dekhiye unka gala dabane ki wajah se unka voice bag puri tarah damage ho chuka hai. ab ek hi rasta hai hume patient ka voice bag chnnge karna hoga.

all look at him shocked.

dr ve - sorry but it is last option . hume ye jald se jald karna hoga. warna wo kabhi nahi bol payegi.

dus - jo karna hai kijiye dr.

dr start her operation . it longs for 6 hrs.he come out.

dr ver - dekhiye operation successful tha. but patient kabhi high node par gaa nahi payegi. na hi cheekh payegi. so advise her not so sing or roar on high node.

ishu sit on chair numbly,

is - teddy ka to do hi sapne the .ek kabhi pura nahi hoga, hope ab uska arme usse dur na ho.

dus - pata nahi beta ,is ek kali raat ne sab kuch badal diya, barbad kar diya hume.,

sub - samjh nahi aa raha jise kho diya uske liye matam manaye ya jo andar jindgi or maut se lad rahi hai. use jeene ki ummed de. ya us ladki ko sambhale jisne apna sab kuch kho diya or uske sawaln ka hum jawab nahi de pa rahe, roshni ki halat kharab hai, karan ka phone aya tha,

dus - haa sabhi news channels mai subah se flash ho raha hai ki mishra family k ghar mai cylinder blast mai sab mar gaye or unki choti beti ki bus khai mai gir gayi.

ish - kya.

dus - actually karan or roshni ko humne jab bas se utara uske 10 min ki duri par bus khai mai gir gayi. or sab mar gaye , maine karan ko bola hai roshni kisi ki najar mai nahi aani chahiye, qki riyu ne behosh hone k pehle bola ki uski jaan khatre mai hai or jo riyu or family k sath hua koi to jimmedar hai, hume uske hosh mai aane ka wait karna hoga,

dr vani come out,

vaa- riyu ki condition bahut critical hai, apne 28 sal k carrier mai itni darindgi nahi dekhi maine, dr hone k nate mai use bachane ki kushish kar rahi hu. par ek aurat or ma hone k nate meri bhi rooh kanp rahi hai. par ye uski inner strength hai jo use ladne ka hausla de rahi hai.

ish - w.o ,,bac...h ..to...ja.ye..gi

van ( in fumbled voice) - keh nahi sakte uske shareer k har hisse kar jakham hai. internally bhi bleeding ho rahi hai,

ish - maai kuch bhi karo meri riyu ko bacha lo.

karan come there with tear in his eyes. ishu run n hug him. both cry alot.

dustin come n console both.

kar - dad riyu.

vani show him ot. he look at her, onle her face is visible . but its hoorible. all his strength dropped n he feel very weak n slumped on floor .n cry

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manasvi..

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Posted: 8 years ago

#175

ishu n all come to him.

kar - dad teddy. kya kiya uske sath , dad wo aise.,,

dus - sambhalo khud ko karan .hum sabko ek dusre k sath ki jarurat hai.

sub - roshni kaisi hai,

kar - kaisi hogi ,mom or roshni dono ka ro ro kar bura haal hai .mom aa gayi hai. riya k jinda hone ka roshni ko pata nahi hai abhi.

van - thik kiya ,wo ise aise nahi dekh payegi.

3 days later

roshni is still living secreatly in a home. she is not in condition to ask any question . whole day she only hold her family pic n sit numbly on bed n stare at nothing.

no one hear any word from her mouth since last 3 days.

here dr subhash n family n dustin did ritual of whole family . no last rite can be done as all bodies burn badly n become ash .

here dr vani is trying hard to save riyu,

at her clinic

dr vaani - riyu ko hosh aa gaya hai. aap log chaliye.

vaani ,subhash,dustin, karan n ishu all present here. she open her eyes with difficulty

kar - teddy to thik hai.

she nod her head in denial

all has tears in their eyes but they control.

ri - maai meri medical report taiyyar kijiye. or sare samples preserve karke rakhiye.

ish - riyu

ri - mujhe roshu.se milna hai.

dus - beta.

ri - uncle plz is waqt mujhe kamjor mat kijiye,.

she request them,

all shut n about to leave

ri - ishu,

ishu come n hold her hand.

ri - roshu ko bulao or meri dairy tere pas hai na wo bhi lana or mera bag bhi.

all look at her . her face is emotionless . it look like she has no feeling left, only a body who is seeing n talking is laying on bad.

all come out.

vani - ye nahi hona tha.

sub - wo thik hai na.

van - nahi uska ek operation baki hai yha fir ek or baki hai or wo london mai hoga usne shart rakhi hai ki hum agar uski bat nahi manenge to wo operation nahi karwayegi.

all get shocked

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manasvi..

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Posted: 8 years ago

#176

kar - kya kaisi.shart

vani - pata nahi.

dus - uska reaction

vani - wahi to sabse badi chinta hai . usne khud mai ek tufaan kaid kar liya hai, ab ye tufan kya tabahi layega kuch kaha nahi ja sakta, usne khud ko khatam kar liya hai, puri tarah se.roshni ko bulao shayad wo kuch kar sake.

all nod

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roshni place

she is sitting on bed holding her family pic. her phone is ringing but she dont know,kiran come n look at her ,she clean her tear n attend call

os ,,hello roshni mai.sameer phone q nahi utha rahi,

kir - beta she is not well actually

sam - ha aunty mujhe sab pata chala.

kir - uski halat bahut kharab hai.na kuch bolti hai na kuch khati hai.

sam - sab khatam ho gaya aunty, rockstar i mean riya.

kiran cry

ki - wo bhi nahi hai ab.

( she dont know anything )

ki - jaise hi wo kuch normal hogi. mai bat karwati hu.

sam - hmm. mai jaldi hi aaunga.

they cut call n karan enter,

kar - roshni

but she dont respond

kar - roshu teddy tumse milna chahti hai.

roshni try to register his word. she get up suddenly

ro - kya riyu, wo jinda hai,.karan sach bolo meri riyu jinda hai.

kar - hmm or wo tumse milna chahti hai.

kir - sach karan

kar - haa ma.

they rush toward hospital

at ri room

roshu enter her room happily n look at riya ,she get shocked n numb seeing her sis. only riya face is visible

rosh - riyu ye sab

ri - roshu mai thik hu bas blast ke karan

ro - riyu teri aawaj ye to bilkul alag lag rahi hai kya hua ye teri awaj nahi

dus - blast mai iska voice chord kharab ho gaya.

ro - par ye to strach marrks type hai,

ri - hmm blast k time hua .tu kaisi hai.

ro - kaisi ho sakti hu. par ab tu hai na mere liye. riyu humne sab kho diya

she cry n try to hug her but riya stop her

rosh - riyu

vani - actually beta uski body par burn hai na infactions ho jayenge.

ro - ohh. par sabne mujhse chupaya q

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manasvi..

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Posted: 8 years ago

#177

ri - wo chod meri bat sun

ro - bol riyu

ri - meri kasam kha meri har bat manegi.

ro - riya tu kya bol rahi hai

ri - kha meri kasam

ro - teri kasam tere liye kuch bhi karungi tu bas bol.

ri - roshu tu jiya ban ja or arjun k pas chali ja

ro - dekh riyu paglo jaisi batien mat kar, tu is condition mai majak kaise kar sakti hai

ri - mai majak nahi kar rahi.

ro - mai aisa kuch nahi karne wali. tu aisa q chahti hai. tu chahti hai mai teri jagah lu pagal hai,

ri - meri bat sun mera ek operation hona hai jisme mere bachne k chances kam hai. agar mujhe kuch ho jaye to tu jiya bankar jayegi.

ro - tujhe kuch nahi hoga.

ri - to tujhe jiya nahi banna hai par agar kuch ho gaya to tu jayegi, arjun mar jayega apni jiya k bina, tu samjh rahi hai na .tu karegi na apni riyu k liye itna.

ro -- par mai kaise.

ri - tujhe ye karna hoga, use wo pyar dena hoga jo jiya use deti. uska har waqt sath nibhana hoga. promise me tu usse shadi karegi

ro - nahi

ri -- to mai ye operation nahi karwaungi

ro - pagal hai kya riyu

ri - promise me

ro - promise . par wo pehchan lega

ri - nahi pehchanega, uski jiyu ki ankhe or awaj tujhse milti hai. or ye dairy isme humre har moment kaid hai. sab kuch.bas tu pad lena.

ro - mai to uska sahara ban jaungi riyu par mera kya .tu mujhe chod kar nahi ja sakti.

ri - to tu wahi karna jo mai karti hu. dairy mai likhna . bilkul waise jaise mujhe bol rahi hai.

ro - par

ri - ye meri akhiri iccha hai,

ro - riyu

ri - or tu mere last rite mai nahi ayegi. agar mai bach gayi to tujhe milungi . tu ja yaha se.

roshni cry alot n abt to leave.

ri - ishu ise wo locket de de.
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she give roshni a locket . its same locket which arjun sent for jiya as gift. ( its same locket which arjun used to wear in serial after rohshni death.)

roshni leave .n ask karan to inform her every moment .she go to tample n pray for her.

here riya operation start.after some hours karan call roshu n inform her that her riyu is dead.

tbc..

precp - emotional ride of all characters. sameer come to meet roshni.

riya pov about arni
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manasvi..

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Posted: 8 years ago

#178

hello all

so here is another part of jep akp .

hope you all are feeling it worthy. plz tell me how you guys feel abt current track .

n plz comment .if you are not liking it at all plz tell me I'll stop,

n abt that part ,i m sorry but some parts will be sady one n horrible one. hope you are not getting bore. i am trying to give frequent updtes of this one. bcoz this is very long story of mine.

plz share your views n your suggestions are also welcome

thanks

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SYSHA

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Posted: 8 years ago

#179

didu u are going good..hume na aisa lagraha jaise hum koi movie dekh rahe...u are writting damn good didu..eagerly waiting for next update...thanks for pm