THE BROKEN ANGEL - AN ARIYA SS updated page 6 - 16.10.15

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THE BROKEN ANGEL...

Charactersketch -

Suryakant rawte - father of arjun rawte . well known businessman. And husband of 3 wives.

Naina rawte - 1 wife of sr. have a son - arjun. Loves her family a lot. 8 saal pehle kisi vajah se vo sabko chod kar chali gayee thi.

Radha rawte - 2 wife of sr. have son - karan . A very evil lady , jealous of naina and always tried to humiliate sr(suryakant rawte) about arjun. She wanted that her son getall the property of his father.

Veer rawte - 3 wife . always respects other n don't have child. Loves arjun n karan both.

Arjun rawte - caring n loving son . loves his family a lot. Also 8 years ago ek ladkise pyaar kiya shaadi bhi ki but ...

Karan rawte - loves his bhai nd badimaa a lot . respects them and can do anything for the happiness of his bhai . loves his bhabhi a lott...

Rawatji - a humble man , good friend of suryakant nd wanted happiness in rawte family alsoteacher of arjun.

Guru raghvendra - teacher of arjun nd always works for the justice of people.

Riya rawte- ek ladki jiski saare khushiyaan8 saal pehle khatm hogaye jab uske pati ne use shaadivaale din hi ghar se baahar nikaal diya. An orphan nd lives in orphanage. Have 2 brothers - shiv nd raghu nd small sister pari.

Aisha rathore - bsst frnd of riya nd married to sameer but jab uske husband ne apne dost arjun ko nai roka to vo bhi riya ke saath aa gaye aur unke saath rehne lage.

Sameer rathor - bsst frnd of arjun nd married to aisha . aur usne bhi 8 saal pehle apne biwi ko kho diya...



1 CHAPTER ABHI THODI DER MAI UPDATE KARI HOON...

PLZZ READ ZAROOR KARNA...

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Posted: 10 years ago
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awesome cs
loved it
cont soon
waiting for the first part
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Awesome CS. And i am glued to this SS now itself. Continue soon
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hiii frnds
aaj my mom's birthday
to ise khushi mai maha update de rahi hoon

5 chapters back to back.
so enjoy reading nd do reply..
i will be waiting




The entire family of rawte is seated in the hall taking breakfast when a messenger brings a sealed letter for mrs. Radha rawte who faints after reading it creating an alarm. Veer the youngest wife of suryakant rawte picks up the letter and has shock written on her face

SR: Veer whose letter is this?

VEER:the letter is from naina di!!!!

Everyone is stunned - a letter from mrs.naina rawte had arrived which meant that she would be returning as well. Radha had been taken to her chamber where she was resting but in reality she was thinking about the letter and its consequences

Arjun, SR, Rawatji, Karan and the others come over for a visit when she twists the letter as a prank played on them but arrival of Guru Raghvendra and his confession leaves them shocked and sad

Guru Raghvendra was a man of principles so when he himself found out about the incident at Rawte palace he spoke to Naina Baiji about it as he believed that everything that happened with Riya was wrong and unjust. Naina had been so upset and ashamed at her family's way and felt guilty on learning about Rao Mamrakh's Riya's father death that she decided to help her daughter-in-law in a way that would be remembered for years to come. So she came up with a plan - a plan to teach everyone especially RD(RADHA)a lesson and she prayed with her heart that it worked

Chapter 2

Guru Raghvendra rarely involved himself in familial issues but seeing the injustice happening to orphanage and its residents he decided to help naina Baiji in her quest which brings him to his current location - seated comfortably in the luxurious room of the palace he was waiting for his hosts to show up as when they did he (GR) was about to tilt their entire world on its axis

Radha accompanied everyone to meet Guru Raghvendra as she wished to learn the motives behind his impromptu visit. So after all greetings were done he (SR) broached the topic of his visit

GR: I have come here to escort Riya Baisa to naina Baiji so that her efforts to keep this family safe especially your son Kunwar Karan can be completed

SR:Riya? Naina wants Riya of all people?

GR: Why wouldn't she want her? As far as I know she has been singing praises of her daughter-in-law in all the holy places she has been visiting making sure that no harms come to the family

Everyone looks shocked at this revelation and Radha tries to steer them towards the lie she had created

RD: I apologise for interrupting but we were under the influence that it was because of Riya that di left all of us. She in briefs re-counts the entire incident

GR: I cannot believe it that you are saying this Radha Baiji (making everyone stare at the woman)

RD: I don't understand Guruji

GR: I met with Naina Baiji very recently and she told me she has been in constant touch with you since her departure that all the messages she sent with regards to the puja, fasts and special rituals to be performed by Riya baisa have been met with as per your responses

RD is stunned to learn this developing fact

SR: What is he saying Radha? Have you been in touch with Naina and not informed us about it?

RD: No... I never received any letters

GR: But she has been getting responses with your signature Radha Baiji

Rawatji speaks up: Maybe someone did play a prank on us surya - a prank that led to an innocent child being blamed for all the bad- a prank that led to the daughter-in-law of this family to be humiliated and insulted and thrown out like mere garbage and now with this new development we are again seeing a prank - someone is out to harm the royal family and succeeded in breaking it apart

Arjun's head is hung low realising the truth about everything - Riya was innocent and he blamed her for his mother's departure from his life. He married her took vows to protect and honour her in front of the sacred fire but he never fulfilled them at all

GR: Rawatji are you telling me that Riya is no longer at the Rawte palace

Rawatji: I'm telling you Guruji that mere 24hrs after her wedding Riya was thrown out of Rawte palace for making Naina Baiji leave

Chapter 3

GR: Hmmm then I need to leave and inform Naina Baiji about it after all only she would know on how to proceed with the puja

VEER: May I ask about the significance of the puja Guruji

GR: Ji.. Naina Baiji was informed by an astrologer that the family would be facing a major crisis especially Kunwar Karan who would probably come face to face with death and not survive. The only way to counter it was to devote oneself in utter supplication to the Gods for at least 8years. NainaBaiji knew that Radha Baiji would not have been able to do it as Karan at the time was a toddler and she was attached to him as any mother so for the betterment of this family she went to perform the rigorous task of devotion which included separation from one's family, renouncing every worldly luxury, fasting without taking a drop of water and holy pilgrimage. Unfortunately I have to be the bearer of the bad news that all her efforts had been in vain

VEER: Why is Riya important for the puja?

GR: Well after Naina Baiji Riya is the only person in this family well in the entire city to be honest that can devote herself completely. Her virtues extol her to be the most blessed of us all but after what was done to her I would be surprised to know that she wants to even see Kunwar Arjun or anyone from this family

Everyone is in shock learning the truth about Naina Baiji's reason for leaving them except Veer Bai who was confused but GR had already placated her with his reasons. SR, Rawatji and Arjun were all feeling guilty on their past actions and Radha well she was numb - her son's life was at stake and the one person who could save him was sent away by her own actions

RD: I will go to ORPHANAGE. She declared as everyone turned to look at her when suddenly a servant runs in with the news of Naina Baiji's arrival in palace.

Chapter-4

Naina had received the message that Guru Raghvendra had reached the rawte palace that meant the plan was in motion and now the family would be in complete astonishment and overwhelmed from learning the truth she wanted to spread - he main reason for leaving was Veer Bai's harsh words but she never thought that poor Riya would be blamed for the mess. Now she as her mother-in-law would make everything alright - Riya would hold all the power and she would have the choice to forgive them all and accept her son again or never see them for the rest of her life

It was time Radha Rawte was given a taste of her own medicine- a bitter pill that she (NAINA) would thoroughly enjoy watching her (RD) swallow and now was the time for her entrance

Dressed in a simple yellow saree with beads in her hands devoid of any jewellery Naina Bai still managed to look the most beautiful woman present in the hall. SURYAKANT and ARJUN both were staring at the woman who meant the world to them, Veer Bai was scared of meeting her gaze, Rawatji looked happy to have her back and RADHA was looking at her like she saw a ghost

NN(NAINA): Before anyone starts with their questions I wish to meet my daughter-in-law so that I can make the preparations for the final puja. So kindly call Riya as well

Everyone (except RD) hang their heads in shame as if unable to speak a word about the girl in question

NN: Why is everyone staring at the ground? Arjun call Riya I need to speak to her

Arjun looks at his mother and then back at the ground when Rawatji speaks up

Rawatji: Baisa Riya is not in the palace

NN: Not in the palace. She must have gone to the temple. Send one of the servants to call her back

VB: Rawatji meant that Riya is not in palace di

NN looks at the youngest bride - she was still the same as she left her- scared of her own shadow trying a way to fit in the family but still on the periphery a mere stranger. NN felt a pang of pain for her but right now she needed to think about her daughter-in-law

GR: Baisa please allow me to tell you of the incidents after you left the palace

Chapter 5

Naina Baiji was an amazing actress GR thought after all only she could have pulled an all angry and disappointed look at the same time. The entire family had been silenced with her glares and even Radha had no response for her questions especially when she presented the letters of response carrying her signatures. Radha was in caught in a deadly storm and there was no way she would survive it intact

NN: di I'll go and bring her back

NN stares the woman who was decked up like a newlywed bride herself

NN: And what do you intend on saying to her?

RD: I will bring her back di. Riya is our daughter-in-law and I...

NN: Now she is your daughter-in-law what happened to this relation when she was being dragged out of the palace Radha? It was you who kicked her out and the order came from you right Surya and don't get me started on Arjun

ARJUN: Rani Ma please understand that it was a misunderstanding

NN: It was a misunderstanding Arjun - I misunderstood your feelings for that girl. You were the one adamant on marrying her and no one else so much that you went to her home and broke her marriage with another man. You made me believe that you loved her - was this your love? Leaving behind the girl you married after 24hrs on the doorstep of a temple. She left everything behind to start a new life with you and this is the life you gave her I admit I'm at fault as well but all of you- everything I did for the last 8years is now ruined- I stayed away from my family for the sake of the health of this family, for Karan's health and this is what I come back to- a family that could not even respect their own daughter-in-law

Guruji if you don't mind I would be highly obliged if you accompanied me to orphanage - I need to go and seek forgiveness from Riya and her family for all the bad she has suffered at our hands

NN: We will come with you di

NN: you have already done enough Radha so please don't do anything more

Veer: di we know what we did was wrong and we would all like to be given a chance to apologise to them as well please allow us to accompany you






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Posted: 10 years ago
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yipee i'm the first one too comment🥳
awesome update dii
and that too five chap at one time
it was really very good
hmm , so naina bai decided to give rd a taste of her own medicine
i also hope her plan got successful
and thankgod that the all the members of rawte family are ashamed because of what they diid too riya
specially , arjun and suryakant
and seriously riya shouldn't forgave them easily plsss
loved it di
cont soon
and pm me plss

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that's awesome..
plz continue soon
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That's amazing 👏
Now radha will have to taste her own medicine...
Continue soon...
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Wow.
I m speechless...
It was tooo good.
Please update soon and do pm me.
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Wonderful updt di
It's amazing concept
Loved it very much
Hate Arjun's family nd him
Naina was really good
She was adamant to
bring Riya back at any cost
Eagerly waiting to read more
Please do continue soon
Nd do pm me di
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hiii😊😊
chapter 6 update kar rahi hoon
padhna zaroor ..
aur sorry kisiko bhi pm nai send kar sakti
thodi problem ho rahi hai pc mai


chapter 6

suddenly two people of orphanage came and say-

People of orphanage are hurt and angry with rawte family. orphanage would have revolted long back against them if it hadn't been for Riya- she has been taking care of her land and her people for the last 8yrs like a true daughter of them. We do not know what she did wrong but we do believe that your son and this family do not deserve an angel like her. We will take your leave as we cannot stay in the place that humiliated our princess.Both people leave the hall and go back to orphanage. Arjun is overcome with guilt and pain so is everyone else - Rawatji couldn't believe that the girl he whom he chose as her niece has been fighting all by herself because of a misunderstanding created by someone who wants to harm the family but the question was who would do that?

GR kept his silence but knew that if he didn't speak up then nothing would happen

GR: So Mr. rawte what is your plan of action now?

SR: What are we supposed to do Guruji? Orphanage has tensions brewing and if we go then surely there is bound to be friction

GR: But if you do not go then you would not be fulfilling your duty as the protector

NN: Guruji is right Surya we need to go to orphanage and we will go but in disguise so that we can see for ourselves the true reality and assess the situation

Everyone agrees and leaves to make preparations

Naina had called the RajPurohitji as she wished to discuss the alternate methods to protect Karan from the evil omens that were out to get him- on learning about the visit Radha also joined in.

RajPurohitji was tensed looking at the astrological charts making Radha worry more for her son- her son was her lifeline- he was going to fulfil all her dreams and desires and she was willing to go to hell and commit all sins to get him his desires and rights

RajPurohitji: I'm sorry Baisa but the stars have changed course. All the good you earned while performing the rigorous rituals and puja have been negated by the sins committed against innocents by the family

RD: There is something we could do

RP: There are two ways but they are not easy

NN: Please tell us

RP: The first way is that Karan needs to devote himself in complete and utter supplication for the next 16yrs. He is to lead a very normal life like a devotee and take pilgrimage to all the holy places where he will be required to observe strict fasts- no food and water for 2days, he will have to walk barefoot in the scorching heat and bear the chilly winds- he would have to open himself to nature and her elements completely and not only he even you as his mother will be required to perform certain rituals and observe fasts.(poor karan. ab kya kare bhai ke liye to sehna padega verna storykaise badhegi😛)

Radha is shocked😲😲 .RD: what is the other way?🤢🤢🤢

NN smiles😊😊 internally while RP says: The second one is also tough Baisa

Those who have unknowingly or knowingly harmed the innocents need to seek their forgiveness. Once they are forgiven then the innocent person/persons will be required to observe a strict three day fast as well as participate in a puja to please the Gods while Karan and you still be required to perform tasks throughout till the main puja is completed successfully.





end of the chapter .

n yes bata doon meri story vaale riya itne aasani se nahi maan ne vaale.

bahut mehnat karne padegi arjun ko...

to deal with this new riya😛

also lot of drama with romance😃😃

nd some flashbacks...



jald hi haazir honge aapke khidmat mai

agar aapko ye kahaani pasand aaye.

plz do comment .

after reading story.😊

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