Ariya OS:Dn't Dare To Ignore Me(Challange)Complete - Page 6

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Posted: 12 years ago
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After half an hour Rathod comes outside frm his cabin & speak in loud volume , "Team we have case , cme in Conferance room,." Rathod brif d details abt case & orderd Ayesha-chotu to go victim's home , Shree-Riya to Police Station & wit Arjun he goes to Crime spot.
All return in d ofc @ 4pm wit all details. All discuss d case , Rathod & Arjun ask team abt thr findings. Ayesha share her details , but Chotu seems uncomfortable , while talking Ayesha ask Chotu to give her a letter tht thy found in a victim's hme , and forward her hand towards him , bt Chotu lost in smewhere. All look @ him , Shree slowly called him , Chotu lokked @ him , he look @ all , " Rathod Sir cn w take a break , im very hungry , plz Sir." he finally requested him . Rathod growled & orders , "Lunch break " and goes frm thr. Chotu smile @ turn to Ayesha , "Sry Mam " "Its k Chotu , enjy ur lunch. " & she goes frm thr. Shree happily goes to Chotu & hug him. Arjun goes to his cabin.
Shree : Kya boss , daring dikha di aaj , acha hua tune bol diya , mai kehene hi wala tha .( Woow boss , wht a daring , thank god u inform thm , otherwise i ws also thinking sme.)
Chotu : Oh really.
Shree : Ys . U knw Chotu , Rathod Sir never say no to me .
Chotu & Riya understands his drama.
Chotu : Oh , ys..
suddenely Riya say a bit loud , "Are Rathod Sir " Shree immedatly turn around in fear & see no one is thr.
Chotu & Riya give high - five to each other.
Shree try to gather himself & pretented to show tht does nt affect him. Suddenely phn buzzes & Chotu ans d phn , after talking minutes he give phn to Shree , "Rathod Sir want to talk wid you . " Shree slowly receives d phn & says "Hello... hello bt thr is no response . within a minutes he herd engeage tone. Shree put phn down & turn around to see his frnds.
Shree : Who did ths? And wait a minute Rathod Sir is in his cabin , thy why he call me on ofc no , he called me in his cabin r he calle me on intercom , tht means u bth r ...
Chotu & Riya : ( pretend to serious ) Sry , bt ... bt ( Riya is smiling , while Chotu tried to calm her) look... look @ ur ... face... Shree... see ur eyes... ur sweating...
Shree : (angrily & loudly) Nw you two r gne , wht do u think , im afarid , no im nt afarid anyone , and why do u always making fun of me ha , dn't try to mess wit me , (pretending to so smart) im nt afrid of anyone nt Arjun Sir r nt Rathod Sir. Thy bth r depending on me. (Riya signals Shree to stop , Chotu also stop laughing & sriously look @ shree.) What Ri , wht do u think , why i stop , no im nt gng to stop , ohh u bth jelous on me , for my wrk , dn't wry guys i can understand , bt i"ll help u out. (Riya signals him to turn around , bt Shree smile @ him he think thy r joking again) Riya dn't try to fooled me again , why u tld me turn around & Chotu why u luk so scare , u bth guys r really dumb , wht u think i turn around & found Rathod Sir is standing thr how childshish u r guys. ( wit tht he turn around & found Rathod standing thr wit his hands folded to his chest. He calmly look @ Shree.)
Shree : ( OMG whn he come , i have to understand first , Ri try to inform me , bt im too fool to understand , nw god plz save me.) S...s...ir
Ra : Why r u talking so loudly , and wht r u saying , i heard tht u tke my name.
Shree : N...n...no .. i ws... ws nthng ... ( he try to smile )
Ra : k. lets forget abt it. I give lunch break , dn't waste ur time in gossiping. ( ths time he says a bit loudly.)
All nodded. . Rathod back to his cabin. Riya asks "Guys wht w order tod.?"
Shree : Anything light.
Chotu : I wnt to eat Chiken tod.
Riya : Oh.. Bt Chotu it takes to much time to cme.
Chotu : No Riya , Murga(chiken ) is thr .
Riya : (Puzzled ) What Chiken is thr , in ofc , whr?
Chotu : (Signales towards Shree ) Riya understands & Chotu & Riya laugh @ him. Arjun watching ths all frm his cabin .
Edited by M.V.Kohli007 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#52
Hey dear, awesome development of story, you have respected well my concept. Although I meant one shot of few lines on the WOTW thread itself. but I will ignore it this once as I might have not been clear. :D

Advice which I wanted to give is: avoid sms language such as 'wrk' for work, '@' for at, 'wit' for with, and so on. Please try to write full words it makes the story more clear. This is something very important in a story.

One more thing, if you can try to put the whole name of persons all the time.

I don't mean to hurt you. I just want you to progress.

Luv u<333
Kashish

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Posted: 12 years ago
#53
awesome!! loved choreeiya scene.. omg🤣 can totaly imagine it!! poor riya!! now she is trying to set up arjun n aisha!!update soon!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#54

Originally posted by: kashishk

Hey dear, awesome development of story, you have respected well my concept. Although I meant one shot of few lines on the WOTW thread itself. but I will ignore it this once as I might have not been clear. :D

Advice which I wanted to give is: avoid sms language such as 'wrk' for work, '@' for at, 'wit' for with, and so on. Please try to write full words it makes the story more clear. This is something very important in a story.

One more thing, if you can try to put the whole name of persons all the time.

I don't mean to hurt you. I just want you to progress.

Luv u<333
Kashish

Thx dear for liking my wrk & also for suugestions..
Ya , i try to do wht u said to me.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#55
gr8 update dear :) poor riya..:o nd lovd it when arjun was thnkng abt riya nd rathore..:p rofl... shree's dialogue.. bichara shree... continue soon :)
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Posted: 12 years ago
#56
nice part
liked it
last part was too good
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Posted: 12 years ago
#57
Awesome dear...

ria succeeded in ignoring arjun..
Shree was really so cute...and he got caught...lol..it was so funny:)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awesome update dr i am laughing while reading the conversation between the trio wow superb dr...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow nice updates..
conv. b\w trio was awesome..
shree is tooo cute...
cont. soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#60
so riya is matchmaker!!!!😊😊!!

poor riya!!😒!!

update soon!!!

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