An Evening Turned Awry

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Her bubbly smile had vanished

Pale as pristine snow her face bereft of emotions

She gazed blankly

Quick as lightening she jumped to her feet and bolted indoors

They pursued her in haste

Shut door awaited them. They panicked

Anxiety heightened he was a mess

Thinking on her toes

She prized open the door

what met her eye broke her heart

A shivering heap gasping for breath

Mukkus messed up state proclaimed

The face she looked upto for answers

Was writhing in pain

The raspy breath, endless tears, pierced her heart

Maternal instinct drove her to hold the shuddering form in a tight embrace

Some thing is terribly amiss she noted

Unable to evoke from him an answer

She screamed his name

Tottering he came by tears unabashedly stained his face

He stumbled and steadied himself as he fell

A pandoras box of woes unfolded

Spine chilling was throwback tale

She rocked the frail survivivor of a horrendous marriage

Which of the siblings suffered more

Was hard to tell

Both needed a shoulder to lean, a heart that sensed and eased their pain

Her role clear she steadied them both

Praying for solace

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Posted: 4 years ago
#2

you again did it👏

you summarized whole episode in just few lines aur wo bhi itne sundar dhang se poetic manner mein👏

Posted: 4 years ago
#3

so so so beautiful👏🏼

especially the end♥️

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Which of the siblings suffered more

Was hard to tell

Both needed a shoulder to lean, a heart that sensed and eased their pain


This part 🥺🥺❤️❤️

You are master of words dear👏



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Posted: 4 years ago
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Wow such a beautiful poem, u r so good with words. I'm simply amazed. Lovely

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Splendid! ❤️❤️


The end was Soo Soo Soo perfect! Each word was placed aptly.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Thank you. Happy you liked it.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Thank you for letting me know your thoughts.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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If there was an emoji for, I melted after reading this then I would have used it but superbly summarized episode.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Thank you. That's so sweet of you.

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