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anasuya43

@anasuya43

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Posted: 12 years ago

#31

Debalina_Paul

Yes even I do same thing😆

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Saina

@--Saina--

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#32

Wow story is going great ...Rocking Gals...do continue...

Debo, Saveeta and Zahara- Awesome job !!

Edited by --Saina-- - 12 years ago

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Debalina

@Guggul

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#33

Agam instantly looked back. He was shocked at what he saw. Nimrit was sitting on the floor and the hot iron-box was there on her left foot. She was crying non-stop. Agam immediately removed the iron-box off her foot and kept it aside. A deep red burn mark was imprinted on her foot skin.

"Agamji", Nimrit was sobbing uncontrollably, "my foot is burnt".

"Don't cry Nimrit.. Don't cry. It will be alright. Try to stand", Agam tried to calm her but his own heart was freezing seeing the deep burn on her foot.

Agam put his hands on Nimrit's arms and pulled her up softly to make her stand. Nimrit stood up somehow but collapsed immediately. Her feet were burning with pain and they could not carry her weight.

"Agamji, I cannot walk", she continued crying frenziedly. Agam's heart was melting seeing her in pain. He immediately carried her in his arms and stood up.

He was not done with buttoning his shirt but right now, he didn't care. He carried her out of the room and walked hurriedly towards the hall.

Nimrit was clinging to him and crying hiding her face in his chest. Agam descended the stairs. He screamed out, "Ribban Aunty.."

Hearing his scream, Nimrit pulled out her face from his chest. He placed her softly on the sofa with utmost care. Nimrit's eyes were red of pain and continuous sobs. She looked towards the dining table. Her mom and everyone else were rushing towards the hall.

She called out feebly, "Mamma.."

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Saina

@--Saina--

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#34

Debo - You writings are awesome..Have you written FF's/OS before??

Edited by --Saina-- - 12 years ago

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gowrisa

@gowrisa

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#35

Wow, Lovely story

Great idea and the story coming out realy welll...

Kudos all 👍🏼

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shanaya28

@shanaya28

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

#36

Debo..lovely and so beautifully written updates..👏

Enjoy reading each part and visualising the scenes also...😊

This for you ..👍🏼

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krithika

@Wonderfullife

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#37

Beautiful continuation Debolina..❤️

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zahara

@ZAHARA.

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#38

AMAZING! I'll try to write the next part but that's when I have time :)

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Debalina

@Guggul

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#39

@Saina: No. I never worte anything. this is just a small try and that too because its a mixed effort.

Everyone, thanks.. Now its ur turn. Zahara, Savee, Saina, continue soon. I am eager to see the next part..