simi's beautiful msg pg 1 & updated pg 3!!!!! - Page 2

Update was too good. Anyways the epic Radha Krishna love story is all about the pure and serene love between an older Radha and young krishna

Originally posted by: mesimi

Update was too good. Anyways the epic Radha Krishna love story is all about the pure and serene love between an older Radha and young krishna

oh yes!! you are right !! Thats well caught!!

Originally posted by: mesimi

Update was too good. Anyways the epic Radha Krishna love story is all about the pure and serene love between an older Radha and young krishna

one more point Radha gori hai or krishna kale so it fits perfect in this sense as well. since abhi has darker complexion compare to simi

Originally posted by: pop77

Abhi to Simi:

Masti bhari nigaahen jaane kya kya ishaara karti hain
Samjhoon tere ishaare, phir kyun na muskuraoon main

great one fits perfectly.😊

As always Ramas you are an excellent poet.

Originally posted by: bee5

thats too good ramas!!

Thanks yaar this was my kind of msg. Simi is calling herself radha who is going crazy after her natkhat lal. for her abhi is natkhat lal as one minutes he puuls the craziest prans and the next he is ready to solve all her problems and take care of her.

I am diverting the msg little now. Simi is dreaming wating for abhi who is stuck in the trafic she decide to send him another msg where she is actually thingking she is radha who is wating to see her kanha(abhi) who is not showing up

wowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww u r a gifted writer..or i must say poet..awesome yaar...simi ne to do chaar line likhi..bt u wrote the whole poem..and its fantastic..it conveys bth simi and abhi'sfeelings very beautifully..loved it...the whole rhyming process and all the words used r jst beautiful and perfect...
hey i knw u r already writing a ff..bt start one more na...i am dying to read more ff on abhi-simi..i need some dose of their beautiful..passinate romance.... 😊

Originally posted by: ramas

I am diverting the msg little now. Simi is dreaming wating for abhi who is stuck in the trafic she decide to send him another msg where she is actually thingking she is radha who is wating to see her kanha(abhi) who is not showing up

Simi to abhi

kal thi jo ek premdiwani

bani aaj hai darshdiwani

bhar ke ankho me pani

na kar tu mujh se beimani

kab aaoge natkhat lal

kar na poun ab aur intejar

karni hai baate prem ki do char

sun ne hai lamhe tumse hazar

ab na karungi shikwe bar bar

samajh payi hu ab mai tera pyar

ab chahe chhodna pade ghar baar

kadam picche na hatenge ek bar

tum base ho dil jigar me mere yaar

chaho to tukde kar ke dekh lo hazar

bas aa jao mere yaar

ab sukh rahe hai mere pran

abhi is thinking what has happned to simi today msg pe msg aa rahe hai he sends her a msg simi plz let me come there I am also eager to see my simi this way. how can I drive and see ur msgs at the same time.

I will reply when I come there. see you soon.❤️

abhi comes there in 10 minutes and reply

ab pass aaja meri premdiwani

ban jaa ab toh tu sayani

na ab tu la ankonke me pani he begs

ab mushkura de meri Radharani

kya kar sakta hun kabhii tujhse beimani

tu mera dil jigar mere jani

mujhe khush khabari hai tujhe sunani

kar ke aa raha hun kam jordar

thodi der bas kar intejar

aayegi khush kahabri mere yaar

aab pass to aja dildar

tujhe chhune ko dil hai bekraar

ab ho na raha mujh se bhi intejaar

tere papaji se jakar karna hai muje ikraar

aapki beti ka hath dedo muje ek baar

vaade nibhounga mai sau sau bar

khushiyna dunga sari jiski woh hai haqdar

Hi ramas,

Wow!! you having amazing talent!!
Just now I got up and logged into the forum and reading this 1st, it was a treat and a great way to start the day!! Hope my rest of day goes as beautiful as your kavita.

maanna padega mere yaar
tumne rok liya Abhi ko traffic me,
taaki tum likh sako chaar aur line mere yaar

Loved the stronger Simi appearing in each and every line after "samajh payi hu ab mai tera pyar".
Also the Abhi in last para when he replies to Simi that he would ask her father to give her hand was adorable especially the lines "aapki beti ka hath dedo muje ek baar".
Why not Abhi, even I would recommend RS to trust you and give his daughter to you, you are the right johari who had identified what a gem Simi is!

ramas, I don't have even an inch of talent that you have, but I felt, these lines would be nice with the following changes:
"bani aaj hai darshdiwani" -> "bani aaj ek darshdiwani"
"ab sukh rahe hai mere pran" -> "ab sukh rahe hai mere pran mere yaar"

Beautiful - the last verse that you wrote for Abhi was brilliant. I could just picture him saying those words to her. I wish we could see more in the show. Great work.