naksh one shot..

Page

Suspended

Posted: 15 years ago

this story was written for .ye risht with the pinch of our spice... n after appreciation from u all.. i decided to write another part for it.. althought i thot i would write after my xams got over... but i cudn't resist myself.. here's the part which i wrote in the story writing competion.. the other part would follow after this part... n sry for the spelling errors in this part..

akshara is bak to her usual self.. crying n crying n cryin n cryin... she goes to her room.. wahan pe she sees naitik sitting.. she decides that it is he last time she'z apologising for her mistake.. n if naitik will not listen to her.. she would not stay here...

akshara ; naitik.. plz meri bat suniye.. main sach keh rhi hu main mayka hi gyi thi.. aur main yeh shuru se chahti thi ki aapko ye cheez pta ho..

naitik ; akshara.. mujhe apse is bare mein koi bat nhi krni hai... iss sab mein apki hi galti hai.. islie apna n mera time mat waste kriye..

akshara : naitik.. ap sach mein meri bat nhi sunenge.?? mujhe apni safai dene ka ek bhi mauka nhi denge.??

naitik doesnt reply... he opens his laptop n starts to work on it....

akshara : oh.. to ye apka akhiri faisla hai na... thik hai..

she goes to her cupboard.. puts her clothes in the suitcase.. n prepares to leave.. n just then she notices nandini standing on the door.. akshara looks at her...

nandu ; akshara.. tumhe kahi jaane ki zarurat nhi hai.. tum mere sath neeche chalo.. aur naitik... tumhe bhi abhi neeche aana hoga..

naitik.. is sitting on the bed.. all confused..

nandini puls akshara by hand.. n forces her to go to the main living area.. then. she shouts on the top of her voice... sab neeche aaiye.. mujhe sabse bhot zruri bat krni hai... every1 cums pout of their rooms.. but koi neeche nhi jata.. all of them are standing.. when..

nandini : gulabo.. tujhe pta hai kya.. ye jo kuch bhi ho rha hai na ghar mein.. isme akshara ki koi galti nhi hai..

when she says this.. every1 ke kam khade ho jate hai,,.. n rajbanna heads to the living area.. much to the narazgi of gma n dino... rashmi foloows..

nandini : kaka.. aap plz mera yakeen kijiye.. ye jo kuch bhi hua hai isme akshara ki koi galti nhi hai.. vo main thi jo humesha akshara ko apne sath chalne ke lie majboor karti thi..

akshara : didi.. aap ye kya bol rhi hai... aisa kuch nhi hai..

nandu ; nhi akshara.. or ek bat sun le sabhi.. maine yaha sabko siirf sunne ke lie bulaya hai.. bolne ke lie... bhot bol lia sbne.. aur tumhare upar bahut jhoote ilzam laga lie.. ab meri bari hai.. aur ek bat to final hai.. meri galti ki saza tum nhi bhugtogi.. islie chup chap khadi rho.. aur bus suno..

ma.. choti ma.. apko kya lagta hai.. jb bhi akshara bolti hai ki vo apne mayke gyi hai.. vo sach mein jati hai.?? nhi ma.. adhe se zada bar meri vajah unhe ye jhoot bolna padta hai.. kyonki ye main nhi chahti thi ki kisi ko bhi iss bar ka pta chala.. aur ye pehli bar aisa hua hai ki naitik ko iss bare mein kuch nhi pta tha..

hum jb bhi milne gye hai mohit se.. naitik ko pta tha.. nhi pta the tumhe naitik.?? btao..

naitik : ha.. pta tha.. ek bar ka mujhe pta tha..

nandu : bs.. aur kuch bolne ki zrurat nhi hai... aur ek bat naitik.. tum ye kaise keh skte ho ki akshara ne bate chupa kr bhot badi galti ki hai.. jb ki tumhe puri bat kuch pta hi nhi hai.?? aur ek bat... vo bechari sirf aur sirf tumhare nakshe kadmon pr chal rhi hai.. ye bat tum yad rkhna.. kya tumhi ne nhi kaha tha akshara ko ki vo choti ma se angoothi wali bat chupaye.?? kya tumhe ye nhi yad ki mere janmdin wale din kya hua tha.. kaha nhi tha kya akshra ne ki humein sbko ek bat bta deni chahiye.?? vo tumhi the.. jisne mana kiya tha..

naitik ; kon si bat.??

nandini : rashmi ki dost akanksha wali bat.. aur tumne ye kaise soch lia ki ise humari izzat ka zara bhi kahayl nhi hai... jb ki tumhe ye saf saf pta hai ki ghar mein sbka kitna man krti hai.?? tumhe nhi yad.. vo tum hi ho jisne akshara ko pallu lene se mana kia hua hai.. jbki bauji ko iss cheez se nafrat hai.??

naitik: didi bat iss sbki nhi hai.. bat hai vishwas ki..

nandini : naitik.. tum vishwas ki bat kaise kr rhe ho naitik.?? tumhe vishwas ka matlab bhi pta hai.?? shadi se pehle.. shadi ke wakt. aur yahan tk ki shadi ke bad bhi tumne akshara pr vishwas nhi hai.. kya pehle sbke samne daantna aur fir akele mein sry bolne ko hi vishwas kehte hai.?? or tum ye keh skte ho ki tumhe kisi ka bharosa nhi toda.. tum naukri karna chahte the.. bhari sabhi mein jb tumne ye kaha tha tb nhi socha tha ki tum mere bauji ka vishwas toda tha.?? fir police chauki mein jb tum akshara ke sath mile the.. kya tb tumne kisi ka vishwas nhi toda tha kya.??

naitik : didi.. ap ye kya keh rhi hai.??

nandu: main jo bhi keh rhi hu bilkul sach keh rhi hu naitik .. shadi se pehle akshara ko kisi ne ek giri hui book kya utha ke de di.. tumne to iss bat ka bilkul hi ulta matlab nikal lia..

shadi ke wakt kya tum akshara ki wajah se naraz nhi the.?? par.. kuch kia tha usne.?? nhi... kuch bhi nhi...

aur.. shadi ke bad bhi.. jo bhi gulabo ne kaha uss din.. ki akshara ne mere naseeb ko kosa.. sbne man lia.. tumne ye bhi nhi socha ki meri pani aisa nhi kr skti.?? aur aj bhi yahi cheez ho rhi hai.. fir tum uska vishwas nhi kr rhe.. fir tum vahi galti kr rhe ho jo ki tumne pehle ki thi.. akshara.. tum ise kabhi maf mat krna

akshara: ( to herself) : nhi krungi didi.. nhi krungi.. uski tnsn ap mat lijiye..

nandu : pta nhi kya ho gya hai sbko.. koi bat sunne ko hi tayar nhi hai kisi ki.. sb apni apni kahani bune ja rhe hai.. kisi ne bhi sach janne ki koshish ki.?? uske bad sb ilzam bina soche samjhe kuch bhi kahe ja rhe hai... aur mujhe to ek bat bilkul bhi samajh nhi aa rhi.. ki sb akshra to itni nafrat kyo de rhe hai.?? pyar maine mohit se kia hai.. akshara ne nhi.. baaate maine ap logon se chupayi hai.. kisi aur ne nhi.. aap log ye kyon bhul rhe hai ki akshara ne ye sb mere kehne pr kia hai.. khud ki nhi suni isne..

bma : pr isne humse jhoot kyon bola ki ye beauty parlor ja rhi hai.??

nandu : ma.. lagata hai apki yadshast zar kamzor ho gyi hai.. vo main thi jisne apse jhoot bola tha.. akshara ne nhi.. aur vo mayke hi gyi thi pehle.. kyo gyi thi.. vo main ap logon ko btana zaruri nhi samjhti... aap ko jo bhi saza deni hai.. mujhe dijiye.. akshara ne kuch bhi nhi kia hai.. aur main bhi apni galti ke liye bhot sharminda hu.. main behak gyi thi.. aur main mafi mangna chahti hu is cheez ke lie..

bs.. mujhe aur kuch nhi kehna...... asha karti hu ap meri bat ko smjhenge...

Edited by moonlight08 - 15 years ago

Quote

Frequent Posters

457639

Suspended

Posted: 15 years ago

here's the 2nd part...

after nandini spoke.. there was tears in every1's eyes.. n also a sense of guilt.. they just cuold nt believe what was being said.. gayatri.. who was standing upstairs with other members... ran down... much to the amazement of naitik n other family members...

she went to akshara who was crying..

G (with hands folded) : akshara.. beta mujhe maaf kr dena.. mujhse bhot badi galti ho gyi.. pta nhi kyon main ye man baithi thi ki iss ghar mein ho rhi sari problems ki zimmedar tumhi ho.. beta.. main bhool gyi thi ki tum iss ghar mein nayi ho.. aur ye humari zimmedari hai ki hum tumhe iss ghar ke saari reeti-rivaaz acche se btaye.. mujhe maaf kar dena beta...

A (holding gayatri's hand) : arre ma.. ye aap kya keh rhi hai.?? mujhe aapki bato ka bilkul bhi bua nhi laga hai ma.. sacchi...aur sirf aap ki hi nhi.. mujhe kisi ki bat ka koi bura nhi laga hai.. balki aapne mujhe daanta.. mujhe bhot accha laga ma.. dekhiye.. daante to apno ko hi hai na.. aur hum naraaz bhi apno se hi hote hai.. aapne mujhe apna samajh ke daanta.. mujhe iss bat ki khushi hai.. ha.. mujhe thoda sa bura zarur laga tha ma.. lekin ye khushi sbse upar hai.. sach keh rhi hu.... aur ma.. accha hua maine ye galti yahan par aa kr ki hai.. kyonki agar main apne maayke mein hoti na.. to mujhe isse kayi zada daant padti... ma to bilkul bhi mujhse bat nhi krti.. aur bauji ko bhi nhi krne deti.!

G : ye tum kya keh rhi ho akshara.??

A : main jo bhi keh rhi hu... dil se keh rhi hu ma.. main aap logon ki bahut izzat krti hu ma.. apne maayke walo se bhi zada.. mujhe accha lagta hai jb aap mujhe daanti hai.. kyoki isse mujhe lagta hai ki aap logon ne mujhe apna lia.. mujhe iss ghar mein izaat di hai.. app jaanti hai.. jb bachpan mein ma mujhe daanti thi na.. to dadi mujhe chup krnane ke lie kaha karti thi.. ki akshara.. daant ka kabhi bhi bura nhi mante... kyonki daant to pyar ka prateek hai.. jb tk tumhe daant nhi padegi.. tb tk ek to tum ek acche insaan nhi banoge.. aur tb tk tumhe yeh bhi ehsaas nhi hoga. ki tum bhi ghar ka hi hissa ho.!!

Rajbanna to gayitri : arre ye to humari akshara bitiya ka baddappan hai jo isne hum sbko maaf kr dia hai.. varna bhagwan jaane bahuyein aaj kal apne sasural walo ko kaise kaise din dikhati hai..

( to akshara) humare to bhag khul gye tumhe apne bahu ke roop mein paa kr bitiya..

A : nahi bauji... aisa nhi hai.. sach mein.. accha main sabit karu ki mujhe apse daant khana acha lagata hai.??

Bma : ye kya bachpana hai akshara.?? bahala daant khana kis ko accha lag sakta hai..]

A : arre nhi bhabhima.. sach mein.. accha chaliye main aapko btati hu.. aap log mujhe itni bar kehte hai.. pallu sambhal ke rakha karo.. bar bar mayke na jaaya karo.. lekin fir bhi main jaati hu... aur kabhi kabhi mere sir se pallu bhi hat jata hai.. agar mujhe apse dar lagata na.. to aisi cheeze dobara nhi krti main.. par kyonki main ma ko aur sbko apne gharwalo se badhkar samjhti hu.. mujhse ye galtiyan dobara ho jaati hai... main shayad apni in galtiyon par zada dhyan hi nhi deti.. kyonki mujhe pta hai.. aaj nhi to kal sb meri galtiyon ko nadani samajh kr maaf kr hi denge.!!!

Daddaji : kitne ucch vichar hai mhari bahu ke.. humse bahut badi galti ho gyi bahu.. jo hum thare ko pehchan na paaye..

A : daddaji plz.. aap mujhse maafi maang kr mujhe sharaminda mat kijiye.. main aage hi apne kie par bahut sharminda hu..

Nandu : akshara.. fir vahi baat.. tumne aisa kuch nhi kiya jisse ki tumhe sharaminda hona pade..

A : nhi didi......................................

Rashmi : uff ho.. bahbhi.. plz ab saari bate fir se mat dohrayiye.. pichle kuch dino mein aap already bhut aansu baha chuki hai.. ab aur nhi... jo hua.. use bhul jaaiye.. aur biti bato par mitti daaliye...

Rajbanna : arre wah.. dekha high command.. humari beti kitni sayani ho gyi hai.. baato ko kitna jaldi samajhne lagi hai...

G : ha ji.. ap sahi keh rhe hai.. rashmi bilkul sahi keh rhi hai... jo hua use jaane dijiye.. ab dekhi jaaegi..

Daddaji: ha.. ha.. chalo ab bhot rona dhona ho gya.. ab thoda aram kr lena chahiye hume... hum to zara apni kamar seedhi krne jaa rhe hai.. tum log bhi thoda aram kr lo.. sham ko uth kr sochenge nandini ke lie aaye rishte ke lie kya karna hai..

Nandini's face drops on hearing this..

Bma : arre beta chinta mat kr.. jo bhi krenge hum... teri khushi ko dhyan mein rakh ke hi krenge..

nandini smiles on hearing this...

every1 smiles at akshra then head to their respective rooms..

in Naksh room :

akshara is putting her clothes back in the cupboard.. just when she feels 2 arms wrapping around her.. of course.. it was naitik...

A : removing the arms from her waist... naitik.. plz mujhe chodiye.. mujhe bahut kam hai..

N : akshara...

a : naitik.. kya apko nhi samajh aaya maine kya kaha.. chodiye mujhe..

N : par akshara meri bat to suniye...

A : kyon.. kyon sunu main aapki baat naitik.. aapne suni thi meri baat.?? kis muh se aap mujhe keh rhe hai ki main apki baat sunu.????

naitik stands there surprised... n shocked to see this roop of akshara....................................

( to be continued)

the next par would cum after few days.. most probably after 20th.. becoz right now i am very busy with my exams...

plz comment n press the like button if u lyked it... sry for the mistakes...

Edited by moonlight08 - 15 years ago

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

ananya_krish

@ananya_krish

Rocker

Posted: 15 years ago

very nice continue soon:-)😊

Quote

San

@sanw

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

great write up

this is what we all wanted it to happen. but we know its not possible. nandini will not open her mouth. & till akshara is not thrown out of the house she will not get even an idea of leaving it!

Quote

deepa

@_Dipsi_

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

wow thats really nice ...good akshi shouldnt forgive naitik....

Quote

musenartist

@musenartist

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

Kaumudi.........I loved the second part as well.................Akshara tadpaofying Naitik and all, wow!Do continue whenever time permits u, dear!Lots of love 2 u..................