Originally posted by: Albelipari
Oh my god !!
What a wonderful piece of writing with great imagination .. First of all take a bow girl your story took me to a different world where I was very clearly and strongly was feeling Samaina's condition
Manisha this is like the best compliment I have ever received🤗
When you mentioned sameer was came with his nanu to see a girl and how he was spellbound seeing a girl draped in simple yellow colour saari I assumed this os to be a very sweet and simple arranged marriage os but then sunaina's entry proved mW wrong and how !! 👏 this was one of those rare stories keeps you on edge throughout till the ending
I am really happy that it kept you on the hook till the last moment that was much needed.
Poor naina was literally living in a hell where their was nobody whom she could call as her family they all were so brutal and inhuman towards her .. My heart broke seeing her miserable state where she was getting punished for no reason Ohbai reminded me of brutal saas of old Hindi films and I was imagining her as one
Oh bai could have been like that and I have no doubt about that. hence I showed her in that light. There are still some people who treat their widow DILs that way.
I possible I fell in love with sameer Even more reading this os .. This boy fell in love with her at the mere first sight and was ready to move mountains to have her in his life .. His love is what we say as " true love " the little moment of happiness he felt when she showed care for his life by asking him to leave .. It was so beautiful his determination didn't lessened a bit seeing the inhuman sight in front of his eyes rather he felt the urgent need of taking hwe with him and protecting her
Sameer is the definition of perfect. when he loves he loves them with all his heart and can move mountains to keep them to himself and that is what he did for Naina.
He had to protect Naina at any cost because she became his life in just mere seconds so how could he have let her go.
Even his failed attempts didn't made him give up on her .. I became so emotional reading everyday he used to come and wait for her in the garden if this is not selfless love than I don't know what is my happiness knew no bounds when she finally said yes to showed the courage of leaving and breaking all the ties and go with him to start a new life with him
Naina had to break in front of his determination one day and she did because it was his love that pulled her and she got the courage from him to move on.
A story like this is quite difficult to handle as it can easily go overboard but you handelled it very well and the beautiful ending made the story " complete " this story is indeed out of the box very well deserve to win
I am glad you did not feel that the story went overboard and I was able to keep you hooked.
I had read the story in the contest thread but didn't knew that it's by you .. Congratulations for winning and you are very good at bribing 😆 now eagerly waiting for Monday 😉
This was something I had tried for the first time and it came out as planned I can not be more than happy.
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